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Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Reading*Please accept the following as an intended helpful review.....*Smile*

I liked your imaginative fantasy, a sprite who dances her partners to death. It certainly came in handy in this story, a mannequin with a knife comes to life, and she works her wiles on him.

Your story flowed without a stumble for me.

Your characters were adequately described (I realize this was a flash fictiion piece with word restraints.)

Your plot as I described above was interesting and imaginative.

Your resolution was appropriate and sort of expected.

My only suggestion for improvement would be to insert a few lines of dialogue in lieu of narration to move the story along.

Overall, an interesting and enjoyable short fantasy.

By all means, keep writing and sharing.

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Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The following review is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. It is my hope you find it helpful in some way.

Hello Marti...This is your review for my contest, "Invalid Item" .

Your title appropriately alerts the reader to the focus of your poem. It gives just enough information to encourage us to read on.

The flow of your poem ran with no stumbles for me.

Your poem's tone was wistful and light.

Your choice of words adequately told your story. There were a couple of spots where the same word was used twice close together. Pulling and pulls...perhaps tugs for "pulls"; and still in the second stanza...perhaps "but the memory remains so strong" for the first still. Just a thought for variety.

Your imagery painted a picture of one who misses her home near the sea (as I do). I could feel that undertow and smell that salt air. My daughter sent me a candle that smells like the ocean, burning or not. I have it on my nightstand next to my pillow.

Overall you've written a lovely memory....keep writing and sharing.

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Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Tikkun.....

For some reason this poem reminded me of "Santa Claus is coming to town".

You've done an excellent rhythm and rhyming job. I went along with nary a bump. I did note the line...fool me AGAIN...so the author has been fooled even though up to that point in the poem it sounds as though he hasn't been. Better not to tempt fate....

I enjoyed the light read with hidden depths....keep writing and sharing...

Connie
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Review of Afterparty  
Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hello Paradoxical,

You gave an intriguing title to your short story, hinting but not telling too much of what was to come.

Your sentences are descriptive painting a scene of fear and horror in the mind of the reader suggesting the terror that was to come.

Possibly due to a word constriction, you omit much of the information of why, how, who and where. This does not detract from the gist of the story. Some dialogue would have been helpful and could have told a lot in a few words.

The human nature twist at the end, her relief at the expense of someone else's misery, gave more meat to the short story.

Keep writing and sharing.....

Connie
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Review of SOM's Cookbook 1  
Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sister of Mercy,

I'm reviewing your cookbook as part of the MB Holiday Bonanza. It was the crab meat recipe that hooked me. I love anything with crab in it, and this one sounds so delicious the ingredients are already on my grocery list.

I'm getting hungrier the further I read. You will be bookmarked among my favorites. All your recipes sound easy to make and the instructions are clearly written.

Thanks so much for sharing these and I will be checking back for new ones.

Connie

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Review by Happy Mom's...
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Reading*Please accept the following as an intended helpful review.....*Smile*

Hello Beryl Greene...thanks for entering my contest, "Invalid Item" .

I liked the actual telling of this story but I couldn't determine who was telling it?

Your story flowed logically in a precise period of time but that time period was not made known to the reader.

Your characters were adequately described and I could easily picture them and their actions. The dialogue furthered the tale.

Your plot as far as I could tell was to get out of the storm safely.

Your resolution is left unknown...actually left as an enigma to me.

My only suggestion for improvement is to give more information to readers like me.

Overall, a story that would have been extremely interesting with greater exposition.

By all means, keep writing and sharing.

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Review by Happy Mom's...
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Juffin...thanks for entering my contest, "Invalid Item" .

I liked your children's story that parodied The Three Little Pigs.

Your story flowed easily and could be fully grasped by 6-7 year olds, I believe.

Your characters, the dolphins and the shark, were adequately described to someone who already knew what they were.

Your plot, of finding a safe place to live for the three little dolphins would certainly be interesting to small children.

Your resolution of the coral reef was imaginative.

My only suggestion for improvement would be illustrations and more description and, perhaps, some more make believe dialogue. You could even add more about the time spent before they left to find their new homes.

Overall, a cute story and an enjoyable read.

By all means, keep writing and sharing.

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Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Maria,

I liked the title of your story. My anticipation grew with what was to come.

Your story flowed well. With your word constraint, you competently related a brief glimpse into the "life" children give to their monsters.

Your characters were well described by their actions and their feelings.

Your plot, all in the boy's mind, was suitable for the brevity of the tale.

Your resolution seemed to be in conjunction with the word constraint as well.

My only suggestion for improvement would be to tell the story through either the eyes of the monster or the boy. The narration doesn't give the story as much oomph.

Overall, an excellent beginning.

By all means, keep writing and sharing.

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Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Shelleya,

You have done a wonderful job *Thumbsup* of creating a crossword that is both educational and fun. Anyone wanting to learn more about creating or just reading poetry with a better understanding can benefit by taking a stab at your crossword. I must confess *Blush* that I had to "google" several of your definitions before I finally got all the right answers. Well done!

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Review of Dare To Be  
Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The following review is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. It is my hope you find it helpful in some way.

Your title was very thoughtful, reflecting the hopes of the author, summing up the message at the end.

The flow of your poem couldn't be improved upon. I noticed no stumbles as I read, very smooth.

Your poem's tone read like a letter to your daughter giving guidance and loving hope.

Your choice of words visualized the life you hoped for her, encouraging and guiding.

Your imagery evoked my senses of smell and sight.

Overall, a lovely poem, as always. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi MnM,

This is a well-written short story. You have done a good job combining simple and complex sentences for easy flow. First person POV is a good reader-grabber as well and you have stuck to it all the way through the story.

You've done a good job setting the background and have described your other characters sufficiently to encourage your reader along.

The conclusion wraps the story up and makes the reader feel good.

Other genres you could have used, in my opinion, are: dark, emotional, experience (if it is), inspirational, personal (if it is), relationships, religious, spiritual, and young adult.

You have a good language and grammar basis and know how to relate to your reader. Good job and keep writing.....

Connie

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Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Mysticsierra,

This is your official review for the "Invalid Item"  for the "Invalid Item"  .

Your items are organized appropriately into folders and I did enjoy your comments on the folders and items. The comments encourage readers to look inside and see what's there.

You could elaborate more on your genres. I noticed several items left with "other". Most readers and reviewers look for the genre before looking at the item so you do yourself a big disservice by not utilizing this tool as fully as possible. This was the only problem I saw with your port organization. Your "pups" are too cute.

Thanks for all your effort and good luck in the contest.

Connie

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Review of Paper Doll  
Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello MnM,

This is your official review for the "Invalid Item"  for the "Invalid Item"  .

You have done a good job of organizing and clearly stating the content of your folders. Your genres are specific and most likely will determine the reader's decision to read or not.

Your comments have just that right touch of cynicism and comedy to draw the reader in.

My only suggestion is to add more items so the reader will have more variety of choice. Your organization has laid the groundwork for an inviting port.

Thank you for all your effort and good luck in the contest.

Connie

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Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello sssam,

This is your official review for the "Invalid Item"  for the "Invalid Item"  .

Your folders are well-organized and clearly state their contents. Your pics and intro add a warm welcome and friendly, light atmosphere. You have made a special effort to encourage readers and reviewers to your port.

The only improvement I could offer is in the area of genre selection, especially for your short stories. People new to your port usually look at the genres to make up their minds whether to read or not so it is very important to be as specific as possible.

Thank you for doing such a good job and good luck with the contest.

Connie
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Review of Sailing Huitian  
Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello sssam: Please take the following as only my opinion and in the good spirit in which it is offered.

Title: Appropriate, incorporating the poetry form and topic of the poem.

Imagery: Good, I could see him fighting the wind and cold.

Rhythm: Good rhythm except for the third line of the second stanza.

Rhyme: Good rhyme except for the third line of the second stanza.

Mood: I could feel his joy of sailing.

Most Liked: The first line set the mood of the poem.

Personal Thoughts: I really stumbled on the third line of that second stanza...maybe something like "All thoughts now to tack and brace", and I think "sailings" should be "sailing's".

Overall: The form was very well done. I enjoyed your poem.

Keep writing.....Connie

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Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Reading*Please accept the following as an intended helpful review from Connie.....*Smile*

Hi Lee, Thank you for your entry in "Invalid Item" .

What I liked: I very much enjoyed reading about this rescue at sea and the look at an event in history. I like the way you tell it from the POV of a young crew member on one of the rescue ships. The vivid descriptions such as the angle of list and other sea terms made me feel as though I were there. Great job.

What I disliked: There was nothing about the story I disliked. Only a spell and grammar check were lacking.

Flow of story & impact of characters: I was able to follow the story easily. I liked the way you inserted the feelings of one of the passengers being rescued but I was not sure how that was known, if it was surmised by the Greeley crewmember?

Attention grabbers: The entire story held my attention.

Suggestions for improvement: Somehow the POV needs to be clarified on the passenger being rescued.

My overall take: This was a throroughly enjoyable read for me. Thank you.

Keep writing and keep sharing...Connie

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Review by Happy Mom's...
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is great. I had scads of entries in my contest from people who could use this. I'm putting in a link......thanks for sharing this, Lyle
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Review by Happy Mom's...
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Lawrence: Please take the following as only my opinion and in the good spirit in which it is offered. Just want to say how nice that you are back and healthier...c

Title: Conjures up exciting images....the flowers are looking and listening....I love it.

Imagery: Just absolutely beautiful imagery throughout the poem.

Rhythm: It just rolled right along without a hitch.

Rhyme: n/a

Mood: I felt as if I were in that field myself.

Most Liked: The idea of flowers looking and listening.

Personal Thoughts: You make beatiful pictures with words.

Overall: A lovely poem about flowers.

Keep writing.....Connie

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Review of I Like Spiders  
Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Richard: Please take the following as only my opinion and in the good spirit in which it is offered.

Title: Gave a clear picture of what the poem was about.

Imagery: Great imagery...especially: Like milk shakes slurped through straws.

Rhythm: Good rhythm. I noticed no stumbles.

Rhyme: abcb.....good rhymes

Mood: The poem started out with me wondering "why would anyone like spiders?", then at the end, I see you only like them when they are "in their place".

Most Liked: The "milk shake" line.

Personal Thoughts: Cute poem....good read.

Overall: Excellent description of spiders.

Keep writing.....Connie

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Review of Life's Gamble  
Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Angie: Please take the following as only my opinion and in the good spirit in which it is offered.

Title: Most appropriate.

Imagery: You paint a picture where most readers, I'm sure, can see themselves, making decisions each day.

Rhythm: Very good rhythm, no stumbles.

Rhyme: N/A

Mood: Our daily trials of decision-making, sometimes stressful and full of pressure.

Most Liked: "Choose" boasts the voice
that continually pushes forward,
"Which cards will you keep
and which cards will you throw?
Choose".


Personal Thoughts: Comparing our decisions to a game of chance shows the limited control we sometimes have in our decision-making.

Overall: An interesting poem, thought-provoking.

Keep writing.....Connie

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Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
An extremely informative article, well written and easily understood, even by me. Thanks for doing all this research. I am copying this to my harddrive for future reference but I promise not to infringe on your copyright laws. Hopefully, someday, I may write something someone else may want to copy. Now, I will know my rights. Thank you, Lyle, for sharing....connie
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Review of Tender Delights  
Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jaya,

How very lucky your childen were, and you, as well, for being able to share in this grand adventure with them. I very much enjoyed reading your account of your ocean journeys and would have enjoyed hearing many more details. The thrill of learning new music, of being a comfort to those who missed their own families on the long voyages, and the exposure to so much new "easy" learning is something reserved for the dreams of most children. How wise of you to take advantage of it. Thank you for sharing and keep writing.......connie
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Review by Happy Mom's...
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Hello Aralls: Please take the following as only my opinion and in the good spirit in which it is offered.

Title: The last line tied in the title very appropriately.

Imagery: Imaginative descriptions. I especially liked the line "Enveloping myself so my mind may relive this day again."

Rhythm: Good rhythm, I noticed no stumbing blocks.

Rhyme: N/A

Mood: The poem sets the mood of the acrostic "The Perfect Snow Day".

Most Liked: The last line.

Personal Thoughts: I felt this poem was a memory being conjured up by the narrator....not an actual happening event.

Overall: A lovely image of fun in the snow.

Keep writing.....Connie

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Review of Good Conversation  
Review by Happy Mom's...
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Reading*Please accept the following as an intended helpful review from Connie.....*Star*

What I liked: What a good story....you had me right til the end.

What I disliked: Nothing.

Flow of story & impact of characters: Logical chain of events and lots of showing by good dialogue that moved the story right along.

Attention grabbers: The ending of course.

Suggestions for improvement: Not a thing.

My overall take: I really enjoyed this story....keep sharing and writing.....connie

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Mariella! Thank you for entering this story in:

Young Stars Shine Your Light Contest  (E)
A CONTEST JUST FOR WRITERS EIGHTEEN YRS OLD AND UNDER! ~ON HIATUS~
#1557458 by NickiD89


In appreciation for the time and energy you spent writing this creative story in response to the prompt, I offer you this in-depth review. Please refrain from editing your piece until after the winners are posted in the forum. Thanks!

[The suggestions following red check marks are based on my observations and opinions. Please only take what you find helpful and leave the rest *Smile*]



*Note2* Characters: 4.5 *Star*'s

*Thumbsup* Your characters were well-described from the young princess' beauty to the kindness of the king. More description would have added to the story but yours was adequate for the tale.

*Check2* You imparted the love felt by the king and her subjects to further the plot of your story. After a short narration, the story was told through the eyes of the king. Good dialogue helped to further the story along.



*Note5* Plot/Conflict/Pace: 5 *Star*'s

*Thumbsup* Your story flowed smoothly; I noticed no stumbles. The plot (seeking the perfect present) was setup well. The conflict (the inability to find that present) was presented to us three times building to the climax.

*Check2* My attention was held throughout your story....waiting for the perfect present......good job.



*Note1* Grammar, Punctuation, and Spelling: 5 *Star*'s

*Thumbsup* An excellent job here as well.

*Check2* I noticed no errors.



*Note3* First Impression Wow Factor: 5 *Star*’s

*Thumbsup* You saved the wow factor for the climax but held my attention from the very beginning.

*Check2* I love cats...you couldn't have had a better present.


*Right* My Overall Rating: 5 *Star*


I enjoyed your creative story! Reviewers and Judges are in the process of reading each story and writing its review. Winners will be posted in the contest forum no later than the 7th of the month. The Judge will email the winners individually and award their prizes just prior to posting the results. Best of luck to you!


Keep writing.....connie
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