"However, the man standing before him didn't appear as if he were out to kill him, so Churchill relaxed. Only sligthly."
"out to kill him" sounds very extreme, I think it would be better if you put "out to harm him" or something.
Also, "sligthly" is spelled wrong. It should be "slightly"
“Not exactly, as you might have probably guessed already, the respective muggle and wizarding ministries have separate governments. "
"might have probably guessed" sounds weird. Maybe you could put "as you might have guessed"
Nice job with this, and it's so true, pain can in turn be a very precious gift of strength. I seem to recall a quote that goes along very well with this: "What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger"
Muhammed has led the future of Islam into believing that haveing up to four marital partners is justly; while I do not agree, probably becuase I follow the Bible and not the Quaran.
I doubt the Islamic religion was based on a sexist state of mind, but that's exactly what it is with polygamy being allowed and polyandry not. Whether there be different set backs or not.
Nice collection of thoughts here, thanks for the read.
This is a very nice dedication poem and fits the prompt very well. Good flow of words, but with the commas being used so often, the rhythem feels choppy. I would suggest taking a few commas out where they aren't really needed. Other than that, great job and good luck in the contest!
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.22 seconds at 6:06pm on Jun 15, 2024 via server web1.