This is cute. You should try using a litte more distription in this poem. Make it more visual to the reader. They need to be able to create their own story with pictures in their minds. Keep up the good work!
I'm Frogger. It's very nice to meet you. You recently reviewed one of my works. I appreciate your comments.
I read your lyrics. The first thing I have to say is...wow. Very far from what I was expecting to be reading from you. You would need to do a lot of editing with the rhythm of this piece. A writers work is never done...(smile) As for the actual story behind this song. Hmmmm... I defenently understand it. It is one of those pieces that once you start writing, you can't stop until your head is empty, and your hands will no longer move. Me personally? This made my heart uneasy...heavy...and alone. If I heard this song...it would make me feel exactly that way, and I would run to turn it off. Only my opinion.
I can defenetly see the great talent you possess, and at such a young age...thats amazing. You have sooooooo long to perfect your craft. I'm excited to see what you will come up with next. Hopefully something that doesn't cause dark emotion...or at least to the extent of this piece. Keep writing, and as always...
Hi I'm Frogger. It's very nice to be here, thanks again for the invite. (smile)
I like the whole idea of this poem. It is very unique, very descriptive, and extremely convincing. Just makes me want to ride a motor bike...(smile). My favorite part of poetry, is that it is so clearly written on paper, that you can easily picture it in your head. I believe that our poems, are our thoughts.
Hi...I'm Frogger. It's very nice to meet you. I love poetry, so when I stumbled into your port, I was of course pulled into the first poem that I found. I sensed a lot of feeling and the descriptive wording you used, gave me a good picture as to what you were trying to express in your poem. (smile) I enjoyed it very much.
OMG! I absolutly love your poetry... I am sooo happy to have visited. I see myself in this poem. I think me and you may have something in common...yes?
Thank you very much for comment on my poetry. I just had to come and visit your port. Your defenently not the only one...believe me, I've been through just about everything...twice. I'm glad to know, that your still smiling.
I liked this poem a lot...I reread it several times. I like to read them over and over...it gives you a better feel and you can get more out of the writing... I love how I can feel exactly what you were feeling when you wrote this. Very good job and as always...
I'm Frogger, it's very nice to meet you. I really enjoyed reading this poem...you were really able to put your inner thoughts into visual. I share your feelings in this... You are not alone...
I'm Frogger, it's very nice to meet you. I came across this letter and had to read it. It was absolutely perfect... I beleive that it is exactly what the rest of the world is thinking...I know it's what I was thinking. (smile) Thank you for putting in words, what we have in our minds... And as always...
I'm frogger, its very nice to meet you. I liked this poem, very unique. (smile) (Handing you an invitation) You are more than welcome to check out my port...and as always...
I'm Frogger. It's very nice to meet you. I loved this poem. It took love to a whole new light. I loved the intensity and description. It sucked me in, and made me imagine in my head all that was written in the poem... Wonderful poem.. (smile)
Another good one...I want to read them all... I absolutly love your poems...(smile) wow..! I'm just gonna read and rate the rest...cause if I comment to you about every single one...(and I have a feeling that I'm going to adore them all) I might swell your head just a little too much..(smile)..j/k.. Take care...and once again.
I'm Frogger. It's very nice to meet you. I absolutly loved this poem...very sweet, and inspiring. I wish I could write like that...I try, but I'm just not quite good enough...maybe someday...(smile) I'll never give up. I love writing poetry. I'm poems are my thoughts...how I feel inside. My poems are me. Sometimes they scare people. They are my way of letting it all out constructively, instead of deconstructively. I love being able to write...and share my thoughts with the rest of the world.
I'm Frogger...it's nice to meet you. I loved this poem, it was very cute. It kind of reminded me of some of the poems that I write. I don't know what it is about it, but it made me smile...(smile) Your a very good writer. I love writing poetry. My poems are my thoughts...they are who I am.
I'm Frogger. It's nice to meet you. I liked your poem... It really kept my interest, made me anxious to see how it ends...regretfully it ended poorly. Not the poem, but the story. And I give you my sympathy for that...but it made for a good poem..(smile) Thanks for sharing your thoughts with me...
I've never rated any of your poems but have enjoyed reading them time after time...it's difficult to explain the deep emotion, that is bursting out of every word of thought, every word from the very depths of your heart. You have a great talent in poetry. I reread every poem...and every word...always craving to hear more. Your words press into my soul... Please write more...(smile). I could only dream, to have the ability to express my heart the way that you do. You write so beautifully. You leave your readers wanting more...and that is what a great writer does. You are a great writer. Thank you for sharing your thoughts, your heart, your words...
I'm Frogger. It's nice to meet you! I saw the title of your poems and immediatly had to read them...I'm a woman in my 20's that has never been pregnant...has never lost a child...I never thought about what it would be like to lose an unborn child...I mean I alway's new that it would have to be a horrible thing to lose a child...but I never thought about losing a child through a miscarriage. My mother had a miscarriage after she had me...and right before my brother. She never seemed to show any type of inner pain...or emotions because of it...but the more I think about it now...the more I see...that it has got to be an extremely difficult thing...and I commend you, for your courage and strength to share your stories with me. I like reading things that open me up to other things, that I've never had thoughts on.
That was a very impressive poem for your first one ever written. It was very descriptive of how you are feeling inside and out, and that is what a good poem is supposed to do. Describe in words...what is going on in your head, and your heart. I enjoyed it very much, thank you for sharing...
Frogger
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