I can see why you gave this the title you did. In only a few words you managed to create a vivid image. I must admit the act of licking ones lips in a seductive manner is quite a tease.
You have executed the form of this senryu perfectly. There were no errors found.
This is such an inspirational and moving piece of poetry. When I think about all of the people in this world who are missing out on so much by not accepting Christ into their lives; I could cry. You poem shows us that even though we don't feel we are worthy and that because of our sins we shouldn't be saved, Jesus is there. He is waiting for us to open our hearts and let him in.
I think this poem could be a wake up call for many of us. It is beautifully written and there are no errors. Great write Audra!
I was deeply moved by the thoughtful and loving words in this remarkable poem. It is clear to see that you are adored by many here at WDC; and for good reason. This poem highlights the truly wonderful, loving, caring, patient and kind woman many of us have come to know and love. This poem is a heart warming tribute to you Pat. I personally am honored to be able to call you my friend.
The overall composition of this poem is great and there were no errors noted.
I am more than sure there are many people who can relate to this poem. I think we have all felt lost at one point in our lives.
Your poem raises some good questions that may never be completely answered, but who knows.
There are a few things that I noticed in this poem that should be corrected. In several place you ended your sentences with a question mark but the sentence continues into the next line. You need to delineate where the line ending is going to be before you add the "?".
I didn't find any spelling errors in this poem.
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This is a deep and powerful poem. It tells a story of a lost and desperate soul longing to be found. It evoked strong emotions in me because not so long ago I was in the same place. It's a difficult place to be especially when we don't feel anyone can hear our cries for help.
The good thing about this poem is that the writer has recognized the need to be found and know what steps to take to get there. This is a great start.
The overall composition of this poem is great. It is free form, therefore doesn't have a strict from to follow. The flow is even and I didn't find any errors. Write on!
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I love acrostic poetry and this is a fantastic piece. With a simple title, you have given your readers a look at what you see in the color of a rose. It isn't what most would relate it to and I think that's what makes this poem one of a kind. For me, there was hidden meaning. I can't exactly put it into words though.
I liked the added touch of the colored text at the beginning of each line. There were no issues found with the form of this poem. It has a good rhyme scheme and a nice even flow. There were no errors found anywhere in this piece. Great write!
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You paint a stunning image for your readers with this elegant and articulate poem. It took me through a range of emotions as I read it.
The composition of this Spenserian sonnet is flawless. There were no spelling or grammatical errors found. I wish you all the best in the contest.
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In times of trouble it is reassuring to know that our Lord and Savior is right by our side all along. Sometimes we often take him for granted when we are the ones who are lacking. Your poem gives hope to those who may need reminding of what He does for us. It is uplifting and inspirational.
There were no issues with the form of this piece and the meter is perfect. Awesome write Shirley!
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I nearly pee'd my pants when I read this poem. Especially this line: "Across my crotch when'er I sit" Too funny! Your sense of humor shines bright in this hilarious poem.
The form-meter-rhyme scheme are flawless and I didn't find any spelling or grammatical errors. Job well done!
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I am simply amazed each time I read one of these complex poems. The detailed structure they require is highlighted by the works of literary art created when one is written. This one is astounding! The moment I started reading it, I could feel goosebumps form over my skin. It is pure perfection Shirley!
Thank you so much for sharing your talent with us here at WDC!
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My what a beatiful and inspiring poem. Your words come alive on the page and fill the reader with a joyful noise. This poem is so uplifting I felt my mood change as I read it. Truly remarkable!
There are no issues or errors that were found in this delightful poem.
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This is a lovely poem. You have given your readers a great visual. You have a strong rhyme scheme at work in this piece and it also has great form and meter. There were no errors observed.
I would like to know why you have another name listed at the bottom of this piece. Is it not originally yours?
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This folder contains the best artwork I have ever seen. Looking at all of these images here caused one of those jaw dropping moments some experience when coming across something truly remarkable. You are so fortunate to be able to put your talents to use. I am an aspiring Graphic Designer and looking at your work motivates me beyong words. I am privledged to have the opportunity to review your work.
When we start judging others for their wrong doings we soon realize that we aren't much different from them. This poem highlights that fact boldly. The message it gives to its readers is loud and clear.
Overall, this is a really good poem. I did find that the meter was off in a few places. I would suggest looking at the syllable count to see of you can even it out.
There were no errors found in this poem.
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I am inspried by this wonderful poem about children and their journey through life. There is so much to admire about them it's hard to focus on one thing. Your poem is a touching reminder of how children impact our lives.
Looking at the technical aspect of this poem, I found it to be well written, it has great form and there are no errors. Thanks for entering the contest.
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You have done a superb job harnessing true love with this sensational poem. There is no doubt in my mind that these two people were meant for each other. This piece is wonderfully written, has a nice even flow and there are no errors. Awesome Write!
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This poem is breath-taking. You have captured the joy, beauty and wonder of nature in this piece. The words flow freely off the page creating a vivid picture for your readers to enjoy. It's perfect my friend. Write on!
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This poem is a lovely tribute to our Lord and savior Jesus Christ. It speaks of his birth and the wonder surrounding it. I think you did a great job with this poem as it highlights the most important aspects of Christmas.
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My first reaction to this poem was "oh no this can't be real." I can't imagine doing anything so careless by shooting a gun on a dare. Your poem is written with a sorrowful sentiment that the reader can feel. The rhyme scheme and meter are great and I didn't find any errors. Write on!
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I would have to agree with the woman's sentiment of "This is fun?" during her first skiing experience. I have never been on the slopes or do I care to ever go. I am to scared to break something.
I enjoyed the humor of this short story. It is very well written and there are no errors. Great write Ken.
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I think you did a great job with this biography. It is well written, very descriptive and gives the reader a glimpse into Jessie's life. I didn't see anything wrong with the flow and there were no errors. Write on!
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I'll admit that I am not a big fan of video games so the homework vs. Sims issue would be a non issue in my house. Homework would win hands down. Anything over a video game would win. I can understand your viewpoint when it comes to the game but for me it's the real life stuff that matters. You can always escape reality ONCE the homework is done.
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My WDC Goals (E) List of contests I intend on trying out and my goal of getting an upgraded membership. #1524886 by care_a_lot
I think it is great that you have set goals for yourself. By entering the different contests you have listed here you challenge yourself to write more which is why we are all here. However, entering these contests does not guarantee you will win any gift points to help keep your membership. I would highly suggest you start reviewing. This is the BEST way for you to earn gp's and you learn so much by reading other peoples work! This is also a great way to get your work reviewed in return.
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I was recently diagnosed with Type II diabetes so I know how the food thing can be a real issue in someones life. I am having a hard time with my "sweets" addiction too. The fact that you have educated yourself and know how to keep your sugars in check is the main thing. Most cases of gestational diabetes go away once the baby is born. In my last pregnancy, 12 years ago, the doctors said I was borderline for it. Although I never got it I did deliver a 10 pound 4 ounce baby girl! Good luck to you!
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Your sense of humor shines bright in this hilarious poem. 
! I'm thrilled you were chosen for this honor 
