A fairy tale romance is what comes to mind as I read this poem. The imagery you have created here is lovely.
It has a nice even flow, a great rhyme scheme and there were no errors found, however, I feel that punctuation is needed to finish off this piece. Good luck in the contest.
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I was thinking for a moment, lucky you all snuggled up in your bed with a good woman but it's a cat! Well, I suppose that is just as good. The simplicity of this piece makes it a nice read. No complicated structure or rhyme scheme. It doesn't even need punctuation. Nice write Dawn!
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Although I don't fully understand science rhetoric, I can honestly say I enjoyed this poem. Trying to prove that time does not exist seems like a waste of time to me since well all know it clearly does.
This poem has a nice flow and is well written. I thought I noted a hint of humor too. I would consider adding punctuation. Other than that, this is an error free write.
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I felt a sense of loneliness and frustration emanate from this poem. It felt as if the person in the poem was giving up all hope to find love.
The chain rhyme sequence in this poem is quite fascinating. I don't think I have seen it before. Alhtough the rhyme scheme is flawless, I found the meter in this poem to be quite bumpy. Nevertheless, the reast of this piece is great and there were no mistakes found.
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This is quite a compelling poem as it compares human emotion to the dark and dismal nature of the Acheron and Styx. A deep feeling of foreboding fell over me as I read this piece. For me, evoking emotion in your readers is a plus.
This is a great write Dawn. It has a nice even flow and there were no spelling or grammatical errors found.
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It's amazing the things we discover when we open ourselves up to see and listen. You have given your readers a vivid look at the path taken on a journey of self discovery.
I found your poem to be well written. You have a strong grasp of poetry and its various forms. There were no spelling or grammatical errors found during my review.
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So many things can be seen through the eyes of a child. Their innocence and strength astounds me. The child portrayed in this poem, took a bad situation and did their best to change it for him and his mother.
This poem is well written, has a nice even flow and is error free. Thanks for entering the contest. Good Luck!
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It's hard not to feel some kind of emotion after reading this poem. All I could picture while reading this, was a woman with tears falling down her cheeks while she held onto her young child. The image was hard to bear.
You have a really great poem here. It gives your readers an inside look at what it's like to have someone you love walk out on you. The harsh reality of this poem is that situations like this happen everyday.
I didn't find any issues with the form of this poem and there were no errors. Great write!
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It's merely by coincidence that I happened upon this poem today as I started my own weight loss program. Your poem is highly motivating and tells us to get off of our rumps and get moving.
It has a solid rhyme scheme and nice even flow. During this review there were no spelling or grammatical errors noticed. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a compelling poem about one's sin and desire to be forgiven. I couldn't help but feel for the person in this piece.
The technical aspects of this poem have all been carried out splendidly and there were no errors found. Good luck in the contest.
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This poem brought me back to my time in school and the detested line ups. I like the spin you put on this seemingly ordinary routine. Well done!
I didn't see any issues with the form of this poem and there were no errors found. Thank you for sharing your work with us.
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I immensely enjoyed this fantastic poem about the "Plumber Geek." The rhyme scheme is absolutely fabulous and makes this poem shine. This poem is deserving of all the accolades it receives. I am honored to be able to review your amazing work. I wish you all the best in the contest.
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I don't now what this situation must be like for you and your siblings. I pray that your father will return home to be with our Father peacefully. I think you all should put your differences aside and let sleeping dogs lie. Your dad needs all of you.
Your poem shows the struggles that your family is dealing with as your father's condition deteriorates. It's painful to read. I will keep you in my thoughts and prayers.
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I know Parvo Virus can be a life threatening illness to dogs and my heart goes out to you and your family. This poem gives brief look into this devastating illness. Keep the little guy safe and secure. I am sure that God will heal him.
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I absolutely love reading your poetry. It is so beautifully written and has an eloquent quality to it. This one is especially lovely. You have an admirable talent my friend. This poem is flawless. I am honored to have the opportunity to review your work.
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I love the way you describe the memories left by this mystery woman. You paint a lovely picture for your readers through the vivid imagery in this piece. For me, the poem had a serene feeling. It is beautifully written Eliot and error free. Thanks for sharing it.
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Gardening in this story definately has its perks. There was more than just foliage blossoming here. I like the subtle way in which you described the characters lustful thirst for each other. For a short story, this one is really good.
I didn't see any issues with the technical aspect of this piece and there were no errors found.
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Sensual Fantasy (18+) Fantasy/Erotica Short Story Contest for those who love to love mystical creatures. #1511345 by Christine
I can honestly say I have never seen these two genres combined in a contest. I would assume that you get some very interesting entries. Your idea is certainly original.
You have the forum set up in a neat and orderly manner. The contest rules and regulations are easy to follow and the prizes you are offering are awesome!
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You need not worry about where this poem came from because it is awesome. I agree that it is very macabre, however, it's intriguing at the same time. The images that came to mind while reading this were pretty gruesome.
I don't see any issue with the form and the meter is great. Another winner Jewel.
The Ancient Magic is a spellbinding tale that had me transfixed to the page as I read it. You have done a superb job with this poem. The rhyme scheme is absolutely amazing and the meter of this piece is flawless. The imagery is also top notch.
During my review, there were no errors found. Thank you for your entry. I will you all the best in the contest.
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I agree with your opening line 100%. This poem gives some very good advice. It's graphic in its imagery and evoked many emotions as I read it. You have written this well. The form is Pantoum style and it has a nice even meter.
There were no errors found during this review. I wish you all the best in the contest.
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My heart was torn by the saddness and sorrow in this poem. The stark reality of how real this situation could be is frightening.
I found no issues with the form of this poem and the technical aspects are all error free. No spelling mistakes were found. Good luck in the contest.
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I love the image you created with this delightful poem. It's magical nature was like a breath of fresh air. This poem has an excellent rhyme scheme and a flawless meter. You did a fantastic job with this piece. During this reivew, there were no erros found. Good luck in the contest.
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I was touched by the sincerity of this lovely poem. Your friends must have been thrilled that you wrote this for them. The way you brought this poem together, style wise is so unique. It adds a unique, aesthetic appeal.
The technical aspects of this write, flow - meter - rhyme scheme, are all flawless; as is the spelling and grammar. Nice work my friend.
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You have written a lovely poem for your wife. It is clear to anyone who reads this, that you care for her very much. You describe yourself as having a shell and in my opinion, it's a common characteristic for most men. However, I can't figure out why?
I like the unique style and form of this piece. The spelling, grammar and punctuation are all flawless. Thank you for sharing this poem. I wish you all the best in this contest.
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