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672 Public Reviews Given
673 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
Honest, for the most part. Not hurtful, for the most part. In other words I'll try to be straight up but not step on you face while I'm about it. Oh, by the way, this points business confuses me. I don't want to charge for a review. If I have the points in the bank I'll refund you 900. Why I'm required to ask 1000 is past my understanding.
I'm good at...
Not much. Grammar, spelling, punctuation, most of the mechanical stuff. Good eye for composition. I read a lot and I can give you a reader's opinion. Most good reviews are a fresh eye.
Favorite Genres
western, sci fi , detective, general or literary fiction
Least Favorite Genres
erotica
Favorite Item Types
what, pray tell, is an "item type"?
Least Favorite Item Types
See above
I will not review...
stories about kangaroos
Public Reviews
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Review of Wherever You Are  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (3.5)
Watch that first step. I'd say the best way to get over death is live through it. Or maybe it's the other way round. Who knows?
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Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (3.5)
Guess it works. Here I thought the Pantoum was a comic strip guy in purple tights who lived in the jungle and fought pirates. Naaa, too unbelievable, it must be Malayan poetry. Sure, that's the ticket.
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Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (2.5)
Ohh the black helicopters are gonna get you! Bad writer, bad. Down boy , down.
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Review of Maggie  
Review by Dee C
Rated: 18+ | (1.5)
I think I need a little more reason to suspend disbelief.
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Review of The Interview  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well done. Yes we do forget or reorganize history to suit some agenda that has crept into our culture like a fog or a thief. in '39 in Europe people were sent to camps. In a play Sophocles wrote "let no man say it cannot happen here..." It can or it will or it has already.
In '39 in a country called The United States of America people were pulled from their homes and sent into the camps. I mean 1839 and the camps were in Tennessee and Alabama and the people were of the civilized tribes, not Benjamin, or Dan but Cherokee, Choctaw, Creek you know the story, unless you forgot.

Thanks for sharing
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Review by Dee C
Rated: ASR | (1.0)
Ahhh you can't disturb true love, fella. Just write a longer story about it.
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Review of Clowning Around  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting tale, not as clearly defined as the last of yours I read, intentionally? I like the dialogue between Trishy and Mr. Gwen. Not just the grammatical correctness but the content.
When a writer uses a uncommon name (Gwen) for a character, a reader's antennae go up, though I detected no reason for not naming him Johnson or Jones it attracted attention and possibly distracted from the story.
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Review of Post Mortem  
Review by Dee C
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
Well gosh, what can I say? I guess I should say something positive, so later when I say something else you won't be hurt, then finish up with another slice of positive, yeah that's the recipe.
The modus operandi of the killer was positively grotesque and nasty. This forced the reader to ditch any sympathy they might harbor for antagonists in general and this felon in particular. That was a good thing, it would have been better if some sympathy had been on the plate for the detective and his wife. Hard to really like underdeveloped cardboard characters, a true challenge.
The piece is a really fine story outline. Maybe some meat on those bones would help out?
I wonder why I didn't believe the detective's reaction to his wife's horrible murder? Maybe because he sat down and indulged in shop talk with her murderer? Could be.
Well here at the end we top off with the other slice of white bread on the the merde sandwich. Good thing: It was short.
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Review of Lightning  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (4.5)
It seems to fit the prescribed form , as I understand the form. It has to do with nature, lightning is natural. There seems no relevance to the human condition, probably not essential, but nice to see in poetry. I'm sure you know more about what a good haiku looks like than I, so I'll just say thanks for sharing.
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Review of Good-bye 2011  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (3.0)
You're kidding, there's a form called Pansee? I declare! The things you learn online.
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Review of What Things Are  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (5.0)
I was very impressed with your writing. This was done in a fashion that any person who appreciates good writing will admire, or in my case, envy. The fantasy element is made credible by its juxtaposition with the factual, more mundane element. The creature is fantasy the dead grandfather is reality. The mix is mastery of the art of writing.
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Review of Lesson#4  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (5.0)
I see a good lesson, patiently constructed and intelligently organized. This lesson, for motivated students, is at least adequate and in many cases excellent. In English as translated from the Academic: "The lesson is a sermon to the choir." I now ask you, Teacher, what lesson can fill the needs of the under motivated student? You know of whom I speak. A vision passed before your eyes as you read the question. Probably not at all my business. My business was to tell you what a god job you did with the lesson and I completed that assignment in the first two sentences.

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Review of The Perfect Gift  
Review by Dee C
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Do you really believe colored ink is the key to effective writing?
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Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (4.5)
Your fears are unfounded. Artificial intelligence is not, nor will ever be a threat to humankind. Artificial intelligence is your friend, friend, friend, fri...
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Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (4.5)
Now, If I got a greeting card with that poem written inside, I would be pleased as punch. That sentiment would never feel the cold magnet pressing it to the refrigerator door, no sireee, Bob Marley. That card would go straight into a nice wood frame, under glass and hang in perpetuity alongside my diploma, and business license.
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Review by Dee C
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good story, I liked it. Generally readers like me enjoy stories that have that "the son of a bitch had it coming " element. Anyway having an outcome that meets or exceeds a readers idea of proper retribution works. Sam Peckinpaw made a fortune doing this with movies.
Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Thank a Tree!  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like Arbor day and I love trees. Mind you I don't hug them and some times I love them as I love chicken, for their usefulness. Other times I enjoy the shade. I'm glad I read your poem and I think it would be a nice thing for school children to read in class on Arbor Day.
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Review of The Joint Gift  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (3.0)
I see this "story" as a lesson in ingratitude (the employees) and grace (Bella). There may be other lessons inflicted, but if so they sailed past my understanding.

I hoped to see more conflict and to see that conflict resolved by the end of the piece. I wished the dialogue had been properly developed in an accepted grammatical form. I would have felt like more of a participating reader had the information dump that is the first paragraph not landed squarely on my neck. In stories that I like and admire the characters are brought to life by their actions and dialogue, otherwise, characters appear only as writing upon cardboard - as in "these words mean character A".

The piece was difficult to read because of form, grammatical technique, and composition.
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Review of Just a Man  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (4.0)
A very nice tribute to a fallen warrior saint. I was pleased to read it. Most people, even his serious detractors admired his courage. As a boy I saw him in my home town, he happened to be on his way to jail at that moment and I was impressed by his composure. I suppose he expected it and had prepared himself for arrest, but still...
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Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (3.0)
I keep an offering in my coat pocket much like I keep a handkerchief. I don't usually need a hanky, but someone else might. As to the offering, when I'm down town and a drunk asks for enough change to buy a meal I show him a card I bought at McDonald's good for five dollars worth of food. If his eyes don't light up I put it back in my pocket.

(Now, here gentle reader you may write your own ending from two choices I shall give you.)

A) Then I walk away.
B) Then I take a pint of whiskey from my other pocket.

I enjoyed your poem, it made me think.
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Review of Metamorphous  
Review by Dee C
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Haven't seen this device before it is very interesting and you filled in the blanks marvelous well. I like the measured beat you achieved and the rhymes seemed natural and not forced.
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Review of Retrospect  
Review by Dee C
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
In my opinion love does not hurt so much as itch. Lost love is similar to the pain am amputee still experiences in that lost limb.
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Review of George Washington  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (5.0)
When we look at the truthful cherry tree hacker, the silver dollar tosser , Delaware crosser, the powdered wig wearer, it's hard to remember he was a land speculator, a slave owner, and possessor of all the other little foibles that go into the manufacture of clay feet.
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Review of Flies  
Review by Dee C
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Sufficiently weird, weird enough to qualify for horror anyway. Very reminiscent of Poe's tales: dark, foreboding, obscure narration. Unreliable narrator finally revealed at the end. I certainly enjoyed it. Hope you write some more like this and hope I run across them.
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Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey this is the way to do flash fiction. It has action, momentum and a bang up finish. You let the dialogue do the work without a lot of tiresome exposition or backstory, your nouns and verbs are doing the heavy lifting and you are chary of modifiers letting the narrative show what going on and leaving the adverbs in the locker (except this one:"Randy said excitedly").

All in all it's the best thing I've read tonight so bravo to you. Keep up the good work.
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