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672 Public Reviews Given
673 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
Honest, for the most part. Not hurtful, for the most part. In other words I'll try to be straight up but not step on you face while I'm about it. Oh, by the way, this points business confuses me. I don't want to charge for a review. If I have the points in the bank I'll refund you 900. Why I'm required to ask 1000 is past my understanding.
I'm good at...
Not much. Grammar, spelling, punctuation, most of the mechanical stuff. Good eye for composition. I read a lot and I can give you a reader's opinion. Most good reviews are a fresh eye.
Favorite Genres
western, sci fi , detective, general or literary fiction
Least Favorite Genres
erotica
Favorite Item Types
what, pray tell, is an "item type"?
Least Favorite Item Types
See above
I will not review...
stories about kangaroos
Public Reviews
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Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (2.0)
Good idea,however,the writer screwed it all to pieces with inattention to logical order and a seriously wandering point of view, but who knows? Maybe they will write like this in the future. I hope not, but I'm the one that thought mini skirts would go on forever. Missed that call, drat.

I see the copyright on this is 2016 so we must have a decade or so to go before the ambidextrous point of view comes into vogue.

Dc


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Review by Dee C
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Decent prayer I'd say. Was that the writer's intent, to write a poetic prayer? The next King David, right? Or was it the writer's intent to write a poem, prayerful in nature, observant of the Judeo-Christian culture, but still a poem? Either is fine by me.

One itty bitty nitty point, the giving of a lump of coal kicked me entirely into Santa Claus mode and kicked me entirely out of prayer mode.
DC


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Review by Dee C
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Seems to me that for a fire there wasn't much heat. I don't say I'm disagreeing with the premise, yeah old people do the love thing in a different nostalgic sort of way from the young'uns, but this piece advertises itself as poetry, not sociology 101.

DC


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Review by Dee C
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
"Bring me the head of Santa the Claus!" Amazing poem, not amazed by the writing, just the bloody idea. You meant it so, did you not? Of course you did, naughty child. Bet you got coal or ashes last Tuesday? Right? You bet I'm right.

As to the poem, the rhyme is sweet but the beat hopscotches a wee tinsy bit. Oh, bet you meant "reins" although the "reigns" is nicely Freudian.

Good bizarre writing
DC


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Review by Dee C
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
An interesting story. The dialogue was stilted and needs to be punched up a bit until it does justice to a fine story. The word limit, if there was one, may be the culprit. The dialogue seemed rushed as if it had to be gotten out of the way to get on with the action.

DC


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Review of Energy Crisis  
Review by Dee C
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Well that was weird. I lost count of all the movies tropes but The Postman figured large. Did you meant to put in all the misspellings. some were pretty funny so if you just can't spell don't worry it all worked out. All in all it was a real riot.
DC


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Review of Painting  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (5.0)
That was a cute story and I'll bet it wasn't cribbed from a Wilson cartoon. It would be amusing for some clever writer to start a contest for cartoonless captions. The reader would (in a perfect entry) be compelled to visualize the cartoon from the caption the contestant supplied.

"On second thought maybe a giant chicken eating frog is not the right animal to bio-engineer."
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Review of Big Puzzle  
Review by Dee C
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
Interesting, I'll bet that is delicious with Ranch Dressing.
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Review of Scratch Away  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (5.0)
"Be honest, encouraging and respectful..." Hello Keaton. I copied that blurb that always appears at the top of the page because it seems like a bushel of equine by- product. I fail to see how honesty and encouragement are conjoined twins. Respectful? Maybe I'm missing something?

All that aside, what about your poem? I like everything about this piece except its shape. What is it with you and the balusters? Some kind of Freudian thing? The sense and context of your writing are excellent and entertaining. Excellence and entertainment are absolutely not conjoined twins. Sometimes I think they are orphans.

I appreciate the mental vigor you put into this thing and want to be honest and encouraging. That other thing just ain't in me, but I'm working on it.
DC


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Review of Foolish and Old  
Review by Dee C
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Boy, old Harry sounds a lot like me, just jumpin outta windows hoping for a Hollywood awning to catch him and give one big bounce into the windshield of the taxicab carrying his ex-wife down the street to meet her latest flame and then what happens... well you tell me. you got me into this situation.


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Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (5.0)
I liked it. Greed is a powerful motivator - one of the best. But adventure? Adventure beats all. We can say we are in it for the money. We aren't. The people who made money during the California gold rush were the wagon makers and shovel sellers. Most of the prospectors went bust, but the stories, the golden stories, are about the risk takers and dare devils. Your piece went to the place that adventurer would go.

Thanks for taking me along.
DC


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Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (5.0)
My sister worked as a receptionist/secretary in the same building as I did, so I saw her often. I noticed one day her pencil eraser was worn out. Being a wise acre I asker her "What can I say about a secretary who wears out her eraser before she wears out her pencil?" She didn't think a whole minute, before retorting, "She catches her mistakes." She was right. It isn't a mistake if you catch it.
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Review of Free will  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Delia,
I received an email today inviting me to review this piece of writing. I have read it and find no flaws in either the mechanical aspects of writing or the logical presentation of your assertions. I think most people nowadays hold that they have free will. The people I know think they at least have a choice. It seems to me that if, and I may be wrong, people are already convinced that free will exists and they have it, then you are preaching to the choir. By that I mean presenting to a group whose reaction is "yes, of course."

If you want to expand into how to beat peer pressure, how to not follow blindly, how to be your own man or woman; that piece of writing would be more useful and interesting.

Personally when I read a tract, and this is a religious tract, and see instruction from someone just as human as I that informs me what (capital H) He wants, I'd like to get some authority for that instruction. I'll bet you have the instruction book there with you. Cite your authority and your assertions will carry more weight.

Thanks for asking me to read and comment.

Delmar Cooper


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Review of REMEMBERIG A SON  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (4.5)
A good poem. Well written, but destroyed by a misspelling in the title. Why did you do that?

DC
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Review of Sarcasm for all  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (4.0)
This one defines bitterness. I like the title but I would have liked "With Sarcasm for All" better. Has a ring to it. I'd like to meet the face to face liar. I think that would be an interesting character to write about. Maybe, maybe not. I think a writer as good as you could make it so. Maybe. Maybe not.

Thanks for sharing.
Delmar Cooper


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Review of Dear 2015  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (4.5)
Interesting story. Holden Caulfield in space. I enjoyed it and I give you credit for the narration which I think was deliberately unreliable.

Delmar Cooper
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Review of Writing.Com 101  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (1.0)
Hello,
I've recently had the ratings of two of my stories adjusted. I have looked over my portfolio in light of this and now I want to make some other upward adjustments. In point of fact I want all my work to be listed at non-E and 18+ just to be on the safe side and cull out the children whose readership I do not solicit anyway.

Being a rookie here, I am unsure about how to do this. Can your office assist me?
D.Cooper
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Review by Dee C
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Well Bob all I can say is that this one will be hard to beat. It's well written mechanically, and well thought out contextually. The story, even with the coincidence level so high, is believable or at least so plausible that a reader is easily willing to suspend disbelief for the sake of enjoying a good tale. I was able to do so without question.
Thanks for sharing a fine piece of writing.
DC


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Review of Nine One One  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (3.0)
Well I sure didn't expect that. Perhaps in the rewrite you could possibly include an Elvis impersonator? Or would that just be too perfect? I wonder if the EMTs had a tube of Crazy Glue in the medicine kit? Probably not, a egg related emergency isn't an everyday thing.


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Review by Dee C
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
I haven't heard that song in years. The story was a pleasant tribute. The dialogue was very well done. I felt right at home, as my ear is attuned to that culture. The best part of the speech pattern replication is that it is not overdone. If Goldilocks was a redneck...

The religious references ring true, again not some over the top Flannery O'Conner knock off.

A pleasure to read. Thanks for sharing. Please imagine five stars down there.


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Review by Dee C
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I hope you did or will do well in the contest. The writing is workman-like and beyond reproach grammatically. Do you think cancer, which I assume to be the prompt, is essential to the story? Might not some other disease served the story just as well? Not serve the prompt, mind you, just the story. If you don't win it will probably be for that reason, because otherwise it's super.


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Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (4.0)
I read an article about the history of a local Baptist church yesterday. I slavery wedding vows were not as those we hear today, but "Until death or distance do us part..." Appropriate for those whose lives and freedom were not their own. Those sold into distance were as dead to those left behind.

Odd, but true.


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Review of Jehovah Raphah  
Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (4.0)
Absolutey outside my solar system. I have never heard of Raphah and neither has my spellchecker, as it just informed me. But, no matter, I am ignorant of so many things that this is small potatoes. Ignorant that reminds me that until I was ten and saw a horrific accident I thought people were solid all the way through like potatoes.

Reminded me of my favorite poet, King David.


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Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (4.5)
We have here, in season, an infestation of hummingbirds. Wicked creatures like angry little fairies that dispute among themselves with ferocity about the deed and title to the hummingbird feeder. But, while one bully is busied chasing away a tiny competitor another sneaks in for a quick drink.


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Review by Dee C
Rated: E | (5.0)
The word "cultural" was well placed. When I think of culture I never envision the personal effect of culture on one individual. This piece of writing made me aware that culture is granular rather than monolithic. Although I could not put my finger on what gave me a sense of impending doom that foreboding existed in the writing. Thank you for sharing this.
dc


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