I liked this story very much--it's well written, with humor. At first, I thought it was a friend or sibling, only to find out later that Henry is neither!
This is a GREAT story, and very well written! I love your descriptions of Linda and her brood, and Riley's relationship with Anthony.
But my favorite part is:
"Try explaining to a twelve-pound tomcat that he is too big to stuff himself into my shirt anymore. For the most part, I lose this argument. He also has a problem with squirrels. They chase him whenever he ventures out into the yard. This usually results in his insistence that the world is a safer place when viewed from inside my shirt. It’s hard to argue with that."
This is beautifully written!! The imagery is wonderful, showing how God reveals Himself in lives , every day, in so many different ways!
My favorite stanza is:
"I Am the trusting, believing child,
I Am the waters, calm and mild.
I Am the breeze which cools the air,
The ribbon in a young girl's hair.
The thoughts you have expressed here are powerful, and you have presented them extremely well!!
I especially like the following sentiment, because I have been there, too:
"The walls may be crumbling around me, and my problems may seem great, but with my strengthened faith in the God who has always loved me, I now possess inner peace and strength to overcome each and every obstacle. He opened my eyes and I can see all the great things He has set before me. He is my refuge, my stronghold, my light, my salvation."
This is a powerful, poignant presentation! You gave all the right arguments, using a personal example to bring home the points were making!
My son, when he was 16, was in the front passenger seat when his friend, a new driver, swerved and hit a tree. Thank God, they all had their seat belts on, and everyone walked away from the accident. I don't even want to think about what would ahve happened if even one of them had not been buckled up.
I liked this story! It is well written and the ending is a surprise..it ends on a positive note, although that is not the way it feels during the early on.
And, we are never really alone and apart fom our loved ones who have gone on before us--an importnat lesson to be gotten from your story!
There were a few typos--the use of "Kitten"should be capitalized everywhere, and when speaking of God, "He" should caopitalized, as well.
This is a wonderfully-written, personal account of staying at a cabin in the mountains! You wrote about it in such a loving, descriptive way that the reader is brought there, right alongside of you, enjoying the sights of the surrounding areas.
I love Christmas stories! I especially like this one--it was interesting to see how a tradition grew from a need. And traditions are such an important part of Christmas!
I loved this story! Your descriptions of Angel, the Victorian house (I LOVE Victorian houses!), and the surrounding area was so well done, I felt as if I were there!
I also love the symbolism of the broken goose! Life is never what we plan, and for every turn we take, there is a lesson learned, and we go on from there, just as Angel does!
This is a wonderful story that is very well written.
Just one small typo- "life-long commitment". Other than that, great job!
You have expressed well the soundness of a cat's sleep. I really liked the poem, and know the feeling all too well, of seing my cats sleep, and wishing sleep would come as easily to me, too!
I especially liked the following:
"Why are you here?”
I said with fear,
Looking for the door;
“This is no haven!”
Then quoth the Raven:
“I’m here for evermore!”
This is clever and imitates the original, only to turn the tables, and have the Raven quote "Evermore".
This is beautifully written! I especailly liked the reference to life being a maze and wandering without a map--that's exactly how it feels some days!
Another part I like:
"Life is a footnote in the expanse of time.
Angels know the path to God and the divine" --how short life really is but that angels are here to guide us along the Path.
I enjoyed reading this very much! You chose very descriptive words and phrases for what the cats sees, and how it behaves towards moving and stationary objects. I especially like,
"My green crystal lens with lens imposed
Collects those movements that interest,
And cuts the running or the motionless to blurs if caught
With claws and teeth like torn metal"
I liked the way you presented this--the stolen kiss, putting off the bad thoughts, hoping for a future together, and at the very end, the realization: "it cannot be, you are with someone else, not me"..very powerful!
It is short and to the point, with very effective use of the words you chose.
What an emotional and very touching portrait you paint with your words! I think it is particularly effective in your repetitive use of "I remember" and contrasting it to what the man knows as fact--that what he remembers he will not have again.
I am typing this with tears in my eyes. This is wonderfully written, and a touching tribute to Rupert! I especially like the inclusion of Kipling at the end.
This is REALLY, REALLY funny! Perhaps I can see the humor in it because it sounds like a lot of the do-it-yourself projects that have tired to take us out around here...
this is wonderful! I especially liked your description of giving your first speech..wobbly legs and all! I think most of us can really relate, although the references to cricket matches really got me thinking, although I think it is universally held just as you described it: that "a win gets you a mere pat on the back while a loss earns you a half hour lecture..."
I am very touched by Terri's story--and your poem discussing it. You have summed up the story so well--that her life is more than a mere group of cells. When a story is constantly in front of us, like this one is, we tend to forget that, and we divide into our "political tents".
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