Presentation: Impression:A little boy special to you. That must mean a lot. Suggestions: The poem tells instead of show... You can use more details for the eyes and lashes. Also you can mention one place you've gone together. Otherwise good.
Overall Comments: The poem is intersting, like a mix of a Happy B-Day letter and something conversational. Keep up the great work.
Grammar and Spelling:Nothing here that I can find.
Presentation: Impression: Emily's mom came to Emily...then it went led to some other events. Sequence/Plot:Great job here. Character Development:Great way to show the characters' emotions here.
Overall Comments: Great story. I believe this is good as it is, but then you say progress...lol Keep up the excellent work.
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> Impression:A real life experience in Africa. Very much takes you to the place.
> Sequence/Plot: Great events, and which order they're in. I like the plot too.
> Character Development: The narrator develops as it goes along. I love the details you have for them, and the dialogue too.
Overall Comments:Neat book. I enjoy reading most of what I've read. Keep on writing.
Presentation: Impression: There is a lot that describes your condition. Sequence/Plot: This is real life experience, which makes the plot unique. Character Development:You are strong for your conditions!!
Overall Comments:Great letter! I enjoyed reading this.
Grammar and Spelling: No spelling or grammar errors found.
Presentation:I love the flow your poem has. It also has great rythem to it, as well as some rhyming words. The poem expresses something out there that answers the question, in my opinion.
Overall Comments:Great job with this poem. I enjoyed reading it.
Grammar and Spelling:No spelling errors or grammar errors found in this area. This section is perfect.
Presentation:This is very persuasive, or, is it informational. Which ever I mentioned fits the article greatly. The details is so neat. There is a lot to know besides just searching!
Overall Comments:Great job writing this article. I really enjoyed it. Keep up the great work.
Comments:This is a neat short story. lol I can tell that the short story describes the family and how they chose a pool, which Nathan thought was prettier. lol
Grammar and Spelling:No spelling or grammar errors found.
What's all the secrets? I wonder about that...lol It would also help me out I believe. I do prefer writing mysteries, only it gets abandoned, I daresay. This looks like something that would take some time working on, so I'll be patience with reading your things. lol Keep on writing please.
Great prelogue. lol I'd say that dialogues can stand alone as a paragraph, which could be separated. I don't see any grammar or spelling errors, a great sign of a good story. Keep up the great work, and continue writing.
This looks like there's some intersting things in it, even though I haven't looked at them yet. I love that sig/picture you choose for your collection, it is very unique. Good luck on your contest, and keep up the great work.
Comments:This poem is neat. There is some feelings in the descriptive words as well as a picture.
Grammer and Spelling:In where you put "Now no longer sre we man but...." There you put an s instead of an a.
The second to last word should be gained.
Overall Comments: I do believe this is a neat poem. It just needs that much fixing up and then I'll change my rating to a 5. Keep up the excellent work.
This looks like an intersting story to read. For it being your first one I'd say your off to a great start. It's your birthday now *singing* so you don't have to get it done today...lol. There are some puncuation errors and no spelling errors so far. Keep up the great work.
I like this poem. It doesn't give too many details, but it does give a repetition and a visual picture of what the bird did. The first three lines, where it started aboutThere WAS a bird... which gave some forshadowing on what would happen to it. Keep it up.
I enjoyed reading this short story. It was very intersting, with the different creatures in it. One of the best things about it is the intent fighting that the king and Sage fought, and the rescue was afterwards. Make some more stories that I can read.
This has a smoothe flow, and is accurate in what happened in sequental order. Some things I really enjoyed: The story was mainly a flashback to what had happened, and why he is thankful to his dad. I really enjoyed reading this.
This is intersting and neat. It gives some form of description that expresses emotion and forming a 'movie', even though it isn't. There are a few spelling errors, and maybe every other I could be capitalized, unless you planned it to be that way. Great freewritten poem anyways. Keep it up.
This is a really neat. I wonder what happens in the second chapter, what had happened to Emirepir that night she disappeared? Or if the narrator left in search of her? That's the foreshadowing of throughout the chapter, I believe. It's a great thing to keep the reader's attention. The beginning might not have such as strong an effect on the readers as when they get into the middle part. I'm intersted in reading the second chapter.
This is a really neat poem. Shooting stars would be fun to watch, but the way you describe fears is even more intersting. Blind me in a state of cycles is my favorite phrase out of the poem. Keep up the writings.
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