I saw your request for a review in the newsletter. Please note that these are just my opinions and others will have different opinions.
The theme of this poem is a difficult one - I understand, because I've had friends who have battled with addiction. I actually wrote a poem myself from the OTHER perspective - that of the user who has passed on. If you're interested, you can check it out - "Final Comprehension
I liked your choices of words, and the mood you created with the poem. There was a mix of what I call 'sweet, sickly words' which give us a lingering impression of the drugs (words like pleasure, saturate, sweet and release), and then the somber words which go with the results of using those drugs (words like burning, evil, pain and extinguish). You do repeat some of the words twice, but I don't think they need changing.
The poem is not rated, and I would suggest you could rate it as 18+ (or 13+ but I'm not 100% sure that's the right rating, so I'm suggesting 18+ just to be safe). If you leave it as '---', it isn't listed on the public pages, and it's much harder for people to find. That might be why you've had so few reviews.
For me, the main 'criticism' of the poem is the lack of punctuation. I know that some poets don't like to use punctuation, but I much prefer it. It's over to you entirely, but I'd like to see full stops, etc in there.
and your pleasure"s, burning black holes
You've used a quotation mark there instead of an apostrophe, but I don't think it needs either. I would take it out and just leave it as 'pleasures'.
I watched sadly as you, saturate you
I would suggest taking out the comma in that line, and changing the second 'you' to 'yourself'. So it would read 'I watch sadly as you saturate yourself'. What do you think?
and I wonder how, you could not see me
waiting for your return , from that deep dark valley of insanity
all the love I have given you, is not enough to stop you
None of these lines need commas in them. It feels like you've put the commas in there to make the reader pause, to give rhythm and meter to your poem. It worked, but it leaves the reader frowning over the incorrect use of punctuation (well, that's what it did to me anyway!). I would suggest removing the comma and instead moving the words after each comma to a new line. You could do the same where you currently have commas in your second, third and fourth lines - each of those could easily be made in to two lines. That would keep the metering and rhythm you've achieved, while fixing your punctuation.
Further on metering and rhythm, I thought it was excellently done. I found it easy to 'feel' the metering and the rhythm as I read, and that's a lot rarer than you'd think in poetry.
All in all, well done.
Founder of the "Kiwis on WDC!" group