This was a beautifully written poem about a person looking into the eyes of someone the love. I've never heard of this particular poem form, but it works well for your poem. I like how you expressed the love of the other and the wish to linger in the eyes of the other person in so few lines and without using certain words that are often used in love poems. Very good job.
This is a creepy little story and I enjoyed reading it. The story could have been longer, and the sense of fear could have been more drawn out, but it was still a very good story. You did a good job of creating a short horror story in only a thousand words.
This is a poem about loss that is short and to the point, which works quite well for your poem. With shorter poems, it can sometimes be difficult to express what you want to express but you expressed what you wanted to express well and in only a few lines.
I enjoyed this poem very much. It’s cohesive and well-written. It paints definite images of camping out in a place where you can see all the stars. I can picture getting so lost watching the stars and constellations that I lose track of time and suddenly its morning. For me, this poem inspires stories about adventure out in the wild places of the world, and what ifs about adventures out among the stars. It evokes a sense of the serene calm of getting away from the craziness of a stressful week (or couple of weeks) and recharge your batteries. It’s a beautifully written poem that I will definitely be adding this to my favorites so that I can read it again after a stressful week. Keep up the good work.
Your article was highly informative and I learned something today. I’ve never heard of this particular fruit, most likely because it’s not sold in the US as far as I know. I also learned that the durian is an important part of Malaysian culture. I’m not sure I’d enjoy eating this particular fruit, however. Since I work at a supermarket, I’ve seen a wide variety of different fruits and vegetables that are very unique but this was a new one. Thanks for the informative, well-written article.
I enjoyed how you used the letters of each word as the first letter of the first word in the line. I also liked how when read down, those letters spell the title of the poem. that was an interesting choice that made the poem unique. It's something I never thought of. I also enjoyed the images you made with the word choice. I could definitely picture it in my head. I did notice one thing. In the sixteenth line, you used the word axes instead of axis but that was the only thing I noticed.
Being an animal lover myself, I find this story sweet. The love between an owner and their pet, particularly of the pet is a dog, is strong. I enjoyed this story very much. I also enjoyed the ending. Knowing how much dog and master loved each other, the master's friend not only returned the dog home when he thought the dog had wandered off , the friend paid for the dog to be buried next to his master after death so they could still be together. This is a very good story.
I like the rules you listed for handling both kinds of reviews and reviewers. When dealing with reviews and reviewers, it's good to be able to tell the difference between constructive and destructive and how not to take both kinds too personally.
I've experienced déjà vu myself, though not in quite a while. I never looked at it quite this way , despite being an avid video gamer myself. This was an interesting and well written article with a theory that is clearly thought out and I'm glad I took the time to read it. I'll be looking at my own déjà vu experiences a bit differently from now on.
This poem is both simple and romantic, which is part of the beauty of it. It talks about some of the firsts involved in love. Whether it’s the first date, or simply holding hands for the first time. It also speaks of remembering those firsts and celebrating them with simple truth because sometimes love isn’t a whole lot of frills and flowery words. This poem speaks to the romantic in me, which is hard to do. It's a very pretty poem, one I enjoyed.
I watched a program about the 60 greatest mysteries and crimes in the US and the program talks Tom Horn, his trial ,conviction .execution and the mock retrial that found him innocent. However, your well written article contains facts and information that was not mentioned in that particular episode. Thus I learned some details about Tom Horn and his case that I didn't know before.
The chapters could be longer. Longer chapters have more detail that further adds to both the emotions and actions of the story, but it also helps draw readers in. You don't have to do it all at once but spread it out over the story to make it that much more interesting. Details also make the characters more interesting and helps bring them to life in the imaginations of the readers. However, what you have so far is very good. It's an interesting story with good characters. It simply needs more depth.
I rather quite enjoyed this. I enjoy psychological thriller types of stories and this one was pleasantly different in a good way. My favorite part was the bit of a twist at the end when the identity of the narrator was reveled. I was not expecting that.
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