I enjoyed your poem very much. The poem is descriptive, and the rhyme scheme is consistent between the stanzas. Even though the poem is short, the length doesn't detract from it and it does a lot with a little. Overall, a very well-written poem. Good job.
I enjoyed your short poem very much. It's well-written and concise. The poem is short, but the length doesn't take away from the poem. The use of free verse works well for the subject. Overall, a very well written and enjoyable poem. Good luck working on your masters.
I enjoyed your poem very much. I particularly enjoyed the use of rhyming couplets, which worked well in mataining the flow of the poem. I did notice a potential spelling error. In the second line of the fourth couplet, the "other" isn't pluralized making the line sound slightly awkward. Overall, good work.
I enjoyed this introduction very much. It's very well written and the descriptive details paint a strong picture of what's going on. Though it's short, it uses the length wisely, doing a lot with a little. The small taste of world building adds to the piece. I look forward to reading more of this story.
I enjoyed your poem very much. It's well-written and descriptive. The descriptions paint a vivid picture of those early days on the island. The varying lengths of the stanzas worked well and helped to emphasis the descriptions and emotions of the poem. I enjoyed the reptation of the line "One often wondered was Dad safe to battle the treacherous waters
So many oceans and dangerous obstacles between us.". Very well-done.
I enjoyed your poem very much. The description is simple yet effective and doing a lot with a little, without going overboard. I also enjoyed the reptation of the phrase "as the wind blows", which really ties the stanzas together. Overall, a very well written poem.
I enjoyed your poem very much. It's well written and consistent. The rhyme scheme is consistent throughout the poem and helps express the thoughts and emotions of the writer. The use of couplets was also consistent and used to great effect to express the writer's experiences. Overall, very well done.
I enjoyed your poem very much. The form and rhyme are consistent throughout. This is a fun and silly about one of the hazards of golf. The poem's length works well, with it not being too long or too short. It definitely made me smile after reading it. Overall, a very well written poem.
I enjoyed your poem very much. The poem is very well-written and expressive. It conveys a number of emotions throughout without any of those emotions lessening any of the others. The poem is also precise and to the point without drawing to much out. Very well done.
I enjoyed your poem very much. It's short and sweet, but the length doesn't detract from the poem at all. The poem is a well-written piece of free verse. The poem does well conveying the inspiration taken from one of the most famous bands ever. It uses that inspiration to great effect. Very well done.
I enjoyed your poem very much. The poem is well-written with a consistent rhyme scheme. While short and sweet, it does well expressing the blessing of newness, while also acknowledging its' fleetingness. The poem also acknowledges the blessings that come with time and the memories that one holds onto. Overall, this is a very well-written poem.
I enjoyed your poem very much. It's well-written and highly descriptive. The description used bring the sea journey to life for the reader and invokes a sense of adventure. It also invokes a sense of overcoming the odds in the face of adversity. Overall, this is a well-written, fantastic poem.
I enjoyed your short story very much. It's well-written and the tone is consistent. The world is well-built and described, which creates a distinct image. The main character is distinct, unique individual and even the nameless minor characters she passes are distinct and clear. Very well done.
I enjoyed your essay very much. It's well-written and informative. It gives a different perspective on horror stories with monsters. It's a perspective that I hadn't considered or thought of, and I look forward to utilizing this going forward in my own writing. I did notice two small errors. In the ninth paragraph of the Two Kinds of First Acts section, there's this line, "That's the methodology in Jaws Brody finding the female swimmer's body on the beach is the catalyst." It seems like there should be either a period between "Jaws" and "Brody" to make it two separate sentences or a comma for one sentence. And in the first sentence of second paragraph of the Third Act section, the word "monster" has an extra "e" in it. These errors don't detract from the effectiveness of the essay. Well-done.
I enjoyed your story very much. Both characters are unique and distinct. Humor is sprinkled throughout, and it highlights the inherent silliness of predicting the weather based on whether a groundhog sees his shadow. The story is well-written overall, and very entertaining.
I enjoyed your story. The story is interesting, and the main character is distinct. His confusion and anxiety were clear. I would enjoy reading more of this story. I noticed that each sentence is a separate line/paragraph. It did make reading the story a little difficult. Putting a space between each paragraph and/or indenting the paragraphs would aid readability.
Also, some of the sentences can been combined to make a single paragraph instead of several paragraphs. For example, the section that starts with, " I pushed my desk away, looking for my backpack," and ends with, "Nobody ever cared to take a look; except me, who was trying hard to avoid stepping on the shattered glasses on either side of the floor," could be one paragraph, instead of what appears to be eight. However, it may be the formatting. Overall, a good story with a lot of potential.
I enjoyed your piece. It's well-written and expresses your fond memories of past Halloweens. As a fellow lover of Halloween and all things spooky, I enjoyed accompanying on your trip down memory lane to the spookiness of days past. Well done. Happy Halloween.
I enjoyed your limerick very much. It's well written and utilizes the form well. It's a short limerick but the shortness of it doesn't take away from the limerick at all. The length is well-used, and no word is wasted. The subject of the limerick, wanting to write a poem about a specific thing but not being able to get it to work, is a familiar one. Very well done.
I enjoyed your story very much. The characters are well-written and distinct. The descriptions were well done, bringing life to the characters, events and the story as a whole. I enjoyed the way you weaved the world building throughout the story. Overall, this is a very well-written story. Good work.
I enjoyed your poem. It does very well in expressing heartbreak and the pain it causes. The tone is consistent throughout. The use of free verse aids the poem in expressing its' subject. Even though there's no rhyme scheme in the poem, that doesn't detract from the poem at all. Overall, well done.
I enjoyed your haiku very much. It does a lot to invoke the image of forests and it does so with very little. It's a different style of haiku, one I haven't tried myself yet, but it's a good demonstration of the style. This is a very good poem. Good job.
I enjoyed your story. It's well written and consistent. Both characters are distinct, and their first meeting is sweet. I did notice that in the fifteenth paragraph, when Jo comes back from New York there's the line, "I had not asked the right questions with the right tone, at the right I thought..". It reads like there's a word missing between the last "right" and "I" that would allow the line to make a bit more sense and there's also a second period. Also, in the next paragraph the line, "I couldn't fathom how you just go from, I love you, to nothing," has extra spacing between "I" and "couldn't" which end up splitting the sentence and the paragraph a bit awkwardly. But overall, this is a sweet story.
I enjoyed your poem very much. It's well written and consistent. While it's not very long, the poem's length doesn't take away from the details. Having heard the folklore about the Superstition Mountains, this poem does very well in expressing the folklore and bringing it to life. Good work.
This is a good start. I would recommend spacing out the lines and indenting for clearer, more distinct paragraphs and easier reading. Also, adding quotation marks when characters are speaking will assist in readability. Adding more detail will help draw in readers. Altogether, this is a good start to a story, and it has a lot of potential.
I enjoyed your comparison between three different versions of a well-loved fairytale. It's well-written and well-thought out. Your critique details both the differences between the versions and the similarities between them very well. Very well done.
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