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Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed your poem very much. It's well-written and consistent. Though there's no rhyme scheme, that doesn't detract from the poem. While not overly descriptive, the descriptiveness the piece has aids in the poem's flow and expressing its' themes of travel, new experiences and the fear that can come with them. Overall, this a well-written, philosophical poem.
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Review of Wire Walker  
Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed your flash fiction story very much. The story makes good use of its length, doing a lot with a little. Though brief, the main character of Marc was interesting and his nervousness and joy at suggest were well-established. Overall, a will-written piece of flash fiction.
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Review of Listen  
Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed your poem very much. It's well-written and flows very well. The form is well used and consistent which aids the poem's flow, making the poem easily understandable to the readers. The theme is made clear throughout the piece. Overall, a well-written poem.
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Review of Moonlight on Cows  
Review by Detective
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I enjoyed your story very much. It's well written and the characters were distinct and unique. The story isn't very long, but it uses the length well. I enjoyed reading along as the mom explain what the word genre means and use some different as examples.

Overall, a well-written story with good characters and an understandable plot.
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Review by Detective
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)



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I enjoyed your story very much. It's well-written, consistent, and flows very well. The characters are distinct and interesting. The plot is solid, and the mystery is intriguing. The story is written in a way that it's easy to follow which keeps readers from getting confused. The plot builds up the suspense well to draw readers in and keep them reading. The crime is also set up well, without being graphic. Each suspect is set up well to be the potential killer without making it obvious which one it is because it could easily be any of them.

There were no major errors that I saw, though there were a couple of things that I noticed. When the detectives are talking to Helen, the second and third paragraphs probably should be combined into one since both are things being said by Helen. Also, the last sentence at the end of the story has a quotation mark that it doesn't need. These were the only things I noticed, and these are only suggestions.

I would enjoy reading a longer version of this story with more details and clues, as well as having a resolution to the mystery. You do quite a bit in the length the story has, but making the story longer would give you more room to add details to further intrigue the readers and draw them in. This would enhance the story, add to the enjoyment, and keep readers engaged, but again this is only suggestions. Overall, a well-written mystery with interesting characters, an intriguing, well-set up mystery and a solid plot. Good work. Keep writing.
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Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed your short poem very much. It's well-written and consistent. The poem's form is well used and clear, making the piece flow well, being understandable and easy to read. Overall, a well-written, sweet poem written in an underused form.
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Review by Detective
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed reading your story. It's very short but it uses the length it has well. There were no errors that I found while reading. The only suggestion I have would be to expand the story, adding more detail and expanding on both the plot and the characters. I would enjoy reading a longer, more fleshed out version of this story. Overall, a well-written story with potential. Good work.
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Review by Detective
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I enjoyed your opinion piece very much. It's well-written and consistent. The prompt was well-used and the subject matter was clear and detailed. Using the small comic to express how views on email and snail mail have changed was a good choice. Overall, a well-written piece. Good Work.
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Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a great crossword puzzle. The clues were well-thought out and clear without making things too easy. I managed to figure most of them out by giving the clues by giving them a good hard think. There was only one I couldn't figure out on my own and one of the ones I did figure out I got wrong only because I didn't think to pluralize the word. Overall, a fantastic, challenging puzzle.
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Review of Brain Freeze  
Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed reading your poem. It's well-written and the subject is well-expressed. The poem isn't overly descriptive, but it does well to show the effects of brain freeze, particularly when combined with the energy of a young child. Overall, a well-written, fun poem.
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Review of The Domino Effect  
Review by Detective
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I enjoyed your story very much. It's well-written and the characters are both unique and distinct. The plot and set up were both well-exectued to keep the readers engadged, without getting confused. While the ending didn't go in the direction I was anticipating, but the ending was very well-done and it fits the story.

There were no errors or mistakes that I noticed. I would also enjoy reading an extended/longer version of this story with added details, particuarly with the last two sections.

Overall, this is a well-written short story with a good plot, an interesting twist, and a solid ending.
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Review of Star  
Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed your poem very much. It's well-written and it flows well throughout. Even though there's no rhyme scheme, that doesn't take anything away from the piece. The poem also uses its length well, being long enough to express its subject and them without dragging on too long. The descriptiveness of the work lends itself well to expressing the poem's subject, getting the poem's subject across without confusing the readers.

Overall, a well-written, descriptive poem with a well-expressed theme. Good work.
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Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed your short poem very much. The rhyme scheme is consistent throughout the stanzas. Though the poem is short, it utilizes that length very well, doing a lot with a little. I would recommend capitalizing the first word of each line. Overall, a well-written, enjoyable poem. Good work.
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Review of Icy Hand  
Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed your poem very much. I enjoyed the descriptiveness of the poem, leaning into the cliche without going overboard, while your home provides warmth and safety from the weather. I also enjoyed how the first stanza is utilized as the final stanza to tie the poem together. Overall, a well-written, descriptive poem. Good work.
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Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed your short poem very much. It's well-written and consistent. The piece flows well throughout and expresses its subject clearly. While the poem isn't particularly long, it uses that length very well. The poem isn't overly descriptive, but it still manages create a distinct image for the readers. Overall, a well-written, enjoyable poem.
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Review of Mutiny  
Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
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I enjoyed reading your poem. It's an interesting piece that didn't go the direction I was expecting it to go based on the title. That didn't take anything away from the poem. You subverted expectations very well. The rhyme scheme is well utilized and consistent throughout the stanzas. The entire piece flows very well with no hiccups. It’s certainly a different take on the word mutiny. Using mutiny to express failing health makes a lot of sense and helps tie the stanzas and the poem as a whole together. The subject of failing health is made clear in each stanza, as each organ joins the mutiny. It's a subject that many readers can relate to. The poem is a good length, not being too long or too short. It uses that length well without feeling like it's dragging on too long or like it doesn't have enough space.

I particularly enjoyed how you use a different organ in each stanza, which helps express the poem's theme. I also enjoyed that you put a way to see the definition on the word “Hale” in the poem. This adds to the poem’s consistency. The poem also contains a good amount of description, without going overboard. It allows the piece to get the point across without bogging it down. There were no spelling or punctuation errors. The piece as a whole is readable and easily understandable, which keeps the readers from getting confused.

Overall, this is a well-written, interesting poem with a consistent theme, a well-executed rhyme scheme, and a different take on a concept. Very well-done. Keep up the good work. Write on.
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Review by Detective
Rated: E | (3.5)
I found your story in the Read a Newbie section. The premise of the story is solid one, a letter to one's future children. The premise is well expressed, particularly through the first half of the story. However, the piece falls flat a bit in the second half due to repitition.

There are some suggestions I have that could help make improvements. Firstly, I suggest making clear paragraphs to make it easier to read, instead of having a solid block of text. Also, the second half of the story is essentially the first half of the story repeated word for word. There's also a lack of punctuation that makes the second half read like a run on sentence. Since this is story is meant to take the form of a letter, another suggestion would be to format it as a letter.

Overall, this is a piece with a lot of potential.
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Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Disclaimer:The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

I enjoyed your short article very much. It's very well-written, easily understandable and educational. It contains quite a bit of information for being as short as it is. I learned some new things about onions that I didn't know before. The information was conveyed in a clear and concise manner that allows the reader to follow along without getting confused. The article is straight forward with its subject of natural cough relief.

I particularly liked the fact that the article was separated into sections, which aids in the readability of the article. Throughout the piece, it gives simple explanations for why onions work for helping with coughs, how honey and lemon can assist and enhance the effects and what to avoid and why and it does this while using words that the readers will understand. At no point does the article treat its readers like they're stupid,

There are no errors in terms of punctuation or spelling that I could find. The only suggestions I have would be to bold the section headings and to expand the sections themselves with more information. Expanding the article with more information could give readers a better understanding of the subject. Though the length doesn't take away from the information already present, getting straight to the point without any fluff.

Overall, you've done a good job conveying the information here to your audience, making this is a well-written, understandable article with some good information that will hopefully help anyone dealing with an annoying cough.
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Review by Detective
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Night's Watch image for G.o.T.



Disclaimer:The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

I enjoyed your story very much. The story certainly didn't go in the direction I was expecting it to, but that made the story more interesting and more fun. The characters were interesting and unique. Even though you don't go into an enormous amount of detail about the characters, the details that are given are just enough to create the images of the characters well. The descriptions were straight-forward and well-used, creating a distinct picture of the events for the reader without bogging down the story. This allows readers to visualize what's going on with ease and without getting lost or confused/

I particularly enjoyed the ending of the story. Not only was it good to see Joe get a bit of a second chance with the possibility for some happiness, but it was also pleasant to see that Mr.GR sent Joe a message explaining things and telling him that his friend was alright. It was a happier ending then I was expecting when I began reading.

I did notice a few simple errors. Once Joe is pulled onto the boat, thanks Charon and the Grim Reaper, and then asks where he is there is a large space between the first quotation mark and the "T" in "Thanks" that shouldn't be there. Also, a couple paragraphs down, after Mr. GR points out the party, he explains that Joe and Antonio are being taken to Limbo for processing. There should be a quotation mark next to the word "We".

Overall, this is a fun, enjoyable story with good characters, a well-thought-out plot, and a happier then anticipated ending.
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Review by Detective
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Night's Watch image for G.o.T.


Disclaimer:The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.

I enjoyed your story very much. The characters are all distinct and unique with clear personalities. The intrigue was weaved throughout the story which drew me in. I was excited to keep reading to find out what happened next. It was fun to follow Karrena and Vancent's investigation into Thantia, gather evidence and then revel that evidence, bringing an end to both the former leader’s campaign and criminal actions.

The pieces of worldbuilding sprinkled throughout the story help to bring the story to life. The terms used were easy to understand and were clear enough to keep readers from getting confused. I particularly enjoyed the partnership between the two lead characters. They work well together, even if Karrena wasn't particularly thrilled about being assigned a helper/assistant. Though there were no obvious errors in terms of grammar and punctuation, etc., there is a place in the third section when Karrena is talking to her boss and he's explaining why Vancent has been assigned to her.
There's a slight disconnect between parts of Doggan's dialogue. The lines,“I know how you feel about having a Helper. Especially a Help like Vancent, but you need Vancent. This planetary tour of Thantia is almost over, and you still haven’t found anything against her.", and,“If anyone can find out what’s going on with Thantia, it’s Vancent. Don’t get me wrong. You are still in control. Vancent is only there to help you.”, are both clearly being said by Doggan ,but the lines are split. It makes that bit of dialogue a bit disjointed. Combining the two lines would clear up that slight snarl up.

Overall, this is a well-written sci-fi political drama with well-thought-out characters, an interesting plot, and good worldbuilding. Good work.
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Review of Life in USA  
Review by Detective
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed your article very much. It's well-written and easy to follow. Having it divided into sections helped make it so easy to follow so readers won't be confused. I would suggest bolding the section headings to make them a bit clearer, along with a space between the sections and the headings. Overall, well-done. Good job.
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Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed your poem very much. The choice of free verse works well for this poem, allowing it to flow unhindered. The prompt words were well used and aid in bring the poem's imagery to life. While there's no rhyme scheme, that doesn't detract from the piece. The descriptiveness of the work also aids in making the imagery clear. Overall, a well-written poem. Good job.
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Review of The Ring  
Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed your micro-fiction very much. It's a very well-written story. Though its' short, it manages to convey a lot in that short space. While not overly descriptive, that doesn't take away from the story. It contains just enough description to convey what's going on in the story. Very well done.
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Review of LAYERS OF CLOUDS  
Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed your poem very much. It's well-written and flows well. The rhyme scheme is consistent through each stanza which helps maintains the poem flow. The poem's theme is expressed very well and very clearly through the work's descriptiveness. Overall, very well done.
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Review by Detective
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed your article very much. It's well-written and highly informative. Having the separate sections for each item discussed makes it easy to read and understand. It passes along information and advice in a manner that doesn't talk down to the readers. The examples used help give clarity to the article's subject. Well-done.
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