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Review of My Beloved  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I chose out of the religious inspiration category

Overall impression of piece: I really get this. Life very rarely is what we think and hope for. I like your portfolio blurb. Most good reviewers read those.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok/ Reads well. I think Me would be better than I (although He is the great I Am). Fiercely instead of fiercely

What I liked?*Smile* This is open and very honest. Honesty is the first attribute of any good writing. A lot of this is lifted directly out of scripture and definitely works

What I disliked*Idea* How do you say anything new about the Lord that hasn't already been said? In clined his ear to my cry. flew away like a dove among others. What his direct revelation to you and how did you feel?

How the piece made me feel I am not working and my wife is. She gets so tired. It is easy to think I lost a wife and a job. Can we be better?

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Chocolate Bliss  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in pieces to review.

Overall impression of piece Who doesn't like Chocolate? There is obviously a sweetness here. Sweetness doesn't last. Definitely an interesting message.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok; reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Your rhymes are very well done and this reads incredibly well. I have detailed information on him and chocholates both.

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure if you are for romance or against it. It seems like an eat drink and be merry for tomorrow you may die--or at least run out of chocolate

How the piece made me feel: Live for today for tomorrow the chocholates will be gone. Kind of a cynical message to me. I am not expecting Hallmark to purchase the rights to this. Love is a decision; I grant you that.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this scanning one of the three headings you have for the piece. These areas are kind of my bailiwick.

Overall impression of piece: This is obviously a big event. I think your sonnet form couples with it well

Grammatical and spelling errors: I don't think billions needs a capital

What I liked?*Smile*: You havae taken a largely scientific event and given it the legs of being able to see it first hand. There are even other senses you bring in. Good rhyming couplet at the end. The picture really does help us to visualize.

What I disliked*Idea*: In the blink of an eye is approaching cliche. A footnote kind of telling of the event would really help to fill in blanks. Obviously, this is very complex and not intuitive.

How the piece made me feel You have got the biggness of this event down right. If we know about universe, we should feel very small.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of This Dream  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This caught my eye. I pretty much only review what interests me

Overall impression of piece: We can be anything we want to be. Why not a hero and a damsel> Some do it all at the same time

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile*: I like the varying rhyme schemes. None of them seem to be contrived. Some of the internal rhymes within lines is pretty interesting like sky and high, and steep and deep, found and renowned. We have a cacophony of images here--much like a dream.

What I disliked*Idea*: Is this a dream or an image? Can I tell the difference? Are we driven by dreams? I guess I never have been(but that may be just me)

How the piece made me feel We kind of like to split ourselves apart. I can be an athlete and nothing else. I can be a thinker, but not a lover. I am not sure where that comes from.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Why I chose this piece I like not rating this. It was probably a good idea

Overall impression of piece: Something is not an overwelming idea and often it is. We kind of struggle with that. Sheep are really kind of dumb which pretty much talks of our natural tendency

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Picture kind of augments the piece. Children and sheep were on about the same level. Jesus love them too. This is simple direct and too the point

What I disliked*Idea* Most have heard all these ideas before. You are kind of telling us instead of showing us. What is it like to be a sheep? Maybe it should be written from a sheep point of view.

How the piece made me feel Sheep are dirty, disobedient and foremost disagreeable beings yet the shepherd loved them. John 10. We can't explain it

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I kind of like spiritual things. Saw this rambling through the site.

Overall impression of piece: I always love something new. I wonder if they ever found Waldo. Is he beside Billiken?

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is definitely a case of I wonder how these things get started. Your pictures our all first rate. I have travelled a little in Japan

What I disliked*Idea*: The purpose of this is? I am not really sure why you wrote this. I have to admit I wasn't connected to the billiken phenomenon. You have kind of left yourself out of this. We all have prejudices. (Mine is Christian and Christ). If you have an expert, why not use him?

How the piece made me feel I don't think it is bad to study things like this. They just are. Live with it for my more conservative Christian friends. I have a history bent so you might like some of my pieces.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays. I like history

Overall impression of piece: You have hit many of the crucial points of the John Brown saga. Some considered him like a Messiah, calling for a new America. That obviously did not happen after the Civil War

Grammatical and spelling errors: Numbers are generally spelled out unless very complicated. Dashes are two hyphens together--no spaces. You kind of run clauses together. Too many clauses make things kind of hard to read. 323-5 is missing a hyphen

What I liked?*Smile* You have some great ideas here. When is Civil Disobedience warranted? A lot of the 1960's had elements of that, although Martin's was non violent.. I agree with more blood shed than progress. It was by far are most dastardly war.

What I disliked*Idea* You have a footnote of where things came from, but don't list any more about it

How the piece made me feel Do we have a right to hate people? Today's political climate would say no> Violence had been brewing ever since the Constitution was written. Whose rule is more important--God's or man's? I am not sure if the Civil War changed anything. It did give us solidarity as a country. The United States is a great nation. They used to say are. Not a whole lot changed until the 1960's

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Dawn  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overall impression of piece Part of Yellow power raid. Love's labor lost is kind of a recurring theme in literature

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well

What I liked?*Smile*: There are ups and downs in any relationship. We've been married 42 years. Is it perfect. Hardly! You are absolutely right. Hurt doesn't go away. I love the image of a washed up tree. I feel that. I also think of the tree on the mountain being battered by the wind but holding on. It has got to be lonely there

What I disliked*Idea* It is hard to write something new here. Regret seizes me. I get that whole heartedly, but I could use an image to show me that.

How the piece made me feel My thorns have pricked me is a great image. I have worked with hurt couples before. Often we find that we personally are the enemy. We are a very prickly people

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Spunky Old Broads  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Overall impression of piece: i definitely had to read your portfolio to get a look at a unique individual. It is kind of nice to see someone not hiding who they are. Part of the Yellow case raid

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. I like the exclamation points

What I liked?*Smile* I kind of like the varying rhyme schemes. There is no doubt how you feel on things and your approach to life. Moost of this is referring to yourself in the third person. It kind of works. You obviously are one of whom you are speaking about.

What I disliked*Idea* As I never dyed my hair, I am not sure how this plays out in time. I am not sure just how old we are talking about here.

How the piece made me feel I have never had blue hair. I Tell folks I dye my hair grey but no one is buying it. Maybe I was born old. Wail against growing old. I have heard some poets say. Geritol is actually pretty much bad for you unless you are anemic. I grew up with that too. I am 65

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of lost in moon song  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

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Why I chose this piece This is a random read and review. I see things here that are very conducive to good poetry

Overall impression of piece: Obviously the highlighted words are required by the contest. I can see that in some way or form you were a part of this

Grammatical and spelling errors" Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* There are so many sounds. Most of the time we miss them because we are too busy to listen. There are internal sounds too. They are the sounds of the heart when we are in pain. There is a lot going on in the dark.

What I disliked*Idea* There are so many images here, that I kind of loose that this is a song of remourse. The main thing is not really the main thing in this

How the piece made me feel Are we creatures of the night howling at the moon? I think we are in many ways, although we won't readily admit it

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Review of GARBAGE . . .  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

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Why I chose this piece Saw this in prose. I get this

Overall impression of piece: I have a piece in my repertoire called "Where Junk goes to Die." If things don't sell in the regular thrift shop, this outfit has a warehouse where you can buy "treasures" by the pound and books for almost nothing

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* The explanation at the bottom kind of puts this context. Is it God that keeps this from happening or is it God working in us?

What I disliked*Idea* Kicked to the curb is approaching cliche but still seems to work. Does God make junk? I am not sure about that one. We have a purpose; it is steadily being redefined

How the piece made me feel I think man and woman have the same basic need: a search for relevance. Why am I here? I had a job for 24 years and moves were made to extracate me from that. It was and still is kind of depressing. "What else can I do? Can we get reborn. Spiritual thought would say yes. Reality is a little more doubting> All the stuffed animals in the world are here at the warehouse. Children eventually outgrow things

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Non fiction Review group

Why I chose this piece This caught my interest in the spiritual category

Overall impression of piece: I guess we get all kinds signing on to WDC. Why not a goddess

Grammatical and spelling errors Maybe instead of a dash (which is two hyphen--no spaces, a colon might be in order.

What I liked?*Smile* We all have wishes that we wish were so and often are not.. Delivery often leads a woman to say, never again, but lucky for the human race; they forget. Great summary of hope leading to faith. I don't think you can have faith without hope

What I disliked*Idea* She doubted herself is kind of a key element here. I would expand on it a lot more. I don't know what the goddess is a goddess of.

How the piece made me feel Hope is a sure thing. Magic only has tricks. I think we all hope for magic when what we really need and want is something we can depend on over the long hall. I think hope is outside the self and we must encorporate it into ourse;yes. It makes us different

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Vessel of Your  
Rated: E | (4.0)

Non fiction Review group

Why I chose this piece I like religious and spiritual pieces. I have been reading how ancient Jewish culture changed the interpretation of early prophets

Overall impression of piece: It has been going on for centuries. The life of faith is such that we really have to understand what is truth what are the lies we believe. Mankind kind of believes lies

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* There is just enough rhyme to keep things interesting without being overbearing. There are a lot of rhymes in the last stanza that kind of give it closure.

What I disliked*Idea* Verily verily is kind of Bible talk. It limits things to a single group. On who breat we can sever doesn't exactly make sense to me

How the piece made me feel We have a tendency to explain away what we don't like. I don't really need to do ... . I have to have a reason so I will reinterpret things

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Review of 2012 Reading List  
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Rated: E | (3.5)


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Why I chose this piece Random review

Overall impression of piece: I am an avid reader. I read exclusively nonfiction. It helps me in my thinking and having a variety of thoughts to draw on

Grammatical and spelling errors: Book titles are underlined

What I liked?*Smile* I havae read a book a week for many years. It influences my thinking and my general state of mind. I use it in my reviewing. It reminds me that not everyone thinks like me. That is probably a good thing. This is well organized and I can see some pragmatism here.

What I disliked*Idea* I don't know why you are doing this. Most goals and resolutions fall off pretty quickly

How the piece made me feel This seems like an interesting idea. Of course, it helps that I am already doing this. I have a library that kills my book shelves

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Autumn's Palette  
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Rated: E | (4.5)


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Why I chose this piece I picked this up on a random review. I appreciate Christian authors

Overall impression of piece: You have a lot of the senses here.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok? Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Colors can dance. I can see that. Color is the natural thing for plants. We see more of it in Fall. I hear this. I see this. I feel it

What I disliked*Idea* Peace kind of sneaks up on me in the last line. It has mainly been about color and texture. Maybe color changes soul too? Wispering through the trees is pushing cliche

How the piece made me feel There are colors in the world. Perhaps there are more in autumn because chorophyll kind of overpowers. We must grow--not so, at least not all the time

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)


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Why I chose this piece Saw this in a spiritual newsletter. Field of Dreams is Definitely a favorite of mine

Overall impression of piece This is kind of disjointed. It kind of skips around a bit. It is easy to get lost.

Grammatical and spelling errors: You know is missing a capital. At least for now needs a comma

What I liked?*Smile* You do have some intriguing ideas in here. Memmories do shift. Memmories as a small child are often non-existent. We didn't have the wordsd to catalogue them. Passion is a fire and it doesn't have to go out

What I disliked*Idea* The Joel quotation has to do with being revitalized by the spirit of God. I think we all need that. One of Joshua's generals was over 80 years old and he wanted the tough job.

How the piece made me feel I think you tried to tell us everything you knew. I would tell only a few things that you know well. I would make a decision of what you know and share it with us. At least, let us in on your process.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Thank you  
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Rated: E | (4.0)


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Why I chose this piece I saw this in the history section. Interesting category to put it as it actually reflects some of my own

Overall impression of piece: Ephesians 2? has a comment that says that God has ruded the dividing wall of hostility between us. I think it is what we do as humans. It is our normal tendency

Grammatical and spelling errors: End in a comma. Maybe a period after fearless. Brick-by-brick

What I liked?*Smile* This is lifelike and pragmatic

What I disliked*Idea* Give me more detail on the wall. A lot won't buy the concept. I think that most people need acceptance to let the wall go.

How the piece made me feel Sometimes I don't even think we realize that there are people on the other side of that wall. We just throw stuff over, not worrying that people are getting hurt.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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718
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Rated: E | (3.5)


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Why I chose this piece Advertised on a side panel.

Overall impression of piece: Honest piece. I think a lot of folks really wrestle with things like this

Grammatical and spelling errors:thru is getting to accepted, but most don't spell it that way

What I liked?*Smile* It has a nice marrative style. I know exactly what is going on.

What I disliked*Idea*: Love is such a grand topic that it is hard to say anything new. These phrases are approaching cliche: wildest dreams, reality broke me to pieces, count the tears I shed, sleepless nights

How the piece made me feel: Love is not a feeling; it is a decision. We are all so full of inadequacies. Can we deep in our spirits make a decision to love.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Battlefield  
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Rated: E | (4.0)


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Why I chose this piece I saw this advertised on a side panel. I am kind of a history buff. I volunteer at a military history museum

Overall impression of piece: This is a very regulated rhyming piece. It could be a song, I think

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* Read well. It has a pretty good meter.

What I disliked*Idea* All those repetetive lines and format. They were scared to death--best guess. I am not sure if I really see or feel that

How the piece made me feel Just saying someone is tortured doesn't make it so. This is the ultimate in extreme stress. People are trying to kill you. More and better imagery would help

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Perfect Blows  
Rated: E | (3.5)


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Why I chose this piece I found this in essays. I wondered about it

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: This is hard to read. If you use a block format, you need a line in between paragraphs. It makes it very hard to read on the computer.

What I liked?*Smile*: I too hate selfie's It seems they are the ultimate in narcissism. I have no doubt how you feel on the topic

What I disliked*Idea* Examples of what you are talking about help get by in. I am not really sure how perfection ruins people. There is such a thing of analysis paralysis. Should we be excellent? Would I follow someone who isn't striving for that? Perfection is elusive is another example. I don't think you can assume people know what you are talking about. Most of our educational markers go down every year.

How the piece made me feel Rants are common place on WDC. You do have to prove your point. It is not true because you say so.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
721
721
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)


*UmbrellaG*Review of showering acts of joy*UmbrellaR*

Why I chose this piece I like essays. I like kids. I see them in the museums I volunteer at and, most of the time their eyes kind of glaze over and they are not really there

Overall impression of piece: Love the quote that starts this, I think the average time a parent talks to a kid would be shocking

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* This is definitely a relevant topic. Education is lagging in this country, largely due to lack of funding and imagination

What I disliked*Idea* This needs examples. We need to know what you are talking about when talking of dying in poverty. Water bourne diseases would rank very high. We celebrate a lot of really strange things--like groundhogs day

How the piece made me feel: You are being a crusader in this piece. You need to tell us what to do. When I talk to children at the aquarium, if I interest the children, I interest everyone. I think we all want to be interested and involved. We often don't know how

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MichaelFrom Mountains
722
722
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Rated: E | (4.0)


*UmbrellaG*Review of showering acts of joy*UmbrellaR*

Why I chose this piece This is a requested review and obviously the work of a pretty deep thinker

Overall impression of piece: Why does anyone take on a risky venture that will redefine existence as they know it and solidify the makings of the self? Marked and sealed under Jewish and Christian thought suggests Covenant

Grammatical and spelling errors: You are missing a lot of periods.

What I liked?*Smile*: We are told in our upbringing to be "Reasonable." The people who form humanity and civilization are seldom thought. What is right? It is a question of the ages. Is it dies that speak to our inner person that tell us what to do and what not to do? I don't think so but that is my Spiritual Perspective as a Christian. That is definitely unorthodox. I do think we are put on this Earth to do something and to make a difference.

What I disliked*Idea* You are thinking things that most people don't think about and that is incredibly positive. Shaping the metaphor as you call it, is really the essence of the power of the piece. Few of us have that totally thought out. Is this a letter to self to guide you through the ramifications? I am really unsure of where you are coming from and where you are going with this.

How the piece made me feel When Hamlet said to be or not to be in the Play Hamlet, he wasn't thinking humanity so much as he was thinking, "What is right?" His environment was corrupt and he was going to make it right. Things really don't change all that much. Do ideas change the world? I don't think they do. Treating men and women with the spirit of kindness and fairness is almost always responded to. It is world changing. We are in this world to have our breath taken away not to take breaths and live out a life span. I wish I could tell you completely what that is all about.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Insert title here  
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Rated: E | (4.0)


*UmbrellaG*Review of showering acts of joy*UmbrellaR*

Why I chose this piece Part of the review folder

Overall impression of piece: This is certainly a ponderable piece. Most don't go here and the complexity and simplicity mirror each other wondering which will be displaced.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Therefore appears misspelled

What I liked?*Smile* Affinity of illusion lives in illusion of infinity

What I disliked*Idea* These are rather intense thoughts and I am not sure what they all mean. What do eyes open in darkness mean when you can't see anything?

How the piece made me feel I am not sure how you see darkness. Black is the absense of light. We tend to dwell in darkness, because that is all we know and although it doesn't satisfy, it is where we live. If infinity is an illusion, why do we try to characterize it? Is it Startrek material?

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Above Every Cloud  
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Rated: E | (4.5)


*UmbrellaG*Review of showering acts of joy*UmbrellaR*

Why I chose this piece Love your work. As you encouraged me in your note, hopefully my review will encourage you

Overall impression of piece: This is encouraging and very good stuff.. Jeremiah was writtten to people in exile who had lost all hope. Jesus said, it is not over. Bad times are just for a time. They help keep you focused.

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile*I like that you typed out the quote and gave the translation. People do not read when they should. Bible says, check it out as he told the Berea's. People do not. I like your message from the Spirit. I believe it to be quite real. The letter format is personal and shows a willingness to come along side.

What I disliked*Idea* Starting a sentence with a But is probably not helpful. I might replace it with a therefore. The Bible uses that a lot. You put your message from the Spirit in quotes. This is appropriate I feel, but may not be totally understandable to those not cognizant of the Spirit talking. A sentence or two of explanation is probably in order. "What do you mean, Lord?"
How the piece made me feel I heard truth here. That is not an easy thing to come by. It is open and honest

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Eden  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)


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Why I chose this piece I picked this one up on a random review. I realize we might not share the same world view and that's ok

Overall impression of piece: We live in a frustrating world. It might even characterize us

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile*: I get the frustration. Retirement held no allure for me, but I was pretty much forced into it. What is the purpose of life? I have my biases from my Christian Point of view. Great image with the film. I go back to the time where we actually used that.

What I disliked*Idea* Eden evades us. Christian tradition says we were kicked out. We are meant to be frustrated. There is hope and there are things to be hopeful for, but we end up needing to see them and capture.

How the piece made me feel: KInd of an hopeless piece. I can get that. Sometimes I feel the same way. I generally try to do something else. What makes me feel worthwhile?

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.

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Peace and beauty in freefall
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