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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this and bookmarked it for later to come back to.

Overall impression of piece This is succinct and easily followed. Grammar needs help. I would suggest a course from New Horizons on this site.

Grammatical and spelling errors bited him back should be bit him back. My spell check concurs. You join a lot of compound sentences together with a comma where an and or a semicolon would be in order.

What I liked?*Smile* This seems like a different spin on well-known stories

What I disliked*Idea* Every cloud has a silver lining is a cliche. Even bad things had a positive side regardless of their intensity

How the piece made me feel Definitely tell us something about yourself on your port. Reviewers use this stuff in order to address where you are coming from. It helps to know something of who you are.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: You have a good eye for people. I see some of this in my grandson. I sometimes wonder if he is listening to me

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* I can definitely see this guy. I can see the frustration of the parole officer. I pretty much get it on a visceral level. A pretty well crafted piece that is easy to read. I like the font.

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure how this ends. Is this a suicide attempt? Is this a potential bank job? Whatever it is, it will not be easy. Some people life just happens to

How the piece made me feel Most of rehabilitation takes place out of prison. We have one church in our area that specialises in inmates

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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Why I chose this piece
This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: This is a common plight in literature and life

Grammatical and spelling errors Generally and is written out and not a symbol. Because she skipped dinner... is a fragment as is Because she had no one to help her. Both and not complete sentences. A lone single mother instead of alone, There is a difference in the phrasing and I think that is what you meant.

What I liked?*Smile* This is a fairly well put sequence that does kind of grab us

What I disliked*Idea* Obviously we need more to know the story

How the piece made me feel Your port doesn't tell us anything about you. It is important for reviewers to know stuff like that. Where are you from? Is English a native tongue?

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is obviously a thoughtful piece with no reviews. I think I can fix that.

Overall impression of piece: I pretty much know what is going on and have been following this. I am not sure if nothing, in this case, is a clever thing to do. Who will they blame? Probably the party in power.

Grammatical and spelling errors Logo is a symbol of the party. I don't think it can be a piece of legislation. They may have put their stamp on it and I think they did. One of your republicans is not capitalized.

What I liked?*Smile* This is a full and adequate summary of a devastating piece of inaction. We voted to have these representatives to be responsible and this is the result

What I disliked*Idea* I am missing a couple of things. Can insurance vote note to participate and still sell insurance.? I would explain that a little more. I am not sure if I get lockstep politics. It is a central piece of your work so I would give it a little more. These people are supposed to do good for the country and not have temper tantrums.

How the piece made me feel: I am getting to the point where I might vote them all out of office. I think the middle class is suffering

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece You have personally felt most of this. It is forthright and kind of spooky

Grammatical and spelling errors: You have numerous run-on sentences.
Ah Stockton, how you disappoint me in so many ways that it literally drives me borderline insane, mentally and physically. As soon as I walk outside all I can hear is the illiterate speech of people asking for cigarettes as they have two in the box and still ask for more. I think they want to preserve their cancer sticks and the future of lung cancer ahead of them, coughing as they chortle and being out of breath within a matter of seconds, the sheer sight makes me feel anxious for the health of people here. Another point of negativity are the crows. Crows don't sound like such a problem, but the glint of the eyes and the thought of death just by staring up to the circling birds sends a shiver down my spine, the thought of one of those birds on my future gravestone is a thought that troubles me. Not as troubling as people in this town thinking they can wipe the slate clean, finding the solution at the bottom of the Jack Daniels bottle. Driving terrible cars at top speed so drunk out of their mind they can't find the break pedal, destroying property for petty comedy in groups and causing mayhem, wondering how they ended up behind the cold and lonesome bars of the prison cell. The way the atmosphere feels makes me uncomfortable, the way the air is filled with tobacco and broken dreams, slowly killing me withe depressing pressure of failing in this dead end town. Honestly you cannot find a town like this one, if you're hopeless come visit, if not keep the distance.

Could use a semicolon on the last sentence instead of a comma
I underlined stuff that kind of just came out as fragments.

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What I liked?*Smile* You have seen this with detail and with emotion. That is a rare gift. There are lots of grammatical things. I am thinking a grammar course from New Horizons would really help you a lot.

What I disliked*Idea* The only Stockton I know is California, but since you are British, that seems odd. Give us more

How the piece made me feel I see potential here. Don't give up

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Review of LINES  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a read and review

Overall impression of piece: Congrats on your publication of this. I think this kind of asks a question of what is alive?

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Music has a life of its own. Art work too can make the simplest things seem alive. Pencils dance. There is magic in creation. There is always magic in creation.

What I disliked*Idea* Maybe the creation part is not played up enough. I think a lot of times artists just amplify what is already there. I see it in your words. Could it be stronger? I am kind of motivated to think through this myself.

How the piece made me feel Bless you for not making me rate this. It made me think about my part in creativity.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of She Talks with Me  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I have reviewed both you and your daughter. I have articles on family and it is very important to me

Overall impression of piece Your daughter is a remarkable young lady. I enjoyed her piece and interacting with her on line

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact.

What I liked?*Smile* I like the bold typed words. Somethings are more important than others. The relationship angle come through loud and clear. It is in some of her writings too

What I disliked*Idea* I have no idea about the hot plate. I would kind of reiterate your conclusion in your intro--of course in different words. Your present intro it is a little hard to see where you are going. You are trying to tell us something and as men, we need more help

How the piece made me feel Respect is the key. There will be disagreements but the attitude exhibited says volumes

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Review of Untitled  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: This is more universal than I bet you can believe. I believe that all lovers are flawed. I know I am and I have been married for 43 years

Grammatical and spelling errors: ~googlin g this punctuation doesn't really mean what you think it does. You have used it as a pause, where the form most likely means the way a letter is pronounced. I would use ... or even just indent it. You want us to pause. Otherwise, this reads pretty well

What I liked?*Smile* This is definitely honest.

What I disliked*Idea* It lacks a lot of imagery to show what you mean. It is mainly telling and not showing

How the piece made me feel There probably is no normal. We are all a cacophony of emotions and flawed responses. Music calls it creative dissonance.

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Review of Responsibility  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in the spiritual newsletter

Overall impression of piece: Maybe I can't quite get on the hit parade this piece has been given. In general I don't really like accrostics, so this is a bias

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* You do have several fine images here. Revenge stops time. I can buy that. A foul snake. Yes... I see it. Be careful where you put your hands. We do get locked up in the way we think the world should be, not what is. I like your rhymes at the end of stanzas

What I disliked*Idea* Responsibility is right in the very word itself. Response and ability. The format kind of obscures the magnificence in what is born into us. I guess I come down on the side of the message is the message.

How the piece made me feel I see a lot of professionalism in this. It is an admirable effort.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I kind of like flash fiction. I like pointed things

Overall impression of piece: It is a Western. The question is always, could I buy into it.

Grammatical and spelling errorsI think you mean did not care to understand


What I liked?*Smile* This is very rich in detail. It is what makes or breaks a piece. I do get the feeling of a witness and, this is plain weird.
As the narrator you are reacting to what is going on

What I disliked*Idea*: Grammatical error

How the piece made me feel Tell us more about yourself. As evaluators, it makes it easier, to do that.

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Review of The March  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like penguins. I am a zoo volunteer and they are fun to watch. They are so clumsy on land and kind of like demons in the water. They literally fly under water.

Overall impression of piece: I certainly get the trudging part. These guys are not nimble out of water.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* You certainly got the almost comic part of them walking and there is a lot of darkness in this. Many Antartic will be extinct soon. You have described their massive migrations very well.

What I disliked*Idea* I definitely need a footnote or two. I know nothing about the type of gun fire. I googled it and it is roughly a Russian ak 47. I really don't know what is going on. If you are raising an alarm, be a little more specific.

How the piece made me feel I could sense you really identify with them. How about some anger?

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Review of Tale Of Love  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the newbie newsletter.

Overall impression of piece This is a pretty well crafted piece. You worked hard on this

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* I am sure this met the intent for which it was written. I suspect an anniversary I have been married 43 years and have written nothing so grand. Maybe I should

What I disliked*Idea* It is hard to say anything new on romance. What hasn't been said before many times? There are a lot of cliches here, especially love at first sight. It is hard to say something new when you are giving summaries of what happened with he and she. The best images are personal. Love everlasting followed by a lifetime of fasting is not intuitive to me

How the piece made me feel It is a tale as old as time. Some things don't really get old.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I love essays and I love history. Definitely one of the stormy times of our past with much that is unknown

Overall impression of piece: I am assuming by the structure, this is an academic paper. It certainly could have been. It is quite thorough

Grammatical and spelling errors Book Titles are Generally underlined although I think this does work

What I liked?*Smile* You did a lot of work putting this together. It is logical and sequential starting from the introduction and following towards a conclusion. Everyone treats him as serious, but his contemporaries apparently were not quite there.

What I disliked*Idea* You have three sections in your introduction. I think it might be better if you put those sections in your piece. never really talked about McCarthy's demise.

How the piece made me feel Like most of history, there is much more than meets the eye. Most of us are very superficial

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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw one of your pieces in poetry and went to your site. There weren't any reviews on your site, so I thought, why not

Overall impression of piece This is country old style talkin'.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Ok

What I liked?*Smile* There is definitely a romance in the old west. Men were men and didn't have phones. I can kind of get that.

What I disliked*Idea* This seems kind of fatalistic and full of cliches. Dying with my boots on would not be a good choice for me. It is kind of life is hell'then you die. Kind of overused .... I am not sure we got to know you well. There are impressions you have of yourself, but for all I know you are an accountant.

How the piece made me feel

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Why I chose this piece I like essays and religious things

Overall impression of piece> This is a rant and probably won't change much of anyone's mind

Grammatical and spelling errors Profits might supposed to be prophets. Maybe hat does is that

What I liked?*Smile* This is kind of hate mail and I have a pretty good idea what you dislike. It is clear.

What I disliked*Idea* It is not listed as Queen Mary in the Bible. I think this is an invention of the Catholic church. When I hear Queen Mary I am thinking Queen of Scotland and England. A lot of things appear to come back from the dead. Trees we have chopped down are now 15 feet tall. A lot of us aren't into Popes so there is limited relevance here. Mary as a divine figure has no basis in the Bible

How the piece made me feelHow can you know someone that lived 2000 years ago. With Jesus, it is about the lives He changed in the process of living. True, I don't have any evidence of Greek Gods and Godesses

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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. I liked your port explanation.

Overall impression of piece: This is life and love. Some try and do it without love. It is not likely to work

Grammatical and spelling errors: Perhaps why in quotes? Otherwise reads well

What I liked?*Smile* This is very cleverly done. Your rhymes are subtle but effective. I like the varying rhyme schemes. We may think we like confusion. I am not sure why that is.

What I disliked*Idea* Your title on the piece versus the first line don't match. It seems odd.

How the piece made me feel I think our biggest need in the world is to be understood. Relationship is like blood to our bodies. A lot of us are anemic. We don't work at getting what we need because we need to help them get what they need. Maybe this piece is about finding a lifeline

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Review of Soldier's Choice  
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This caught my interest so I bookmarked it for later.

Overall impression of piece: This could happen in this fair country. I could buy into this fictional reality. We3 have told lies before in American government

Grammatical and spelling errors he asked the reporter probably doesn't need a capital.

What I liked?*Smile* You do have a lot of meticulous detail and dashing characters that are certainly eye catching. They are meant for drama and do achieve it.

What I disliked*Idea* You have an explosion and people that are rummaging around the debris for no apparent reason. The explosion should at least be followed by a summary of a newspaper story and maybe some of the subsequent investigation. Things are recorded as fact, when there is no indications that they are true. We don't know how they know what is true. There is much more of a story that is not told.

How the piece made me feelI like the approach. I don't think something like this is beyond it. We need more supportive data to buy in to it

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece I found this in prose and was immediately interested.

Overall impression of piece: It seems weird not putting showering Acts of Joy on this. It is nice to see that you have a face. It is a kind face like all my dealings with you

Grammatical and spelling errors Of course, no errors.

What I liked?*Smile* You have put all the particulars of who you are here. I like that. I knew many of them Gabriella is an institution so her name needs no explanation. I love the link to the academy. I have referred people to it in my reviews. ( A sentence or two might be nice)

What I disliked*Idea* Rising Stars should probably be highlighted too.

How the piece made me feel This has all the tone of a progressive and responsive teacher. Someone said, Come let us learn together.

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Review of Leaves  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece From the shameless plug page

Overall impression of piece I guess I can take it or leaf it. There are interesting things in here

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* You have interesting rhymes in here. They don't seem to be forced all that much, but having three lines rhyming makes it seem that way

What I disliked*Idea* You really didn't give us much new on leaves. Even what you feel or see would help.

How the piece made me feel Chlorophyll actually takes away their natural color. They are naturally red, like autumn. I think there is a whole tree universe in a leaf?

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Review of Stranded  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of our St Patricks Day raid. Your piece was in the author's newsletter

Overall impression of piece: There is good writing in this. I know of all the people you describe. Some would not give anyone an inch if their life depended on it. Their lives show the results.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Nothing obvious. See note in disliked category

What I liked?*Smile* Generally when our family is in a motel, it is kind of like camping. We put way to man people in it. Bribery is a legitimate way to get people to cooperate. The dialogue is realistic and in keeping with what happens in hotels

What I disliked*Idea* Could you mean nonplussed? Nonpulsed would be sort of dead.

How the piece made me feel: The highlighted must be mandatory words. This is a very creative use. I could not think of better ones. It is like you had all of humanity in the lobby

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Review of A Moment In Life  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: We all think we have to do extraordinary things in our pursuits of God and this world. Somewhere, we will have to wash dishes.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Ne errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* We think we know everything about everything. Most of the time we are unavailable. Dishes are important. It is part of the reason we were put on earth. We can learn something if we are truly present.

What I disliked*Idea* A tin roof and a sink filling seem a lot different. These ideas have been expressed before. I am not sure if the good abbot below had Calgon.

How the piece made me feel: Why are we here on earth? We can say it is to do great things when in reality it is to wash the dishes and think about the greatness of a God that loves you. A Friar said that. I can't remember his name. He, too, liked washing dishes.

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Review of Droplets  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of our St Patricks day raid. This is certainly a nice green piece. I might even find a leprechaun or two

Overall impression of piece Magic and mystery come in odd places I get that. They are often unexpected.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* It seems like you are creating a world within a world. Who is to say which is real? We like to think that it is all separate stuff when in reality, it is all connected.

What I disliked*Idea* Stories from deep within is approaching cliche. I would use words to reflect the world you or she is trying to create.

How the piece made me feel The world is full of magic. Even if we just catch a glimmer, it is still there.

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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review.

Overall impression of piece: This is a poem that is as old as time. I think all have felt like this at one time

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* I like the epitaph being centered like it is. It makes it front row center. We often do remember by smells. I am sure you remember the sounds of her voice during the hymn. I think the universe does give us what we need.

What I disliked*Idea* This is beautiful and perfect.

How the piece made me feel Closure is a beautiful thing. My mother died when I was 8. Children didn't go to funerals

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Review of Broken Bottles  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is from the review me page.

Overall impression of piece: I see this as honest. I sense you have been at this point too

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors noted

What I liked?*Smile* Who doesn't remember the early days. I don't think we can ever forget them. We all have seen shadows of things that we hope aren't coming. This is in letter form. It is unique and effective.

What I disliked*Idea*Kind of devoid of punctuation. It would help us to read it. Merry road is both tongue-in-cheek and borderline cliche. I think you could be more precise. Is red ink in the bottle. I am not sure exactly what you mean. Alcohol can write our lives

How the piece made me feel Our growth group talks about things just like this. Personally, we feel powerless. Luckily it is not all personal power.

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Review of Like Sedation..  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like spiritual pieces. I found yours

Overall impression of piece: This is kind of like a psychedelic trip without the acid. Can we walk on stars? I think it is in dreams that we do go to new heights and have greater vision

Grammatical and spelling errors: spellbound either one word or hyphenated. Don't with an apostrophe. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* We live in an unseen universe--the land of thoughts and dreams. Most people are earthbound and tied to slow moving things. We are creators. We hold stars in our hands

What I disliked*Idea* Oblation is a gift to God. Can it be personal? It is a little confusing

How the piece made me feel Covered most of this.

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