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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbies newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: This is a pretty intense piece. Who hasn't gazed up in wonder?

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. Maybe a period on the end line?

What I liked?*Smile* They sailed earthly seas by the stars. I can imagine ancient mariners looked up at stars in wonder. They were kind of lost without them. Sometimes they worked better than satellite technology

What I disliked*Idea* behind lies the eternal is kind of telling and not showing. I would try to convey that with an image. The image of blockaded stars is a little hard to see. I need more here. I like the starts of sentences with capitals

How the piece made me feel

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Saw this in the Newbies newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: What interesting categories you put this in: philosophy and nonsense. Some would argue they are synonymous but not me. Are we to understand the intricate workings of the universe? Not me!

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You have just enough rhyme to keep this interesting and to give it a bit of a rhythm. This is heroic and it is big. That is what God's world really is. Immortality is an unbreakable path. the thing that is really powerful is that we choose immortality

What I disliked*Idea* An eternal dye is cast is borderline cliche, but I am not sure how you would explain this. The first line implies that time is a person. I have a bit of a hard time of that image.

How the piece made me feel I felt touched by this. Not every author can give their bird's eye view of the universe.

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Review of Research  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like nonfiction stuff. I like innovation. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: You have genuinely given this a lot of thought and have new ideas.

Grammatical and spelling errors Generally out of date trends would work just as well. Last sentence is a run on sentence. Only one and per sentence. Too many clauses in one sentence.

What I liked?*Smile* You are absolutely correct. We don't really teach people how to think. Most think if you can spend enough money you will get results. Most innovations come from mavericks who are outside the big corporations

What I disliked*Idea* Generally, the block format needs a line in between paragraphs, especially on the screen, it is very hard to read it. We could use some more examples how the current research methods aren't successful

How the piece made me feel Imagine a research project in kindergarten. It is both alarming and frightening, all at the same time

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Review of Abandon Ship!  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece All the pieces tied to the last piece I reviewed are your pieces so I thought another one could be in order.

Overall impression of piece: This is better than the last piece. I got more to think of from an intellectual point of view.

Grammatical and spelling errors The last sentence is borderline in terms of correctness, but it does work for emphasis. I would leave it as is.

What I liked?*Smile* You are playing with your facts more. I like that. Your comments about Yelowstone are spot on.

What I disliked*Idea* Never really defined where the Permian was. I would give a little more depth.. Life is fragile, anywhere. I am not sure if I would be willing to give up a perfectly good planet. Watch the Movie intrastellar. It talks of some of these issues.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I love non-fiction. I have familiarity with your work

Overall impression of piece I am pretty well versed in science. I spent most of my formative years in Pathology

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors seen

What I liked?*Smile* The facts are all there. They are properly laid out and you can set up a whole theory from what you said

What I disliked*Idea* I know you somewhat from our last encounter so I will not hold back. I am pushing you to gold here. You have a pretty good academic paper here. I am kind of missing things that would interest me and draw me in. I have some familiarity with Creation science which is using a Biblical reference point. The truth is that we have no idea how old the earth is. All the carbon dating has to do with pretty recent animals. Rocks don't carbon date.

Could the world have been built in 6000 years? I supremely doubt that. Why aren't there dynasours? You would have thought they would at least get a mention. Most of the missing links between species are still missing

How the piece made me feel I do fall into the evolution framework. It is all that makes sense to me. This is good but it doesn't relate to me in formulating what is important. I want your twist on things.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: I always like historical pieces and thinking individuals

Grammatical and spelling errors: Starting a sentence with And really doesn't help.

What I liked?*Smile* I love short and concise. Jews had been persecuted for centuries. Hitler's power came from what most wanted to do anyway

What I disliked*Idea* You never really answered the Saddam Hussein question. The United Nations would almost certainly have something to say/ That would be worth at least another paragraph

How the piece made me feel Of course, we probably didn't invade until we thought there were weapons involved. It is frightening that Germany was predominantly Christian. My Father had a saying that "Those who are willing to make a decision are usually allowed to make it. We need to decide what is right.

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Review of The Itch  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. You have a fascinating bio.

Overall impression of piece: I love having the prompt for the contest. You did fulfil the nature of the contest.

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You have an interesting twist to make this work. We live in a day of insurrection so this kind of makes sense.. It is concise. It is not hard to follow.

What I disliked*Idea* Never said 20 of what approached the landing area. This seems a little rushed. I suspect word count problems. Bug bites versus the need for retreat don't seem to be really tied together.

How the piece made me feel Maybe should have been longer. The twist doesn't really figure into the storyline.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review.

Overall impression of piece This is well thought out. Your message is extremely clear.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* This is very rational and well thought out. Any war effort has an overall plan with armies and forces on the board that are moved in unison at their particular time. I get that. It is strategy

What I disliked*Idea* Sometimes it isn't logical why people win or lose. Agincourt was a famous battle where 5,000 archers went up against 20,000 French Knights, The french got stuck in the mud because it had rained. I think there has to be a belief that victory will come. Most victors want the victory more.

How the piece made me feel You are right--to a point. Often armies would burn their ships so they couldn't retreat.

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Review of How To Meditate  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was in the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece It is all here. How do we do this? Pretty amazing in 18 lines

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Bless you for putting the prompts for this. The piece makes much more sense this way. This is an intriguing exercise. This is definitely what it is about. I would think you are a practitioner.

What I disliked*Idea* This is more what it is like and not enough what does it feel like. Something like feel your muscles loosen as they gain vitality. Don't let your thoughts scare you. Entertain their presence.

How the piece made me feel This is cold and a bit austere. You want them to go deeper. they need to know what that feels like.

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Review of The Inferiors  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was advertised on a side panel. Welcome to WDC. I see immense potential here

Overall impression of piece This hasn't been attempted for a long time. It is an impressive undertaking

Grammatical and spelling errors: Starting with a conjunction really doesn't help. It reflects speech, but not necessarily good writing. It is a filler.

What I liked?*Smile* As this is a prologue, you have put it into a place and time. You have described the backstory. There is always more to the story and history does make a difference. We are very close to genetic engineering right now. This has a lot of elements of 1984 but is different. A lot of us today feel that the country is running despite us

What I disliked*Idea* I would expand to hit some sort of climax in the prologue. We really are kind of missing a hook to get us to read chapter 1. Maybe there is a strike against the government? That creates a lot of turmoil. Maybe a loose cannon gets elected president

How the piece made me feel We started in the US as an Oligarchy run by rich educated planters. There have been tides that have run through this country. I see many of them in this

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Review of Useless Advice  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is an interesting piece. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: There seems to be some soul searching here.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems to be missing a lot of commas. These are kind of your instructions on how to read this piece

What I liked?*Smile* You use imagery to show what it is you mean. Punchbag and wingman are pretty descriptive. I know some that communicate like clay

What I disliked*Idea* I am not too sure what your point of view is. I could use clarification

How the piece made me feel I am not too sure who you would be if not yourself Your port photo is quite beautiful, but I could use more about you to help me review. I am not sure what you are saying Are we ourselves when no one is watching?

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was a highlighted piece on my piece called Winds in the Canyons. I can see how it is hit with some of the same hammer

Overall impression of piece: Pretty cool to be a turtle Mamma. Your detail is exquisite.

Grammatical and spelling errors Seemsd intact

What I liked?*Smile* I have no doubt that you really were there. I read your background on your port. Most impressive. I work with Reptiles at an aquarium. We have a Mississippi Map Turtle and a Russian Tortoise, among others. You obviously have specialised knowledge to know that Turtle rescue was in order. We think we know things, but life has its own mysteries.

What I disliked*Idea* This is almost certainly an endangered species. A book was written on Green Sea Turtles which was truly excellent. It is Called , Fire in the Turtle House and I would recommend it. You are expanding our horizons. Why not a little more?

How the piece made me feel You fired me up with your writing. I am predominantly a nonfiction writer

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Review of Crayola  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter

Overall impression of piece: This is a beautiful fairly well-crafted piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Agape didn't come up as a word on googol. I think of the greek form of the word agape. I am not sure what you mean. I realise you do play with words like the crawfood dish

What I liked?*Smile* I think we all need this infusion of spring. It is like it awakens something dead within us. We might even go dormant. I get the exuberance of May

What I disliked*Idea* I seems like you used agape to force a rhyme

How the piece made me feel I see the date on this. I think we feel the same way

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Review of Wildness I Love  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through Philosophy and found this one. I kind of look in one area when I review on certain days

Overall impression of piece: I love this. I used to hike every year and then got a bit older and my wife unavailable to accompany me. I wondered what exactly I missed? This pretty much hits the nail on the head. If you have a truth, it doesn't take a lot of words.

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Love the nature and philosophy categories. I think we do have to push ourselves to see new things in our worlds and in ourselves. I think one poet called it the undiscovered country

What I disliked*Idea* I kind of stumble on wildness. Maybe bears and mountain lions just aren't my thing. I think the newness of creation is better. I think it is in our personal dna

How the piece made me feel Imagine sitting on an ancient shore where your new future is awaiting for you. America was a place for freedom to become. We are a nation of immigrants

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. In general, I hate acrostics. This one changed my mind

Overall impression of piece This has got a lot in it. You have almost a time capsule of the way we were. I go back to Commodore 64 era but actually, my first computer had 264 K. I wondered how I would use all that memory. Now my watch has more than that.

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* You have references to both the history of WDC and the way we were in terms of the internet. I am not sure how much we endured. We thought it was a wonderful tool, even though we learned it could be better.
I like the end line rhymes of the last stanza and the third stanza, The acronym is not the message. Hurray!! Last line is classic. I think every rhyming poet worries about that;

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything

How the piece made me feel This is both creative and personal. I believed you meant this.

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Review of My Process  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this as interesting and bookmarked it. Welcome to WDC.

Overall impression of piece: I get exactly where you are coming from. I won't even let someone who is not registered look at my writing for reviews

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I sometimes wonder if some of these people are even from this planet. I am reading a lot less of them since I upgraded who the piece is for. This is kind of a welcome to my port kind of piece. I can see by this that you are a professional and you will be well appreciated here

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything

How the piece made me feel This is definitely a thumbs up kind of piece. It is clear and well organised. Stories are not my forte, but I do have some

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: This is so not my style, but I really kind of liked it--in a macabre sort of way

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile* You have a horror situation. I think most of the good stuff starts in dreams and works its way into reality. The twist is interesting at the end. I wasn't expecting that.

What I disliked*Idea* The first angry no's make me think of a 5-year-old. I need more detail. It would build the suspense. Opening your heart to someone is generally considered a good thing. I am not sure what is going on here. There has to be more of a horror reaction to involuntary heart transplant. Maybe the dreams going away would be a calming thing, but there is still this incision

How the piece made me feel Maybe I won't go to sleep tonight.

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Review of Treason  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is from the requested review area.

Overall impression of piece: This definitely got the brain cells working. What is truth? We all seem to have a differing version of it. Wars are fought. People die, with no end to the discord.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* This reads incredibly well. Truth does seem to make itself heard in loud and sometimes obnoxious ways. You are talking about discussions that are taking place everywhere, worldwide.

What I disliked*Idea* The rhymes built on are incredible, but it is a little hard to put my finger on what exactly you are saying. I too have a science side as well as artistic.. I feel we need both. Last stanza, it is even hard to understand what it is

How the piece made me feel You have a mind with a big picture, but the paint of the picture is a little hazy

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Review of STOP Wasting Time  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is really good and interesting. It is great to have someone who comes from a similar background

Overall impression of piece: Definitely a piece that deals with ultimate issues. This is certainly well worth thinking about.

Grammatical and spelling errors But when are two words. Dashes are the parenthetical thought--no spaces on either side--then the rest of the sentence

What I liked?*Smile* Action is a vital part of our faith. I get that. It is a big part of how the Christian church grew and became recognized.

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure what you are saying about John Donne. I am thinking you are saying copied from John Donne which is entirely an ok thing to do

How the piece made me feel I was a bit conflicted reading this. Are we human doings or human beings? Do we work our way to heaven? I realize there is a mixed bag of stuff here to deal with. James would say, that Faith without works is dead--but of course, you know that too. They loved people. They thought about things too. When heresy wandered in, they thought about things. That is what most of Paul's letters are about. Without the call to going deeper in ourselves and our God, we won't be able to do the right things

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Review of Coffee Culture  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this. It interested me. No, I am not a coffee drinker.

Overall impression of piece: This really hits home on the topic of why we do things. A lot of times there are emotional and olfactory memories involved

Grammatical and spelling errors: It looks like there are not two spaces after a period. It looks a little crowded in places. In a broken quote, the second part of the quote should start with a capital. Last sentence has the second part as being a clause and not a sentence. I think it is ok, but technically not right (I think)

What I liked?*Smile* The sights and smells of doing things often captivate us. You have a ton of sensory imagery that is really pretty captivating. I think the things that really captivate us, like coffee, almost become part of our dna. You describe this all in great detail. It is obviously important to you,

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything. Grammar points are pretty picky

How the piece made me feel This is marketable somewhere. I enjoyed it immensely.

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Review of Finding the Awe  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this of interest. Who doesn't love a love poem?

Overall impression of piece Celebrate sensation. You've been there. You remember. Comes from the musical The fastastics. Loves first love is almost assuredly not what you think it would be.

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* This is love and life celebrated and lived. Your intro sentence says it pretty well too

What I disliked*Idea* Maybe a dash after to share the sun. He didn't see me is the most dramatic line and needs to be set off.

How the piece made me feel I know people with eyes screwed shut. It takes a lot of work and determination. Awe takes a lot of openness. Most of the time, we are not ready for awe.

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Review of Dear Electra  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: I can't say you are wrong. The world has fought wars over this with millions dead.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* This was probably unusual to put in a category. In some ways it is about everything

What I disliked*Idea* Senseless and excited and happy don't seem to go together. That is the primary meaning of euphoric. Maybe a better word is in order.

How the piece made me feel I have never changed anyone's mind. If they go my way, they accept that I am telling them the truth. I need to accept them, but not necessarily follow them

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Review of In Other's Time  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. Welcome to WDC. I am not sure of all the things you say you are. You do have a background. You do words.

Overall impression of piece: You do have some thoughts here. I never thought of people being relative, but I guess it works in my frame of view too.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Autumn is mispelled.

What I liked?*Smile* To whom do I take reference. My Christian bias would say God and then we really are a drop in the bucket.

What I disliked*Idea* Do trees get tired. I think through living and dying they eventually grow so they don't produce leaves. I am not so sure they are sentient--although it is an interesting thought

How the piece made me feel Some would say we are star dust, part of a big cosmic process. Carl Sagan would say that. Our voice in some ways doesn't mean much in terms of cosmic chatter but perhaps means everything.

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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this nonfiction piece to read later.

Overall impression of piece> This is absolutely fascinating. This appears to be the liberation of Paris, which would make you kind of a folk hero. We think we invented in our century liberation in sexuality, but that obviously is not the case

Grammatical and spelling errors: Misspelled exuberance. My spell check caught it

What I liked?*Smile* Wow. I liked this a lot. This does seem real and places a lot of it in its emotional context. That is history and I am afraid most of it has been lost.

What I disliked*Idea* We need a lot more background. It is the whole story. Your port doesn't say how old you are, but I figure this is world war 2

How the piece made me feel You could do a book on this. One paragraph is nowhere near enough. I think you still remember this with exuberance.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this and bookmarked it for later to come back to.

Overall impression of piece This is succinct and easily followed. Grammar needs help. I would suggest a course from New Horizons on this site.

Grammatical and spelling errors bited him back should be bit him back. My spell check concurs. You join a lot of compound sentences together with a comma where an and or a semicolon would be in order.

What I liked?*Smile* This seems like a different spin on well-known stories

What I disliked*Idea* Every cloud has a silver lining is a cliche. Even bad things had a positive side regardless of their intensity

How the piece made me feel Definitely tell us something about yourself on your port. Reviewers use this stuff in order to address where you are coming from. It helps to know something of who you are.

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