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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I have been a sci-fi fan for decades.

Overall impression of piece: There are possibilities with this one. This looks like a prelude to your book

Grammatical and spelling errors: I believe taking my wife doesn't need a capital, Your block paragraphing is supposed to have a line in between paragraphs. On the screen, it is hard to read. Starting a sentence with a conjunction doesn't help. So particularly is a filler word. Some of them are malevolent is a fragment and not a sentence.

What I liked?*Smile* The story has an interesting mix of foreign (alien)intrigue, romance and science. You do introduce a potential climax towards the end

What I disliked*Idea* I am looking for some specific event that will lead to the final outcome. A lot of this is done in summary manner and particulars are left out. Since we are on Earth (at least I am, how does this relate. It is kind of disjointed. If it is the captain's story, make him carry the action. You are implying that they are not human. "Stronger than most humans have." WQe need more for place and time

How the piece made me feel The story is there, but it is kind of lost in space. This is a more sequential process than what you wrote.

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Review of thoughts  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. It looked honest.

Overall impression of piece: This is anguish poetry. I used to write a lot of it way back when

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile*: I think anyone who has walked the planet knows something of this. You probably know more than you are telling us. I write my pain on ... the empires of the moon hoping it will shrink enough so I can live?

What I disliked*Idea* Love hurting and love fading are borderline cliche. You do a lot of telling here and not much in the way of showing. It is best when you can convey what that feeling might be like with images.

How the piece made me feel Nothing is random. Maybe mice typing Shakespeare is random but little else. We are a product of where we have been and how we experienced things. I wish I could help but that isn't too feasible. I actually wrote a piece called a 60 year old looks at depressing poetry

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Review of Singing By Whales  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I am an animal volunteer in both the zoo and the aquarium. Our aquarium is very small--obviously no whales in Idaho.

Overall impression of piece I love the facts in this. They are absolutely right on.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors. Reads very well

What I liked?*Smile* I love that you left footnotes on them. We all need to go deeper with whales, You have obviously worked on this

What I disliked*Idea* This is beautifully and conscientiously done. My issue is rather this is the right format. You have told us a lot. I think poetry is more for telling us how things are and feel, rather than the facts. You want us to be and feel the same way. I think if we, as readers could dive in with you and hear the sounds ourselves, it would be more effective

How the piece made me feel My first thoughts on reading this were, "Who is murdering the tenors?" Are we looking to hear a concert that will no longer be here?

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Review of Sea Muse  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in the author's newsletter

Overall impression of piece: This is kind of a chatty piece about the sea. What is new to be said?

Grammatical and spelling errors Maybe after state, use a colon or a dash. It is pretty choppy

What I liked?*Smile* I think this is kind of the universal quest for any writer. You are on the right track. I don't know how many times I write in reviews, "Borders on cliche."

What I disliked*Idea* This is a piece about not having anything new to say. It appears all you got out of this is a dirty sea shell. First paragraph with a new perspective is not commented on. As a writer and somewhat of a poet, I need more to latch on to.

How the piece made me feel There is tremendous everything at the beach. Think of all that power coming in. Ocean flows through you and is you. There is both a softness and a harshness in the air.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter. I was impressed by your bio and port.

Overall impression of piece: There is a lot here. Why are things the way they are? This is a map. Not many pieces will go in this direction

Grammatical and spelling errors There are a couple of non-sentences but in poetry, all is well. Maybe an aura of calming presence could be part of a dash. As a gust of strong wind outside sends... is really a clause

What I liked?*Smile* This is beautiful. It not only helps us see what you are talking about, it helps us feel it.

What I disliked*Idea* You kind of have the whole map here with very short explanations. Maybe one or two with more explanation would be better.

How the piece made me feel I am honored to read your map. I sense you really live this.

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Review of Vernal Equinox  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter. I love a challenge. No reviews

Overall impression of piece Vernal equinox is coming. I get this. We take the goodness of creation for granted and instead think of traffic.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* I generally don't like this type of poem. Your letter startings aren't unduly forced, although there are tough ones. The message is most important. Not the acrostic.

What I disliked*Idea*: This is kind of a tough piece. I think you are trying to bridge a gap between where you are and your reader's point of view. All those specific things to your faith are kind of hard to get a handle on. I realise you have a link. Most won't read it.

How the piece made me feel I see truth in here although I don't get any of the references

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Review of No Longer  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through the author's newsletter. I spent time in the Navy aboard ship in the 70's. It seems like it was just yesterday

Overall impression of piece I was pretty newly married when I got assigned to ship duty. I was one of 4 in my class to get the assignment. I know about distraction. I read all of Shakespeare while deployed

Grammatical and spelling errors: It is kind of hard to read. It seems to be missing a lot of punctuation

What I liked?*Smile*: The anguish of what this is all about is all here. The repeated line till it's not one of those days is effective.. It is a lot of miles. It doesn't seem like the same planet. The cultures of men on ship and foreign cultures are hard to comprehend

What I disliked*Idea*: This is a lament like love's labor lost. It is a little depressing. I sense it wasn't necessarily written for me. I always look for a way out of sad verse. Maybe there isn't always one to be had.

How the piece made me feel We definitely have a romantic here. It is good to know that you are alive and well. I have been married for almost 43 years.

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Review of Small Steps  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece random review

Overall impression of piece: You've done well explaining your art form.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile*: This seems to be a good example of the craft you speak of. We all want to take a giant leap towards our goals, but it is seldom done that way. You have a nice link to explore this more fully. You do have imagery here, of sorts. A physical step is a metaphorical one. They definitely are related.

What I disliked*Idea* This is ok from the point of view it is written. It is not a usual western piece. Maybe I am biased.

How the piece made me feel I don't think we are very patient. We want everything yesterday

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Review of Despair  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I am looking at this from the shameless plug page.

Overall impression of piece I found this worth reading. It made me wonder about despair.

Grammatical and spelling errors: All-consuming, Two periods after jukebox. It looks like you only have one space after a period. Generally, it is two. Comma after breadwinner. If you give up would be a question.

What I liked?*Smile* I love Max small being tall. I love the magical connection with Uriel. It really is that way
The road toward this type of purgatory is a steady downward progression. I believed this was a real type of encounter.

What I disliked*Idea* Nearful,if a word, is kind of stilted

How the piece made me feel I realise the 300 word limit did put limits on you

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Review of Last Chance  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of a random review

Overall impression of piece: I can see the sonnet in this without reading the introduction. This is a perfect format for a love poem

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* I got the feeling I was with you as you penned the lines. They are really quite beautiful. Being stowaways in time is an old theme of love poems, but works well here. Great rhyming couplet at the end to finish this off. This is sensual with a lot of differing and varied inputs.

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of any

How the piece made me feel What is love? I think you have approached it with vigor and clarity

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Review of Innocence Lost  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: I can see the darkness here

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok. Reads well.

What I liked?*Smile* Innocence is a recurring mantra. Even at 65 I still miss some of that. It is kind of an interesting view point to talk about yourself in the third person.

What I disliked*Idea* This kind of spins a tale of loss of innocence. It really doesn't give any answers. The purpose of poetry is not to recreate the black whole. That is kind of Stephen Hawkings stuff. Even black holes recreate something.

How the piece made me feel My faith tells me that we need to be reborn. Even common sense kind of tells me that if you think what you've always thought, you will get what you've always got.

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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece

Overall impression of piece This is an extended metaphore. It is pretty unique the way you put this together.

Grammatical and spelling errors: First sentence isn't a sentence. There is no verb. Its should be without an apostrophe. It as a possessive doesn't get one. Two of your I'ves need an apostrophe instead of a comma. Some of your feelings are capitalised and some aren't

What I liked?*Smile* I think a lot of the time, we feel we are on a train--perhaps to nowhere--with certain cars on it. I can buy all of this.

What I disliked*Idea* Everyone needs a way out. This is a pretty dark piece. Can you give us something?

How the piece made me feel Sympathy and empathy are two different things. I think we all need people to come along and be there with you. Empathy would have to take account you are going somewhere and taken that into account.

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Review of The Brewery  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece Of course deadline is a big drinker. I can get and see that.

Grammatical and spelling errors> We need to know what an IPA is the first time. Since usual is the start of the quote, it needs a capital. Bad record with that war doesn't need the comma

What I liked?*Smile*: I think, in your imagination, the usual people come into a bar. I can accept that. We al have alter egos we take with us

What I disliked*Idea* All these names need kind of an introduction of who and why they are there. I can accept the premise, I just can't figure out what they are doing there. I need something to relate all these named people together.

How the piece made me feel I am kind of confused. This is more than three men walk into a bar. There might even be some mysticism here

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Anniversary review. I love history. There is self-help potential in this topic

Overall impression of piece: Kind of a chatty little piece. We either buy into this or we don't

Grammatical and spelling errors Generally dashes are two hyphens together--then the parenthetical thought. There are no spaces

What I liked?*Smile* The history of unlucky Friday the thirteen has some historical underpinnings. Criminals were executed on Fridays. They even had a society to prove the Friday the thirteenth was not unlucky. The met on Fridays and the 13'th was a special meeting. Things went well until their meetings started getting bombed by extremists. Meeting attendance really went down

What I disliked*Idea* If this a magic talisman or some self-fulfilling prophecy? I probably need more to go with a universal principle

How the piece made me feel I have never had a problem with the concept. I was probably born on that day

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Review of Eunice the Unique  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: This is certainly written in a poetic and metaphysical style. We are a part of everything. At death we become those things all over again

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* You really followed the prompt well. It is evocative and looking at leaves is kind of challenge. I have young boy roots--alright I am 65.. We tromped them. I think we do want to be unique like a leave, but there are so many of them. We literally miss the forest for the trees.

What I disliked*Idea* There is pretty heavy duty metaphysics here. I don't invalidate your concepts. Could you help us as readers enter into the world of leaves more?

How the piece made me feel My leaves are old and crinkly after being on the ground all winter.. Sometimes I feel that way too.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review.

Overall impression of piece: I work in a Military History museum

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* There are not a lot of things like this. Your links are pretty good and easily accessible. They could be used easily.

What I disliked*Idea* This description doesn't give me much. Most of this is lifted directly from the source you linked to. I guess I could down load it, but I did not. What I want to know is what you thought of it as a reviewer. All the quotes from someone else should be attributed to the original

How the piece made me feel I really want to know what the reviewer thought of this.

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Review of Serpent lies...  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the review requested file

Overall impression of piece> This is pretty sense catching

Grammatical and spelling errors This is kind of hard to read with a dearth of punctuation. There is so much going on here, an occasional comma and period would really help. This is definitely written to be read. Capitalization appears a bit random

What I liked?*Smile* This definitely has a visceral feel to it. People have lost their sense of snakes and serpents who are really pretty gentle folks(work at an aquarium) and are terrified.

What I disliked*Idea* This is a little over the top for me. You have a bunch of very grandiose images which are spectacular, but I am not sure what they mean to me as a person.

How the piece made me feel TS Elliot would say we are the Hollow men. We may be yolkless too. We definitely slay with words. There are probably more word murders than actual ones, by far. Can we fill our lives with dreams? Very interesting

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I kind of like essays. This seems honest and forthright

Overall impression of piece: This sounds like you know what you are talking about and have been there yourself.

Grammatical and spelling errors You might put the In you are faced with your ego a semicolon instead of a then to connect it, it would not feel quite a cumbersome

What I liked?*Smile* I saw from your site that you have been building up to this. Not a bad start. This is honest. It is a hallmark for good writing.

What I disliked*Idea* Give more examples of what you are talking about. You are talking about very personal things that people need lots of guidance on. How can being powerless make us feel more confident?

How the piece made me feel Learning to be powerless is an interesting turn of phrase. There evidently is something that is greater than you. As a Christian, I get that. It is not a prevailing way in our age. I think we do like to think, "We're ok." Statistics say we are not.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Random review that popped up. It is my kind of article in that it is short, to the point and practical

Overall impression of piece: This is very short, professional and helpful. It anchors in a lot of what I am thinking about.

Grammatical and spelling errors Well punctuated. No errors

What I liked?*Smile*I love your links. You are very right in attaching them because most of us are not tuned in. Great last paragraph, People are not happy often because they don't do what makes them feel good.

What I disliked*Idea* Don't respond to no great exhale. It sounds too much like just breathing. Perhaps exhilaration? More detail on release point.

How the piece made me feel In a Book called Flow by Michal (long check name that starts with a Cw) he said that in his scientific study that people were most in tune with their life when they were doing something that made them feel validated. Often, this is at work. He would literally page them and ask them what they were doing and how they felt.

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Review of NOT ENOUGH  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece i was going through prose and found this, I was born in 1951, so I remember the song and the summer very well

Overall impression of piece: I think we long for the perfect and it seems so very far from us

Grammatical and spelling errors: Intact. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Since I lived this, what is not to like. I think we were all a little apprehensive. It was new. It was startling. With Vietnam protests, we thought the country would disintegrate. I love your suggestion. People need some compliments. You catch flies with honey

What I disliked*Idea* Innocent victims might be a bit over the top. Maybe the critique is too The perpetrator might not think so. The reality is probably they are just innocents. Victims are either dead or maimed.

How the piece made me feel I was young and coming of age. I wasn't sure what I felt about that. It was complicated.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I found this in essays. It is a lot of what I like.

Overall impression of piece: I think your heart is in the right place in all of this. A lot of what you say is pretty true

Grammatical and spelling errors A period became a greater sign

What I liked?*Smile* I like writing out scripture. Almost no one looks it up. Stewardship is in the Bible. We do take care of the things of God. Everything really belongs to Him.

What I disliked*Idea*: God helps them who helps themselves is not in the Bible. I am not entirely sure if it is entirely true. There is a popular folklore that it is. It is one of the most quoted non-verses. A lot of this is not very new and not very personal. I think you are talking about a comprehensive world view, but it kind of got reduced to a formula

How the piece made me feel The prayer is thy kingdom come, thy will be done: not my will be done. I kind of like the Russian proverb: Pray for a miracle but row for shore.

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Review of Unseen Secret  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in the review requested list.

Overall impression of piece: This is one of the famous men in the worlds as to scientific endeavor.

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is kind of an introduction of a legend. They were dedicated, but most had little idea how to use them

What I disliked*Idea* You have introduced a secret here, and we aren't really sure what it is. There is a lot of summary here. Especially for edit point 3, we need to know what the things he did were.

How the piece made me feel I am not really sure why you wrote this and what the requirements for the contest are. I am kind of a history buff

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Why I chose this piece Returning a review. This needs a review. No one should have an unreviewed piece

Overall impression of piece: I haven't seen this format. I kind of like it.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Kind of like how all the second lines rhyme. I like the use of a pen name. It makes me wonder what I would name myself

What I disliked*Idea* Could there be imagery in these? You are kind of just telling us, although they are grand things

How the piece made me feel: Who isn't confounded by love. The more you give yourself away, the more you feel love. It is the ultimate irony. We have a mission, in any faith. It is pretty much summed up in the last line.

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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review and looked interesting.

Overall impression of piece: This is a pretty tight little piece where all the characters are pretty well defined in less than 300 words. Pretty amazing

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* Will we do the right thing only because of laws or are we geared that way? That is interesting. As a Christian, I might have a bit different take but I respect yours. Most people do cheat on the law. They cheat on spouses.

What I disliked*Idea* He's at a psychiatric hospital. This kind of precludes possibility of rational choice--at least someone thinks so

How the piece made me feel: Are thoughts arbitrary? The wife kind of thinks so.

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Why I chose this piece I like essays. I write many myself.

Overall impression of piece: You are writing about things I am unaware. That's good. You describe things that is in our popular culture--the mind of Spielberg. Where did he get it? Very interesting.

Grammatical and spelling errors "Close Encounters" is a Movie Title. I believe quotes are in order. Secret Journey to Planet Serpo is apparently a book. Underlining would be in order. 12 has two different types of parentheses

What I liked?*Smile* This is kind of like a news release/book report. I like short and to the point. I like you put a reference.

What I disliked*Idea* Why is Brandenberg as scientist who became unhinged? I need more

How the piece made me feel You are trying to change our opinion. I think you may be right but I need something to tell me the author is credible.

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