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Review of My Valentine  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in a spiritual newsletter

Overall impression of piece: I would hardly think spiritual about this. This kind of plays up twisted to the max.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* This deals with a lot of stuff. You have all the sensory images you need for romance, except--it isn't there. This is like a poem to unrequited love that is perhaps moderately deranged.

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure if she killed herself or just did that to scare him. The ultimate love story is Romeo and Juliet where if I can't have them, then I will die. This seems extremely manipulative. I would give a little more detail as to what happened next: either slowly dying or calling 911 or something.

How the piece made me feel What is love? Do we want tokens or do we want the real thing? This is pretty scary stuff. I am glad for the rating

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Review of Adapting  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece A newbie review

Overall impression of piece: I did believe this could happen. I got enough details to make it believable

Grammatical and spelling errors: Learnt is generally not used. Perhaps this could be a British usage but for an international audience, not so much. Generally, I would think cared for. Split quotes go for the second quote, "No harm to her."

What I liked?*Smile* You do have a lot of sensory detail here. I can see most of the motivation here.

What I disliked*Idea* Excitement being repeated doesn't make things exciting. More sensory detail would help.

How the piece made me feel Put in a bio. These are very helpful for reviewers

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece; Life happens. I kind of get that from reading this. The combined holiday is really pretty much a reality too.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* I can see why you wrote this. It is the ultimate romance story--even if the hero is very young. He gets it. Love is about pleasing others. Also a definite yah Grandma. Mother is the ultimate co-conspirator and maybe instigator

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure if this was a contest offering. It could have been. It would have won.

How the piece made me feel We are committed to our families--till death do us part.

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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: I guess mythology is not my strong suit, but I kind of liked this one

Grammatical and spelling errors God of Promise is a proper name and probably deserves capitals. Same with Goddess of Wisdom.

What I liked?*Smile* This is kind of a down home view of what really happened with the world's most cherished cherub.. In a short piece by design, you have put in a lot of detail and made it seem real.

What I disliked*Idea* Since the name is so important, I would havae found a way for the translation.

How the piece made me feel Jupiter had his heart missed by cupid. That explains a lot.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this piece as interesting and am coming back to it. I read and understood your bio and pertinent pieces of this fine piece and was fascinated.

Overall impression of piece: This is very good. It made me think and feel personally.

Grammatical and spelling errors: The true statement is kind of awkward. generally there is more eplanation before the colon.
English-oriented needs a hyphen

What I liked?*Smile* You havae described your predicaments very well. Most of society would rather ignore and hope you would go away. There is some soul searching in here about your background and how it effected you

What I disliked*Idea* Joy was found is kind of passive as a sentence and doesn't give an active enough desciption of the process. Here, we need details

How the piece made me feel Congrats on being a rising star. It meant something to me too. I think more people than you can imagine are basket cases under pressure. There are things that work in text book, but real life is quite different. It is than we need someone to come along side. I think we all know in our minds the right things to do. The problem is getting the heart or volition to actually do it,

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I love history. It is kind of a passion. I also love short and to the point

Overall impression of piece: This definitely meets the concise category

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile* There are specifics in this. I can see and almost handle the artifacts. There are some references as to where this stuff went to. I love the link. I think it is vital to your piece. We all need to know, "Where to from here?"

What I disliked*Idea* I love succinct but I need more. There has to be something to make me want to be interested. Massasoit I believe, is very famous. Make sure we all know the connection. We need a specific group of settlers. Most American believe that John Wayne performed most of our history.

How the piece made me feel I could easily see this doubled in length and not lose any readability. We all want to know why things our important--even in a short piece.

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Review of He Carries You  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through spiritual pieces and found this

Overall impression of piece: This is personal and heart felt.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok. Reads well.

What I liked?*Smile* The physical and the spiritual are not that far distant. We all need to be carried by ultimate hope

What I disliked*Idea* I like the fact that the continuation of sentences is not capitalized. Unfortunately, you are not consistent. Some continuations are capitalized. Maybe a little too much rhyme. I like telling by images rather than just telling.

How the piece made me feel Your boy knows ultimate hope. He doesn't write poetry and hope to figure it out. God's relationship with us is personal too.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review.

Overall impression of piece This is a pretty well crafted piece.

Grammatical and spelling errors Grammar and poetry almost have no place together but, after mistake-proof maybe a semicolon. It does read ok with a comma.

What I liked?*Smile* The repetitive rhyming tends to emphasize the repetiveness of most work life.

What I disliked*Idea* Go for the peach seems a little forced and I am not sure what it means. Maybe its not free speech

How the piece made me feel Your interesting rhyme scheme gave this a very interesting rhythm. It talks of the rhythm of work without talking about it.

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Review of The Lakefront  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece From the review requested file> I am kind of a prose writer ,self. Mostly, I find poetry a little too restrictive.

Overall impression of piece I think this would qualify as prose. This has a lot of poetic images in it.

Grammatical and spelling errors Moss hangings sentence really isn't a sentence. It has no verb. Sometimes prose that is reasonably ok

What I liked?*Smile* You have a good view of things. I think you are able to see things that most do not

What I disliked*Idea* This catches mood really well. I am not sure if anyone changes or what the process that people are going through. I am not too sure what off putting is.

How the piece made me feel You might look at song lyrics from a Peasant Valley Sunday. All the things that happened seemed to have a reason for them

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I am. of course, well familiar with your work and story. I bookmarked this because of interest.

Overall impression of piece This is a short friendly piece that you might get from a friend.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Comma after thrash. I think you might have meant embracing a death. Probably a comma after ecstasy. Good use of the colon

What I liked?*Smile* This is short, direct and to the point without being preachy. There is pretty heavy duty theology here without seeming that way

What I disliked*Idea* What is the gospel message. It seems basic to your piece. I think it is the possibility of spiritual rebirth in Christ. I would state it. It is basic to your message.

How the piece made me feel Caterpillars are literally rearranged at a molecular level before they become butterflies. Be transformed in Romans 12:2 is the same word we get our work metamorphosis from. God knew what he was talking about.

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Why I chose this piece I am not sure. I bookmarked this to come back to. It is an incredible piece of work

Overall impression of piece: This is an incredible amount of information. I have seen books that didn't have this much.
I am well familiar with the Bamboo tree. Patience and perseverance are the keys

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* There is so much here to like. We are raising a generation on non-thinkers. It has pretty much become something we can google and don't do ourselves. Read a book? Are you kidding me? (I am probably 50 too 100 per year--if not more) Your example of the bamboo tree is striking and definitely on-point

What I disliked*Idea* Although I agree with pretty much everything you have said, it is a lot without specific examples of why what you are saying is the truth. We know a lot of truth. I think the example part and seeing more of how things work is what really convinces people. For instance, calling could be a piece just by itself. Most really have a struggle with that. Follow your calling. Most of us have a real problem with knowing what that is. Reach for the infinite? There is a whole section in the library about that

How the piece made me feel I liked reading this. I pretty much resonated with all you said. That is the first step in communicating. It definitely has been my pleasure to read and review. Sorry no one else has. It is to their detriment

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Review of Dear Me  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I havae reviewed a lot of these over the years

Overall impression of piece: I like the process you have gone through here. You are very systematic and sequential. You definitely do know what you know. That probably is not the issue. Ilove this type of exercise. Even if you don't win, you will win if you address most of this.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* I get what you say. Sometimes life sucks and we need to do something else. The thing about anti depression meds is really good. I do take them. You do know what to do. I think in the Lovesong of JR Proofrock he says, beyond the thought and the action lives the shadow. Life is very long

What I disliked*Idea* Grow a pair seems like kind of a mixed metaphor for a very pretty young lady. I think you can do better. I would deal with the fact about doing the right thing

How the piece made me feel 70% of people who are told to make life affirming choices never make them. The Bible says, choose life so that you may live. Seems pretty left brain to me. I am not sure that is where we live.

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Review of Patience  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter

Overall impression of piece: I think a lot of us have waited at this critical juncture. I think Shakespeare said, "Put your courage to the sticking place and we will not fail

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* I get the work of all these suffering people of verse one. They were all waiting. I think what empowered them was to do the right thing. Sometimes we do wait in the dar.

What I disliked*Idea* Everything comes to all who are patient. There are a lot of patient failures. There are a lot of people with peace and joy that kind of enjoy being lost.

How the piece made me feel 6-'s flower children seem to come to mind. Peace, love dope. Most went on to be captains of industry. They did have to make money, too. I am not sure we make the world happen by patience. We have been patient for a long time and nothing has happened.

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Why I chose this piece I love essays. I love your dedication towards your craft

Overall impression of piece: This is a very well organized piece. It shows a lot about your mind

Grammatical and spelling errors: Paragraphing error after achieve? 8 hours should be eight. I would capitalize the elements of smart like Smart, Measurable--we are really pretty dumb.

What I liked?*Smile*. You have pretty much hit the high point for every organization guru known to man. This is very succinct and directed.

What I disliked*Idea* This is not very personal. You are trying to get people to do these things. Anyone who is slightly well read knows what you are saying is correct. The trouble is that 70% won't do them. Encouragement and personal example are probably the biggest factors

How the piece made me feel You have a lo9t of the genre of personal development. I have read most of this. I think most want to know what you think and how it works

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Review of Chaos Awakening  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in the please review file. I looked at your bio. I could certainly identify with a lot of stuff in there

Overall impression of piece: I have morning like this. I get what you are saying< I am retired from a profession I really liked and felt a part of it

Grammatical and spelling errors: Since bladder seems to have an identity and a point of view (I get this, I am older) maybe quotes would be in order.

What I liked?*Smile*: I can admire the discipline to write something of this, Your rhyme and meter seem to work. Rhyme does not seem contrived.. It reads well

What I disliked*Idea* Darkness is night by definition. Perhaps we have over poeticized this. I saw your picture. You seem to havae been trained in the way things are about when I was. Consider just having the first of a sentence capitalized

How the piece made me feel Maybe you are tring too hard to hammer this in a format. Most of the time I write prose because I can say just what I feel. I feel you have more to say. I think flow comes along when you are doing something worthwhile.

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Review of Essay on Tiresias  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the random review function. I like essays. I am kind of into antiquity

Overall impression of piece We are doing an education focus here. It is almost amazing how much of this seems to be modern day. We definitely know about gender identity issues today

Grammatical and spelling errors: Starting sentences with an and is how we talk, but is not too grammatical

What I liked?*Smile* I get some of the issues that go into this tragedy. Gods didn't live simple lives. Athena is kind of a B... . She always has been

What I disliked*Idea* I really don't know how this guy you are talking about fits into the overall picture. Even a couple of sentences would really help. How about what story are they from?

How the piece made me feel I would give a reason why this character is useful to other writers like--as an example of... Even us as humans are confusing.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I picked this up in the random review function. Newbie writer. Wecome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: This definitely hits the dark category

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* I get the feeling that you know this type of thought and dream. It seems kind of realistic. There seems to be a move towards resolution in the character--like all stories should have--but I am not sure what that is

What I disliked*Idea* Loki is the trickster in norse and I believe Indian mythology. There are certain thinks that are expected when dealing with him as that name. I don't really know what or who is real. That is both the beauty and problem in this piece.

How the piece made me feel This is definitely someone possessed by demons of sorts. Everyone seems out to get them. Claire he knows. Loki appears to be an ongoing nemesis.

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Review of Rainy days  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Random review function. It started to rain here. It has been all snow

Overall impression of piece: The first thoughts from the first line made me think of happy days are here again. We live in the desert so rain is not a big factor (11 inches per yr)

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* This is evocative in its storminess. Through the ages our perceptions do change and so do our foci. Finding a star on a rainy day is a nice touch

What I disliked*Idea* This seems a little bit sad. I am not sure what to make of it. I guess it is hard for me to come up with a point of view.



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Why I chose this piece This is part of the random review function. Your name came up

Overall impression of piece: This has been a hard winter here in Idaho. We generally have a week of snow at the most and then, rain. It has been over 2 months. We have kind of freaked out as you say

Grammatical and spelling errors: One paragraph you kind of break block form. Otherwise it is ok

What I liked?*Smile* This is genuine and honest. I don't think you are holding back. You do have a unique perspective

What I disliked*Idea* Never start anything with an apology. Things always are what they are. I havae no idea where you are going with this. I need more. It is kind of rambling--albeit kind of poetical rambling. It kind of is like a diary entry and you need to draw us in more

How the piece made me feelWe are all looking for that miracle. Even at 65, I get that. I am not sure if it ever goes away

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Why I chose this piece This is a random review function. I like religious poetry

Overall impression of piece: Peter is of course, human and spiritual. Which is more important? I am sure the answer is :that depends

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* I am sure by the Spirit that Peter reembered everything Peter was told. I am also sure that doubts came up continually

What I disliked*Idea* I have no idea what a senryu is. A footnote of explanation would probably be in order.

How the piece made me feel Simon means sand. Being called a rock is a serious upgrade.

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Why I chose this piece I too am a Chrisitan. I can and do empathize with what you have written

Overall impression of piece: These are wonderful thoughts right in the middle of most peoples view of the Lord/ No one can argue any of these.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* You have some interesting rhymes in here that are not contrived in appearance. I cannot doubt your sincerity

What I disliked*Idea* You havae done a lot of telling what the Christian walk is about but that isn't much in the way in showing us what it is like. I am not saying peace and love aren't good things, but how will a non-Christian perceive them. I am not sure where the pain comes from. I suspect it is that life is hard.

How the piece made me feel

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Review of Bubbles  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I kind of like essays. This is prettily written

Overall impression of pieceL We all have known the magic of bubbles. When we are little, we could be mezmerized for hours. I am not sure why. They seemed to have a life of their own

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact.

What I liked?*Smile* Bubbles are my writing is a nice image. They are fragile and easy to misinterpret. The incomplete sentences seem to work as they convey the child's fascination

What I disliked*Idea* Bubbles have roots to terra firma is kind of pushing the image maybe. Bubbles could be more solidified as an image by playing up the process. We blew them and they expanded. Sometimes they were humungous

How the piece made me feel The lovers that dream and blow bubbles soar together. Perhaps. We have become a society of non-dreamers--to our detriment

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Why I chose this piece I found this in essays and I love a challenge. I kind of hang out here.

Overall impression of piece: You have a fine and logical mind. I have seen a lot of spin misters not put things quite so clearly. This is a definite and unique point of view.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* No one group will entirely get there own way. So get over it. Filibuster had its origin in hostile takeover of cities. We think it is part of our way

What I disliked*Idea* I think the relationship between the two battles being fought can be strengthened. How does railroading your way lead to a breakdown in democracy. Everybody seems to be part of a special interest group

How the piece made me feel Your second battle is kind of a silent one. Our past president kind of got around this by issueing executive orders. It is really not a phone battle. There are real battle lines and we need to know what they are and take them seriously. Do we care? Someone will have to compromise if we are to move forward. Compromise is not a four letter word

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Review of Time To Wake Up  
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Why I chose this piece I found this in essays. I kind of hang out there

Overall impression of piece: I believe this. It seems real

Grammatical and spelling errors: Where sentence has two man ands and would qualify as on a run-on sentence. Dashes are two hyphens put together and no spaces--the parenthetical thought comes next.

What I liked?*Smile* There is obviously a story here. You haave told it in tones and emotions which seems to work.

What I disliked*Idea* Starting a sentence with a but is how we talk but adds nothing. Where my heart sings approaches cliche

How the piece made me feel How do we remember something? It generally is by how we felt at the time. A lot of folks should be able to identify.

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Why I chose this piece I only review what I like. I see enormous potential here. I love the cheery disposition showed by your port picture and your words are definitely words of life.

Overall impression of piece: There is a spirit here. I sense this and your heart is definitely in the right place. You are speaking from the heart about something you know.

Grammatical and spelling errors This kind of shows a basic non knowledge of grammar. I would take a class as is offered by Horizon academy. Capitals are missing. They is capitalized over and over again when it probably doesn't need to be. Things are held together with commas and and and the results are run-on sentences that make this very hard to read. Think one and per sentence and a comma doesn't combine two sentences.

What I liked?*Smile*: This is a road map towards living for Christ. It is the basis for our faith

What I disliked*Idea* The grammar will make this so most will not review. Growth in understanding means probably grammar needs attention first.



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