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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece An essay. I like those. I write a bunch of them

Overall impression of piece. You start with a definition. Everyone seems to define their own melancholy differently

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors seen

What I liked?*Smile* This is very systematic and left brained. Generally people suffering need a little more of that. Wisom means you have something that is applicable and personal

Points to Ponder:*Idea* You define it well. What does it feel like? Are we products of our thoughts or feelings? I think we are to wonder what it would be like to feel better? It is not very personal

How the piece made me feel You sent me a zillion points. I review because I want to. Return reviews are a big deal. Shad Helmerstine wrote a book of What to talk about when you talk to yourself

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through psychology, I think in the encircling crisis, we all think that things could be better.

Overall impression of piece: I am up many nights, but I am afraid, it is about being older.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads very well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Rhyming is very clever and keeps a playful mood. It makes a rather somber piece,more fun. There seems to be a dialogue going on

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Abuse yourself or write? Indeed, an interesting question. I think we feel that the world revolves around us. It does not. Do we write for us, or someone else?

How the piece made me feel It reminds me of the sad poetry I used to write. You have good questions. Be bold, even if only one person other than yourself read them

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This type of thing has been going on from the Garden of Eden. Men and women see things very differently. What is love? The best explanation I have heard is putting someone else's self esteem higher than your own. You try to please them.

What does that mean in real time? I am a good red blooded American male. I am not going to say that I don't think about this more than my wife. If you don't please your wife outside of the bedroom, very likely it won't happen in the bedroom.

30 syllables and you have said a lot.
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Review of Winter haiku.  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This came up on a random review. Haikus are mystery pieces. Both are good. We have all been here and wonder about mystery and how to get there. I guess I would go with the second one.. Snow doesn't crunch on its own. Either way, it is obvious that there is a journey involved.

Michael
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I have been heavily involved in the marriage movement and have been married for 46 years. I am familiar to the verses referenced.

There is a lot of supposing going on. From my experience, most of success or failure has to do with working on it. Couples are so very different. You haven't established any real authority here. Most troubled marriages only get better when they work on it.

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Obviously there are words to be used in this contest. Yes, you do tell a story. We are where we have been. There are mileposts along the way, to direct us and help us find our way. There is something going on here. We have no idea how many minuits, days, years or generations have gone by. Perhaps it doesn't matter, but it is confusing
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Now this is cool and, reading your bio, right up your alley. I think you could add that people had to think about what is really necessary. The answer probably is very little. I call my car a gas tank with wheel

Homecooked meals is a little peculiar in your piece. Didn't compute with my way of seeing. My gas credit card became invalid and I didn't know and for a long time, didn't care.

I am pretty sure there are lessons we can all take away from this

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You covered this with a clarity that is missing in most pieces. What do we really know and what is covered up. Covid might be an example. I am kind of the idea that very little thinking goes on and the hierarchy feels we will just kind of forget out about it. Maybe there going with the lunatic fringe argument, but it is a big fringe

Watch words like expungement. I think I am clear, but it is a bit over the top. EBANs is a little unclear.. I am pretty sure I get it from context.
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Review of Green  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You took a lot of time on your picture. Fascinating. Our culture says we are supposed to be green. Obviously, they have no trouble.

I am wondering about how to make this unique. After all, it is a grasshopper. Archie, as a cockroach wrote a whole series of books in the 20's, including Archie, Archie and mehitabel and one other I think. He gave archie a personality and an attitude

Perhaps there is more
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Review of Losing Our Dreams  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through sites with sponsored writing I like the concept of a weekend writer

Overall impression of piece Thought provoking and emotionally ladened piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile*I think we are pushed to do the right thing. We know what it is but things happen

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Reach for the stars in nearing cliche. I believe sonnets are 14 lines with rhythm things in the lines. I don't think this is it

How the piece made me feel I am not sure if we can do any of this on ouur own. We need a moral center to think and make good decisions

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Why?  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I marvel at the challenge to tell a whole story in a limited amount of words

Overall impression of piece There certainly is blood everywhere

Grammatical and spelling errors: NO obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* You certainly have a lot of graphic detail

Points to Ponder:*Idea* What is the right thing? It really is never said except killing the other. I would introduce the brother's identity earlier. Seems weird. Surely he would understand in time seems odd as he is dying

How the piece made me feel He had it coming and he knew it? That is quite a concept to put into a few 100 words

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Drabble #1  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is pretty well done. They say the things we remember are generally tied to an emotion or a feeling

Pulled them close. I think you meant her although in this day, who knows? Only one person most likely.

I'd like to feel that you learned something. This probably meant something. I get the less solitude and pain

Fill out a bio. It helps us an reviewers to know something of whom we are reviewing

Michael
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Review of Man and Shark  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I like anything written in a science mode. There is a lot of good stuff in here. You obviously have studied this. It shows with all the detail. They are the top of the food chain so they would concentrate toxins more.

Grammar wise, watch your quotes. They generally start with a capital.

We have an issue in our culture that most get their shark info from watching "Jaws." Shark attacks are generally pretty rare and often involve surfers in a seal nursery. Maybe there are seven per year. Man verses shark numbers in the thousands with most caught in nets with other fish.

Give some history in your bio. We need something to show your capacity to know these things. I volunteer at an aquarium. We're small so generally have reef sharks

Michael

Michael
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Review of Disobedient  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This looks like a flash fiction of some sort.. I get the book was highest on a shelf so no one would accidentally have a look.

You have a narrator problem. Who wrote the story? It looks like it was written posthumously. Why this story? I guess it could just be a dark story. There are a lot of them

I guess I am looking for more.

Michael
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Review of Guise  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am not sure if this as dark as you think. You are in poetry mode, so grammar is just an argument point. I think you have the essence of what a lot of us have been through. If I am not the things I have been preplague, what am I?

Should we run around naked? CAn the world handle that? I am overweight and wondering about that. What is expected of us? If we are all that we could be, would the world be ready?
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Review of The Jar with Ears  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Pretty cool piece. It is a kind of, "YOu wonder how these things get started."

Inanimate objects do have personalities. Police lights always get an ,"Oh no."

I like the philosophy here. We can never do everything, but we can do something. Society, by in large has stopped trying. Your scene setting is priceless. I have been in stores like this

Quotes start with a capital. Possible could have quotes in a quote like family way
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like thoughtful essays. You gave this a lot of thought and it hasn't any reviews

Overall impression of piece: This is a logical and sequential look at what everybody will deal with. I realize the contest for this

Grammatical and spelling errors: No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile*This is personal as well as sequential. It has a logical conclusion that builds on everything else. Crisis is a call to action; do something

Points to Ponder:*Idea* The second crisis is more like an issue of beyond any personal ability to change. I do like your approach to do something. Like plastics in the ocean, only 10% is recycled. I buy recyclable plastics. Crisis in chinese means dangerous opportunity

How the piece made me feelIt made me feel supported and challenged.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of King of My Pond  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like this. I am not sure if I have known some sensuous frogs, but Frenchman never tell. It is very conversational. I never would have thought frogs were great talkers. You tell most of it through dialogue.

One of your compound sentences is joined by a comma. A midsentence quote is missing a capital. Small issues for a frog I suppose.

You pull off a frog's eye view of the universe. You even make the frog a chauvenist.
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Review of love  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Who doesn't love the subject of love? Who understands it, without a bit of craziness

Overall impression of piece This is kind of a come-along-side type of piece that works aslong as we believe you

Grammatical and spelling errors: Quotes begin with a capital

What I liked?*Smile* YOu do have examples of perceived love, but they tend to be a bit cliche. I love love crosses out flaws. It is just them

Points to Ponder:*Idea* There are a ton of cliches in here, like actions speak larger than words. You have kind of set yourself up as the resident expert on love. There are innumerable resources, especially the Bible and Jesus. You spoke of this generally; we don't become an expert until we wrestle with it permanently

How the piece made me feel I have been married for 46 years and counting. It changes

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I saw your picture on your port. Your smile makes you look like a dandelion. Jesus wasn't talking about planted gardens. God has a way of taking care of "His" pets. There is color and emotion here God made many beautiful things in the wild world.

I wouldn't give up "flower power."

Michael
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Review of VINTAGE  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I get this. I shop a lot at second hand stores. When their clothes are better than mine, it is time to go shopping. I asked one impeccably dressed clerk if he bought all his clothes there. He assured me, he did

I don't see any errors at your edit points. This almost seems like a commercial. I am not sure what the purpose was. I spent time in Edmonton so the our on color brought back memories.

I notice you have quite a writing background. Up to 10 pieces are free and after that, pretty reasonable

Michael
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the shameless plug page

Overall impression of piece: I believe this is a real happening. It is raining today (in the desert) and wonder about the "Why" of existence

Grammatical and spelling errors Some of your allusions to Ponodorros are beyond me

What I liked?*Smile* Interesting imagery of dry branch and tinder. I feel that way until I take a closer look atmyself. The albatross allusion makes me think of "Rhyme of the Ancient Mariner by Coleridge. I think the people would die for any sense of normality

Points to Ponder:*Idea*: Misery can be very apparent to you, but some of it is harder to follow. Mos Eisley is beyond me.

How the piece made me feelThe rest of my world has gone back to work. Since I am a professional volunteer I am left here alone watching it rain. It is a staged horror show

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of What We Never Had  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the fearless plug page

Overall impression of piece: Sensuousity in spades. I feel what is going on here

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I love your explanation of the form, You do tell a story that is very easy to follow. It is logical and sequential

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Lips and rips is kind of a strained rhyme. My lips don't rip

How the piece made me feelThis whole season of Covid has been a season of loss. I almost figure that death would have been easier. Do we have to die, a bit to move on? I wonder about that. Intimate relations are not always physical--especially as you get older.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Lost  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this pieceWelcome to WDC. Saw this in a review column

Overall impression of piece This is quite picturesque

Grammatical and spelling errors Dashes are two hyphens together. Like her deserved: maybe she. A genuine heart felt smile is kind of a clause; maybe join it with a dash. Sentence fragments in the last paragraph

What I liked?*Smile* I can see and feel a lot of what is going on. The descriptions are visceral and identifiable

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I am not sure what the friend is about

How the piece made me feelI am not sure why this was written. It is kind of on the prose side which makes the grammar things more manageable. There is talent here.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting.



Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Phone Call  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This came up on a random review. Often, I am not a flash fiction fan. You have the whole story here and it makes sense (As much as life ever does).

We try and make sense of things when life can and is pretty chaotic. I love that he never says what "It"is that she can do. This is entertaining and captures the basic human conundrum
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