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Review of In the closet  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays and I like words and expressions

Overall impression of piece This is honest and heartfelt. I get it

Grammatical and spelling errors ... means words have been left out. I don't see it in your usage. All quotes start with a capital. Probably want worst instead of worse

What I liked?*Smile*. A lot of our expressions are very colorful. Your ideas are interesting and personal.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Nothing too overt.

How the piece made me feel I am about as conservative as they come. I have opinions. Judging is not in my job description. My daughter has announced and she still lives with us. I care and will talk about issues if and when she is ready. Maybe furniture people are gay. Look at the musical Kinky Boots

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I found this interesting so I bookmarked it

Overall impression of piece: YOu have obviously studied this. There is a lot of information here

Grammatical and spelling errors No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* They say that Nazi Germany wasn't as different than Roosevelts administration, Even their symbols weren't that different. Lindberg was a Nazi sympathizer

Points to Ponder:*Idea* There is so much information it is hard to fathom truth from rhetoric. You have to be able to answer the question of, "Why shall we believe you?" It might be better to lead with one overpowering fact and give more detail and possibly, a footnote.

How the piece made me feel Any one of these paragraphs could be made into a piece and fleshed out a bit. What does this all mean? People need to have meaning with a government that is in obvious chaos.

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Review of I Am Home  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the spiritual newsletter. The topic is something I am dealing with myself, although I have lived in the same house for twenty-five years

Overall impression of piece Simple, direcy and to the point.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This brought up a lot of interesting questions that might be deeper than you planned on going. What is orientation of the soul?

Points to Ponder:*Idea*There is a lot of telling in this. I think the things that more express the poetic form is, "What does it feel like or look like?"

How the piece made me feel We have become a homeless people. We think we are something, but without a center to define us, we are not much

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece A please review me piece. Welcome to wdc

Overall impression of piece You really get 7

Grammatical and spelling errors Lots of grammar things. All quotes start with a capital. She is missing a capital. I think you are going for block formatting which generally has a line in between paragraphs

What I liked?*Smile* I kind of like Molly as narrator. The dialogue is quite right on. You have heard it before.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* You might pick up more of the grammar if you use grammarly on your computer. It is a free download. I use it

How the piece made me feel I was amused. I like kids

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. Welcome to WDC. You have talent that needs to be developed

Overall impression of piece: This is very honest and forthright for a 13 year old

Grammatical and spelling errors dashes are two hyphens put together

What I liked?*Smile* Most of the time, these are adult reminiscences looking backwards. To even understand a single parent Dad is really incredible. The language is definitely compatible with 13 and works

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Doorbell ditch kind of is hard to get. You might use sincerely, your 13 your old self

How the piece made me feel Makes me wonder what I would say to myself. People don't really change until they want to.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this to come back to. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece I get the essence of this piece and understand it

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is well formatted and easy to read. We have a lot of people who have lost the ability to try

Points to Ponder:*Idea* You need to define mistakes. They are not all equal. Dropping the ball on the one yard line is not a character flaw.

How the piece made me feel You are not necessarily beautiful because you make mistakes. Some are boorish and lead to end of relationships. Some are downright fatal--like drunk driving. You are absolutely correct that people fail because they stop trying

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Review of Supremacy  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the Newbie review articles. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: I kind of get this. Arguments do become kind of all-consuming,

Grammatical and spelling errors It's should refer to words which are plural. Perhaps they are. It kind of looks like we are missing some commas, like after muster and generation

What I liked?*Smile* Our arguments are kind of greedy. "My way or the highway."

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Gluttonous squabble. I get the word. Arguments eating each other needs to be brought out more. Rapacity is kind of a stilted word for something so basic to what you are saying

How the piece made me feel Do our arguments eat each other up? I think they might. That is intriguing

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Review of Our fate  
Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece Came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece Interesting. I felt some of this

Grammatical and spelling errors: Them in the first sentence is unneeded. Sometimes has three distinct sentences so it is a run-on. Can deny is two words. Which is misspelt

What I liked?*Smile*. This seemed personal and I felt you truly believed it. A lot of your images are visceral and easy to feel

Points to Ponder:*Idea* The moment is pretty rambling in structure.

How the piece made me feel This is there. Proofing would help. I use grammarly, a free download. Some grammar help would be in order.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I write a lot of essays. I saw this one without a review and thought I would comment

Overall impression of piece: A lot of folks don't think this is a real issue, but I do. We are raising a generation that is so plugged into electronics, most people seem schizophrenic

Grammatical and spelling errors A lot of these sentences aren't sentences. First one is kind of a salutation Most of second paragraph is a run-on sentence. Semicolons generally join sentences instead of using an and

What I liked?*Smile* Definitely a colorful piece. This is a major battleground. With computer games, you are getting a dopamine hit like taking cocaine.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Most would not know about the famous whiskey speech. Give us a footnote or a url. I have no real idea where you stand. Don't write about something if you think no one is interested.

How the piece made me feelCulture is about how we make relationships with people. Electronics, in general, get in the way.

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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I did another piece and have done others. I am ex Navy

Overall impression of piece: I like the idea of this. Most stories are simple and are taken from somewhere.

Grammatical and spelling errors Drug-addicted with a hyphen. First sentence is definitely a run on and is hard to follow. Wondering probably is waundering, unless he was an unusually pensive fellow. There actually are mainly run on sentences here. Dashes are two hyphens put together, no spaces

What I liked?*Smile* I like that you gave a source for this. It is an amazing story. I have one I have adapted on "Wrong way Corrigan"

Points to Ponder:*Idea*: Don't be afraid to give us more. If you don't know all the facts, you can extrapolate on what you know or just debate them

How the piece made me feelThere is a bit of the storyteller here that can be developed.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays and write a lot of them. Jackie O is from my generation

Overall impression of piece: Definitely a subject dear to my heart. I have been married 45 years and have done Bible studies

Grammatical and spelling errors : Quotes start with a capital. The first sentence is a run-on sentence. Can't end the last sentence with a dash>

What I liked?*Smile* Important topic handled in an informal and personal way

Points to Ponder:*Idea*: I need more of what you think

How the piece made me feel The point is, "Sell yourself to the highest bidder?" I kind of miss the personal angle here. Are we willing to invest in our marriages? Without that, they will fail. I don't think Jackie O made it to her third marriage

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Review of She Lingers  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece I am pretty familiar with ebola

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. Well punctuated.

What I liked?*Smile* This is personal and experiential in an area that is hard to describe.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is about a man but the reference to she is a little obscure. I think the hospital could be brought out more which would increase the whole pathos of the situation

How the piece made me feel Do we flee from pain into hospitals? Interesting. I think you are right. There is little solace there. We think we are not still hunted by predators. Some of them are very small

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Review of Opposites  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I am well acquainted with your work

Overall impression of piece You definitely get the full range of expression from seemingly simple words.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* What are we as a society? We are definitely googling more than librarying. You have educated language as well as not so much

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is a lot of words and lines. You have an issue to determine at the end of the piece of so what? Maybe you could end with meaning and paradox

How the piece made me feel Perhaps didn't hit me where I live.

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Review of Two Adams  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is a pretty good piece and a very credible effort. Thanks for printing the prompt and the verse. People don't generally look them up. Saw it in the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece This is pretty good. There is always an earthiness in good theology

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You have definitely got the Eden curse down. It is simple and direct. Your characterization of Jesus as the second Adam is good

Points to Ponder:*Idea* The first Adam is generally considered the one of creation. The second Adam is generally considered Christ. The antichrist just kind of confuses things

How the piece made me feel Paul doesn't describe it this well.

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Review of The Final Answer  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. Part of our port raid

Overall impression of piece: We will scarcely know the future when it comes. Old people, like me will say, "It never was this way before. This kind of looks like a prologue to something much bigger.

Grammatical and spelling errors , and a period together seems odd

What I liked?*Smile* Mankind is designed to squabble. I doubt if that will ever go away. We will definitely be different.

Points to Ponder*Idea* You have things introduced that you don't tell us how they fit it--like AI. First two paragraphs don't seem to add anything to the story. This really doesn't give a reason why it was written

How the piece made me feel: Magic needs to be spun. Use more elements and unless it pertains to your story, don't bring it in
Definitely write something in your bio. It helps us as reviewers.
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Review of Dream  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is a piece for a "raid function." I found this of interest and bookmarked it

Overall impression of piece: What is real in terms of extraordinary ambition? Are we children of the universe?

Grammatical and spelling errors reads pretty well. Perhaps a little more punctuation

What I liked?*Smile* We are looking at life from a different plane. It is not 9-5

Points to Ponder*Idea*This has got real possibilities. What would a real hero look like and feel like? What would feeling stars be like? There is a lot of "I" in here. I am looking for feelings that can be grasped. I have no idea where "here" is

How the piece made me feel You are on the right track. We should be extraordinary but shy away from it. It is helpful to fill out your port descriptions and bio. As reviewers, we really look at that. Everest is called the dead zone because if you die in the final ascent, no one has the energy to bring you back down

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Why I chose this piece I saw this in newbie pieces and in essays. I love essays and history

Overall impression of piece This is definitely a complex topic for a very short essay. It is definitely valid for our state and time

Grammatical and spelling errors Until with only one l

What I liked?*Smile* This is a good attempt and certainly fits my world view. Revelations say wisdom will depart our leaders in the last days

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Was Washington directing this or was he a product of his time. 52 of 55 of the signers were good church men. Adams would say that without Christian morality that the laws would be unable to be kept. I think we are seeing that. I need specifics on how they are altering the course. I am a profound Christian, but I need specifics as to what you think is happening. Have we forsaken the nation or forsaken God? 45 years seems arbitrary and I have no idea what it refers to

How the piece made me feel Yoou obviously well read. I appreciate that. Maybe some footnotes might be in order.

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Review of Hollow Singing  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in a newbie newsletter and I thought some comments might be in order. I volunteer at an aquarium and astound kids that the sound they hear is the ocean that is inside of their ear. It is echoed back to them as ocean waves

Overall impression of piece Ninety percent of people have no idea about sea shells

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems alright. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Can we get a message from the universe? Do we know how to listen?

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is kind of negative. A lot of people have delved into the mystery. Don't give up.

How the piece made me feel We are part of the ocean of life. Even our blood is sea water in terms of salinity. I tell kids that the only way to talk to a mermaid is on a shell phone. (young crowd). We get our best understanding of the universe when we understand it.

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Review of Stars Born  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Returning a review of your very nice review of my piece

Overall impression of piece You can go a long way with this. Poetic form is good. It rendered questions

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* The whole world is based on cosmic dust. What happens to humans on death? They return to star dust and probably start the whole process over again. Interesting rhymes. Definiely gives a cosmic perspective.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Lurks is an interesting word. I had to look it up. Often it means a hideout or a someone who does something deceptively. Stars kind of are just there. Humans, by contrast, are [retty transient

How the piece made me feel This is very descriptive of something we couldn't possibly put our minds around. I am not sure what any of this actually means as an individual

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Review of Darkness  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is a requested review

Overall impression of piece: This seems pretty honest

Grammatical and spelling errors: Your sentences have a lot of clauses kind of running together. They verge on run on sentences. I would be a subject. Me would be more of an object. I suggest me

What I liked?*Smile* Darkness overpowers colors. That is even true in the physical world. We need a certain amount of light to see richness. I get the despair in this. There is always hope in a new day. Internal eclipse is a very powerful metaphor

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is so descriptive, I kind of lose the person involved.. This is a first person account, but you kind of lose some of that with all the descriptive clauses

How the piece made me feel Please let us know a bit about you in your port. Reviewers really need to know something of whom they are reviewing

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Review of Inner Fires  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the spiritual newsletter. I write a lot of stuff like this

Overall impression of pieceL I get some of this from a feeling level

Grammatical and spelling errors: Lots of sentence fragments

What I liked?*Smile* There are a lot of good images here

Points to Ponder:*Idea* This is personal yet you write about it in the third person. I think you know a lot more than you let us in on. What freezes our souls? I would extend these images so that they can be felt more fully.

How the piece made me feel O'Neil would write about not going gently into that good night. I expect that was cold too

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Review of Divine Unity  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the shameless plug page.

Overall impression of piece: Words are powerful. We have to consider where they come from.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* There is a cosmic view point in this. I have to consider what you say

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Are words kindled by the Spirit or is the author. I would consider the second. The author creates with words. They are tools.

How the piece made me feel A lot of these faiths that seem so distinctive, have a lot of sismilairites

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Review of INTERCONNECTION  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece You certainly havae a unique perspective on this

Grammatical and spelling errors: Two spaces after a period

What I liked?*Smile* Definitely a cosmic view of everyday reality

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Cosmos and universe tend to be synoymous in most folks way of thinking. I would define how you are defining universe. I believe that a universe has individual laws that designate its purpose and meaning. I am a universe./ I can buy that. I have billions of cells

How the piece made me feel Do 9 billion universes make the world easier to understand?

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Review of Love's Surprise  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: I could give this a one word review. "Wow."

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads very well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile*. We can separate in Marriage and not have lasting disaster is the common view of marriage...We do grow into each other so it is hard to know where one starts and the other ends. Of course there is attraction and yearning. We are all human and we need each other

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Can't think of anything

How the piece made me feel I hope you pursued this. There are differences. There always are. It is a miracle to find each other and keep finding the other

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Review of Love Poem  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece Love is a very particular subject. It come up a lot

Grammatical and spelling errors NO errors. Reads pretty well

What I liked?*Smile* There are interesting rhythms and rhymes in this

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Love is everywhere? How about in abuse and un incarcaration. Love soaring to great heights approaches cliche. You have told us all the things love is, but there is no description to have us feel like you do

How the piece made me feel Love is the ultimate enigma. Sometimes it is unrequited.

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