Cute and it made me giggle! You wrote this in 2017. Still hitting that snooze? Happy New Year!
I'm using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter as an editor's pick. ~fyn
Flat out loved this! What a magical storyteller you are!This made my heart smile!
I'm using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter as one of my editor's picks! ~fyn
WOW! Thanking you for the purely magical peek behind the scenes! You've sparked an urge I never knew lay waiting! I have traveled to many places, now here is another I must explore. :) I'm using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter. ~fyn
I love reading something like this and hearing the music in my head! Well done, my friend, well done. Yup, using this in this week's newsy which you inspired! (For Authors) ~fyn
Absolutely, flat out loved this!!! Your Mrs. Menzinger and my Mr. MacMurren were cut from the same cloth. I was the outsider weird kid too. And, might I add, I had waaaay more fun with the characters in the books I voraciously devoured than I ever did on a playground! Wasn't hurt as deeply ever! And, I expect, my vocabulary still outshines theirs fifty years later!!!
I am SO GLAD you are writing again!!! That makes my heart sing! I'm using this in this weeks picks for my For Authors Newsletter ~fyn
WOW! An epic of excellent lines and fresh perspectives!
Just an example--
a tangled spider’s web of wanted emotions, a
heart ensnared, this soul you deftly captured
and
No heart-warming tales from softened chairs, cold calls of valour’s salvation
Only thoughts of abandonment remain in my keep, those
Missing gears and sheared cogs, that fog life’s memories
Finely crafted! I'm using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter. ~fyn
Not only did you fulfill the prompt idea exceptionally, but did it in a difficult form to do well to boot! Took me through a day, a glorious ride, in such a way as to hear, see, smell and feel. Bravo!
Wow. Some truly excellent lines, fresh perspectives, and descriptions. I love stumbling across new word combinations I haven't encountered before. This piece made me smile. A big thing!
Your speaking of spring and word choices like betal nuts, figs, and prayer bells tell me we are a world away from each other, and yet, I felt invited into your world! Invited in to share your vision, and to agree with the sentiments.
Well crafted! And this review request is answered, not lost in shuffling leaves falling from ancient oaks to line the paths. Indeed, I found some precious acorns along the way! ~fyn
Enjoyed this! Some truly excellent descriptions! Like: driven by an engine that roared like a lion with a hairball and --> George didn’t thank his son for his hard work. He didn’t pat him on the back for a job well done. He didn’t say a word. A half smile spoke volumes.
This line carries volumes!--->George, ever the soldier, moved ever forward.
Totally enjoyed this! Numerous levels.
No errors, nothing to mess with,
just appreciations of language use--
One example - his words smooth as river stones<--great analogy!
More, there are layers, and nuances and depth.
Bueyond all this, it is in the storytelling this piece rises to great levels.
The repetition of 'melody most recalled, but few remembered.' Zings, wraps and nails the whole piece.
I'm using this as an editor's pick in my For Authors Newsletter this week. ~fyn
Reading this is a lot like wrapping one's self in a cozy warm blanket in front of the fire and falling into the story. I commend your talent with rhyme and meter as this just dances along in the very best of ways! REALLY well written! ~fyn
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