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Review of Claimed  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Oliver, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is one of unobtainable beauty.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Her deep grey eyes attract him. Her voice is a soft, tender tone. Her Raven black hair is woven in soft gentle plaits, like water over a gentle fall. His desire of her claims her in unrequited love as he reaches out with his desperate grasp.

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Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Description is vivid. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Garden Statue  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Harry, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. {c:orange} Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem tells a story about a garden statue.
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From the Reader: The poet feels the statue is very ordinary and grey, yet he is compelled to purchase it. He discovers it is an angel, cradling an object close to her breast. He later displays the Angel in his yard. His wife complains of such a display, says she cannot imagine what the ornately cast angel is cradling. You cannot tell what the cradled object is.

Later it is time for Santa to bring exquisite, lavish presents, except for the statue, which the poet can't capture. The angel statue is sad with head bowing. There is a message: We've gotten too commercial when we cannot appreciate a simple statue that represents love of others, especially family. Time to put real constraints on gifts. Focus on an evening church service and draw names for simple Christmas gifts. Up the status of the statue and lower the status of the lavish gifts. The writer might want his family to analyze the meaning of Christmas at his home.

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Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public eviewing pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
A majestic unicorn encounters a talking acorn with no brain

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: A majestic, stately unicorn strolled down a wooded forest lane. Moans came from a magical acorn, who said he had yet to discover his brain. His words: "I have a quaint home. I warn strangers of the fox." The unicorn thought he was caring and nice. Both tirelessly made new friends with wondrous beginnings and ends. Neither had an abundance of brain power.

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IRhyme pattern is consistent. Description is vivid. was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of WHO AM I  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Alka, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles,, which I found on the. public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
A daughter's grief is sensitively explained so others may understand.

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From the Reader: This article explains social mores and traditions. A daughter does not own her parents' home. When she marries, she will become part of her spouse's family's home. Her brother is the real member of his parents' home. As he gets older, he thinks parents are a burden, is disrespectful of parents and shouts at them. A daughter has a desire to accompany them and cook them meals with love. Society's laws say daughters are not eligible for these kindnesses. Daughters have two families and are submissive. Daughters are the cutest dolls and dress up family relations.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions: You will one day NOT you, will one day
do the social laws NOT does the social laws
truly NOT truely

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Harry, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This story poem has a fabulous story to tell. Listen!

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:

From the Reader: Right away I'm sitting on the edge of my seat, wanting to be entertained by the poet's story poem. At midnight the poet took Rusty and Pepper on their evening walk. There was a definite chill in the air, the first since March. The reflection of the full moon serves as a neighborhood nightlight, which caused the droplets on the lawn to sparkle and fade. The sound of a distant train is muffled by the nearby serenade of the frogs and crickets. What a glorious relief from a sticky summer.even though Fall is still weeks in coming. Mosquitos and migratory birds, lawns and leaves are told it is time to prepare for the change in seasons.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed free verse. Well-written with a logical conclusion. Good use of simile, eg as a full moon serves as a neighborhood nightlight. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Chris, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This love poem describes a man in love.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet says his beloved is his love, his life, his all. She is there at his request and call. She will always be there for him. He will love her more with each new day. His love will stand the test of time. He loves her more every day.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent, Otto form. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of "Love"  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi T.L. Finch, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes love as an entity.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Love is the heart's mender and quick to forgive. Love's gentle beat is there when lovers meet. Love comforts the lovers in sadness. It hears them in times of need. It's a spell when lovers kiss. Love never misses its cue.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions for Stanzas 3 and 4:
its seed NOT it's seed
its cue NOT it's cue

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Review of GOALS!!!  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Ember, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The writer's goals for the week include expressing her imagination and other items of creativity.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:

From the Reader: In the area of art the writer plans to draw five objects. To keep her creativity flowing, she plans to write two articles. In the literary arena she wants to finish her book before it's due at the library. Help at home, wash the dog, and other chores. This young lady has a very well-rounded set of goals which she should continue developing. I believe in the process of setting goals for a period of time and getting input from other associates. In five years you could have a very professional process that can amount to productivity. Best wishes.

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Well-written and organized. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Harry, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This story poem is about rain, a blue jay and an unexpected visitor.

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From the Reader: There was heavy rain day after day until today morning dawned cloudless and sunny. The poet had neglected filling his feeders. There were birds galore on his lawn and a bluejay landed at his feet. The bluejay flapped his wings aggressively in front of his face. He tried to get the poet to stop walking. Much to the poet's surprise, a muscular snake, a deadly, aggressive water moccasin, slithered the poet's way. The poet took two steps backward, took an ax and be-headed the snake. The snake was after a squirrel or bird for dinner. The poet knew in his heart that the bluejay had saved his life. The poet saved several animals that day and might have saved his own life too.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well-written with a logical conclusion. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion: Stanza 6: in NOT to

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Lety, I          am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your pieces, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece describes his unrequited love.

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From the Reader: The poet's love is unrequited. His beloved does not care for him as he cares for her. Emotions are not returned in the same way. She might be hoping that he would shut her out with words of abandonment.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:.
The poet evaluates the Lord's taking care of humanity, especially the winter holidays.
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From the Reader: As 2013 comes to a close, the poet thinks about many old friends and what became of them. She evaluates New Year's, the hopes and fears, As the year begins, she wonders if she will make new friends, survive, and sing new songs. We should all take the time to pray and set new goals for the coming year. She looks forward to proclaiming the glory of God to humanity.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Good use of simile, eg sands through an hour glass. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
through NOT though

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The poet has written a tribute to his dad's wearing of neckties.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:

From the Reader: Dad couldn't his casually. The neckties he wore said he worked hard to take care of his little guys. Dad's job paid well and his sons made him feel rich. Wise and careful, Mom always selected his ties. His ties were stylish, but not chic, and never belonged to some inappropriate.geek. Getting his paycheck was what he was after.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent except Stanzas 3 and 4. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of BECCA  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes beauty which is relative and needs to be taken in context.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Becca! Beaming beauty! Is it her skin, dark and lovely from the sky? Sleek and shiny. Her bosom, taut and beckons. The poet hears euphony of thoughts about his beloved. The poet wonders what to tell his momma. He promised her beauty, not bereft of brains.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed unmetered verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Gutters  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Pony Tale, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a mood created by a rainy day.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Unrhymed verse. It's one of those days when memories and leaves are left in the gutters. You can't take a step without splashing sadness on your pants. You're compelled to weap with the rain in the gutters.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Flight Home  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your story opens, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .  

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This story poem is a sestina about a story poem.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Early that morning flights of geese said their cold goodbyes in the lightly falling snow. The poet was 10 again, sitting in the bow of his canoe, spending time with Grammy. It always made him sad to see their waves of so many sad goodbyes. Momma and Poppa were life geese mates and never left each other. Poppa had a wing that needed repair. Momma was shot recently. The two of them had a nest this year in the bow of the poet's boat. Poppa trained his flight of birds to fly in formation this year. The poet's Grammy knew this year heaven was calling. She joined the geese on the horizon. There were no final waves of goodbyes this year.

From the Reader: Your story poem is a fascinating adventure about Canada geese and growing up. Vivid description is expressive and colorful. I felt like I was sitting in the canoe with you.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Well-written. Rhyme s sprinkled through your story poem in this unmetered verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Drop by drop  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Sophie, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the. public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This blue poem describes those days in one's life when anyone can feel down and out.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Drop by drop, tear by a tear, bit by bit, the poet hasn't found her place in life. She stays where she is with a forced smile on her face. She is at a crossroad, but doesn't know what to do. She's at a loss for words, on her own and all alone. She incorporates many words which measure many experiences, eg, bit by bit and tear by tear.

From the Reader: Have you tried setting goals and building a five year plan to help you isolate and identify what your needs are? I find this productive and just what you need to find your niche. Best wishes.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed. S
Suggestion: foot and route do not rhyme in Stanza 3.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article describes the love and respect children need from parents.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:

From the Reader: Raising children requires love and respect for them. The writer's parents allied the writer freedom of expression and never bashed the writer's ideas. She says she'll do the same for her children.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Suggestions: Begin new sentence first line after liffe to avoid a comma splice. Check the use of question marks and punctuation marks. "When do we see our future selves?" Here begin new sentence with capital letter.

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Review of Asteroid  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This science fiction story poem describes the asteroid aimed at earth.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:

From the Reader: Your rhyme pattern is consistent. Your description is vivid and expressive. I call your piece a story poem with a logical conclusion. I really found myself on the edge of my chair, hoping the asteroid would be lazered red and veered away from the earth.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This writing piece attempts. to build an awareness of the gift of life.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:

From the Reader: This writing piece emphasizes that when we are gathered to celebrate, we should communicate peace and unity in a brotherhood. We should serve God and be our brother's keeper. We travel in different spiritual, mental and physical thoughts.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Claude, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describe the poet's view of love and passion.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:

From the Reader: Timeleas wishes, endless kisses, comforting songs and beats from the band are things the poet's loved one could share with him. You could show the poet love to set his patience free.

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Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of yourpoems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a dream of flight.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Strands of silk catch, entwine and embrace the wind. I float on stardust and earth glistens and the sun rises over Africa.

From the Reader: Your poem is placed on the page in an interesting fashion. I am reminded of flight when I look at it. What message or statement are you conveying?

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of IN MY GARDEN  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Mary Ann, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public reviewing pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's garden.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The poet talks and prunes each bloom in her garden, but she needs a helping hand from sunshine and rain. When gentle winds blow, the petals fall. She wanders down to the garden gate and ponders the garden she creates with God's wonder.

From the Reader: Good job with consistent rhyme pattern. The rhythm is choppy and you need to read your poem aloud to create a smooth flow of words.


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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion: God's wonder NOT Gods wonder.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
HI Tim, Iam GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public reviewing pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a love poem which starts with hello.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The poet feels those without love wait for love. A time, place or purpose can bring two hearts together. When love doesn't exist, others might reject. Then hurt pride exists. It is hard to ask someone to return your love when love starts with hello.

From the Reader: Your poem has a consistent rhyme pattern, abab. You have a nice way of sharing your values with the reader. Nice job.


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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of April Winds  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public reviewing pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This cameo form poem is well-suited by its name, a delicate picture to be sure.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:

From the Reader: April's wind bites as the tiger roars. The wind chill factor shivers. Litter is blown across green lawns. Bird nests rock as tree limbs wave.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed, unmetered cameo form poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Suggestion: Did you mean bird nest rocks NOT bird nest rock?

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public reviewing pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This sestina poem describes what it's like to sip the nectar of the stars.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The sky spread overhead like an overturned bowl of glitter. Stitched by stars on heavenly quilt. The poet sat content watching the dance of firmament. He had spent an entire night washed in stardust. The poet felt insignificant, yet content. He was content to write poetry in deep space.blue. He started each day with a serene orbit of delight. Trust in him to find what he needs and stay true blue to poetry.

From the Reader: Efective use of personification, eg I might watch the dance spread before me all night. Your piece is loaded with imagery, eg metaphor, vapor trails stung red; simile, like an upturned bowl of glitter. Your description is vivid and expressive, eg mists streaming off the lake. Your poem is wonderfully poetic with all the poetic conventions. I feel like I'm attending a fine Thanksgiving dinner with all the trimmings included.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed, unmetered sestina verse. Rhyme is sprinkled through your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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