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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Bear, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of Grandma's down home cookin'!

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Grandma's old apron hung to her knees. The kitchen aroma sat you down. Nothing but smiles as we dove in. Mashed potatos, gravy, fried chicken, collards and fresh okra melted in your mouth. Corn on the cob with butter from their cow, peach cobbler and still nothing said. After dinner we talked about old times awhile.

The title of your poem is appropriate, "Down Home Cookin'". I can just taste it all. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of folksiness in your poem. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of New Year Dreaming  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Connieanne, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
New year dreaming is special to writers.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You think of all the places you'd like to go on this Earth. The Taj Mahal to Big Ben in London and many others. If you can't go today, you can travel through your muse in your mind. Remember your mind can take you anywhere at anytime. You'll be transported by words to lands our minds suggest.

The title is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your lovely poem and found it to have a perfect cadence and flow of words. There is an underlying tone of traveling practically in your mind, just in case you can't travel in the real world. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of life and how life is like a ping pong game.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Life is like a huge ping pong game. It falls off the table or goes into the net. Unforced errors and huge slams determine the winner. Accumulate enough points and you're the winner. Lose enough and you have to make them up next match. You feel fortunate to have played In the game of life. We must breathe and feel lucky sometimes.

The title of your poem, "Life is Like a Ping Pong Match", is appropriate and says what your poem is. I enjoyed reading your poem. There was an underlying spirited, friendly competition. Areas for improvement: N/A

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Simile used well, eg like a ping pong game. Your poem is Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Rainbow Fish, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a house that's not really up to snuff.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Presents topple to the pot and someone's Santa sits. Santa doesn't deny the milk: He guzzles it and sneaks back the way of smoke. He leaves no presents, just a note, asking the family to leave him proper foods next time.

Santa is not pleased with this family. Proof accorded by his not leaving any presents, only a note which says to leave him proper foods next time. He feels shorted. The title of your poem is "Generous but Ravenous". This title seems inappropriate. Santa didn't show generosity and neither did the family. You might want to put on your creativity hat and change the title a little. I enjoyed reading your Scrooge-like poem. There is an underlying tone of being niggardly. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Consonance is used well, eg stumbles, slobbering. Rhyme pattern is consistent. Description is vivid. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Skies of Blue  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Intuey, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of nature's beauty, which is all around us, especially under blue skies. The

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The birds take flight brought by the morning sun. Bushes sway and flowers dance to Earth's rhythmic sound. Life awakens for another day. The Universe holds answers I am never told. Love shiness from above. I stand in awe as I take in the view. Such beauty under blue skies.

The title of your poem is appropriate, "Under Blue Skies". Nature's beauty is bivouac, especially when the skies are blue. I enjoyed reading your book. There is an underlying tone of wonder for nature's beauty. Areas for improvement. N/A

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Your poem has a consistent pattern, except in Stanzas 4 and 5. Metaphor is nicely used, eg softness of light. Consonance is used well, eg sway side to side. Description is vivid, eg flowers dance. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Two Worlds  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Turtle, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a cry for escape from two worlds.

Q*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You asked to be taken from these wasted lands with concrete fields to the forest which commands the sky and the seeds of growth and the songs of spring. You ask that they sing you to heaven to wild fields and flowers. You ask that you are not shackled to iron trees. You wish to be granted your last command. May the works of God be all you see.

The title of your poem "Two Worlds" is appropriate and describes the comparison between concrete and God's gifts. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of torment by one world and peacefulness in the other world. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Description is vivid. Imagery is found throughout your poems. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of I can’t go home  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a canvas for the picture painted of homesickness.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You want to go home and no longer roam. You wish you could to see your friends. Was it really that good? If you did go home, there would be no more worries, and loneliness, just joy. You're not sure if you should. You just want to smile.

The title of your poem is appropriate, "I can't go home". You want to. Should you? I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of sentimentality for days gone by. Areas for improvement: N/A

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Rhyme pattern is consistent, except Stanzas 2 and 3. In this form poem you've used the quadrilew. It is complicated and interesting. Thank you for giving the technical aspects for the quadrilew. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of The Doom of a Boo  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Waddle, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a ghost who doesn't know Luigi.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Boo learned the hard way as he watched doom unfold. A man came to foil King Boo and his evil plan. Boo greeted Luigi at the door, but he didn't know what other ghosts knew. Boo thought Luigi was nice, but he was wrong about the man with the vacuum. Boo was sucked into the machine. He learned the hard way: Get caught in the vacuum and you go into the picture frame.

The title of your poem is appropriate, "The Doom of a Boo", as it tells about the downfall of a ghost. I enjoyed reading your poem, but I had some confusion as to the point of your poem. I think you meant to say, when you're doomed in the vacuum, you go into the picture frame, which means you're plain ol' framed or setup for the kill. There is an underlying tone of tom foolery in your piece. The poet enjoys fooling his readers. Areas for improvement: Rhyme pattern in Stanza 4. Make your message more clear.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent except for Stanza 4. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Gracious Death  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Dave, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of reflections on life and death, using gross blank form.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Aromas from the kitchen bring fond memories of children's laughter. Too soon fate swept him away. Abruptly, cancer came and brought pain upon his soul until the Angels took him to heaven's grace. Our family members gather in that house to share grief and fond regard for him.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Gross blank form is used in this poem. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Intuey, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a friendship made with a new kid on the block.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The new kid wears silly socks and he's always late. He walks home alone, shuffling his feet. I told him to call me on the phone. We got together and played. He said he prayed to the Lord to bring him a friend. Now they have a friendship.

The title of your poem is appropriate, "New Kid on the Block". I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of appreciation by both boys. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Rhyme pattern with couplets is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Blue Windows  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Blue Moon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of love.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You look out the window, see her standing there. You watch the cars go by as you wait for her. You're looking at the moon, wondering if she thinks about you. You pray for her, wishing she belongs to you. Through this blue window, her love belongs only to you.

The title of your poem is appropriate "Blue Windows", like seeing through rose tinted glasses, which might be not exactly true. I enjoyed reading your poem, although there was too much repetition for my liking. There is an underlying tone of dreaming. Areas for improvement: Think about your repetitive thoughts. Are these necessary?

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Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of An Epic Conflict  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Spidey, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public reviewing pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of an epic conflict.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your poem speaks of her preciseness and your cloudedness. Your personalities conflict with each other. Finally, your individual natures cancelled each other out.

Your title is appropriate "An Epic Conflict" and describes what the conflict of your poem is. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of discernment. Areas for improvement:N/A.

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Unrhymed verse which makes a good point. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of hbar, the ogre  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Pat, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This acrostic poem paints a picture about a great reviewer.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your acrostic poem speaks of some reviewers being ogres, except for one reviewer who encourages other poets with humor. He's professional and helpful.

The title of your poem may be appropriate. It is difficult to say. Why do you call the reviewer an ogre? He's one reviewer who is not an ogre. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of appreciation of the reviewer extraordinaire. Areas of improvement: N/A

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Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi.Jatog, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the poet's thoughts of spring.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Nature creates forsythias to combat the gloom of winter. When winter ebbs, you look for the red broom to sweep the steps. On the back porch, beauty appears, the bride and you are the groom.
On the swing sunlight appears and growth takes place as the overcast disappears.

The title of your poem is very appropriate. "When Forsythias Bloom" combats winter. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of happiness and anticipation of spring. Most memorable: sweeping the steps with the red broom. Areas of improvement: N/A

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Rhyme is consistent. Description is vivid. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Raw Fear  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi G. B. Williams, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the. public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This Unrhymed verse describes the poet's feelings as his son is rushed to the hospital a few days ago.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You have a million symptoms of fear as your son is taken to the emergency room. A voice inside you says it's time you fight or flight. You're immobilized and your brain will not process to get you to move. Cold sweat trickles down your back. Chills course through your body out of anxiety. Your heart palpitates. The news can't be good. They're taking too long. The doctor notifies you that your son is okay. You got him to the hospital just in time. You feel that you're going to pass out. Tears stream down your cheeks as you wet your pants.

The title of your poem is appropriate "Raw Fear". I enjoyed reading your poem and sat on the edge of my chair with fear too. The underlying tone is panic. A rea for improvement: N/A.

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Unrhymed verse is effectively used. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Chris, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This love poem describes the meaning of happily ever after.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
My interpretation of your poem: Happily ever after is a fairy tale. Death will end every scheme; This is sad but true. You can deny it if you wish. Happily ever after might end in 50 years. Happily never after is closer to the truth. Remember marital vows say until death do us part. Death will eventually break our hearts.

The title of your poem "Happily Ever After" is appropriate and highlights the main point of your poem. I enjoyed reading your poem. It gave me food for thought for the English language. There is an underlying tone of discernment. Most memorable: Happily never after is closer to the truth. Areas for improvement: N/A. See minor Suggestions below.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
Stanza 2: only exists above. I felt this line was driven a little by meaning.
Stanza 3: until death do us part NOT until death do we part. I felt the use of us would be more official and more like the marital vows.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .
Pride and Playfulness" is fairly appropriate. Your title sounds a little like the book "Pride and Prejudice".
*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem was inspired by the poet's loss in bowling league.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:


You say you're humble, but you know results come to those who work everyday. You won't admit it, and you hide your pride so your pride won't take a hit. You got where you are because you're convinced you're a star. Pride makes you soar, so don't be afraid to admit you're prideful.

The title of your poem "Pride and Playfulness" is fairly appropriate and has the same ring as "Pride and Prejudice" and there is some similarity. The book openly admitted pride. Your poem attempts to hide it. Playfulness refers to the bowling league you've had losses in. I enjoyed reading your poem and the idea that you think a person should admit that he's prideful. After all, that's what got you results. There is an underlying tone of tentativeness in your attitude, trying to decide how you feel about pride. Most memorable: You feel you got where you are because of your pride. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Your rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Hole  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Jimbo, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture about loss.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem Hole" is fairly appropriate. You could add some creativity, eg "Hole in my Hear".

My interpretation of your poem: You're out of my sight and I'm out of my mind. The years are not kind. How can I go on when my heart has a hole?


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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
I think you meant heart has a hole NOT heart is a hole.
Did you mean: Memories of you save me from the rain NO memories of you umbrella me from the rain.

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Review of Youth is a Leaf  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi R. J. Simonson, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem speaks of the similarities between youth and a leaf.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem is appropriate and a metaphor "Youth is a Leaf". I enjoyed reading your poem and found your use of language, eg the use of gerunds, was interesting to read and different from the norm. There is an underlying tone of appreciating nature and human beings too. Areas for improvement: N/A

My interpretation of your poem: The leaf is young and tender, clinging to the caregiver. It gets larger, stronger and proud, but still clings like the swaying wind. Thinking the world is unexplored and it will never change, but suddenly one day the tree is forever gone and the leaf is no longer green.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Nice use of simile, eg lIke the swaying wind. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of A Writer's Lament  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Kenzie, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This article discusses how writing mechanically can crush the heart and soul of the writer.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your article "A Writer's Lament" is appropriate. When you evaluate that sadness strikes at the true writer's heart and soul. I enjoyed reading your article and found it both painful truth and joyful humor. Your words softened the blow with humor. There is an underlying tone of truth. Most memorable: heart words vs. composition by computer. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Well-written from the heart. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Balloon Flight  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of memories riding through the mists in a hot air balloon.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The air was still as if poised on the moment. The balloon was aloft. The morning mists swirled beneath you. Birds flew beneath you. Rising on the wind you soared heavenward 2,500 feet. A time honored toast of champagne occured then you landed. Your souls were still in the air.

The title for your poem is appropriate, simple and to the point. I prepared myself for one glorious presentation of poetry. I wouldn't change a thing except minor error (?) in Stanza 2. See below. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem. The underlying tone is ethereal and heaven sent. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: the whole poem.


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Unrhymed verse. Fine imagery, eg simile: air was still as if poised on the moment. Metaphor is used wonderfully well, eg. a country quilt. Vocabulary chosen is perfect. Description is vivid and expressive. In Stanza 2 you used the word beneath twice. That disturbed my reading slightly. Only minor error (?) I spotted. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of ...and Fred.  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a day in the life of a five-year-old girl.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
In the morning she patters down the hallway and jumps in bed with Mommy. She cleans her room and puts her toys and books away,. Some days they go shopping. Daddy gets home at dinner time. He swings her in the air, and sits her in her chair. After dinner they make sure the kitty is fed. At bedtime she gets into her Jammie's, says her prayers and she and Fred, the teddy bear get good night kisses. Then it's sweet dreams for Fred and her. This poem is whimsical.

The title of your poem is appropriate "...and Fred". Fred is an appendage and goes wherever his five-year-old bear caregiver goes. You don't know who Fred is until the last stanza. You can only suspect! I enjoyed reading your poem. It is so much like the point of view of a sweet young five-year-old. There is an underlying tone of jades ire to experience life and exploe the environment. Most memorable: Daddy swinging her in the air. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of i was here  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Marlow, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the young generation's voive of oppression and madness.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The voices of freedom are madness, oppressed so that young generations are given the title of King for moving a pebble. They rip language and do time's job of change. They scribble gibberish for no point. They remove our past and burn it. Your comment: Again I ask, please leave me be,

The title for your poem "I Was Here" is appropriate, meaning you were there before the madness of the young generation. I enjoyed reading your poem and found it grabbed me to make sure I was aware of what is going on with the young generation, ripping the language and burning it up. Most memorable: the whole poem is memorable. There is an underlying tone of panic in your poem.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Unrhymed verse is effectively used. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Rainstorm  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi KatVon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a canvas for painting a picture of your friend, who was born to be a rainstorm.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your friend was born to be a rainstorm. Your friend's voice is heard throughout the night; His song is sung like falling raindrops. The world ran for cover when he opened up his skies, so he made his thunder silent and learned to bite his rainy tongue. Then he gave life with endless sun. The leaves turned brown and dry. They wished his presence hadn't been taken for granted for he can't be controlled. Nothing beautiful would ever grow if it wasn't washed with rain.

You have used personification effectively, and refer to the rainstorm with human tendencies, i.e. he becomes a friend of yours. The title of your poem is appropriate, "Rainstorm". You could add a creative hint, eg the title perhaps could be "Uncontrolled RAINSTORM". I enjoyed reading your poem, and felt focus was necessary, so I could understand your message, i.e. the many facets of a rainstorm. There is an underlying tone of your poem of mystery which made me wonder what would happen next. Most memorable: how considerate, to create a silent rainstorm. Areas for improvement: N/A

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Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Brittany, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes a Christmas shopping experience.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
We rush around with no rhyme or reason, trying to get Christmas shopping done, and complain of going out in such weather. Weary shoppers shout and push in the malls. What happened to heaven from above? The family with the Christmas manger has stolen my parking space outside this store. It's the helpers who collect money, stand and jingle their bells who you're thankful for. They're what Christmas is about.

The title of your poem is appropriate, but it seems you could give more of a hint by calling it "Christmas Bell", describing that you are delighted with those helpers who ring their bells, collecting money for the needy. I enjoyed reading your poem and thought it accurately shopping at Christmas. There is an underlying tone of panic in the stores of shoppers trying to meet deadlines. Most memorable: The complaining and yelling of all weary travelers. Areas for improvement: N/A

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is consistent and pleasant. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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