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Review of wisdom  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tank, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture for witless poetry.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:{/b
Your poem is short in length and long in wisdom. This seems to me like it is fabulously witty. A word for the wise one would surmise would be sufficient. It isn't.

The title for your poem is "Wisdom", in that if you have any common sense, a word for the wise would be enough said. The listener would know it is time to button up thou lips, and learn from the moment. All you should need to inculcate is one or a few words that will keep you in the pink. You should have faith that this teacher of sorts has knowledge and wisdom to correct the problem. The last line of the poem: IT ISN'T. A person never learns the easy way. It always takes more time than it should; a person almost always learns better from his own mistakes. That's unfortunate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of: practicality vs. impracticality. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: the whole poem I refer to as a saying.

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Rhyme is sprinkled in your poem. The poetic convention of consonance, eg word to the wise.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Cypollo, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a girl whose smiles have stopped.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
When your smiles have stopped, your face turns away, and your eyes drop, your thoughts seem to stray to those quiet, secret places deep behind your eyes. . When your soul wanders through memories and lies, that is when you age with a heart's rage. I know not your sorrows or fears, nor words to put a stop to your tears and restore what life cheats. I have only a kiss where your sad heart beats.

The title of your poem "When Your Smiles Have Stopped" is appropriate, as smiles are connected to a person's overall outlook. I enjoyed reading your poem in that there is an underlying tone of truth seeking and understanding human nature. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: I have only a kiss where a sad heart beats. Something to ponder. I believe you are telling the girl not to get involved in lies, rages and the complexities of life.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion:
heart's NOT hearts

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Fisfall, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only.

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a beef-eater in a vegetarian restaurant.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You go to a vegetarian restaurant with a friend who is strictly a vegetarian. You are a meat-eater and don't enjoy the vegetarian cuisine. This one is no different. You decide next time you're taking him to a beef and brew restaurant. If he doesn't like your choice, you're finished.

The title of your poem "Where's the Beef?" is appropriate, considering your preference for beef. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of justice or fairness in your poem. I don't know how long you'd want to enforce justice though. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Rhyme is sprinkled throughout poem, but not consistently. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Planner-Dan, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of precious memories a dad has of his son the day his son gets married.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You watch your son and wonder if he will always give you precious memories. When he's married his interests will be different; he won't be playing in the sand with Tonka toys, but watching his different lifestyle will still give you precious memories. Someday you will marvel at the precious memories his son gives him. History repeats itself.

The title of your poem "Trucks and Toy Soldiers" is appropriate, as there is an underlying tone of zest and enthusiasm which lead to precious memories. I enjoyed reading your poem, and felt it gave me a special start for the day, knowing that precious memories don't come and go, they repeat themselves. Areas for improvement: N/A.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent, except Stanza 1, in which you have repeated moment and moments. They don't really rhyme.

I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Angels and Heroes  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Slaates, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The lyrics paint a picture of angels and heroes

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
When you deserve them most, angels and heroes show up. They sparkle, glow and lift your heart. Take your heart to its highest level. Look around you. Look inside you. The title, "Angels and Heroes" is appropriate for your lyrics. I enjoyed reading your poem and found it upbeat. . Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: Angels and heroes show up when you deserved them.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Perception  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your Dodoitsu poemr which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a lovely picture of love.of nature.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Sunlight fades in shades of grey and leaves only silhouettes. Reflections change as ripples change reality. (Reflections from the fading sunlight. Movement causes ripples.).

The title of your poem, "Perception", is appropriate, as perception is a type of reality and reality has been changed by ripples. I enjoyed reading your poem immensely. There is a tone of appreciation of nature and anticipation of its next move. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: Sunlight fades in shades of grey and leaves only silhouettes.

This Japanese dodoitsu form has a very natural and smooth flow of words. Nice choice of words.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of two lovers , their excitement about her visiting her parents.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem, "The Night Before You Left", is appropriate, in that the poem describes a few goodbye moments. I enjoyed reading your poem, for there was an underlying tone of sentimentality for the coming few weeks. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: Those lingering kisses on your lips.

You wondered how you could endure three weeks away from your beloved while she went to visit her parents. After dropping her off, you had lingering feelings of the kisses and thoughts of your beloved. You both said I love you that night.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of prairie dogs and tigers and how mankind is making them extinct.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem is appropriate. Almost extinct animals are living off the land while man controls the environment more and more. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of seeking knowledge and evaluating what needs to be done to protect environment, animals and man. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memotable: the thought that tigers and prairie dogs are a precious commodity so man protects him to make money.

From the smallest prairie dog to the largest Asian tiger, Nature's most treacherous cycle pertains to the foraging and the most ravenous hunting on earth. Humans continue to exist in their delicate environments, but the prairie dog and the Asian tiger are becoming more and more extinct as man encroaches on their territory. Prairie dogs are low on the food chain, while the tiger is close to the top. Tigers are valuable for their fur and their body appendages used for aphrodisiacs Mankind continues to tighten it's hold and its


*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Description is vivid, eg windswept, built-up and generously used lands. Unrhymed verse which has a nice flow of words and good cadence. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Birdbath Beauty  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi ConnieAnn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public reviewers pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of nature's sweetness.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Baby bluebirds enjoy their birdbath in the heavy raindrops, but dash for cover in warm houses when they feel drenched. Mama bluebird is happy to see them out of the rain. Clouds are reflected upside down. The title for your poem, "Birdbath Beauty", is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of childish playfulness. Most memorable: Clouds reflected upside down.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Mary Ann I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the memory of your husband.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You say you're lonely since he left. You cried for a year, and played your songs. You feel his presence when you awake. Your children help you through this devastation. You long for his embrace. Until he calls you to join him by his side, then you will once again be his bride.

The title of your poem "Without You I'm Lost" is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as it had an underlying tone of sadness yet hope for your future. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: You'll wait for him to call you to join him by his side when you will be his bride.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Fyn, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the clouds bringing the storm in. If you're going to see the forest for the trees, you need to stop what you're doing and watch.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem "Don't Let the Dance Go Unnoticed" is very appropriate. To me it means if you don't look, you'll never see the beauty described in your poem. Your title hooked me right away. I enjoyed reading your positively lovely imagery. I easily visualized what you had to say. There is an underlying tone in your poem of an ability to paint words in the sky with imagery. I felt the clouds were bringing in a storm, as I evaluated what was said.. Perfect day for a glowing fireplace as you watch what is going on outside.

Gowns billowing with the gowns of a celestial waltz caress the deepening sapphire skies. As the winds whispered ethereal music, the clouds danced.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. Description is vivid and expressive, eg the winds whispered ethereal music. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Christmas tree  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Chris, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poem, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the tragedy in the world of Christmas trees.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem "My Prejudice Which I Freely Admit", is very appropriate and hooks the reader right away. I enjoyed reading your poem, as it had an underlying tone of raising a question of our treatment of the environment. Areas for improvement: N/A

In your haiku you speak of the beautiful Christmas tree which is now gone forever. Your poem brings to my mind the idea of not cutting down the Christmas tree, or buying a living tree which can be re-planted or even buying an artificial tree which has some desirable benefits, thereby saving the Christmas tree spoken of in your poem. I think you're justified in bringing up this issue.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Hands  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi. Cheshire, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of remarkable hands.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your title "Hands" is appropriate but could be more creative. Put on the creativity hat and let your thoughts flow. I enjoyed reading your poem. There is an underlying tone of iimagination of a person who can't get enough painting imagery. Nice job. Areas for improvement: You might think of the number of times you started a line with the word hand. If I were painting this picture, I would try to express the word hand in different parts of the lines.

Hands are storied. They can build, mold, shape, and speak. Hands can reach for heaven and believe in make-believe. Thoughts explode as fingers touch pen to paper. Inner emotions become reality as heart and soul become one. Hands are taken for granted for their life giving talent. Bent and cracked they are silenced from the song they used to sing. Hands caress and love.

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Description is vivid, eg A finger can move mountains or search unknown heavens. Effective imagery: soaring mosaics of sky and water. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Seeking Oneself  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of fears and rejection while growing up.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your title "Seeking Oneself" is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of answering the question Who am I? Areas for improvement: N/A.
Most memorable: Finding out that your true friends never rejected you.

You wanted to be the ultimate gift for both friend and foe. In school being part of a clique was not foolish. You feared the clique's disapproval as well as the opportunity. Your close friends never rejected you. You grew up, took a breath and moved on. The need was gone by then.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. Good choice of words and smooth cadence. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of And so, it begins  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tide, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the snow and rain.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title for your poem, "And So It Begins" is appropriate. You enjoy the day and hear the rain still pattering. We now have a fresh clean neighborhood. The snow is on its way. You've picked the perfect day to write. You can look out the window, hear the rain, see the snow if it gets here, see God's earth and be inspired to write. Perfect! Now you can wrap your brain around each thought. Areas for improvement:N/A. I enjoyed reading your poem.

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Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Star Stuck  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi RainbowFish, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of catching a falling star from the star's perspective.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem is appropriate, "Star Struck", which is literally tue,but who struck whom? I enjoyed reading your poem. I found it was whimsical and playful, but also serious. Caress for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: You found yourself in the cold, clutching grip of the girl who thought Ibwas pretty.

You were plucked from the sky and you hurtled to earth. The girl who thought you were pretty gripped you. Your chest caved inward. You don't want to melt your frigid captor.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Consonance is found in your poem. Personification is used effectively with the star being given human traits. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestion:
Spelling: also NOT all so

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Dr. M. C. Gupta, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem provides a picture for painting.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
The title of your poem is fairly appropriate, "War Cemetery". It seems like an unemotional and matter-of-fact title for the remains of soldiers taken from the battlefield. I enjoyed reading the vividness of your poem. There is an underlying tone of sadness that runs through your poem. Areas of improvement: Capitalization/punctuation. Most memorable: The visitor was advised to be proud, but don't weep.

Silence is all around as one respectfully grieves at the unknown soldier's grave. There is a solemn memorial for those who died for their country. They wreaked havoc with their guns and lances. Now in Mother Nature's lap, they are lulled to a gentle sleep. Visitor, take care. Be proud but don't weep.

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Description is vivid, eg Their souls witnessed in the field a veritable death dance. Rhyme pattern is consistent. Punctuation and capitalization could be an issue. There are specific rules for punctuating poetry. If a poetic thought covers two lines, there is no punctuation and no capital letter ar the beginning of the next line, eg see stanza 1 below. Language usage : lances and guns, NOT singular lance and gun. I was not really distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Stanza 1 Suggestion: To make a complete sentence in this stanza add "is" line 1.
Serene silence is all around,
Gentle wind, rustling of leaves,
Cuckoo calls in the distance
as one respectfully grieves.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Turtle, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your articles, which I found on the public review pages. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your article paints a very fine picture of the analysis of reading a poem.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Too often I read information that doesn't really help me because it is just a list of generic questions, such as those presented at the end of your article, just a list to jog your memory a little. I found that the analysis and logical discussion throughout most of your article was put into a lvery helpful format for both reading and reviewing and eventually writing better poetry. Thank you! I am not going into lengthy discussion, but your analysis will be most helpful. I even learned a new word or two: synecdoche. I tend to want to be succinct; I might be sacrificing some insight by leaning heavily on a succinct approach.

Your title is appropriate, but on WDC writing.com, I think it would help to include reviewing as well as reading. You spoke of using a pencil. What about technology? I don't mark up the poem itself, but I take notes on the computer or on my notepad. I'm a retired educator, so I'd like to mark 'em up. Not practical for me. For others like instructors, yes! I thoroughly enjoyed reading your article; I'm going to make it my Bible. There is an underlying tone of academia and practicality, which combination I fully enjoyed. Areas for improvement: N/A other than a minor point or two above. I'm thrilled to discover your lovely, perfect article.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of A Day of Rest  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
HI Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages.. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of a day of relaxation to clear your mind of daily stress.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
A day of rest consists of a soft cuddly pillow, a warm cozy blanket or tidying up. Simply, it is a way of lounging at home at a slower pace to clear your head of the stress of daily living. You earn your seventh day of rest like God did when He created Earth. Only after supreme effort do you get to relax and lounge within the confines of your home. L

The title of your poem "A Day of Rest" is appropriate for today's workers and those who are familiar with the Bible. I enjoyed reading your poem, as it had an underlying tone of a well-rounded lifestyle. Areas for improvement: N/A. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Lauren.  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Mary Ann, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of Lauren who still gives the same big hugs after all these years.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
You knew her as a young girl. She ave big hub
gp's then. Bedtime dames and she wasn't ready. She would shout and scream. At times she was spanked. Now grown, she has her own home. You, Nanny, visit her from time to time. She loves you and you love her too. Not much has changed your relationship.

The title for your poem is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of bonding, which continues to later life. Areas for improvement: N/A. Most memorable: The tether came out occasionally. In my family we referred to the tether as the cat o' nine tails. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. Good use of metaphor, eg the tether came out.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of What Goes Around  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sum1, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review poems. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of life, what you reap is what you sow.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your poem reminds me of an old adage: "What goes around, comes around." We should never look down our noses at anyone. All people, including the poor, the disabled, the intellectually challenged, the vagrants and more have a special ability in some way and should be treated with respect. Another old adage: "But for the Grace of God, there go I." We could be superior and have it all until a fateful day takes it all away. Arthur suddenly after a fall was found penniless. He had nothing. He learned a lesson the hard way.

The title of your poem "What Goes Around" is appropriate" and gives a hint of what's to come. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of didactic instruction. Most memorable: When Arthur fell and found himself with nothing. Areas for improvement: N/A. Very well-written. The point of your poem is well-taken.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Description is vivid and expressive. Rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture that gratitude is an attitude at Thanksgiving or other times.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Thanksgiving Day is the happiest holiday of your childhood. Grandfather knew how to pray. You silently counted your blessings. You removed the turkey, stuffing, cranberry sauce and ham. Then you put the food away.

The title of your poem is "An Abundant Thanksgiving Box". Your title sounds similar to restaurant boxes that are purchased. No-one prepares the dinner. You just remove the food and put the box away when finished. The meal is delicious, but not prepared by Grandmother, which I can't help preferring. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there was an underlying tone of contemporary holidays plus a Grandfather who knew how to pray. In fact, the last line of each stanza is that refrain of Grandfather. Areas for improvement: You might think about the rhyme pattern in your kyrielle poem. The rhyme pattern is consistent, except for Stanza 1. Food and childhood do not rhyme. Rhyme is according to sound, not spelling. Your rhyme patterns are quite different from what is shown in the note at the bottom of the page.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of My Project  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of projects in general.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Experience guides us with steady hands, responding to people's needs. The pieces are assembled. Now create the plan with closure in the distance. Each detail is mastered. Execution now occurs. Tasks are managed with resources and pride. Approval is the last item needed to move the project along.

The title of your poem is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as I liked the underlying tone of planning and organizing. Areas for improvement: N/A. I understand what you are writing about, as I have done forward planning myself.

Rhyme pattern is consistent. Nicely done.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Dr Gupta, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of the lingering memories of love.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
Your once beloved's memory lingers in your heart. You sang of songs of love in the past. Now she and you have company through your poetry only.

The title of your poem is appropriate, "Lingering Memories". I enjoyed reading your poem, as there is an underlying tone of nostalgia for the past. I can identify with that. Most memorable: singing songs of love in days gone by. Areas for improvement: N/A

Your rhyme pattern is consistent, abcb with a good syllabic count. Your description is vivid and expressive.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Neva, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem paints a picture of what it's like to suck on a peach seed.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
A hummingbird flitted from flower to flower, sucking the nectar of life. Is this how God felt at the moment of creation when He proclaimed BE and the primordial atom exploded . Did He laugh at the eons of time, the creation of stars, planets, creatures, civilizations? Then light and life were spread through the darkness and no existence.

The title of your poem is appropriate. I enjoyed reading your poem, as there was an underlying tone of inquisitiveness and research. Areas for improvement: N/A.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Your poem is Unrhymed verse. Consonance is used in your title. Metaphor is used effectively, eg consuming the nectar of life. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, sthey are not noticed.

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