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Review of My Father's Hands  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the strength and comfort the poet's father could give to him.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet's dad's hands are miracles and keep a sad world an arm's length from his child. An embrace is used to nurture and guide the child . Pride was never part of the embrace. His hands outwardly speak of duty. In the poet's eyes they shine of beauty. When he needed comfort as he grew up, he felt an angel's touch on his shoulder. A sentiment of love iand gratitude is reminisced for your father. How fabulous to receive omfort from a memory.

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Rhyme pattern is consistent. Logical development makes a strong statement. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Jeff, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is a chinquapin about the life habits of birds.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The syllables in this cinquain are divided in an interesting fashion: 2,4,6,8,2 in 5 lines and makes for interesting rhyme and rhythm. The birds are chirping, munching, hanging precariously, life in the branches, they are content. Your poem has a pleasant underlying tone and is easily visualized.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Cakes & Circuses  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Guardians of Worlds, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the thoughts that the poet has of another.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: What is the message in this poem? You have given your thoughts on the matter, i.e., someone thinks you and some associates are dunces, etc. A report on the disagreement to an ombudsman might help in the future.

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Unrhymed verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Ruby, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your account anniversary. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about the consequences earned by one's lifestyle.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet could perhaps say, "I died and went to heaven." Just one small change could land a person in hell for something so small as wishing a person's life unwell. When people tell a little white lie, they are one step closer to an unfortunate life because we put those who love us in strife. We make mistakes, but if we learn from them, we gain strength. When we speak hastily, we increase our chances of ending up in purgatory. (Limbo is for innocent babies and children.). Therefore, think before you speak. Language needs to be deciphered in your poem. A strong statement is made, but language is somewhat cryptic and not easy to understand.

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ILogical development is good. Rhyme pattern is consistent except Stanza 3. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Fading storm  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi -Lusername, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about a hollow tune, the wind blowing across the poet's face.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The premise of this poem: The cold sea water makes life grow. The whistles of the trees in the rain are drums of pain. Light breaks through the storm. There is a symphony of light and color. The clouds no longer cry. The wind blows across the field. There is a good harvest yield. Your poem is loaded with personification, the assigning of human traits to inanimate objects, eg the sea speaks. Poetic convention of consonance is used, eg sorrowful sound. Metaphors are loaded in your poem, eg symphony of light and color. Vivid description, eg light breaks through the storm.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Lost  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Cynaemon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a love poem from the story "Five Little Words".

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The lovers' relationship is not stable. It is obvious in the way they relate to each other. It seems to the reader that they need a minister or other person capable of helping them to gain a stable footing and bring maturity into the relationship. The poet stares at her, torn between love and hate. Words don't tell his thoughts, but his eyes betray his longing. She wills him to the safety of her encircling arms. There are two steps between the lovers, love and forgiveness. One tear gave away his iron-willed self-control. Finally he plunged the knife into his heart. She stands there, lost.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled in your poem. Some nice use of metaphors, eg on the knife edge of a sword. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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Review of Internal Fire  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Iris, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes how the poet feels about soothing anxiety and pain.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: You speak in metaphors that are vibrant and highly descriptive. You ask that pins be taken from your skin. Cool the fire in your breath. You'd like to be a tree, steadfast and slow. Make you still and the world quiet again.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:.
Rhyme is sprinkled in your poem. Excellent use of metaphors throughout your Poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

Regards,
GerMac

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Review of Tender Touch  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi B4Heart, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes bonding between mother and child.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:{
From the Reader: Baby awakes alone in a dark room with crocodile tears. Mother picks up baby and baby's fears go away, replaced by a big smile. Mother helps child with teething, hunger, diaper rash. Mother appears and crocodile tears disappear. Mother loves Baby and Baby loves Mother's tender touch.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of beauty  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi NUTTSS, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the truth in beauty.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Beauty is unique in each person. There is beauty in each person in many ways, whether you're spinning around with the wind in your hair, falling on the grass like an angel, returning to your very own mother or glistening without makeup.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Nice simile, eg like an angel, Rhyme sprinkled throughout poem of unmetered verse. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions:
positioned like an angel NOT position like and angel
it's rich NOT its rich
God's creatures NOT gods creatures
through the years NOT threw the years
their own beauty NOT the own beauty
your beauty NOT you beauty

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Review of Family Tree  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jade Amber Jewel, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found in your portfolio. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the love of generations in the poet's family. The poet has done an immense amount of work putting together hter portfolio in just a few days. Very impressive.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: You have wonderful insights, realizing you come from a loving family who loved iyou from the start. You're a tiptop trio, but someday your Mom and Dad will be a duo again. Here you showed your maturity. You like being a niece, so it's nice that your Mom and Dad have brothers and sisters. If it weren't for grandparents, everyone would be too sad! None of you would be. Every teenager has a mighty appetite for that healthy growing body. I can understand needing a walk-about. I like this word walk-about. Did you create it? Your underlying writing style is breezy and upbeat. Very nice. I can say you are good at showing, not telling.

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Jade Amber Jewel, You have sprinkled some very nice rhyme throughout your poem about the love in your family generations. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Suggestions:
Next in our family tree are the aunts, uncles, and cousins NOT Next in our family tree is the aunts, uncles and cousins {subject verb agreement).

Best wishes,
Thank you for sharing.

Regards,
GerMac

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Review of The Viewing  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Kelso, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem was written by the poet for his grandfather's funeral.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The people who attended the poet's grandfather's funeral were all dressed in black. The poet's message said not to mourn our sudden loss, as the Angels wanted him back. Your soul is at last peacefully at rest.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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Review of Hard Nights  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi WritingInMotion, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This is a love poem.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: He feels her kiss on his lips. He feels quaint and misses her touch that makes him faint. He can't let this grow. He has to slow his heart rate. He doesn't believe the one has been found. He can't string himself along. He says he's not that good. He says he'll be what she needs, not just what she wants.


*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
The rhyme in your poem is driving your thoughts. You might want to try expressing your thoughts without using any rhyme or very little rhyme which is part of free verse. That way what you have to say will really make sense. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The Black Dog  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Gregory, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem provides a canvas for painting a picture of beating yourself up.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet accepts defeat. His memories are daunting. He faces his plight of fight or plight. He wishes he could never e his own worst enemy. Never give in.A life of sorrow is no way to live. He'd trade sadness for cheer. Who would ever think he is a fighter? He'd face the world with much brighter days if he could get freedom from the black dog.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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Review of AFFECTION  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Dr. I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary which I found in your portfolio.
Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes love and beauty.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Tears are not precious nor rare. There are not available in heaven nor earth. There are tears of love of the soul. Dark clouds of tears surge from an undiscovered pilgrimage of the heart. When the splendor of holy feelings is seen on the face, the edge of the sari wipes the tears away.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Morning Glory  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Lexi Joy, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only.

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes praising in the morning.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: A lovely refrain is found at the beginning of each stanza, i.e. You're my glory in the morning. Jesus, is the rain that gently waters the poet's secret deserts in his being, which represent the poet's weaknesses, I believe. Peaceful moments are shared with Thee. The word of God binds the poet's soul and makes him walk in victory. He receives manna to feed his soul. Milk and honey deeply flow. Sweetly and softly the poet will praise Him.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout the poem. Metaphors are found throughout the poem, eg, rain, manna. Description is vivid and expressive, eg secret deserts in his being. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi HuntersMoon, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your eighth account anniversary. Congratulations! Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem sparks the imagination, especially when it's more than a rainy day.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Raindrops from the branches of a crystal tree tell the poet it's more than just a rainy day. Wet window wonders are created just for him. The silver drops meander, play and glide like children at play lost in the magic of the day. They paint a perfect filigree like branches on a crystal tree.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Very effective use of imagery, eg simile: like branches on a crystal tree. Effective use of metaphor, eg a perfect filigree. Consonance, a poetic convention, is used nicely. The poem, stylistically, is a French Rondeau form with a definite plan for the rhyme scheme and refrain. It is a complicated and lovely sounding form poem. Description is vivid. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of A Daughter's Life  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Pro Scribe, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary, which I found on your portfolio. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's love of his daughter, Jenna, through different parts of her life.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet loved his daughter as a newborn. He appreciated her ability to test everything when she was an adolescent. As an adult she peeled the onion of love's intricate architecture, she molded the clay of her unique future. Jenna is a wife and mother, bringing new love into her life. Jenna is a daughter and connects indivisible to the poet's heart, more than he ever thought possible.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout poem. Very effective metaphor,eg she peeled the onion of love's intricate architecture. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

 
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Review of This feeling  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Brittany Lorraine, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary which I found in your portfolio. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's feeling for her loved one as she tried to fall asleep.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: You know the poet's heart is breaking when you hear the sound of small stones hitting the glass. You know the beloved has arrived when you hear that same sound. The heart break is sudden and lingering. The feeling of the beloved's teeth on her lips when they kissed. This is the way the poet wanted her loved one to feel for her.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Good metaphor, eg sound of small stones hitting glass. Rhyme is sprinkled throughout poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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Review of The Doctor  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi. Bluejay, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your limerick for your account anniversary which I found in your portfolio. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This limerick is about a doctor who hired a nurse.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: There was a wealthy young doctor who hired a nurse. She was late every day. When counting her pay, she found she had been docked.

*Pencil*TECHNIQUE/LANGUAGE USAGE/GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SUGGESTIONS:
Rhyme is sprinkled throughout poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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Review of The Friend  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Fireexi, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary, which I found on your portfolio. . Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the meaning of friendship.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Little did the poet know how his friend would capture his soul. He cherishes their friendship which has grown over the years. Although roads may separate them, their bonds will never be broken. The poet insists that they will always be friends.

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Rhyme is sprinkled throughout your poem. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Yeti Man  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem describes the poet's outlook on the Yeti versus the Igloo coolers.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet tells us he's a Yeti man. He deserves the very best. An Igloo is just a cooler. His passed the grizzly test. He doesn't have any bears on his bench. With a $300. cooler within his reach, his cooler weighs five times more than the Igloo chest. With 10 pounds of ice in his he has to lug twenty-five pounds. With ten pounds on the Igloo , there's 14 pounds to lug. An Igloo wouldn't do. I'd save too much and be uncool too.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

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Review of Light and Life  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Dungeon Warden, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about nature's beauty in the sunlight.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: Light is pouring through adorable flowers and leaves to unite in praise of reflected sunlight. You might consider painting a picture for the flowers and leaves, rather than telling about the adorable flowers and leaves, ie, show not tell.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

 
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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Stormy Lady, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to honor you with a review of one of your poems for your account anniversary which I found in your portfolio. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This poem is about tears that drop from the storm in the sky.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: A single teardrop falls. The rain waves her lover goodbye. She has us all in sorrow as clouds assemble, and the breeze rages, causing the trees to tremble. Caught up in the storm's fury, who she hurts doesn't matter. This storm will drop its tears and rain throughout the day.

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I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.
Suggestions: its NOT it's

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Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your poems, which I found on the.public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The poet needs patience and adjustment for his lack of pride at work.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: The poet feels that in his new role he doesn't know enough about the jobs of others. He'll be in his prime when he is accepting jobs where he's known for ideas and knowledge and can show people how to make a huge profit for the company. Until then, he'll have to settle being a person with an unglamorous job, one where he is not seasoned. Make history later.


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Try reading your poem aloud to get a smooth flow of words. Rhyme pattern is fairly consistent. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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Review of Letter To GOD  
Review by GerMac
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sum1, I am GerMac, affiliated with Power Reviewers Group. I am here today to review one of your writing pieces, which I found on the public review pages. Please use my suggestions as you see fit. My comments are opinions only. .

*ButterflyB* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece is a letter to God, asking Him to lead the human race.

*Idea*CREATIVITY/STATEMENT:
From the Reader: I take your letter seriously. We ask God to communicate with the leaders of different countries and point out to them that we are not responsible on Earth. Our lakes are drying out, our trees are being cut down. Our bodies of water are being polluted with litter. Our Earth is suffering with global warming. If man didn't live on earth, we would have a paradise here. People are not capable of communicating with others. We need you to run our earth for us. Please help us. We love you and we know you love us.

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IWell-written. Good logical development.. I was not distracted by errors in language usage, grammar or punctuation. This comment is a disclosure, stating errors are not obvious. If they exist and are not mentioned, they are not noticed.

Thank you for sharing.

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GerMac

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