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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What is with people? They put these signs up to make people think and then act like a person is weird for noticing and asking. Not a nice feeling having too much unwanted attention turned your way. Perfectly written and nicely expressed opening chapter.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Oh boy, this was so well written to show the challenges autism can throw up at us. From the clothes that just feel all wrong, to the dislike of physical contact. Excellent showing of confusion with the not knowing whether to shake hands or not.
Apart from this, the chapter was really well written - no typos, no grammar issues.
Well done.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Oh, wow, this is such an emotional and moving piece of writing. I really felt for Kathy, having to keep her heartbreak held in check until Paul had left and even then only weep silently. I actually found myself hoping that he really missed her, and that his disappointment at her apparently calm response was not a short-lived thing.
Flawless writing!

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Review of Funny things  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I see from the introduction that this was written as part of a grammar class. It looks pretty perfect on that score to me. You did a good job of recounting the attention one gets after any major medical event... it can get a bit over-powering. I liked the reference to the smell of chlorine, I knew there was a swimming pool there before you said it, and that it would play a big part in the piece.

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Review of Dirty cash  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Haha! Well this was a very unusual and unique tale. I remember the days of snail mail very well - still use it sometimes too. It was quite an interesting concept to teach kangaroos to play tennis. I'm not sure it would work too well in reality but it made for a fun read.

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Review of The Two Inside  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I would have loved to see the image that prompted this, but really it is very effective on its own. So many opposites that pose potential conflict, or maybe they'll cancel each other out - a possibility that you voice in the seventh verse.
I really like the way you have kept the lines and verses short - I think this makes for a much more impactful read.

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Review by hullabaloo22
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is so sad and beautiful all at the same time. A love that is not expected to last, or at least there's a fear expressed that it won't. But there's also a determination to push that away and to just enjoy the moment while it lasts.
It struck me that this could be written to a lover, but could also apply to a child that is growing up and moving on.
Anyway, however it was intended, it was a very moving piece.

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Review by hullabaloo22
Rated: E | (4.5)
What a lovely pet tale! It's nice to see a brother and sister kept together too. The loss of those back legs does not seem to have held this dog back from enjoying life which is wonderful. Thunder is upsetting for so many dogs - I've not heard of dog calming music before.
Anyway, thanks so much for the feel-good piece.

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Review of The Wedding  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was such an entertaining read, told in a lightly humorous way. The image of the wobbly stool brought a smile, but I bet you can guess my favorite part. The bee! I could easily picture the looks of horror, but quick thinking saved there from being a sting in the tale.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I loved the character description, particularly the brotherly rivalry as motivation and the survival outlook.
Perfect scene setting, and I did not expect Elazar's revelation; I guess neither did Eldon, but he remained set on becoming an adventurer regardless.
A very enjoyable introduction.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a poem that really makes the reader think what it must be like to be homeless when all the high-spirited revelry bursts out onto the streets. So much money spent on clothes, champagne and partying, when just a tiny bit could bring at least a fleeting relief.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a very emotional piece of poetry, one that strikes a certain chord with me as I tend to retreat from the present. The past is a hard thing to ever escape, hurts still hurt and leave one wary. Then there's the expectations - even though we know perfection is unattainable, some people would be scared of competing it.
A poem that certainly made me stop and think.

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Review of Itzpapalotl  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
There was a lot of story to this especially considering the short length of it. Excellent descriptions of the statuette, building up nicely to those nightmarish dreams that then became so seductive. I liked the way you ended this, leaving the reader to imagine whether George would come to his senses in time.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Some excellent character work in this chapter, especially with Aira and Airen; and a lot of world building and back-story too. What really struck me about this though was the descriptions of nature both at the start and the end of this piece. No grammar or spelling issues that I noticed. Nice writing.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I've got to say that this is one of the most thorough and in depth character write-ups of a character that I have come across. The picture gives a good initial idea, but you really go into the background and the motivations. A good conflict that would definitely cloud the character's judgement.

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Review of Me and only me  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a poem that carries a message that everyone could do with remembering. How much misery could be saved if people did not feel pressured into appearing or becoming something that they are not. Very effective with posing some questions.
One little tiny correction: second verse, second line you want 'you're' rather than 'your'.
Well done with this.

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Review of Summer  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for the introduction to this form of poetry. You make it sound quite simple in your description, but as with so many types of poetry, it is far more difficult to do in practice. I loved your poetic illustration too. It definitely reinforces the introduction.

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Review of Anatomy; a family  
Review by hullabaloo22
Rated: E | (5.0)
This reads like a very private piece, showing the importance and the strength of those family bonds. You do a great job of illustrating the connections between mother and child; but also the strength gained from finding the perfect partner. both beautifully and effectively put into words.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem perfectly illustrates the draw of the night, especially when it's solitude you are after. I particularly liked the way you showed it seems timeless; that hours and minutes don't count. Very relatable on the desire for disappearing, for letting all the cares float away.
Nice work.

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Review of Traveling Windbag  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Oh, this is fantastic! Anyone that has used public transport for any lengthy journey will know the dread of being trapped in a seat next to such a person. So many subtle and not so subtle hints were given, all ignored. A really good rhythm and rhyme throughout which made this a pleasure to read.

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Review of Cabin Fever  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Sometimes it really can feel like winter is never going to end, and the wait for signs of spring is never going to end. Jenny certainly sounded fed up, being cooped up indoors. The prompt words were used naturally in the story, and you built up quite a vivid scene.

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Review of Love Me  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
One the surface this is quite a simple write, but reading it again it carries a strong message throughout. Commitment! If someone is not going to be prepared to fully commit then don't pretend to care. The repetition works very well in solidifying what it says.

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Review by hullabaloo22
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Review of Forever Dark  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I like the way you repeated the first two lines at the end of the poem - it gave a real feeling of finality to the piece. I was also impressed with the way you brought up the fact that crops can't grow without the sun - a total, never-ending eclipse would be catastrophic.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I remember taking part in this for the first time last year, and what a daunting time it was. Good job with showing how taking a break can bring some creative answers. Even cold coffee can help, and let's not underestimate the magical abilities of the humble doughnut in bringing inspiration.
A short piece that brought a smile.

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