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Review of Choices  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Oh boy, well this was a story with a strong message. So Billy wasn't committed to studying, preferred playing games. I can understand the dilemma faced by Maggie and Jack, for education even now is so expensive. What an ending, though; totally unexpected. Great character interactions all the way through.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a great way that would be to start off a day! It's a strange thing about dreams; even the weirdest ones can seem so immersive it's hard to tell that they are not real. Some excellent rhyming work, that definitely complimented the topic of the poem.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a really interesting poem; one that I find quite thought-provoking. I see this as saying imagination and creativity can be found in all sorts of places. A couple of the verses particularly stuck out to me as being excellent; the one that starts 'Speak some truth...' and the one that starts, 'Rust and rot...'
A five star piece.

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Review of Singularity  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I really enjoyed this story - it was exceptionally well-written. I like the idea that it is curiosity that makes us human, and the interactions between your two characters were very well done. My favorite part had to be the description of what chickens were, although that final sentence is also hard to beat.

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Review of FISHING  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I've never come across a Pantun before. I see the ABAB rhyming, which was perfect. Is there more to this form, such as syllable count? I can see the decision is a difficult one to make, between sand and boat. A simple poem, but a very effective one too.

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Review of The Crush  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is actually such a feel-good story. The innocence of childhood captured in the infatuation with an aunt, and shown by those single roses. What a thoughtful young boy he was. And it's amazing what changes a hint of competition can bring to a relationship that has grown a bit stale.
Two lovely characters, both thoughtful in their own way.

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Review of A SOLDIERS PRAYER  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
A truly solemn and thought-provoking soldier's prayer. Every single day can turn into a fight where it is 'kill or be killed' and no one wants it to be like that. I think that's one of the sad facts of war; the soldiers on both sides want more than anything to just go home.
A poem with a lot of emotional impact.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I loved this story. It was so inventive, original, and completely fun. It would make a great story book for kids, with some colorful illustrations thrown in. I've got to admit I'd find it unnerving if candy grew to those sizes, let alone if the pieces could think and feel too.
Very entertaining!

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Review of A Sandy Funeral  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is the kind of flash fiction that really gets me thinking. There was clearly something off about the relationship even though the main character says he did not kill her. There's so many possibilities running through my mind. That Sandy was a runaway; that she was kept imprisoned, and there's even the thought that Sandy was not a person at all but a dog.
Top marks for writing something so thought-inducing, Angus.

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Review of Out of Place  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
At the very start I thought your main character was a person, but within the first couple of sentences it was clear that I was wrong. Then I thought perhaps a fox, but once captured, rescued, I was pretty sure that the character was that of a dog.
Excellent descriptions of the street and what a struggle it was to survive; but I also liked how you showed how hard the adaption was for the animal to make. Beautiful moment at the end!

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Review of The Uninvited Hat  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow! Well that was some story! The man sounded so repugnant it was hard to have much sympathy for him, at least until he picked up the hat and turned it over. Just the right amount of grisly detail kept my interest from the beginning all the way to the end.

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Review of THREE OF A KIND  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Three beautifully written haiku poems, each individual but they join up so well together too. The first one was very relatable as whenever I'm counting syllables I use paper and pen rather than compose the pieces on the computer. It's amazing how often I pick up a pen that won't work.

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Review of The Outlaw Torn  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a well-paced story, full of action. Good job with the character of Ellie, as she took on those robots. Excellent descriptions of the robots, and their unused limbs as well, as Ellie sunk down to the lower levels. Zeke seemed to know her weakness though and was more than willing to exploit it.
No typos or grammar issues that I noticed.

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Review of Suffering  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This really sums up how difficult it is to sympathize with someone that is sick, in pain of either the physical or mental sort. The sufferer feels totally alone, knowing that others cannot understand quite how bad they feel, and this isolation makes the feeling worse.
It's a vicious circle that you describe here, for those that try to offer support but especially for the sufferer.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I just loved this poem, but then I'm not in the slightest bit arachnophobic. Everyone else here is scared of spiders and you do a great job of conveying the terror that spiders can cause.
My favorite bit was the smashed hourglass, and the tiny spiders flowing out instead of sand. The only thing is... you've given me an ear worm!

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice rhythm and rhyme to this poem. Is there any truth to it? Was it inspired by a real person? The man certainly seemed to prove popular with the people, and seemed to be promising great things. That's the thing with the past though, we never know when it's going to be brought up.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
So much story expressed in so few words. I love the importance you gave to the moon, and it being the last full one before his expected return. Great reveal at the end, that the woman waiting is his mother, but what I liked most was you left it with the expectation and not the outcome.
Really well done.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Haha! They certainly did prove themselves to be pretty stupid! They must have been strange toadstools to bring about the squawking!
This has the great rhythm of a limerick, and also has that element of humor that seems to be successful in making one work. Thanks for the smile!

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
A brilliant character sketch, right from the beginning, with her appearance, to the end with those different situations. I think that last part would be particularly beneficial in creating a character, especially if they are going to encounter any of the scenarios.

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Review of The Mystery of Me  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
What a positive poem to read and what a positive way to view yourself. It's nice to see the talents and the plus points given their dues. I loved the descriptions of the different colors used in your art, but my favorite verse has to be the one about poetry.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This made for quite an entertaining read. Lots of characters, and lots of pretty convincing character interactions too that kept the story moving along nicely. I do have one suggestion though: where you have '2' it might be better to replace it with the word instead of the figure.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is lovely. Such a romantic moment captured in these words. It can be so soothing to sleep for a moment beneath the clouds, so long as give those few moments of dryness. Gorgeous descriptions that show how clouds can bring a bit of peace in an otherwise hectic life.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem expresses a feeling I can very much relate to. I often think it would be wonderful, just to be able to take to the wing and soar.
I have one suggestion for you, which you are of course welcome to ignore. In the third line of the first verse, I would suggest dropping the word 'with' and replacing it with a comma.
Anyway, I very much enjoyed the poem.

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Review of Dear Me  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed reading this letter you wrote to yourself. It is certainly true that joining a writing site, and posting your own work takes a lot of courage. Even now, I'm always completely without confidence in anything I write, but I keep on plodding on.
What I really enjoyed about this was the way you included those links. Well done!

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a song I really enjoyed, and am kind of embarrassed to admit that I can relate to it. Too often men think that their opinions are far superior to those of women - even worse, some seem to think women are not entitled to their own opinions at all. Well done for speaking out!

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