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Review of Earl  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Wow, well this was some story. You did a great job with the character of the narrator, Earl, and to a lesser degree, of Doc. The story held my attention and read completely convincingly.
One thing I noticed was that in the third paragraph you used a couple of words repetitively. That was the only time though, so I'm guessing you were just settling into the story.
This is by far the longest story that I've read so far on WDC, so well done for the compelling work!

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Review of Word is Energy  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, this was an excellent piece of poetry. I loved the way you compared words with both trees and rain, making them an integral piece of who we are and of our place on the planet. Some interesting ideas too about what would happen should all the words just disappear.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
This was quite a well-written story. Just goes to show that not everything fades with age, and here I'm talking about Gabe's nerves and Desponia's apparent loneliness. You manage to give us quite a lot of information on the two main characters during the telling.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I really like the idea behind this, and there's plenty to think about. I liked the idea of having an interior personality, secondary to the main one, and the conflicts that seemed to create.
An improvement that would be quite simple to do would be consistent use of capital letters. Sometimes you use 'I' but then other's you use 'i'; also there should be one at the start of each sentence.
I liked the frequent use of short sentences, mixed in with the longer ones. That's a great way of conveying drama or urgency.

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Review of Metaphorical Stew  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Haha! This made a really entertaining read! All of them were amusing, but if I had to pick one to give an award for the best (or worst) I'd go for the fourth one. That poor woman or girl with a laugh that sounded like a dog about to vomit, and hair glistening like nose hair after a sneeze. Oh, and let's not forget E.Coli - great metaphor for increasing attraction!

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
A very hard-hitting poem. I remember hearing about the attacks here in Ireland, on the radio while I was sitting outside a school waiting to pick up my two sons. Even here there was a total shock. Your poem takes us right into the heart of the atrocitiy that took so many lives.

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Review of Baby, Bonita Rose  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is surprisingly hard-hitting. The first few verses are full of love and laughter; a fun time for the baby. Then it all turns so much darker. A relationship that is floundering through no fault of the baby and yet she is the one who is made to pay - although I suspect it was not just her alone.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh, this was a lovely little tale. It would make a great illustrated kid's story. I love the idea of a writing bull, and also of the library having specially adapted computers for writing animals. A really clever idea of Bovine Bessie too.
You kept it lighthearted and humorous all the way through. Very enjoyable.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This brought a bit of a smile, because you seem to have described my approach to reviewing writing here. I think that everyone deserves encouragement, and quite simply if I can't find something positive to say I won't review.
There are plenty of people both on the internet and in real life that seem to completely lack empathy, and these could well learn something from reading this short piece.

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Review of Stanley Dooper  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A good character driven piece of poetry. We get to know quite a bit about Stan, and some about Stacy too. You do a good job of showing what keeps Stan going in a job he doesn't seem to be overly fond of. I think the message of this is to be grateful for what you've got and cherish your family.
Some tricky words to rhyme but you made a good job of it.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (3.5)
What a really strange story! I liked how you did not try to explain the oddity away but instead left a real air of mystery. Some great character sketch moments, especially of Shiloh, although Rey's screeching at the end was pretty telling to.
A unique and well written piece.

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Review of Indifferent trees  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was an interesting little tale. The character seemed to be a man who had definite rituals that he liked to follow; methodical too, going by the thorough job he made of eating that yoghurt. A touch of creepiness towards the end with the whispers, which I really enjoyed.

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Review of hijinks on set  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Haha. You know what they say about not acting with babies or animals... this was a great example of why. I enjoyed the quite lighthearted tone of the telling and the bits of humor that you managed to put into the tale.
All together a quite enjoyable read.

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Review of A Helping Hand  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is very nice, showing just how valuable a dog can be, both for helping out and for companionship. I can imagine that it would get pretty irritating having people constantly asking to pet though - I guess that's the downside of having such a lovely service dog.
Well done.

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Review of Sister Witches  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Haha! This was brilliant. I loved the idea of the argument over what made the better apple, although I've got to admit it was Helen who stole the story. Good image of the worms still arguing.
One suggestion for right near the beginning:'each had their hats in one hand and were pointing with...'
Altogether an enjoyable read!

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a well-paced flash fiction story. You certainly got me wondering what the search was for as Daisy and Ben grew more and more frantic. I had absolutely no idea that the president was involved and they were attempting to save the world. Nice effect with the red writing, too.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I really enjoyed reading this, and like you say, that song does seem to be particularly suited to women at that time. I had a great aunt who tried to teach me the Charleston when I was a child - very tricky footwork.
I think the changes that were made to women's lives during this time are often over-looked, so it was nice to read about them here.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Haha! You even managed to make the 'z' line sound authentic and that's always a challenge for this form of poetry. Actually, you made a great job of it all round, for the words didn't seem at all stilted, but flowed as you took us through a return to education.
Well done!

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The descriptions you use in this piece are really quite beautiful. I love the way you show that nature is always ready to reclaim the land that has been taken. As well as describing the forest and it's hidden life so well, you also did a great job of showing us Nick, and how he almost transforms once he is out there and walking.
Very impressive.

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Review of 343 Firemen  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very appropriate that I should come across this in the random 'Read and Review' section today. You did a great job in making those men come alive; a stressful job needs a bit of humor, and then that call came in. They didn't pause, even though they must have known the danger that they were heading into.
A powerful piece of writing.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is the third or fourth chapter that I've read of this now. I'm very impressed how you manage to put those meltdown moments into words, how things such as the choice of records can be so over powering. Also in this chapter a good insight into how an interest can suddenly take us over.

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is very good, especially for someone that is not a native English speaker. You do a great job of presenting the facts, but also of conveying the urgency and volatility of the situation.
I have just one suggestion for the start of the second paragraph. '...where two police officers discharge...' I just think it would make the sentence read that bit more smoothly.
All-in-all, a very impressive piece!

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Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Well, this was some write, and not only about meditation and intuition either. Having never been to the US I really enjoyed the road trip and all the places you stopped at. It can sometimes work that you get positive feelings about someone and they actually turn out to be true.
Well done with getting all this down.

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Review of Quebec City  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a poem that really illustrates how sometimes a holiday fails to live up to the expectations. It was obviously not only about the food, although you made that sound bad enough to ruin anyone's day; 'Already I was bored with guided tours and strange accents' - I think many people would relate to that.
Going by your final verse, the holiday was not without its plus points though.

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Review of Into the light  
Review by hullabaloo22
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It's certainly true that sometimes it can feel like everything is stacked up against us, and there is no way that things can get better. This poem certainly seems to suggest that with a bit of luck and a helping hand, a change of attitude, things can improve.
A very motivational write.

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