An interesting poem about nature built in continuous lines and occasional rhyming.Indeed nature is so beautiful that words are insufficient to describe.You have managed to illustrate the joyful setting which prevails in Spring.With an expose about the activities of the different creatures the mood is high and the atmosphere blissful.But you have omitted something very important.What about the blossoming of flowers?
The tornado which is within the person is expressed in lyrical form.There are a few rhyming here and there. It reflects the character of an angry person.Most of the time there is the projection of this wrath on somebody who doesn't deserve it.Although it is not meant to hurt yet sometimes the tornado creates havoc.
The lyrics is composed of lines which tend to repeat every now and then. There is the search of love through visual contacts but nothing really verbal or expressive. You have emphasized the importance of looks which convey messages to the lover and the beloved.But from the chorus it is quite clear that it ends on a negative note.
From the story it is clear that Valentina was happy in those odd apparels and likes to seek attention from the boys so that she can be easily noticed among other girls.However, it is obvious that a person must be dressed according to one's size and stature.As regards her encounter with Tommy it seems that he was jealous of her and could not tolerate other boys grabbing her ass.But even after that event Valentina feels good when her butt is touched.
The poem built in five stanzas has equal number of lines and flows well with the continuous rhyming.With the aim of paying tribute to your grandmother you have been able to make other people feel the pain of the sudden disappearance of a dear one.It is characterised by the prevalent sadness throughout the poem.Such events remain recorded in our memories for ever.
The short story illustrates how people attain peace after praying Indigo Hollow.But only Owen could not sleep just because he never prayed.So, in this circumstance it was some form of meditation.Second thing due to remaining awake he involves himself in all sorts of nocturnal activities.which leads him to the tunnels.But here also in his attempt to find sleep he is scared of the echo which creates further turmoil.
This fiction story depicts the skills of the writer and his knowledge about the creation of robots in labs by scientists.But the fact that they have created such mechanical beings do not mean that they are comparable to God.Although they build the bodies they cannot induce life in them.For your first attempt at science fiction the story seems to revolve on the central plot.There is a long way to go ahead.
It's naturally the dream of all of us to become rich and live an opulent and grandiose life. But of course we don't want to acquire wealth by hook or by crook.Concerning the e-mail you got it is very clear that the fellow is a scam trying to dupe people around.Why doesn't he send the fabulous sum right away instead of seeking money every now and then?.Beware of such swindlers.Don't fall in their traps.
The poem is written in simple words which is easily understood.With its free verse style it suits well the topic.You have analysed all the aspects of hunger and put much emphasis on its influences on the poor and needy.Without food life comes to a halt.Millions of people including children are dying of hunger everyday around the world.They go away with their hungry dreams.On the other hand enormous quantity of food are wasted daily in certain countries.
The poem looks lively with the arrival of spring.The lines in the stanzas are well balanced with alternate rhyming..You have created a joyous atmosphere in describing the end of winter followed by spring.There is an elevation in the mood with the changing season.But by trying to draw the curtain on winter you could have avoided the' snow'.
Your poem is a satire to the soldiers who sacrifice their lives on the battlefield for the USA.The partial rhyming adds style to the poem .From the very beginning of his life he is destined to die away from his motherland.You have well analysed the different stages of life from childhood to death.Many children have never known their fathers.Now we see that the Iraq war a real failure.
The structure of your poem is good with balances lines in all the stanzas and consistent rhyming. However, the style looks more a story than a poem.As regards the topic itself it is something very serious and sad which is happening to our youth of today.You have paid a huge price for your friendship.But one thing which must be brought one is that a real friend will not squander money on drug addiction.
The poem constructed in eight stanzas is presented in free verse style.Containing equal number of lines in each stanza it flows well.You have described a series of events which are linked with emotions and attention seeking.The reactions of the protagonists are spontaneous.It seems me that there is an overuse of the alphabet a.
The story looksweird although it has a good start portraying Tim in the church seeking the intervention of God to help him succeed in life by getting a job.Thinking the angel to be his saviour he blindly falls into the trap.Here, there is something worth noting about the sexual relationships between the so called angel and Tim.It's absolutely incredible.But on realising what happened afterwards it is clear that the helper was a demon disguised in the form of an angel.
An interesting poem written in four stanzas with equal number of lines and consistent rhyming.Indeed, sometimes trivial matters render life stressful and difficult.There are certain persons who make a fuss on unimportant things.They are experts in making mountains out of molehills thereby making the life of other persons also a hell.I like the last line which reflects a positive attitude.
Indeed it is an exciting story which has sprung form the old Valentine's card.It describes the immense love which you had developed for your mom when she needed a support to continue living.We see how this love is passed on from one generation to another.It is due to the same card that later in life you have found a nice wife who expressed her feelings similarly.
The five stanzas of the poem tell us about the nature of those who like to remain in bed throughout the whole day.Written in free verse it looks appropriate for sleepers.Even if to a certain point you may be right yet for how long can someone remain in bed? Early to rise makes a man healthy,wealthy and wise.I disagree with you when you say that you are secure in sleep because you can be attacked without being able to defend yourself.
The story depicts the strange habit of Anthony who is fond of animals, picking anything he finds on his way to bring it home.He tries to amuse his friend but the latter is completely different from him.There are some good hints about the playful character of children .They like pets but in an attempt to save the ferret Anthony got hurt .Fortunately,Mary turns up and is able to capture the animal and return it to its master.
A long poem built up on continuous lines and free verse style.It can be considered as a motivation for all those persons living alone and without any support in their dark life.Really, when you don't find any way to solve your problems there is only God's door which is always open for those in dismay.Even if sometimes God takes time to answer your call but definitely He will send the angel as your companion.Your views are entirely correct.
The story revolves around James, his mother and father.His mother has been striving to meet the household expenditures since she divorced her husband.She grew her son alone without his help.The altercation between mother and son about the return of the father evokes the tear in family relationships. The second chapter does not have any connection with the first one.Through the interaction between James and his friend Kevin one can deduce many thing about the former's character.
The story begins with a lengthy description of the setting. You could have started directly with the teen. As it unfolds the reader becomes familiar with the friendship between the girl and her friend.She was acting as her protector and defending her in almost every difficult situation..By using an indirect force'wind' you have tried to instill courage and independence in the teen.Was it a natural or spiritual force?
The poem, written in continuous lines and with partial rhyming puts emphasis on the discovery of a Utopic world. Obviously everyone would like to live in a such a perfect environment. It reminds me of Keats' Ode to a nightingale.But is it possible to fly in such a living unit?With the use of metaphors you are attempting to create wonderful scenery but it's very far from reality.
The long winding story takes the reader to the kitchen where the guy finds himself. There is no hint about the exact nature of the problem in the couple.The writer just paints a very delicate conjecture in a difficult setting .The person is facing moral tortures and is in a morbid state undergoing restlessness.As the story unfolds the reader gets a better idea of the altercation within the couple.Finally the man accepts his mistakes.But does the woman really want to forgive him?
The story begins with a long description of Simian's workplace..We get a an idea about his profession and his relationships with other colleagues.It seems that he works in a sordid building as medico legal officer .Then it mentions about class system involving the labourers-something irrelevant to the main story.I suggest that after a brief description of the doctor you go directly to the investigation and autopsy of Margaret Fischer
The poem made of three stanzas consists of the appropriate rhyming.You have described the wolves beginning their journey in excellent form and with great enthusiasm. The determination is clearly visible in the lines.But I don't know why they are angry. By using the word 'she' you are trying to say that the leader is female.Certain aspects need clarification.What I don't like is the habit of writing in between the lines.
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