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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, NayNizzy

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Only time will tell

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is off and the flow is choppy

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I do have a few suggestions. First off, some of your lines are to long which throws of the rhythm and flow of the poem. I think the best thing you could do for this poem and any other poem you might write in the future is to read it out loud so you can hear how the rhythm and flow is. Sometimes it is hard to hear the words in your head correctly. While reading your poem outloud, make sure you listen to the syllables to make sure they are the same. Secondly, I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Example of punctuation:

How do you handle that?
How do you respond?
That moment where your heart sinks so low to the ground,
that you’re not sure you can pick it back up.

Overall: You conveyed the message of addiction very well in this poem. I think that writing difficult pieces like this one that put your causes of concern out there are something every writer should pursue at least on occasion. This is one of the best avenues to incite change upon. Well done. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! . Looking forward to hearing from you.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello, Carol St. Ann

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: MY "TO DO" LIST

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I can't find any suggestions to make this poem better.

Overall: I was nosing around your port and I found this little gem. I can truly relate to this poem, and I think a lot of people who read this, will be able to relate to this as well. I too, have a very hectic schedule so I know of the things of which you speak. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Like I said before I can really relate to this poem and I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. You give a lot of description in this piece, which I really like. You bring a strong image to the reader's mind, as well as a subtle emotion. This poem was true to the subject and carried the message well. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

Steve'll be home early
Looking for fun.
I'd better get ready;
I really must run!

 This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. I really enjoyed reading this because it was so beautifully written. I consider this a very good read, and one which I would highly recommend. I give it highest marks. My hat goes off to the author!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello, Ali

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

Disclaimer: Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Take Me, Oh Death

Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm was good. The flow was nice and easy. The form was also good.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: I found this poem kind of dark. Also sad too. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem.I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. You speak of death and the life after death. You conveyed this message very well in your poem. This is a great concept for a poem. You're use of imagery makes the poem and gives it heart. You give a lot of description in this piece, which I really like. You bring a strong image to the reader's mind, as well as a subtle emotion. Very nice originality. This poem captures the attention of the reader from the very first line and keeps the reader's attention throughout. My favorite phrase is:

Take me, Oh Death, embrace me,
For past you lies the light!
Through the pause I'll swiftly fly
Into God's immortal sight.

 This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. I must say that I think this was a pleasure to read and wondefully written. Very Nicely Done!

Keep Writing *Pencil* and Keep Sharing With The Community!

I consider it an honor and privilege to read your work. *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, jaya

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

Disclaimer: Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Love Never Stops Growing

Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I do have a few suggestions. In stanza 2 the first word should be capitalized. Secondly, punctuation. I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Example:

full of blossoming buds when my dreamy self,
asleep on the shores of innocent beauty;
came awake to your vibrant presence.
I am still your willing, loving captive.

Overall: This was such a lovely poem. This was an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. I see that the love you are feeling in this poem is making you an ecstatic person. (you lucky thing) . . . You have kept the description of the love you have for your hubby to a simple level, its not too mushy and soppy. I am also married as well, and feel this way about my husband. Good and vivid. A woman expresses the impact her husband has made in her life. A strong man that makes her feel safe. A loving man that makes her feel special. She loves him and knows he loves her as well. A certainty that is indeed rare. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

Always the steadfast, supportive partner
for life, ever the only man I trusted.
Oh my Lord above, and all the Angels!
I prithee, keep the embers of our love glowing.

 This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. What a joy to read - sincere, poignant, loving and precious. I enjoyed reading this poem!! Very Nicely Done!!!

Keep Writing *Pencil* and Keep Sharing With The Community!

I consider it an honor and privilege to read your work. *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Sweet Water  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, LinnAnn

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

Disclaimer: Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Sweet Water

Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm was off and the flow was choppy.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I do have a few suggestions. First, some of you sentence are to long which throws of the rhythm. I think the best thing you could do for this poem and any other poem you might write in the future is to read it out loud so you can hear how the flow is. Sometimes it is hard to hear the words in your head correctly. While you read your poem out loud listen to the syllables to make sure the rhythm is correct. Secondly, punctuation. I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Overall: I found this poem is so heart catching, breath taking, and tear dropping. About a mother who's son has lost his belief in God. I too as a mother can relate to this poem. My son also turned away from his faith and it really broke my heart. But, glad to say he has returned to his faith. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep Writing *Pencil* and Keep Sharing With The Community!

I consider it an honor and privilege to read your work. *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of LightWorker  
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Unratable.)
Hello, S M Ferguson

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

Disclaimer: Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: LightWorkers

Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Choice of words is good which makes for good readability.

Overall: What a lovely poem you have written here. I can truly relate to this poem because I believe in angels and that they are always by our side. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene of the angels doing their work, you did a great job setting the mood to it. You give a lot of description in this piece, which I really like. You bring a strong image to the reader's mind, as well as a subtle emotion. This poem was true to the subject and carried the message well. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I must say that I think this was a pleasure to read and wondefully written. Very Nicely Done!!

Keep Writing *Pencil* and Keep Sharing With The Community!

I consider it an honor and privilege to read your work. *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Baby Powder  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Bikerider

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "Gang's Monthly Review Board" 

Disclaimer: Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Baby Powder

Impression Of Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Spelling,grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm was good. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I do have a suggestion on punctuation. I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Example:

I have baby powder on my shoulder,
Your being is so sublime.
With your perfect smile and lovely eyes,
I met Sophia for the first time.

Overall: This is a poem about your beloved Grand Daughter. There is wonderful depth of emotion and so much feeling is expressed in every line. Just by reading this you can tell that you are a very Proud Grandpa. My daughter has been married for two years, and when I read this poem it brought a tear to my eyes, because I want to be a Grandma so bad. But, my daughter is not ready yet. I want the same feels that you conveyed so well in this poem for myself. I know it sounds a little selfish of me. But, I think I would make a good Grandma. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader about how it feels to become a Grandpa and how you felt the first time you held your Grand Daughter. It really touch my heart!!! Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

I felt your tiny heart beat
And your breath upon my cheek
You’ll stay in my heart as I grow older
Cause you left that baby powder on my shoulder

This phrase really touched my heart. This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem!

Keep Writing *Pencil* and Keep Sharing With The Community!

I consider it an honor and privilege to read your work. *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Batteries  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, strlcukoo

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Batteries

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Choice of words is good which makes for good readability.

Overall: I think every parent will be able to relate to this poem. Now a days, kids do not read rhymes anymore. All they want to do is spend time on the internet or play games on play station, etc. I feel really sorry for these kids, they just don't know what they are missing. I remember reading rhythms to my children when they were younger, but now they are to interested in computer, play station and other battery operated things. I think it is a real shame. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. I like the tone and subject of you piece. It gets the reader thinking about what our youth does with their time now days. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. This was a wonderful poem which I enjoyed reading. Very Nicely Done!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of A Moment In Time  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Pat

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: A Moment In Time

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm was good. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: What a beautiful poem you have written here. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. How wonderful. While reading this I shared your adventure. Thank you for sharing this heart-warming moment with me. You've created a very vivid piece in the reader's mind. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. This poem was a most interesting read and kept my attention from start to finish! This is a very good piece. I enjoy reading it. Thanks for sharing this!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Good Advice  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, YellowRose

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Good Advice

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is very good. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Choice of words is good which makes for good readability.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: What a beautiful poem you have written here. I found this poem to be very inspirational. It shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. A wonderful message. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

I didn't have to think about it at all
Do the right thing all the time and I did
Kept by heart true to God and I always will

 This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. I consider this a very good read, and one which I would highly recommend. I give it highest marks. Please keep on writing just like this!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Hope...  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, AshleyR

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Hope

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm was good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: I think every new college student will be able to relate to this poem. It is a scary thing going to college and leaving home. When you get to college you think about your family and friends you left behind. That is totally normal. I think every new college student feels that way. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. Deep expression of emotion. Powerful! You expressed the emotion of loneliness very well in your poem. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I enjoyed reading you poetic words. Very Nicely Done!!!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Weep not for me  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, Sunfireyes

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Weep not for me

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Grammar: I could find no error. I did find a spelling errors. In stanza 2, 1st line, you need to capitalize, (I} .

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm was off and the flow was very choppy.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I do have a few suggestions. First off you sentence are to long which throws off the rhythm and makes the flow choppy. I think the best thing you could do for this poem and any other poem you might write in the future is to read it out loud so you can hear how the flow is. Sometimes it is hard to hear the words in your head correctly. Make sure when you are reading your poems out loud that you count the syllables to see if the rhythm is correct. Secondly punctuation, I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Here are Example of both:

Weep not for me,
as my pain is at ease.
My life here I have completed,
and a new one I have begun.
Keep me for ever in your heart,
and there I shall be.
Remembered not our faults,
but the good times we"ve shared.
Please weep not for me.

Overall: First off I send you my deepest condolence and prayers for the loss of your friend. May God help you through this trying time. This was a very emotional poem and you still were able to remember you friend in you heart and how he or she would want you to remember him or her. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of DIVINE SOULMATES  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Shi Shad

"Random Thoughts and Cares"  This is a Rising *Star* Stars "Member to Member Review" and you are a fellow Rising *Star* Star!

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: DIVINE SOULMATES

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice:
Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. You conveyed the message of finding your soulmate. I too, believe that when you find your soulmate, you will know. This is masterful poetic writing. Love it! Wonderful! You've painted lovely pictures in the reader's mind. There is such beauty in every line. It's honest and touching. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. This poem was a most interesting read and kept my attention from start to finish! The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

A gift God sent you and me,
For all to marvel and see.
Believe in Love it's never too late,
For you to find your divine soulmate!

 This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem! One in which I would highly recommend. I give you a big BRAVO!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Silent Jeer  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Nicki

"Random Thoughts and Cares"  This is a Rising *Star* Stars "Member to Member Review" and you are a fellow Rising *Star* Star!

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Silent Jeer

Impression Of Title: The title is unique, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy. You use of scheme: abba abba cdc cdc was excellent

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Choice of words is good which makes for good readability.

Suggestions: I can't find any suggestions to make this poem better.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. You conveyed the message of jealousy very well in your poem, such as:Across the room the albatross takes flight. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I like the tone and subject of you piece. It gets the reader thinking about what jealousy is and how it affects people. You've obviously spent some very creative energy in the construction of this bit of verse, made this a wonderfully smooth read. I enjoyed reading your poetic words. One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have a Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hello, Kriss Falcon

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Facing nothing but my fear

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Grammar: I could find no errors. I did find a spelling mistake. In the 2nd stanza line 5 you have (torchure} should be (torcher). In the 5th stanza you have (perrish) should be (perish}

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is off and the flow is very choppy.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: Some of you punctuation was not right. Also some of your sentences were to long which throw off the rhythm. First if, I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Secondly, I think the best thing you could do for this poem and any other poem you might write in the future is to read it out loud so you can hear how the flow is. Sometimes it is hard to hear the words in your head correctly. Example of punctuation:

I scream in pain,
The stabbing is too much to bear.
I see something in the mirror;
A ghoul, from the mouth of Hell,
A demon, from the lions gate of torchure.

By doing this it will make your rhythm and flow much better.

Overall: I found this piece to be very dark. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. About how to over come someones fear. You conveyed this message well in your poem. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Pat

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Shattered Pieces of Love

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Overall: I found this poem is so heart catching, breath taking, and tear dropping and really pulled at my heartstrings. Good imagery about abuse, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. Something like that gives a terrible scar..no one can know the feeling one has inside from that sort of abuse..one can feel shot down, broken, and wrecked. No one has the right to hit anyone to taunt to torture taking away from them who they are.. One ends up wondering why..what happened. I think that writing difficult pieces like this one that put your causes of concern out there are something every writer should pursue at least on occasion. There are so few ways to make people more aware and more involved in putting a stop to such trocities, and this is one of the best avenues to incite change upon. Very nice
originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. Well done.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Un-dead Job  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, Rachel

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Un-dead Job

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is off and the flow is very choppy.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I do have a few suggestions. First off, some of your sentence are to long which throws off the rhythm and flow of your poem. I think the best thing you could do for this poem and any other poem you might write in the future is to read it out loud so you can hear how the flow is. Sometimes it is hard to hear the words in your head correctly. Secondly, is punctuation. I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of (Bud)ding Love  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Nicki

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: (Bud)ding Love

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: What a lovely poem you have written here. You chose your words carefully to evoke beautiful images for the reader. This was an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I think the different colors you did for each stanza really added a lot to your work. There is beautiful depth of emotion and feeling which comes through in every line. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

Jack kissed Daf ‘til her petals laughed
And she blossomed
Into a
Caribbean Sunset
ROSE

 This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for sharing, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem! One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Bunni

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: I'm a work in progess

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Choice of words is good which makes for good readability.

Suggestions: None. Perfect just the way it is.

Overall: I was nosing around your port and I found this little gem. What a lovely poem. Wonderful! You've painted lovely pictures in the reader's mind. About how everyone is always a work in progress and that you can change if you are really sincere about it. You give a lot of description in this piece, which I really like. You bring a strong image to the reader's mind, as well as a subtle emotion. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

I was a work in progress,
and like an unfinished dress,
I was a mess,
It took some time..
but it was worth it, yes?

 This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of In His Eyes  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, The Huntress

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: In His Eyes

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is a little off and the flow is a little choppy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for easy reading.

Suggestions: I do have a few suggestions. First off, some of you sentence are to long which throws off the rhythm and makes the flow choppy. First I think the best thing you could do for this poem and any other poem you might write in the future is to read it out loud so you can hear how the flow is. Sometimes it is hard to hear the words in your head correctly. Secondly, I would place a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion. Example of punctuation:

To watch his smile is to see the sun,
reflect off pools of untouched morning dew.
To hear his voice so clear and calm,
is utmost beauty, a song anew.

Overall: There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. This was an enjoyable piece that I am sure many will be able to relate to. The subject of love never gets boring, especially when written with such a heartfelt tone. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Las Vegas  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, Carolyn Darnton

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Las Vegas

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is little off. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is a little choppy

Word Choice: Choice of words is good which makes for good readability.

Suggestion: I do have a suggestion. A lot of your sentences are to long which make the rhythm and flow off. I think the best thing you could do for this poem and any other poem you might write in the future is to read it out loud so you can hear how the flow is. Sometimes it is hard to hear the words in your head correctly.

Overall: I can really relate to this poem. I went to Las Vegas about 3 years ago it was my first time. So I know of what you speak. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. I think that, with just a little bit of attention, this poem could really bloom into a wonderful piece. I would love to read your intense poem again once you make the edits. I'll gladly re-rate it if you just e-mail me. My email address is: janice48 Have a Nice Day!! .

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Daizy

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Golden Rays Of Sunrise

Impression Of Title: The title is perfect, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Suggestions: I have no suggestions for this lovely poem.

Overall: I was nosing around your port and I found this little gem. What a lovely poem. I found this poem to be very inspirational. It shows so well how it feels when one is willing to let the false sense of self go and become one with God. He does all of these things and more, giving a sense of peace and relief in the wake of fear and pride. A wonderful message. This is an uplifting piece about the importance of faith in our lives. You make many excellent points about the need for faith in our lives. There is wonderful depth of feeling and emotion in this poem and it shows through in every phrase. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. You definitely have a true gift with words. The language in this poem is beautiful. I guess my favorite part (though it's hard to choose) is:

Grace from God is for everyone,
Not for a price, but free.
Just believe, and in Jesus' name,
He'll cleanse you, just like me.

 This is such a beautiful phrase, excellent in depth of emotion and the imagery is gorgeous with this phrase. You definitely belong here, you have an amazing talent. Just by reading this poem, the reader senses the closeness I can tell that you must have put a lot of time and effort into this poem,and I'am sure there were many revisions, but the reward is in the beautiful final copy of this poem. Thank you for saring, and congratulations on such a beautiful poem! One in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author!!

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Sararah

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: See You Later Friend

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhyme scheme is good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.

Word Choice: Word choice is good, nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Overall: First off, I send you my deepest condolence and prayers. May God help you through this trying time. This is a poem about your beloved friend, who is now deceased and in Heaven with her Creator. There is wonderful depth of emotion and so much feeling is expressed in every line. The reader can tell that you loved your friend very much and that the two of you had a very special relationship. I, too, was blessed to have a special relationship with my best friend, so understand of those things of which you speak. You are are really wearing your heart on your sleeve in this poem, which is just lovely.
Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. A pleasure to read this emotional, heartfelt poem. Very nice tribute to your friend!!!

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It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Mistaken  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, mars

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Mistaken

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. Form of the poem is good, and the flow is nice and easy.

Word Choice: Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling.

Suggestions: I do have one suggestions. I think you need to use a bigger font. I had a hard time reading it because the font was so small.

Overall: I found this poem is so heart catching, breath taking, and tear dropping and really pulled at my heartstrings. Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. This poem is about a man feeling alone even if there is love in his house. While reading this I could just feel the agony of the depths of deepest despair of this man. I can not even begin to understand what that feels like, such a sad situation this person is going through. There is very strong depth of emotion and feeling in every line. I cannot imagine going through such a difficult life. Deep expression of emotion. Powerful! Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. A pleasure to read this emotional, heartfelt poem,

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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Review of Snow  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Tina B

I have the honor of reviewing your poem for "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

General Disclaimer: I hope that my observations are in someway helpful, though I ask you to take into account that what I offer is only a personal opinion and respectfully given to you. Only you know what is right for your writing!

Title: Snow

Impression Of Title: The title is good, and fitting the content of the poem.

Spelling, grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.

Flow/Rhythm: The rhythm is good. The flow is nice and easy. The form is lovely, being centered on the page, which makes it attractive to the eye. This, of course, is a matter of taste, and what I prefer.

Word Choice: Choice of words is good which makes for good readability.

Overall: Good imagery, which helps the reader to see in his or her mind's eye what the poem is about and it also stimulates the imagination to see beyond the poem. I can really paint the scene and you did a great job setting the mood to it. This is a lovely poem about starting a new beginning. You conveyed this message very well in your poem. Very nice originality. You caught the reader's attention from the very first line and kept the reader's attention throughout. My favorite phrase is:

Now concealed in heavy snow
Opening new possibilities.

 This was a perfect way to end this poem. Sometimes we can write and write, but finding the ending line is difficult, but you have found the perfect one here. Simply lovely. I enjoyed reading your poetic words.

Keep On Writing *Pencil*, Keep Sharing with the Community And Rock On!!!

It's been an honor and pleasure to review your work!! *Smile*

Have A Wonderful *Sun* Day,

Warmest Regards,
janice48 Have a Nice Day!!

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