Well, it seems you have strong emotional ties to this young lady. In the first sentence, hate has a capital letter. In the last verse, you wrote 'and my soul 'feel'. That should be 'feels' First verse, 'to get shoved...away.' You might want to put that sentence like this. To get shoved away. Keep writing.
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