Well written. A simple thought expressed so well with simple words. In this materialistic world, life will be smooth and happy if everyone learns to accept things as it is. Good or bad traits in a person should not hinder love. Accepting both good and bad in a person can only evolve into a truthful love. Keep writing. You have the gift of presenting tougher thoughts in a simple way.
In a while, my mind is
flying like a butterfly
There's no reasons
why you are on my mind.
Laughing to myself
wishing I could cry
out my troubles..
These lines just reflect my personal thoughts about a dear friend of mine who filled the gap in my life.
The poem clearly reflects the old thought that every thing is a passing cloud. Things can change for better.
The author must have checked the poem for grammar errors. Even that can be excused as a poetic license, sometimes errors can spoil the beauty of the poem. The poem reflects a metaphysical tone.
Good poem to be included in the anthology. So matured thinking even while you were in your teens. The poem with the choice of words beautifully brings out the dual nature of the child who is smart enough to hide feelings and emotions and try to let out while being alone. It may be true with so many children across the world. Good reflection of teenage thoughts.
The author has beautifully justified how small things matter in life. The poem sounds simple but it is filled with indepth meaning. The poem very clearly portrays how the materialistic world of today lacks the patience to pay attention to smaller things in life.
An interesting read. The author has successfully maintained suspense till the end. The writing style is so matured and the reader could feel the smooth movement of the flow of a stream. The author has beautifully brought out how a simple thing can bring about the biggest trouble. Enjoyed reading the story and could not help feeling sad for Ryan.
Simple but heart moving. While reading the poem, I can feel and understand the pain as a mother the author has gone through. There is nothing great to live a normal life. But, it is worthwhile to live through extreme conditions and show our mettle. The poem reflects those feelings so sharply which made my eyes filled with tears.
The author has beautifully discussed about the common ailment of writers 'writer's block.' Just like plague that gets collected on the teeth and hide the shine of the teeth, the writer's block prevents an author from writing down the varied thoughts that should flow like a healthy stream. The poem captured my attention and what a surprise, I am out of my writer's block.
This letter touched my heart. Every living thing that lives on earth has the right to live. The author has beautifully brought out that.
The letter is well written and has expressed the heart felt emotion of a tiger. The author has successfully pointed out the responsibility of the human to let other animals to live peacefully.
A well written essay. The author has beautifully created a picture of Uncle Ho and has helped the readers to have a strong glimpse of Uncle Ho in their minds. The essay is perfect without any grammar or punctuation errors. The author has also used simple sentences to share his thoughts with the reader. Variety of sentences have helped the author to present a well written essay.
With the simple choice of words, the poem is well written. This poem is really a tribute to your mother. You have beautifully written the daily chores of a mother, for which we are all indebted to our mothers.
Though the first three paragraphs of the poem are well written, it will be better if the fourth paragraph is written again. The first three paragraphs has a free flow in sharing the ideas. Yet, I can feel the interruption in the starting of the fourth paragraph.
The recollected memories of the author is worthy to read. The author has beautifully brought out the emotional change and challenges a migrating person would feel while leaving the mother country.
Yet, spelling and punctuation errors interrupt the free flow of writing. Don't forget to run your spell checker before submitting your article. Never forget to proof read and correct the errors that you find. It is always best to give a second reading and fix the errors before submission.
The essay talks about three different hobbies that help a person to develop personality at the best to achieve the goals easily. Singing and flower arranging help to develop creativity at the depth of heart, which will help to understand others and their emotional level. Basket ball as a team game will teach a person how to get on with others. Usually games teach us to have the patience to win our goals.
From the poem I understand how the author has worked hard to link things that we hardly make a notice of it. The author has successfully linked the past with the present through perfect word choice. 'To keep something dead alive, The not letting go, Keep the dog chain tight' tells more than what the author wanted to convey. It is true if we all let the past to rule us, we will not live a peaceful life.
This poem reminds me of the joy I get when I read letters written by my mother long ago. I can feel her in it. The poem is free flowing and conveys the emotion strongly. With simple word choice, the author has conveyed deeper thoughts with ease.
One more beautiful story of the day. The story has a flow to capture the attention of the reader. The author is good in observing things that happen around and bring those things beautifully in the narration. The dialogues in the story are catchy as they convey the mood of the characters in the story in a smooth way. Keep writing.
Beautifully expressed with simple word choice. The author has brought out the agony of a little girl who want to grow up and achieve the best. This poem strongly expresses the power of God and God will never let little kids go off from His hands. Death is not a welcome feature for a little girl who want to live a complete life. Let your poem be heard as a prayer to God.
Beautifully written. The author has successfully portrayed the beauty of friendship or love in simple words. The author has selected simple words to express serious thoughts that goes through both at heart and at sub conscious mind levels. It is true a relationship in life can do wonders for it can make the life beautiful and lovely.
Flow of thoughts binds together the poem. You have beautifully brought out the emotional bond with your friend. The pain that you have felt after the indifferent behavior of your friend can be felt in the poem. The poem beautifully expresses the in depth emotions of a poetic friend who deserves more than this friend who does not know the value of your friendship.
Well written. Solitude is something difficult to describe and give a shape. Yet, you have succeeded in giving a shape to solitude with the choice of appropriate words. Simple words convey the heavy meaning smoothly.
There are two spelling mistakes - plague, existence. Take care of the spelling mistakes for it can spoil the beauty of a well written poem.
The poem is simple to read, but has something to tell the readers about solitude.
The poem gives a vivid picture of an enchanting girl who wishes to get things done in her own way. You have selected simple words to tell what is happening now. People who are selfish and never have the heart to do things in the correct way. The last two lines of the poem sum up the whole poem. Everything happened in a moment has now turned out to nothing. True to experience.
Beautifully written. There is flow of thought from the beginning and the poem ends with an apt answer to the question raised by the poet. Stream of thoughts flow smoothly through the stanzas and the ideas are well knit together. Keep writing.
You have expressed delicate emotions in a heart-felt way. Appropriate word choice has made the poem rich with in-depth feelings. Whenever you look at the eyes expressing the agony the body goes through, I have always felt disturbed and uneasy.
Well written. Everything today is linked to something in the past. The deep unknown layers of our mind always vibrates with the experience of the past. True expression. The words chosen to express this idea brings out your thought neatly. Keep writing.
Very good expression of writing. The pen writing down on a sheet of paper is really an experience to narrate. Keep writing. Writing is a good exercise to bring out the pent up emotions and act as a channel to let the emotions vented out. Smoking and drinking tea makes the experience very personal. Because I never do those things while writing.
Well written mystery. With few characters you have successfully written a story full of suspense. The description of a morning on the hill side is breathtaking. You have not missed not even a minute detail to bring the picture of nature before the eyes of a reader. The story flows on smoothly with suspense hanging behind. You have unfolded the suspense with an ease and that makes you to be a perfect writer of mysteries. Keep it up.
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