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Passionate, and hungry reader. I try to feel the vibes of the writer, and review accordingly. A. We are all in this together. B. Encouragement, and Empathy followed here. C. I am not a perfect writer or grammarian D. Language works when it works. Communication on some level occurs.
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Cooking, ironing, gardening, digging for fossils, budgeting, photography, writing, reviewing drawing, painting, landscaping, erosion control, research. Spotting patterns, rhythms and minute differences within patterns. Data entry. Taxes. Environmental. Public Service, Problem Solving, Building Databases, Data Entry, finding Free Resources (legally), Brand Building, Social Media The price of my reviews is due to a high demand for reviews. I cannot help but give an in-depth review. Peace.
Favorite Genres
Mystery, Juvenile, Childrens, Y/A, Folklore, Story Telling, Native Spiritual, Genealogy, Golden Oldies Sci-Fi,
Least Favorite Genres
Outdated Non-Fiction
Favorite Item Types
Too many to name. I like original content that is "stranger than fiction" from the author's character's experiences. I love when stories pour from the imagination of the writer - and I feel it. Or learn something good.
Least Favorite Item Types
Poetry, because I am really a dive-bar, bathroom poet, and it is too structured.
I will not review...
I do not mean this ugly, please take this from a place of kindness and love - I read a lot. I have been reading a long time. I speed read. If asked to review an item that seems familiar to things read, I will check for plagiarism, and do. I will not review hard porn, poems (unless more prose than poem), nor plagiarized items. I will not call you out. If I turn your review down, it is not about you. It is me and life. Peace.
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Review of Halo Effect  
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Rated: 13+
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*Rainbowl**Writing* *Clouds* John aka hbar *Clouds* *Writing* *Rainbowr*



*Bookstack* What prompted this reader to *read* "Halo Effect " 


*Reading* What kept the reader to the end of the story?

*Boxcheck* The title "Halo Effect" to this reader is a promise of a supernatural story.

*Boxcheck* The photograph of the little princess partially hidden behind a cupboard door is another lure. As a busy reader it is another *Coinsilver* into pot of promise.

*Boxcheck* The location..."The Long and Short" has switched me into detective mode.

*Boxcheck* Genre(s): Spiritual, mystery and family already have me engaged and I have not read a word of the story yet.

*Reading* All of the checked items above occurred in just a glance.


*Dialog* Detail: The detail in this short story is phenomenal

*Angel* All in the first paragraph these descriptions; "my swollen feet and aching back ...trudging down this dirt path...natural as the redwood trees surrounding it...clinic looked more like a cottage..." set a scene, creating a visual with words.

*Angel* "...started picking at the loose seams in a blanket, plucking individual threads and rolling them into tiny balls of anguish..."

*Angel* One of my favorite descriptions: "...I nibbled around the edges of the circumstances that brought me to this point..." She is tired and hungry. Not only does the writer show that Alexandria is worrying and hungry.

*People* Character(s):

*Woman* Alexandria is a very well developed character. We know her name, age, circumstances, family members, skills, smarts, devotion and love.

*Woman* Becky Whittaker is another well developed character. I am not sure if it is intentional on the writers part, but I keep changing how old she looks while reading through the story.

*Man**Cat* *Dog1* Bruce is a complete mystery to me. I have re-read "Halo Effect" several times, and keep missing his entrance or part in the story. *Blush*

*People* The writer did an excellent job weaving all of the sub-characters within the story.

*Rainbowl**Books2**Rainbowr*Overall: Nixie Martell cheerleader is a top notch writer and reviewer whose work shows class and professionalism. It is nice to have a bit of the history for where all this story has been published.

*Teabr* This is an interesting story that can easily grow into a novel.

*Teabr* In the Young Adult (Y/A) genre, this type of story is very popular.

*Teabr* Nixie Martell cheerleader knows I am grammar challenged so I can never talk about punctuation or structure. I found one tiny error "keep if it from him,(turtle Thaddeus)".

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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Document* I was looking for an item to review for your Anniversary and the WDC Power Reviewers Raid and as soon as I read the title and the description, I was swept up in the article.

FORUM
White Case Memorial  (E)
Honoring the WDC members who have passed away
#1230549 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen


*Rainbowl**Grave**Rainbowr* Due to passing the half-century mark a few years ago, this reader / writer has become more aware of her mortality. This is why after reading many of the tributes within the "White Case Memorial," the memorials created are professional and a way to keep a writers words alive. The powerful emotion of this went straight to my heart.

*Rainbowl**Grave**Rainbowr* For writers who publish on-line we must consider what would become of our intellectual properties if we were to pass-away. What of passwords, and all of those complications.

*Rainbowl**Grave**Rainbowr* It is a beautiful aspect of Writing Dot Com to honor passed authors. The origin of this memorial site is given in the introduction:

"...This forum is to honor those that have passed on. Stomper was the original creator and now it will have a permanent home under the wings of "The WDC Angel Army..."

*Rainbowl*Overall:*Rainbowr* The White Case Memorial is a beautiful way to honor our fellow writers on WDC for years to come. Oftentimes an obituary does not go into the lengths of memory that are found here. Beautiful.

This review is also in conjunction with your 8th Year Anniversary on WDC

*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*



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Review of Burnt Rope  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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What is the primary *Hook*hook that caused me to read
 Burnt Rope  (E)
A trip to the Building Center
#1852856 by Nemesis

*Bookopen* The title, "Burnt Rope" is unique enough to warrant a second look.

*Bookopen* The description: "A trip to the Building Center."

*Bookopen* Genres: Experience, Comedy and Biographical.

*Reading* This reader felt sure that she would find "Burnt Rope"  an interesting read.

Set-up: On a cold day like today, I can see the contractor approach the narrator, hands gesturing all around the place, gripping about how his foreman did not show up again, and could Nemesis run to the Building Center and pick up the needed moldings?

*Tools* The builder, "Nemesis," leaves out to the store, to pick up the fourteen foot molding in his eight foot truck bed.

*Tools* Without giving away the best part of this story here is one of my favorite gifts from the author; an inside tip on what men think. "... That’s when I noticed another contractor in a Dodge pick up, staring at my load and shaking his head. That was my first clue that all would not go well..."

*Boxcheck* He really knows that his load is not secure

*Boxcheck* Nemesis acknowledges that the other Contract could see what he was unable or willing to see.

*Boxcheck* Sort of like asking for directions. Forget about it, I have this!"

*Shovel* Overall: "Burnt Rope" is a very funny story. It is written in a format that is pleasing to the eye, and easy to read.

*Shovel* Style: The author tells the adventure of a construction/police incident in chronological order, and successfully completes the title to end in a manner that is clear and believable.

*Clock2* As a busy reader, I feel like my time was well spent in enjoying this humorous story that is so crazy, it must be true. Thank you.

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*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*



*Questionb* What made me stop and read
Me Uncle Packy's Wicker Sofa  (E)
A potential submission for the anthology "Sofas I've Slept On."
#1836057 by Dave
*Questionb*
The title itself is very alluring. I like reading stories that have the fashion to become one with the surroundings. Samuel Clemons and William Faulkner are two writers who used local spellings, and pronunciations creating great works of literature.

*Boat2* What compelled me to get into the *Boat2* of "Me Uncle Packy's Wicker Sofa"  and ride it to the end? The writer was successful in getting me into the vessel by opening with a scene where the reader can feel, smell and sense the porch. The cottage, the furniture - everything.

Description: Dave uses words craftily here. "...its wicker construction creaking every time you moved..." The picture that forms is specific. This wicker furniture is not hastily glued or patched together. It may be creaky, but it is lasting.

Description: The author easily flips a wrist, and suddenly the main protagonist has been aged, told of his past journeys, allowed that he had been a champion boxer in the Navy.

Character: I love the fingernail sketch we get of Uncle Packy and Auntie Selena. It is not much, but the narrator is able to present a feeling of peace and contentment he felt while a guest at his Uncle and Aunts house during those summers.

Overall: I think this story is very well written. One of my favorite lines: "...Soggy afternoons found me napping in that wicker sofa, with its gnarly lumps softened by a couple of floweredy cushions..." That is so much description in such few words.

You are an amazing writer.

*Writing* Write on.

Happy WDC Anniversary

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In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Clock* REVIEW FOR 36-HR MISSION BY Writing.Com Support *Bookstack* REVIEW A NEWBIE *Reading* *Quill*

*Hook* What was the *Hook* that made me read and review
 One Stop, That's All  (13+)
This short story is about a girl who was given a mission to make one guy understand.
#1965004 by Sammy E.


*Check4* The title was the first thing that made me stop perusing items to review

*Check4* The second line: "...I shouldn't have said anything! It was like this black feeling came over me..." Is the second thing that perked up my interest.

*Check4* The format is set in a way that is easy on the reader. The paragraphs break it up very well. (Understand this is not something we learned in English 101 - but then we did not know we would be reading on screens.)

*Blockv* Description: The writer does very well in bringing the reader into the midst of the most volatile few minutes of the lives of the two protagonists. There is pure white rage that sacrifices an angel for a lesson.


*Blockv* Character: In a short story we miss out on the back-story, so it is difficult to decide sometimes what to give the reader so they can just pop in the story as if from outer space, and catch on to what is happening plot, characters, who, what and where.

*Rainbowl**Rainbowr* Your writing is good, and even though you are a Newbie on Writing Dot Com (WDC), you are no stranger to writing. I am a greedy reader, and when I see glimpses of what "could" happen if more of the story were there, I want more. Unfair.


*Blockv* Technicality: This review is meant to encourage and give feedback. It could be me (always) but I am a bit confused about "the angel's" job.

*Angel* It seems a dire punishment for the angel-girl, someone who had already have a broken heart. This is just opinion of a reader.

Welcome to WDC and as we say around here...

*Writing* Write on. *Writing*

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Review of Haunted  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
*Clock* REVIEW FOR 36-HR MISSION BY Writing.Com Support *Bookstack* REVIEW A NEWBIE *Reading* *Quill*

*Hook* What was the *Hook* that made me read and review this item? What hooked me were several items.

1). The title
 Haunted  (18+)
A cop reflects upon the violence of the job.
#1965085 by James Boyle

2). Genre(s) Detective, Dark, Thriller/Suspense
3). The opening line. "...Every cop was haunted..."

*Books1* There are little things that can cause a reader to choose whether or not to read an item.

*Bookstack* The writer was able to do three things to get me to stop, read the title, and stick my toe in the water of the story.

*Books2* No matter how wonderful a story is, if it doesn't get read - no one but you will ever know how good the story is.


*Blockv* Character: Derek is not described in physical terms. For this tale it is more important that we get a view of the inside of Derek's head/mind. This is essential for what is coming up in the life of Derek.

*Man* Character: Melvin is the only other character in this story, but Derek brings him out of the nightmare of the shadows, and reveals the entire identity of Melvin O'Connell. Even as a sub-character Melvin is necessary.

*Check5* Derek could have left Melvin nameless, but in a way makes memorial for him by remembering his whole name.

*Check5* Derek does not appear to be in company with those cops who were sociopaths. Derek is making restitution every day of his life for killing a man in self-defense. It has never been easy for Derek and never will be no matter how "justified" the shoot was.

*Blockv* Description: As a reader I am engrossed with this short story. When doing reviews, I will often re-read the piece I am reviewing. In reading "Haunted" several times, it seems to pull up a new layer each time.

*Blockv* Technicality: Welcome to WDC - There will probably be more grammatical errors in this review than in your short story. I found no errors or mis-use of words.

*Writing* Write on. *Writing*

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In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is in honor of
 Invalid Item 
This item number is not valid.
#1964187 by Not Available.
I found and am reviewing a Newbie for my "Daily Good Deeds".

*Hook* What was the initial *Hook*? The title is interesting. "The Only One Left is Peace". "The only one left is peace" 

*Reading* What made me want to read the short story in its entirety? It is short; 100 words and the genre listed Death and Emotional. I was interested to see what the writer Storiable would do in 100 words.

*People* Characters: Grandmother, and grandchild. This is a monumental snap-shot of a family member sitting in for the last moments of her grandmother's life.

*Document* Descriptions: The author of this very short story stayed focused on her beloved grandmother, and is most impacted by the peace and smiling face of her grandma as she passes over. The grandchild's acceptance of death makes me wonder her age.

*Globe* Overall:This is a unique story, and you have shown that you have talent as a story-teller.

*Tack* Errors: "...There was nothing more I could do, expect except..."
*Tack* Errors: "... I had found the strength to smile her back..." This may be correct, or the only solution you could find to keep it at 100 words.
*Tack* Errors: There are probably more errors in my review than in your short story. These are just things to look at. This is your work.

*Writing* Write on! *Writing*

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Review of Fade Away  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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What *Hook*ed me in to read
 Fade Away  (ASR)
A story of loss.
#1839365 by Lightbringer


*Hook* The title "Fade Away," was a draw, and the genres listed that go with this story; Thriller/Suspense, Tragedy and Death.
*Hook* The title is short and sweet.
*Hook* The genres change it from sweet to something else entirely.
*Hook* It is important to let hurried readers know what they can expect from a story.


What compelled me to get into the *cargray* of the story and ride it to the end?

*Car* In "Fade Away," the very first sentence successfully lures this reader into the story.
"... It was cold today, not a shivering cold, or the kind of cold that causes goosebumps, it was just … different..." The word cold is used three times in this one sentence, but because there is such a conveyance of feeling and description, each "type" of cold stands alone. It is the backdrop for everything to follow.

*Ghost* Character: The narrator is the main character, who is given a solo dialog. The fading does not stop discomforts, or keep him/her from continuing on their daily schedule, and habits for a time.

*Man* At first I thought the main character was an elderly person who was being ignored by others around them. It is disturbing to realize the time may have passed when others stop noticing him/her, or no longer care if anyone can see him/her. He/She becomes a non-entity.

*Writing* Description: The descriptions of the "fading away" of this person are well done. I felt some stress and distress along with the protagonist. The genres are correct as this is a Suspenseful Thriller of Death taking a soul - step by step.

*Rainbowl**Rainbowr*Overall: This story is well written and entertaining. "Fade Away," is a different way of looking at Death, and how death may come. We really don't know. This is a good story, and I continue to consider what transpired in "Fade Away."

*Tack* Technical: There is only one instance where I struggled with what was happening to the Fader; "... Bruised and annoyed, I walked down the tunnel..." This is your creation, and you have license to do what you want. To me the ending is a big twist that I will not spoil, it is just the bruising at this stage to me is questionable.

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Review of Wolfs pain  
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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"Wolfs pain"  is a well written dark fantasy story about werewolves.

*Dropr* What *Hook*ed me into this story? The hook was a little bit of a trick, because I was looking at the graphic thinking "wolf hunter." The genre listed this as fantasy / dark / horror / scary, and I enjoy this genre of work.

*Dropr* What kept me reading? From the first line "...The trail of blood John followed certainly belonged to his wife..." I was intrigued and had to find out what happens. The excellent story telling by Jimminycritic kept me perched on the edge of my seat. Then, "... In the kitchen, there was the body of a naked wolf-man whom John felt certain ‘was’ the werewolf who abducted his wife. His head was ripped clean off and was frying in the microwave. Oh, ya. She had turned all right..." How could I not stay around for the grand finale?

*Dropr* Character(s): The characterizations are brief but do tell us enough about John and his wife, the main protagonists. There were sub-characters whose identification formed pictures in my head as a reader.

*Dropr* Description: The descriptions are visceral and bring the reader into the midst of the bloody scenes.

*Dropr* Overall: "Wolf's Pain" is a solid story with a wicked twist at the end. I suspected there would be a battle, but never thought it would end the way it did.

The writer is a word weaver who did an excellent job of playing on certain words. The last line, "...He was the new 'Nights Master'..." leaves me thinking about the dynamics of this story. I do not want to write spoilers, so I leave this as an enticement to check out an enjoyable horror.

*Dropr* It is my opinion that "Wolf's Pain" could be turned into a full length novel, or even series.

*Writing*

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Review of Fear  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Fear  (E)
In my 5 for 5 in 5 entry I explore the primordial fear of being chased by nameless puruers
#1899316 by Karl
is a well written short story that is description interwoven with emotion.

What was the *Hook* that made the reader decide to review this item? The title: "Fear," and the genre listing as Horror/Scary, Dark.

*Dog2* What kept the reader engaged to the end of the story? The descriptions are second to none.

*Baretree2* "...The trees clawed at me, icy cold fingernails fresh from the grave..."

*Treepine* "...shouts of my pursuers echoed among the pines as I ran..."

*Moon* "...ducking low as flashlight beams crossed the midnight air above my head..."

and finally,

*Train* "... the oncoming train continued its oncoming approach, its rumble accompanied by the braying of the hounds..."

The story reads as if the teller is talking fast, in hurried whispers of thought and action. The writer does an amazing job of using words to set the background, allowing the reader to taste the action.

My own heartbeat sped up, I felt a sympathy of anxiety. The writer grabbed my hand, and dragged me into the story. I can still feel the tentacles brushing the back of my mind.

Overall - Excellent.

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In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Coingold* *Coinsilver* *Coincopper*HAPPY WDC ANNIVERSARY from"Anniversary Reviews" *Coincopper* *Coinsilver* *Coingold*


What *Hook*ed me in to read this item? "Preserving Our Past"  is a non-fiction plea for the city planners and leaders of Cincinnati to consider Historic Preservation instead of wholesale demolition. As an environmentalist this reader knows the importance of retro-fitting, and remodeling older buildings.

What compelled me to get into the *cargray* of the story and ride it to the end? The reader found this gem in Incurable Romantic 's portfolio and had to learn "the rest of the story," regarding the Authors attempt to use the power of wise words to get the city planners to stop and consider what they were doing.

Description: The author did a good job at describing in detail what had previously been lost by the fast-moving city leaders.

*House* "... the Wesley Chapel, [built in the early 1800's] was demolished in the middle of the night so that Proctor and Gamble could build a green space as part of their headquarters expansion?..."

and

*Tools* "...the Albee Theater, built in 1927 at a cost of $4 million, still a working theater – theater palace to be more precise - at the time, listed on the National Register of Historic Places, providing both entertainment and jobs, and helping keep people downtown, was demolished for the Westin Hotel complex?..."


*Train* The writer is hoping to save the "...Union Terminal, which I refer to below, is Cincinnati's historic train station, built in 1933. It, with its Art Deco design, was the center of our rail traffic for WWII, and later, for decades..."

Overall: The reader was moved by this article, and she hopes the writer was able to move the thinking of those decision makers who seemed more concerned about landing huge construction contracts than doing research on the real environmental and economic impacts of destroying already constructed buildings - especially old buildings. The resources used for the building of those will never be recouped, and the energy loss is exponentially terrible.


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In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*Coingold* *Coinsilver* *Coincopper*HAPPY WDC ANNIVERSARY from"Anniversary Reviews" *Coincopper* *Coinsilver* *Coingold*


What *Hook*ed me in to read this item? "Medusa the Snake Headed Monster"  is a scary but humorous poem with the genre listed as Horror/Scary, Holiday, Comedy. This attracted me right away. As a reader I enjoy a good parody. The writer chose well, and made this attractive to read.

What compelled me to get into the *cargray* of the story and ride it to the end? "Medusa the Snake Headed Monster," is a short piece that I was able to sing to the tune of "Rudolph The Red Nosed Reindeer."

Character: All of the characters are from Roman and/or Greek Mythology, so they come into the poem with preconceived attributes and histories.

Cadence: It is not perfect, but after going through this poem several times, the reader found that it worked out just fine. If I could have stopped laughing, it would have helped.

Overall: I would not change a thing. Amazingly the author wrote the initial version of this in 11/2000 (Happy 13 years on WDC).

Today many of our movies, juvenile and YA novels are Mythology based. Classic Comics and Graphic Novels are making full circle and is timely.

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Review of The Last Guardian  
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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What *Hook*ed me in to read this item? The genre listed is horror / scary, environmental. The description also included "An environmental commentary..." These all hooked me in to the story.

What compelled me to get into the *cargray* of the story and ride it to the end? Immediately the reader is aware that some type of tribe or village is under attack by poisonous gases. I become concerned about the welfare of the few remaining members.

*Burstbl* Character: The characterization of Denk and one of her few last remaining relatives are shown as very proud and ancient. They have been fighting the destruction of their tribes for a long time.

*Burstbl* Description: The mistmakers. The cave. Margash, the Seer, clicking, swelling and exploding. Very well done.

*Burstbl* Overall: This is a well written story. I cannot say more without making it a spoiler.

*Writing* Write on and Happy WDC Anniversary

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Review of Double Fantasy  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Quill*"My Name is Lilly and I am Addicted to WDC - 100 Reviews in 30 Days Addicted" *Quill*

Double Fantasy  (13+)
Horror about an infamous piece of Beatles memorabliia. Now available on Amazon.
#1082441 by Lynn McKenzie

is a stand alone horror story that is an excerpt of the full length story.

What was the initial *Hook*? The genre "Horror / Scary" was the first hook. The description: "Horror about an infamous piece of Beatles memorabilia. Now available on Amazon."

What kept me in the *cargray* for the whole ride? The writing is very good. I am a big fan of Stephen King, and the Beatles. I enjoy this story because it layers old and new, with music and horror. I wanted to see the smarmy buyer get it...

*People* Characters: There are two characters who show up in this scene; the buyer Mr. Anderson, and the agent-seller Lee Parker. The writer created such an abhorrent person in Mr. Anderson that I became emotionally involved. Ms. Parker is described more in physical terms, but she remains a cool and professional persona who although not warm, is more likable than Anderson.

*Document* Descriptions:Historical relevance surrounding John and Yoko Ono, John's assassin and a Mr. Stephen are well written, and researched to make the reader buy in, and ride this story to the end

*Globe* Overall: A winner, and I hope to read the entire book "No Rest For The Wicked."

Write on. *Quill*

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*Quill*"My Name is Lilly and I am Addicted to WDC - 100 Reviews in 30 Days Addicted" *Quill*

STATIC
Hotel COWlifornia   (18+)
Song parody of Eagles' Song Written By a Bovine Fan
#358665 by ♥Hooves♥
is a hoot.

What was the initial *Hook*? Today I had two different conversations about "Hotel California" by the Eagles. Was it Kismet of Fate that brought me here? Or was it the lonesome Moo?

What kept me in the *cargray* for the whole ride? Trying to sing "Hotel Cowlifornia" while keeping the tune to the song. Then I was laughing so hard, that my bird bit me. Which made me laugh harder, and then my bird started laughing.

*People* Characters: The Author is the true character here. Funny, funny, funny.

*Document* Descriptions: Yes. The song is fraught with descriptive lyrics of bulls, cows and the farmer. The image that heads this parody is a wonderful indicator that "Hotel Cowlifornia" will be humorous.

*Globe* Overall:The writing affected my mood, my household and the entire apartment community.

I think the padded wagon is outside now.
"I tried to stop it officer," I cried,
"It is all about a cow...
I agree to stop lowing, and leave it alone
I'll be good and quit with the bull.
Of this song and lyrics my udders are full..."

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Puzzles Come In Threes  (ASR)
A young witch goes missing -- a piece for my new witch book, Blue Bird
#1873274 by Shaara
is an entrancing story of love and family.

*Witchhat* While searching through your portfolio for a story to review for your Anniversary I was *Hook*ed by the title, "Puzzles Come In Threes"

*Witchhat* This reader was caught in empathy with Jessica. "... her voice a wail of grief." Her daughter is missing, and out of the safe range of their family/coven.

*Witchhat* Wisdom is woven within the lines of this story, "...“Hush, dear,” Auntie Simone said. “The air travels words, words better not aired, whether truth or not...” When tragedy strikes it is almost natural to start blaming someone, anyone. Auntie Simone reminds, prods gently to use words carefully. That is very good advice for all.

*Witchhat* Jezebel is under a spell by a human. No matter how powerful the coven, love seems to have been the strongest binder of all, and at the end, the reader is still left with some mystery. It is a perfect lead in for a longer tale, or a novel.

*Witchhat* Thank you for leaving the disclaimer about this being a Writer's Cramp prompt. It is helpful to know the constraints with which the writer worked with.

*Witchhat* Overall - Love this. Excellent dialog, descriptions, and not only did the story keep me bound until the end, but left me with a trace of curiosity of what happens next. Does their love survive...

Write on. *Penv*

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 The Thrill of the Hunt  (ASR)
Blood lust and the Bubonic Plague.
#286349 by Harlow Flick, Right Fielder

is a very descriptive work of fiction that I enjoyed reading.

What *Hook*ed me in? Genre = Action/Adventure, Mystery and Environment

Why did I get into the *cargray* of the story and remain in the vehicle until the end? The opening lines are so descriptive that I am drawn through empathetic discomfort of "...heat was becoming oppressive..."

*Bursto* I *Heart*"...The day was...remain an eye-squinting haze..." I know that kind of weather.

*Bursto* The world of the landfill, and the critters that have a strange "eco-balance" where some rats and other scavengers are needed, but too many - or diseased rabid critters must be eliminated to keep the man-made need of balance.

*Bursto* Great twist. At first the reader was angry, because she thought it was indiscriminate shooting and killing of a wolf or something in that family. Good job.

*Bursto* Excellent writing. As a reader, it is a thrill to get tricked until the end.

Write on. *Penbl*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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 Next Mozart or Simple Basics?  (E)
An Assignment I wrote for school to check my writing skills
#1093160 by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm
is an entertaining piece.

*Piano* I read the title, but not the genre. I am so glad that it is comedy, as well as educational, because I am laughing right now. The final vision of A Cow Eating Grass has alerted my giggle button. I see cows all the time, and you Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm have changed my POV forever. I used to yell "Yackity Yak," due to being a "Far Side" fan for decades.

*Piano* Playing the piano. As you described the mechanics of what you have to learn (and good tips for those who want to play), my eyes kind of glazed over. The preceding line is not a reflection of your writing ability, but the reason why I can only play two songs on a piano. I could not read notes, so I memorized each key played in the song "Yesterday," by the Beatles. That is just crazy... I know.

*Piano* Overall: This piece was fun to read and it is an experience for me, (still grinning like a Cheshire Cat).

*Piano* Apologies: This is not a literary review as much as it is a personal reaction to a short story that tickled me pink, and reached down into my own experiences and found kinship.

*Piano* This is good writing and considering the restraints you were under to write it, I wouldn't change a thing.

*Quill* Write on. *Quill* and *Piano* on.

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Review of After The Ice  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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After The Ice  (18+)
In a moment of panic, a man's life flashes before his eyes.
#1403971 by NickiD89


is a well written, and emotionally stunning creation.

*Snowman* The moment this reader started engulfing the words, lines and paragraphs she was feeling an adrenaline need to get ahead of the protagonist, to see what would come around the next curve. The writing is so good, not only did I get into the vehicle of the story, but I was in an endocrine empathy with both Grady, and the poor sap driving in front of him on the cliff bolstered roads.

*Snowman* Character development is over-the-top good, because Grady has become three-dimensional. The sub-characters of his beloved family are also well done enough to have left this reader with an echoing sadness for all of the Grady's of the world.

*Snowman* What a trip. Thank you for the disclaimer at the end of this story.

*Quill* Thank you for going before me on WDC and showing that a writer can become successful and that this is a community that is a living entity with like-minded writers. *Quill*

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Review of Split Ends  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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 Split Ends  (ASR)
It's hard to let go sometimes.
#959749 by Scarlett


*Notepady* is an emotional psychological tale, that is a wild ride that contains a jarring twist at the end. *Mountains* *Carbl*. Whew, I need to redo my hair!

*Notepady* The writer is wily as a fox in that the reader will be *Hook*ed, and while being reeled in, will have no choice but to try to keep their eyes open.

*Notepady* Character development is at a premium in this short story.

*Notepady* Any writer who is compelled to write, is being controlled by a muse, and is likened to a person who has more psychological ticks than a Freudian clock.

*Notepady* This reader has many more words of praise for "Split Ends," but it would be too easy to spoil it for the next reader.

Overall: I love the read, Rita's buddy, the ride, and the soul jarring ending.

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Review of Gold Mining  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Gold Mining  (E)
The biggest golden nugget my mother never gave.
#1933132 by Angels in my Ear
is a beautiful essay and tribute to your mother.

*Gold* As a reader, I enjoy the way that you compare and contrast your mother's wisdom given with gold. There are gold coins, nuggets, and "...her claim, staked long ago, was finally paying out by the bucket full..."

*Gold* As a mother who hoped to pass on golden wisdom to my sons and daughters, it is reassuring to know that although at one time you saw her "ways" as irritating, and a pain - now you realize the value of what she gave you, and how she was.

*Gold* "My mother was just kind to people because it made her happy..." is the final thought that nearly brings tears to my eyes.

*Gold* Summary: "... the things showed me. I cherish them above all. They have made me who I am. And I hope to make my own children as rich as she has made me without saying a word..." brought a feeling of warmth to my heart. Showing beats telling a million to one. The writer did mention seeking nuggets of her mother's wise words at a certain time. Now you are a wordsmith.

Thank you for the enjoyable read.

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Review of Painted Cards  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
*Clock* REVIEW FOR 36-HR MISSION BY Writing.Com Support *Bookstack* REVIEW A NEWBIE *Reading* *Quill*

What was the *Hook* that made me read and review this item?

 Painted Cards  (E)
This is actually Chapters 1 and 2 for the first book I've ever written.
#1961837 by Hispanic Attack
is the first two chapters of "Painted Cards," by Hispanic Attack I immediately got visuals of painted cards.

Recently have read a story from another WDC Member who wrote about her beautifully crafted Tarot cards, and I can envision dynamic images gracing the backs of large reddish orange cards.

*Hook* #Two: It is listed as Young Adult (YA)

*Hook* #Three: Two Chapters for under 12KB is a good deal.

*Carv* The Ride - Hooking the reader is not the only thing a writer has to do well to keep people pouring over pages. We must convince them to get in and ride with us, and hopefully take it to the end. Not only have I come to the end, but now I cannot stop thinking about this kid Oliver.


*Blockv* Description: Writer Hispanic Attack, has done very well in showing us the racing thoughts and jumbled mind of a young man who feels and operates outside of his environment. The reader finds herself in a classroom setting where she is once again an outsider. Day dreaming one of her problems. Wanting to escape a strange and hostile place.


*Blockv* Character: Oliver seems to be grieving. We know that "...Oliver made a point not to stand out. Jeans, black sneakers, a green t-shirt, and a black cotton jacket blended him..." A key is given to the reader as Oliver creates this list as a type of touchstone.

"-Oliver Keys
-Blonde hair
-Mother: Ruby Frost
-Father is missing
-Live in Colorado"



*Blockv* Technicality: I found some trouble with "... his eyes gaped out the window, aspiring everything but admiration.." but it could just be that I do not get it. But I will continue to think about Oliver and "The Painted Cards."


*Blockv* Suggestion:Reread your chapters out loud as they are. It is a good way to check for flow. "Painted Cards" is a very interesting story, and I cannot wait to read more about Oliver, and his thorny world. Thank you.

*Penbl* Write on!

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 Through the Super Collider  (E)
A physicist is working late, falls asleep and has a strange dream
#1693491 by Light
is beautiful.

*Hook* Hook Line and Sinker - you had me at Physicist Scientific and Poetry

*blockgray* Reaction as a science-nerd: The Super Collider came up in a conversation yesterday. That is the coincidence that made me click on "Through the Super Collider".

*blockgray* The prose is so well done;

"...I’m called String Theory

What about you
Ball of quivering activity
They call me
Quantum Loop Gravity

I should not see two
Both theories can’t exist..."

*blockgray* The universe is being discussed and diagrammed upon the chalkboard of those written words. *stargray* *Globe*

*blockgray* An experience of our unlimited imagination that is truth stranger than fiction.

*blockgray* Overall: You have a new fan and follower. As a writer, you have engaged me to a point of near obsession with the subject and intelligence of your work. *Reading*

*Tools2* Technical: There are probably more errors in this review than in your beautifully crafted prose. I would not change a thing.

Bravo. *Hand1*

Write On! *Quill*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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 The Story of the Realm  (E)
A once upon a time which created the plains of existence
#1961439 by Dylan Faustus
is a story about an enduring love that surpasses time and space. Some love stories are written about soul mates also known as Twin Flames. *Fire* *Fire*

*Fire**Hook**Fire* Opening Hook: It seems irreverent to use the term "hook," for what persuaded this reader to go beyond the title. "...When they saw each other flames sparked within the
destined pair..."

*Fire* The opening paragraph is of epic quality:

*Fire* The reader is dropped into a descriptive scene of a crowded and insane market area. "... met through the chaos of a town
market..."

*Fire* We have a solid man and woman who are the main characters: "The woman was...", "... the man stood..."

*Fire* There is a connection or a building tension: "... The woman was snatched away...", "...the man stood awe struck by what he just felt..."

*Fire* A major incident occurs which promises to lead to more action: "...their love for one and other drew them together..."

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*Bookstack* There are books I have read that have stayed in my accessible memory banks over four decades. One favorite begins the first paragraph as one complete sentence. The more artistic word weavers (writers) are able to imprint a vision of the scene that has played through their heads, and present it to the reader.

*Thought2* You Dylan Faustus have pulled this off.

*Reading* I have read the entire story several of times and although you are considered a "Newbie" here, it is obvious you are no stranger to muse, pen and paper (computer, etc.).

*Books4* The format that you have used to format the story is good and proper. and it cannot help be "shaped" in prose. May I suggest that you give more space to the lines. It is not about the writing, but what attracts and keeps readers to the end. Some readers will read anything in any font, at any size, but today's readers like ease of view.

*Peno* Literary prose is a growing genre in books today. This is just a suggestion. Take it or leave it.

*Staro**Staro**Staro**Staro**Staro* "The Story of the Realm," is a 5 star or better work, but [I detest it when people say this, but it has really helped me, and that is my goal ] I would ask that you allow me to await a complete review until I have read it again.

*Bookopen* Show, don't tell. This is common for writers. We are writing those descriptive phrases, "her knee exploded with pain as the cold tile slapped her violently, the end of her nose brushed the small layer of dust on the floor." Then we get excited..."she jumped up and ran because her knee was bleeding." - The reader was once within the story, experiencing what was happening to the character. Then, we cannot wait to get her moving to the good part of the story, so we just tell them what happens instead of letting them feel her pain as she struggles to her feet,...As a writer, I do this all the time.

*Books3**Fire* The bones of this story are a certain success.

*PenO* Write On.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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 A Gypsy Spins a Tale  (13+)
A fortune told, events predicted
#1926395 by Gaby ~ Keeper Of The Realm
is a very well written short story.

*Hook* Hook: Gypsy. I love to hear tales about gypsies. The title "A Gypsy Spins a Tale," is alluring. It promises to be a unique story with brought by a gypsy.

*Traincar2R* Emily: I love her character. She is both parts of her dad Matt, and her mom Sarah. She is an inquisitive child with both parents who take time to teach and communicate with her. I enjoy the interaction of both parents at separate times as well as when they are together as a family.

*Traincar2R* The gypsy woman: The dirty red scarf. I like how the writer set this up for the overview of the gypsy population near their home, and the set up for initial contact with the gypsy storyteller, and then, the final interaction.

*Traincar2R* Concept: As the reader, I found this story to have an important moral about being slow to judge other people, and that kindness can be rewarded.

*Traincar2R* Interaction: Throughout the story The interaction between Emily and her parents, the stranger gypsies, friends and parents of friends are all believable. "...filled her lungs with air and yelled, "MOOOOOOM!!! Seth is being mean again!..."

*Traincar2R* Overall: Two thumbs up because three would be odd. Terrific story.

Write on. *PenR*

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