This is a cool word search. The words in it are quite unique to what one would find in a normal word seach. Frankly, I am quite bad at word searches, myself, so I didn't finish it. But I would still like to send a review that may or may not help you out.
I liked how you have a well mapped out story. The casual reader, that may not be interested in research, may have been a bit confused about the storyline. But, I followed your links, and there is actually a lot to it.
I like your art style. It actually reminds me of a friend's style, that I haven't seen in a while. I am huge anime/manga fan, so that helps me like your entry all the more. I noticed your art files labeled "Felarya Vore Comic." I like your.. I guess I would call it.. format. The way each page is set up, and the visual sound effects, all make it much better. Also, each of your characters have their own characteristics, that are much different than the others. I probably speak on behalf of a lot of viewers when I say, the emphasis on breasts, and such, as a manga, would definitely furthermore hold the readers attention. Example: Orihime from Bleach.
I noticed that you said English is not your original language. I am going to try to help you out a little bit with the sentence structure and proper spelling for:
But, it's not that big of a deal. I mean, after all, you are not trying to write novels, you're making comics. But having proper spelling and good sentence structure will help peak the interests of the reader a little more. I will post the paragraphs here so you can see how they should look.
"Uh oh! Somehow, you've managed to end up in the one place that is considered highly dangerous: Felarya, the place full of strange stories about large women, treasure, and danger.
You better keep your wits about you while you are here. For you never know who, or what, is lurking in those wild areas, waiting for a chance to eat a foolish adventurer. Don't let appearances deceive you."
There are not many mistakes there. For someone that is using english as a second language, you have a good grasp of it. I'm going to look at some more of your deviant art. Keep up the good work!
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