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I love this activity because you didn't JUST include a poll; you included facts about Harry Potter. I love learning new things so I loved reading this. It has been years since I saw the movies and I never read the books so the refresher was nice. I like how within your poll, you described the characters. I was pleasantly surprised to see that my favorite character, Hermoine Granger, was the most popular in the poll. My second choice, Harry Potter, was the second in line! I guess I have a popular taste. I liked the set up and design of this as well, with the two pictures you used. The pictures demonstrated your knowledge of WritingML. Overall I enjoyed the page. You should update it and make it current. There's tons of Harry Potter fans on here, I see them all the time.


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Review by Dominique
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This is a nice quiz about dragons to interact with the writing dot com community and get everyone involved. Fun trivia for everyone. You included topics that meany people would know and be interested in such as Harry Potter, Disney's Pete's Dragon, Dragonheart, DragonLance, and Eragon. I didn't personally know ALL the answers but it got me involved and interested to find out. I like how each question was in a different colored font, adding some spunk to the quiz questions and making it more appealing to the eye. You did a wonderful job.



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Review by Dominique
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This is a wonderful piece. It reminds you to believe and keep your imagination alive.

Something I noticed was that your entire poem was saying "I believe" but your subtitle says "I beautiful" I couldn't tell if it was a typo or on purpose.

This was inspirational and positive. My favorite part was at the end when you say, "I believe in you." It was a great affirmational way to close out.

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Review of ~Evil Fairies  
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Wow! This is an incredible, dark poetic beauty. I love it. It really is a gem. This is something that I would pay to read. I was immediately interested by the title prompt but then once I started reading... You really did your thing with this. The line, "their reflections are your child's deepest fears" was chilling and incredible for this poem. It was one of my favorite lines. Great job with this!


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Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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This is a fun event. It is unique and original. I enjoyed being a part of it.

Raffle tickets: one thing that I think could make this better would be to make different pricing raffle tickets. What I mean by this is... Every raffle ticket costs 1,000 gift points. I suggest making some either less or more.

Appearance: I love the different images for each item. They look scrumptious. You did a great job setting this up and working with the theme. I love Alice in Wonderland.

You clearly spent a lot of time with this and it shows. You did an excellent job. Keep up the fantastic job!

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Review by Dominique
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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This was a wonderful poem in the form of a story. A sweet marriage proposal between a fairy and a prince. I like that they got their happily ever after at the end. She no longer had to be lonely in the world by herself. She was able to make her own little family. It had great rhythm and flow even without any rhyme. I didnt notice any grammatical errors or spelling mistakes. 5 STARS from me. Continue writing amazing pieces.


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Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Appearance: I just figured I'd make you aware that the image at the start of your writing says "image ID #1851550 unavailable". I like the festive emoticons at the bottom, too. I understood the green font, that was obvious why it was used but the other color added seemed a bit much... maybe because I don't see how it would go with the theme. If it wasn't a holiday or festive poem, I wouldn't really say that - I love green and blue but I just don't think for the specific poem it matches. Unless I'm unaware of how the color ties into the leprechauns.

Rhyme: You followed the rhyme scheme of: (ABCABC - DDEEF - GHIGHI - DDEEF - JKLJKL - DDEEF). The recurring stanza alternating between the others were a nice touch. Your rhymes were done well and didn't feel forced or overdone. I like how "fantasy / can't you see" was rhymed nicely and it wasn't just a single word rhyme. It was done well. There were also several in-line rhymes done such as: "when you need a friend, here comes that rainbow again"

Flow and Rhythm: Your poem flowed naturally and freely. The repeating stanza flowed well into it, creating a base for the rest of the writing

Elijah got to learn what love truly is. I enjoyed reading this lovely poem and look forward to reading more from you soon/

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Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Right away I was drawn in by the appearance of this piece. I really like the layout, center alignment, wonderful use of emoticons, and the green font in the one accent sentence.

I liked this awesome riddle for Saint Patrick's Day. It was unique and original for sure. A fun holiday piece about a leprechaun and his pot of gold! Great job! Keep up the good work and write on!

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Review of Irish Heaven  
Review by Dominique
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Another cute Irish Limerick from you! Once again, I love it! You followed the rules of the Limerick completely-- five lines, following the AABBA pattern with the syllable count done correctly, I believe. (9-9-5-5-9).

I don't know who Sean McGee is-- I actually checked Bing search results just in case he was famous and I was missing an important piece of this poem. I assume you used the name because it's a common Irish name. But I don't know, you may actually know a Sean McGee, either way, it works perfectly within the Limerick for several reasons.

The prompt was "make me laugh." You did, indeed, make me laugh. I enjoyed reading your poem! It was a relief in the line of poems and stories I'll be reviewing today, tonight and tomorrow for my holiday review raid. I'm glad yours was a good one in the mix!

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Review of Sons of Erin  
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I enjoyed this short, sweet poem. I like reading Limerick's a lot. They're fun. Your Limerick was a nice festive treat. It followed the rules of Limerick's to a T. The rhyme scheme was AABBA, 5 lines, with the traditional 9-9-5-5-9 form. I noticed no grammatical errors or spelling mistakes. You followed the prompt well. I loved it. I can't wait to read more from you soon. Goood job! Write on.

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Review by Dominique
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I love Limerick poems and this one is not an exception to that! It was written well. A nice short and sweet poem about Phil who wrote poems with a hedgehog quill! It was cute. It's interesting that he made his ink from flowers and dried dill. Nice little fact there because I didn't know you could do that! You learn something new every day! Your poem rhymed well- following the pattern of AABBA. It flowed naturally and freely. It was a light, interesting piece and grabbed my attention.

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Review by Dominique
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This was an incredible poem. I truly enjoyed reading it! It brought a smile to my face. It rhymed well, in couplets throughout the entire poem. The rhymes never seemed forced or overdone. The poem flowed naturally and freely. It read well and with a nice rhythm. It had nice history within the poem. It was dedicated to Phillip James Carney, who I guess could have been the happy Irish boy in the poem. Maybe not though, either way, it was a beautiful poem. It held tons of meaning and praise to Saint Patrick's Day, a lovely holiday! I enjoyed reading the poem. I didn't notice any grammatical errors or spelling mistakes. Everything seemed well written and pieced together. I can tell you put a lot of time and work into this.

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Review by Dominique
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Appearance: I like how only the title was in green font. It added a nice touch with the accent of the title without overkill with the entire piece being green.

Grammar and Spelling: I didn't notice any grammatical errors or spelling mistakes. Everything seemed to be written well.

It was a nicely written piece about Saint Patrick's Day. You added about the spirit it brings people in America, causing everyone to suddenly be Irish on the day, which is SO TRUE! I just bought my son (who's German and Puerto Rican) Saint Patrick's Day shamrock necklaces to wear tomorrow for fun. You added in about the bagpipes, leprechauns and more. I enjoyed reading your festive poem! Happy Saint Patty's Day!!!


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Review of Festive and Green  
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This is a unique poem. It's very original- about explaining Saint Patrick's Day to aliens.

Rhyme, Rhythm and Flow: You rhymed every other line which worked well for this poem and didn't overdo it. For the most part, your rhymes were done well. In a couple places, such as stanza five, I didn't quite agree with shamrock / rock rhyming. or airlock / talk in stanza three but that could be the difference in pronunciation. I'm from Jersey soo I say talk sort of like TAWLK. and lock like LAHK. I don't know if that makes any sense. haha

I was very interested in your poem. It drew me in right away with the subtitle. It was written well. I didn't notice any grammatical errors or spelling mistakes.



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Review of St. Patrick's Day  
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What a lovely, festive Saint Patrick's Day poem. It was a fun and light poem for the holiday. Green is, indeed on display! I love this holiday even though I am not Irish!!!

Appearance: I think it would add to the poem if you spruced it up a bit. Being that it's such a short piece, centering it and making it the largest font size would make it pop. Also, I think when you write "St. Patrick's green is on display" it would look cute to add the word "green" in the color green. Just a suggestion, there's absolutely nothing wrong with the way it is now!

Rhyme, Rhythm, and Flow: Your poem rhymed well following the rhyme pattern of AABBA. The rhymes didn't feel forced or overdone.


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Review of Dublin Sunset  
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Prompt: I like where you went with the given prompt, "You'll be fine." You turned it into an intriguing piece. I love how your first stanza begins with "You'll be fine lad, tomorrow" and your last stanza starts with "You won't be fine tomorrow".

Grammar and Spelling: One thing I did notice was the spelling of "Guinness," which should have two n's.

Rhyme, rhythm, and flow: Your poem was not a rhyming poem which is perfectly fine. It flowed freely and felt natural.

Emotion: This was a nice piece about memories of Ireland in December on Dublin Street. The lonely and down vibe penetrated through the writing into the reader. It felt dark and gloomy. Especially when reading, "without faith, without love, without hope, after the loss..." but the ending left the reader with a sense of hope. "might hold his heart in a smile one day" - you're left hoping for that smile and warm-hearted emotions.



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Review by Dominique
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This was a cute poem about Saint Patrick's Day. You did a terrific job of explaining how a typical Saint Patrick's Day goes while adding in some of the history and symbols of the day.

Rhyme, Rhythm and Flow: Your rhymes were superb. You followed the rhyme scheme of AABB CCDDEE FFGG HHII. It was rhyming couplets which you added at the bottom for the reader. Your rhymes didn't feel forced, they flowed well. The rhythm of the poem felt natural and was done well.

The only thing I could possibly point out as far as constructive criticism is that in stanza two, you wrote six lines instead of the four in all the other stanzas. There's absolutely nothing WRONG with that and I felt the poem looked fine but some readers may feel it makes it unbalanced. I have had reviewers tell me that about my own writing which is why I even noticed it. Like I said, I don't see why it would matter but some apparently think it does.

I like how you added the line count, the contest entered, prompt and form at the bottom. It is there for reference yet not in your face or BAM the very first thing you read. You displayed good use of WritingML by adding the links as well.


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Review by Dominique
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Appearance: Festive! Your poem was festive, creative and well put together. The color green suited it and worked well with the theme. The emoticons were placed wonderfully and not overdone. It looks really nice.

Emotion: I loved your poem! I really did. I was smiling the entire time and you got me, I was laughing at the end. It was brilliant and fun and creative. I truly enjoyed reading your words.

Rhyme and rhythm: Your poem rhymed beautifully. You chose the rhyme pattern of AABBA CCDDC and it worked well with this piece. Your rhymes didn't seem forced or overdone. The rhythm and flow were on point.

Overall, I give you a 5 STAR rating. I would rate it higher, but there are just no stars there to do so.... haha. I enjoyed reading this and look forward to reading more from you in the future!



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Review by Dominique
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hey! What an excellent crossword puzzle! You spent a lot of time going through each portfolio to be able to fill in the questions. I know because I just searched for all of them for the answers. *Rolling* I got them all correct, yay! You're going to die when I tell you which question I got stumped on for a second. Yes, my own!!!!!! HAHAHA. The last question was "Sparta, New Jersey is home to Dominique ______. Well, silly me looked and saw it wasn't enough letters for my last name and thought you got it wrong. I clicked on my portfolio and everything!! only to notice, ummm duhhhhh, I wrote my middle name in my port which should NOT have taken me that long to realize. *Rolling* This was a great job! I didn't notice any grammatical errors or spelling mistakes. The title was large and bolded in my favorite color, purple. It had a sweet introduction referencing the rising star candidates!

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Review by Dominique
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Hello! I read your short story which I found on the I write in 2019 forum.

Favorites:
What a great storyline! I love the idea here! This could turn into something incredible and eerie. I was drawn in especially with the haunted inn. That was a clever idea and the message in a bottle was unique as well.

Least Favorites:
Something that struck me as odd when reading was.. why would he take the bottle all the way home before reading the message especially if he thought it could just be a receipt? That part just seemed a little unbelievable to me.
I noticed a ton of grammatical errors, -ly adverbs and passive voice.

Grammar and Spelling:
- He couldn’t tell if it was a soda bottle or a beer battle but it didn’t matter. [battle -> bottle, add a comma before but]
- You used the Passive voice throughout a majority of your writing. I noticed this because I recently learned what it is in a grammar class and how to change my writing to avoid Passive voice, so it sticks out to me now. Linking verbs should be used in moderation.
-For example of my point above^: "There was a set of tweezers in his desk. He used the tweezers to pull the paper out of the bottle." -> Instead of using a linking verb, you could say something like-> He grabbed a set of tweezers from his desk and used them to remove the paper from the bottle.-- Notice what a difference it can make when using action verbs?
- It was actually several papers that had been typed on and stapled together at one corner. [I feel this sentence would be stronger without 'that had been typed on.' Maybe, write something like-> He flipped through several pages of font typed in Times New Roman.
- They’re all heirs to the deceased [add comma] and apparently [add comma] there were stipulations.
- There are rumors of the inn being haunted. [awkward sentence. Plus, it's passive voice. Try an action verb-> Rumors claim that ghosts haunt the inn.]
- It appears as though someone is trying to cover up their guilt by pin the murder on a ghost. [pin -> pinning]
- the road has been washed out by the weather [add comma] and more bad weather is coming.
- Unfortunately, there’s no other way off the property as there are the inn’s two boats are unusable. [this sentence is miswritten. I understand what you were trying to say, but it reads wrong.
- I’ve done the best I can to collect and preserve evidence [add comma] but I need help.
- If you find this, please contact any law enforcement [agency] that may be able to assist ASAP.
- I fear for the lives of those currently at the hotel, including mine. [adverbs, especially -ly adverbs weaken prose. When using an -ly adverb, consider whether you need it. Will the sentence mean the same thing if I delete it? If yes, then it's redundant and should be erased- immediately. That's what I've been taught and what I'm working on changing in my own writing. Passive Voice and Adverbs are a struggle, but once we grasp it, our writing will sound so much better!!!!]
- Please send help, [comma-> period]
- Robert grew more worried as he read the letter. [consider rewriting to make the sentence stronger]
- He knew the pine Marten Inn. [Capitalize: Pine]
- He listened to the other line ring until it was picked. -> [picked UP or answered]
- We’ll met you at the docks in ten minutes. [met -> meet]
- WE don’t have a moment to lose [in informal writing, capitalizing words and sentences are fine and even the norm. In formal writing, it's appropriate to use italics instead.

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Review by Dominique
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I couldn't agree with you more about nature encouraging spirituality. I think back on my entire life and pick out moments where I was the most peaceful and they all involve nature. I was outside in every single scenario or with an animal. One of the most peaceful moments I can remember was sitting outside near a peacock in a rehab facility. I was in detox/rehab, and there was a peacock that roamed the property. We were allowed out for air and smoke breaks, but we couldn't go too far. Every day I would go and search for him, and he gave me such a serenity. I can't even describe it. Since then, they're my favorite animal. Thankfully, I am from the country, so I live with nature and animals nearby. I live next to a horse farm, and there are random other animals there as well (cows and such). It's so wonderful in the summer to be able to walk to see the horses at the fence.

Grammar and Spelling:
- I live in a urban{/b} area [an* since the following word starts with a vowel]
- wit h the exception of the queen palms [with]
- Keep transferring poems to "Poem Experiments" and "Poem Experiments" . [the period should be inside of the quotation marks.]
- Finish 200 poem dedicated to The Bab in the next 241 day. [poem-> poems, day-> days]

Appearance:
Your blog is designed fabulously. It has all the proper links to follow exactly what you're referring to. The prompts are all bolded or in color. You added in "Istiqlál (independence), 4 Ayyám-i-Há (The Days of Há) 175 B.E. - Friday, March 1, 2019" which was awesome!!! Your list was in an assortment of colored bullet points. It was pretty!

My favorite part:
My absolute favorite part was that you added in a poem. It was short and sweet but a lovely poem. Without you even having to explain it, which I'm glad you did, it answered the prompt entirely in those few words. I loved it!!



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Review by Dominique
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Great response to the prompt question! I can totally relate when it comes to wandering off and fantasizing. I understand completely about stress pushing you into a fantasy world. It's why so many people love to read and write. You enter into another world and can live vicariously through it. Even watching movies does that for me. That was an excellent point and coping skill to point out: when you don't have anything to focus on, you revert back to fantasizing. Keeping busy and your mind occupied helps.

Appearance: I love how your prompt question is in color but the rest isn't. It's something I should consider doing more. I always overdo it with the colors. Whenever I see it done like this, I'm reminded that less is more.

Spelling and Grammar:
- The basic problem was stress which cause me to fantasize... [I believe 'cause' should be 'caused']
- Stress still tends to push me into a fantasy world, however, if I can focus on writing, reviewing, reading, or prayer I usually manage to pull myself out. [I believe the comma before 'however' should be a semicolon instead because it is followed by a complete sentence. Or, a new sentence. One or the other.

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Hey!!! Task number five led me here from MHWA, and I'm certainly glad it did!!! This article was very informative and helpful. I've never used edit points before and now I'm kicking myself for it! This taught me so much! This is only the second time I've seen anyone use edit points on WDC. It's so much more helpful for the reviewer because it takes so much time and effort to keep retyping or copying/pasting chunks of their writing into the review box.

Appearance: I like how you sectioned it well with underlined titles, but I think it would look nice to also bold it or maybe just a bit larger font. That is purely my preference though; there's nothing wrong with the way you have it. I love how you used the edit points within the article to demonstrate what you were teaching. Adding the edit points after each title and then again after each paragraph was a great way to go about it in case you either want to talk about the entire section or possibly just that specific paragraph.

Something that shocked me... Now, I love how you added in the lift for each membership level and how many edit points they are allowed. But what shocked me was how many items were allowed. For an upgraded membership, only ten items are allowed. The 100 edit points are wonderful and certainly enough, but ten items aren't much based on how many items are in my portfolio already. That part threw me off.

Grammar and Spelling:
- This item contains Edit Points ~#~ you can click to leave feedback right within item. [THERE IS AN ARTICLE MISSING BEFORE 'ITEM']
- I've used the often underutilized function on WDC [ADD COMMA] known as edit points
- wish.I will regularly review and clear them as I'm available [COMMA] so comments are always welcome. [2 THINGS: 1. ADD SPACE BETWEEN WISH AND NEW SENTENCE. 2. ADD COMMA BEFORE 'SO']
- Using edit points is a judgement call [SP: JUDGMENT]
- If the writer is uncomfortable with the first draft, then EPs may not necessarily [BE?] a good choice
- when they are enabled. This function does not enable anyone else to edit the piece, only offer editing suggestions. [GRAMATICALLY CORRECT! BUT, SINCE THE SENTENCE BEFORE IT ENDED IN 'ENABLED' THEN YOU AGAIN USE THE SAME WORD 4 WORDS LATER, MAYBE YOU COULD CONSIDER SWITCHING IT TO A SYNONYM. JUST A THOUGHT.]
- Edit points are available for all membership levels, [I BELIEVE THIS SHOULD BE A SEMICOLON SINCE IT FOLLOWS WITH A COMPLETE SENTENCE] however your membership will determine how many edit points are available to you.
- Generally [ADD COMMA] if EPs are available
- depending on the quality of the piece, time constraints [ADD COMMA] and other issues.
-- If I find significant issues with the plot, characterization or overall writing style, I'm less apt to use edit points because the piece will undergo significant revisions and the story structure can change significantly, therefore a line-by-line critique would be a waste of my time except to point out patterns of issues (such as consistently spelling a word wrong or misusing punctuation). [WOW, THAT'S A LONG SENTENCE. I SUGGEST BREAKING IT INTO SEVERAL SENTENCES INSTEAD OF ONE SUPER LONG RUN-ON]
- I will use EPs to provide more detail to compliment a review. [SP: COMPLEMENT IN THIS CONTEXT]
- The EPs are an excellent way to do this. [I WOULD TAKE OUT 'THE' BEFORE EP'S AND JUST SAY EP'S ARE AN EXCELLENT WAY TO DO THIS. IT READS MORE CLEARLY.]

- haha I'm so silly, I could have used the edit points for this review yet didn't.

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Review by Dominique
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi! I saw your post in the I write in 2019 forum. What an incredible poem!!! This really is great. It held so much meaning and emotion. I thought it was crafty how you began the first rhyme off of the title. You taught me a new poetry form: the EP Johnson Quintet. I read about it in the link you provided which was extremely helpful for the reader especially since I never heard of it before. You followed the quintets (5 line stanzas).
So, for the EP Johnson Quintet, it is meant to be 8-9-9-9-8 syllables per line. Although, I was confused by the link you provided because it is worded weirdly and almost sounds as if you shouldn't do that for the first stanza. It confused me by saying "patterned after the first stanza of Ms. Johnson's poem" yet, if you noticed, in their poem example they had it 8-9-9-9-8 in the first stanza. There were other discrepencies with their example poem as well because some lines had 7 syllables but we won't go there, that's besides the point. So, if they're all meant to be 8-9-9-9-8 then your syllable count was off because yours was 8-9-9-10-8 for stanza one. The rest was correct. If not, then you did it perfectly. According to another site posted below, that's not the case. They're all meant to follow the 8-9-9-9-8 syllable count. I researched it because I like to learn new things, not to pick apart your poem, just so you know. I loved your poem!!! It rhymed on point. abbba, accca, addda. The last words of line 1 and 5 were repeated within the stanzas as the form suggests. I also learned something else new from all of this, I always used to write abbba abbba abbba or abbba abcba (whatever) but I never actually put it together until now that the next stanza would have to continue the alphabet and not start over. For some reason, I had it in my mind that each stanza was its own universe haha. Look at all the things you're teaching me! *Laugh* Your Uncle Ray sounds like he was a great man. Someone to be proud of and look up to. You definitely got those feelings through to the reader with your poem. It was filled with emotion and love. Even though it doesn't say a word about love, you can just feel it and sense the connection though your words which is an excellent trait for a poem to have. Great job.

Referance:
http://poetscollective.org/poetryforms/epjohnson-q...


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for entry "Minions " 
Review by Dominique
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hey, 💙 Carly ! I am here to review your poem from I write in 2019 and also Power Reviewers as well.

Oh my gosh, for such a short poem with only 24 syllables you KILLED it girl! I loved it so much!

Poetic Form: It's incredible what you made happen in 24 syllables, it really is. I hope you win the contest because it really is great. The prompt was minions and not only did you make it fit in, you made the poem work so well around it. You used it in such a proper STRONG way. The poem flowed perfectly together, each line flowing into the next to form one larger picture. It wasn't choppy and each line a different idea. It all blended together into perfection.

Grammar and Spelling: I saw no errors in grammar or spelling. It was written well, clear and to the point.

Appearance: I'm in love with your signature. I can only see the second two photos-- the first one says "** Image ID #1855238 Unavailable **". I'm not sure if it's because I'm on a lower WDC status or if the photo isn't viewable to anyone. I thought I'd let you know just in case it was the ladder. But the two images I can see are beautiful and add such a nice touch to the poem.


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