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Psychological Thrillers, Drama, Certain Romance
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Sci-Fi is painful for me to read. Nothing personal but it's not my thing
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Novels
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Novels because I don't want to commit to it. I'm struggling to finish my own books. A novel is too much for me
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Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Mr.Thos.Crown has $ & Cars, luv!! Thank you for sharing your article with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words! Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome. Nor did I notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. So great job.

You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

What I liked most about your writing was very informal and a great review of the TV show, Extreme Makeover: Home Edition

What I liked least about it was I started to lose interest and attention in it halfway through and had to force myself to keep coming back to it.

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Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (5.0)
amazing!
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Review of Choosing Happy  
Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello LadyLeo!! Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words! Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome. Nor did I notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. So great job.

I suggest going back through your writing with a thesaurus and rhyming dictionary. They are our best friend! Avoid boring, dull language. Get rid of overused words! It would truly improve your writing to spruce up the wording a bit. The rhyming dictionary will enhance your poetry, allowing for more complex rhymes.

What I liked most about your writing was the flow and rhythm of it.

What stood out to me was in the fourth stanza all of a sudden, it stops rhyming. In all the other stanzas b-d rhyme. Stanza 4 reads "think-to me" as the ending words. I suggest sticking with the flow; it was working.

You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.


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Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello PureSciFi - And the Oscar goes!! Thank you for sharing your lovely work with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words! Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome. Nor did I notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. So great job.

You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.
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I suggest going back through your writing with a thesaurus, they are our best friend! Avoid boring, dull language. Get rid of overused words! It would truly improve your writing to spruce up the wording a bit.

The characters were believable for the SciFi genre.

What I liked most about your writing was your creativity.

What I liked least about it was there was no description, only dialogue. There wasn't even any description of who they were other than what you gather from yourself.

What stood out to me was the font fits your genre well.



You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.


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Review of Absurdities  
Review by Dominique
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello again, Prosperous Snow (Neva)!! Thank you for sharing your poetry with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words! Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

I didn't notice many glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome. Nor did I notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. So great job.

You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

What stood out to me was the line "crash through the open all the windows of my mind." I understand that you were trying to get your prompt to fit in there but I suggest you fix that line. You either could add punctuation, specifically, a comma to read as --> crash through the open, all the windows. Although, to be honest, that's still not really correct. Otherwise, I'd suggest changing the entire line.

You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.


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Review of Damsel  
Review by Dominique
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello there again Purple Princess!! Thank you for sharing your wonderful words with me again, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem! Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome. Nor did I notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. So great job.

You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language. I actually had to look up the word steed. So, you taught me a new word, thank you.

What I liked most about your writing was it flowed well and was written beautifully. I could feel the emotion invested in your words.

What I liked least about it was: Nothing!! I personally prefer rhyming poetry but that's a personal preference, having nothing to do with your poem at all or how well it was written. So, nothing for this category. Oh, maybe the font. Definitely the font. hahaha

What stood out to me was how pretty it sounded when read out loud.

You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.


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Review of Goodnight  
Review by Dominique
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
This is really amazing! you did an awesome job, I entered so I read the others and I feel that you have the highest probability to win. Of course, I'm not a judge or professional by any means. Eighteen syllables only is a challenge, but you did that girl! Be proud of yourself. It flowed extremely well and naturally. The rhymes were crafty and clever. Short but sweet as they say. You've said so much in a little amount of space; I wonder what you'd say with endless space.

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Review of A Service to God  
Review by Dominique
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello again Tim Chui!! Thank you for sharing another one of your poems with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words! Keep in mind, yet again, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome. Nor did I notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. So great job.

You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

What I liked most about your writing was that your poem rhymed and rhymed well. It flowed naturally and freely.

You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.


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Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Tim Chiu!! Thank you for sharing your poem with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words! Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome. Nor did I notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. So great job.

You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

What I liked most about your writing was that you didn't use ordinary, boring vocabulary.

What I liked least about it was in some places I felt that it didn't flow naturally.

You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.


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Review by Dominique
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Eleanor Willow!! *Smile*
Thank you for sharing your short story with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words! Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is awesome. Nor did I notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with that. So great job.

You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

The characters were believable. They fit the genre.

What I liked most about your writing was that it was written well. There weren't mistakes everywhere (that I noticed)

What I liked least about it was the font size is small and was making my eyes hurt after a bit of reading.

You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.


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Review of Man's Best Friend  
Review by Dominique
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hello !! Thank you for sharing you _ with me, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your words! Keep in mind, I am not a professional, my suggestions are just that, suggestions. At the end of the day, do what you feel is right for your writing! Any suggestion I make is done with love and a desire to simply help you become the best writer you can be.

I did notice quite a few grammatical errors in your writing. I suggest going back over your writing with a fine tooth comb and remember to edit, edit, edit! Specifically, quotation marks, commas, et cetera.
I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, you seemed to be on point there.

You had an excellent word choice, avoiding boring, dull language.

The characters were believable.

What I liked most about your writing was that you included an extremely helpful dictionary for the unknown words in your story. That helped a lot for I did not know what they meant.

What I liked least about it was

What stood out to me was when you repeated wrote three times, "The computer beeped. " I felt like there was other ways to describe it.. like perhaps show, don't tell would have worked well there.

You held my attention from the first sentence until the very end.


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Review by Dominique
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Sum1!! I wanted to thank you for sharing this lovely poem with me! I thoroughly enjoyed it from the first line until the very last word. Your poem was creative, clever, inventive!!! It flowed freely and naturally, sounding rhythmic and in tune. Your word choice was excellent; you didn't stick with boring, dull language. The way it all pulled together was done well. I am rating your poem 5 stars because I felt that it was done exceptionally well. I didn't notice any spelling mistakes. Nor did I notice any grammatical errors.

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Review of A TALE OF DEEP  
Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello AP!! Thank you for sharing your poem with me, I enjoyed reading it. I, personally, prefer poetry that rhymes vs. the latter. It seemed like you were shoving words in awkward arrangement just to have a rhyme in a select few places. I suggest using a rhyming dictionary to help add in larger, more complex rhymes than he-me, we-see, etc. They are extremely helpful, I don't know what I'd do without them. Just google it, if unaware, it's not something you have to go out and purchase. Good luck on your writing! I hope this turns into something great

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Review of The Interview  
Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Purple Princess!! I enjoyed reading your short and sweet words about Eva's job interview! You held my attention, I was interested from the first sentence until the very last word. I didn't notice any blaring grammatical errors. Nor did I notice any spelling mistakes, you were on point with editing. (unless you just write perfectly from the start!) The characters were believable and likeable. I was happy when Eva got hired for the job especially causing me to smile with how/why she got hired! It was sweet.
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Review of Head Games - FF  
Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, we meet again HuntersMoon!! Another intriguing story of yours that captured my attention, stealing it until the very end. I enjoyed reading this! The cliff hanger makes me want more, to know what's going to happen next! Your grammar was proper and your spelling was on point. The characters are believable. I automatically felt horrible for Zack and Alan, imagining their heads being shot/cut off. So many possibilities. Your word choice was excellent, not using boring, dull language. I hope you continue with this story, I'd love to read it!

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Review of The Holocaust  
Review by Dominique
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Schnujo-Join item 2109126 *Bigsmile*!! (Interesting name haha). Thank you for sharing your poem about the Holocaust with me! It was, indeed, a terrible loss for the world, as you mentioned. It was truly short and sweet- in such a small space, you managed to fill in an incredible amount of detailed information regarding the Holocaust. You did it in a way that still allowed the poem to flow naturally. It was well done. You gave facts, while still allowing for emotion on the event to shine through. It was a catastrophe, as you correctly stated, one that people need to be educated on. Information is power, and here you've given the information in a beautiful, natural form. I didn't see any spelling mistakes or grammatical errors.

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Review of Allure  
Review by Dominique
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello again HuntersMoon or Ken!! I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem. Thank you for sharing it with me! Your words were written well, flowing beautifully and naturally. They captured my attention immediately and held it until the very end. I even reread it twice. You grammar was on point, I didn't notice any errors there. Nor did I see any spelling mistakes, good job! It was creative and clever. Great usage of words, you didn't have to go back with a thesaurus, really. Although, you did use a common cliché.. moth to a light, moth to a flame - that cliché is overused, overworked, overdone. Perhaps, you could come up with your own metaphor? Describe it in a way that isn't used daily. Make it own clever description.


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Review by Dominique
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello HuntersMoon! Thank you for sharing your review on the movie Rat Pack with me. I found it extremely helpful for I have never seen it before. Something I found amazing, was your ratings pertaining to specific age groups. That's something I haven't actually seen before, done quite the same, yet it is so helpful! I didn't notice any spelling mistakes or grammatical errors. Your review was clear, to the point yet descriptive. It allowed the reader to have a clear understanding of the movie and whether it would be their type.

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Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello ChrisDaltro-Chasing Moonbeams! Thank you for sharing your writing with me, for I thoroughly enjoyed reading the beginning of a love story. One thing I have to say, as the reader, I was confused. It seemed as though Christina just made her account on eheart.com and Butchie messaged her. Yet, immediately he was saying I love you, Christina. That seemed scary to me, stalkerish at best - stage 5 clinger for SURE! If that's not what's happening here, I suggest that you add in more details. Maybe her thoughts on the situation, on Butchie or more conversations before the I love you. In the description it reads: "After subscribing to a relationship site, their lives changed. This is how it started!" So, yeah.. I was bothered by this. Unless it's meant to bother the reader because it is indeed a horror story in the making, which would be awesome. (ideas)
Another small fix, I suggest going back over your work and edit, edit, edit! There are a few grammatical errors. I noticed places where you had a double space in between words and a few other errors. Also, perhaps consider either changing the format of the way it's written, or maybe add colors for the conversations, making Christina's say purple and Butchie's green. Something to make it easier on the eye to read. It is kind of all bunched together and could get confusing for the reader.

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Review of Cats  
Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Jacky!! I enjoyed reading your cute, humorous flash fiction on your cat drawing escapade! You definitely made me smile, even laugh a little! I wasn't expecting him to come alive, that surprised me! :) I didn't notice any glaring spelling mistakes or grammatical errors. Something I would suggest, keeping in mind I'm not a professional, is the use of a thesaurus! The thesaurus is our best friend and can improve the quality of writing significantly! For example, the word "cats" in your writing was highly overused, in my opinion. It just kept popping up everywhere! What's wrong with kitten or anything else (being lazy and not grabbing one myself for this review)? or perhaps describing your own cat, yet in descriptive words, using the "show don't tell" way. Things of that nature. Other than that, I think you did a lovely job, and keep up the creative flow you have going. Your story was absolutely creative and imaginative!

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Review of THIS IS LIFE!  
Review by Dominique
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hello Sindbad! Thank you for sharing your writing with me. I truly enjoyed reading this. It was heartfelt and your raw emotion was transferred to myself, as the reader. One important thing I would suggest, keeping in mind I'm not a professional, is to go back through your writing with a fine tooth comb and edit, edit, edit! I noticed an abundance of grammatical errors. To name only a few, yet there are more:
- "loving myself,I" - "loving myself, I"
- "I'm always and at any" - would read more naturally as "I'm always, at any"
- "And I understood" 1. Sentances should not begin with the word "and" 2. You don't have a space between sentances there. 3. That sentance as a whole, does not flow naturally.
- "from then on I" - "from then on, I"
- "Today I know" - "Today, I know"
- "offend somebody When" - "somebody. When"
There are several others but you understand the basis of your errors. Lots of comma errors, you need to add spaces in many spots, etc. Also, tons of run on sentances. I suggest using a thesaurus, for they are our best friend! It would imporove your writing tremendously.

Also, something that has helped me, is viewing the following link. It is 8 simple rules for writers regarding the comma. I found it extremely helpful to brush up on, for I have a tendency to mistake commas frequently as well.
https://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/198...


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Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for sharing your lovely poem with me, I appreciate it. Your poem, about a pink fluffy unicorn, is written well. It follows its said form of tercet rhyming a-b-a. The words do indeed rhyme well and you used wonderful word usage, as well. I did notice a few spelling mistakes along the way. Specifically, you wrote "loosing their way" which should be written as "losing their way."
Also, in line 13, you wrote "the pink and fully unicorn" which was meant to be "pink and fluffy unicorn." Simple mistake, likely typo's that are simple fixes once edited. I didn't notice any grammatical errors. That you seemed to have down pat. Also, another thing, you kept my attention from start to finish. It was interesting for the reader. Good luck in the contest!
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Review of What's Behind Me?  
Review by Dominique
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hello Big Bad Wolf is Sam!!! How convenient of a name considering your story. I suppose this is your go-to genre. Thank you for sharing your short story with me, I appreciate that. It made me laugh a bit and it was definitely interesting. It held my attention until the very end of the story. I did notice quite a few spots that could use some editing. Keep in mind that I am not a professional, so do as you please. I noticed quite a few spots where you had grammatical errors. I would go back and check the commas, add commas, that type of thing. Also, I noticed one or two spelling mistakes that we're clearly typos.
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Review of Jeanne's Fight  
Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Celceta!! I enjoyed reading your short story about Jeanne's first battle. This isn't my go-to genre, yet it held my attention to the very end. I didn't notice any grammatical errors or any spelling mistakes. You used your word choice well. It flowed naturally and the characters were believable. I would suggest that maybe, you could avoid certain clichés such as "a moth to a flame" and come up with something unique and different.
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Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Lou-Here By His Grace!! I enjoyed reading your short but sweet poem. I assume this is personal so thank you for giving me a small glimpse into your life, allowing me to learn a little about you. I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors or spelling mistakes. It flowed naturally enough. It held my attention until the end. WRITE ON.
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