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416 Public Reviews Given
416 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I just go with the flow.
Favorite Genres
Psychological Thrillers, Drama, Certain Romance
Least Favorite Genres
Sci-Fi is painful for me to read. Nothing personal but it's not my thing
Favorite Item Types
Static
Least Favorite Item Types
Novels
I will not review...
Novels because I don't want to commit to it. I'm struggling to finish my own books. A novel is too much for me
Public Reviews
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Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (3.5)
I really enjoyed reading this poem about your childhood. It brought back memories from my own childhood and even more recent, past experiences of bonfires. The poem flowed decently enough. I am impressed that you wrote it in only 20 minutes because it takes me a bit of time to write anything decent. I can't just whip something out of me like apparently you can, so go you!
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Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (1.0)
you'll just drive yourself crazy. not sure what you're planning on using this for but good luck! it's not a bad thought or even writing prompt for a short romance story. absolutely just gave me a few ideas, maybe even for a poem! Hopefully I'll see the finished product in the future.
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Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (1.5)
I would change around your wording to make it flow naturally. For example, "Whether it is buying anything" doesn't flow properly. "Whether you are seeking to purchase a new stove for your family or you plan to invite friends over for dinner- the internet will provide all interests." That sentence maybe or something similar would make it more pleasant to read.
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Review by Dominique
Rated: E | (5.0)
Newbie Hyperlinking 101 - Bitem Format  (E)
Learn the ins and outs of creating a link using the bitem format.
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learning bitem code.. did I do this correctly?
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Review by Dominique
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
- This scene made me feel oddly annoyed at the writer for not being more into the blood and scene. I felt kind of turned off by a detective without a stomach for blood but I suppose this is only a short piece of the puzzle. I would need to read more to truly know. It did make me want to read more though, which likely sounds odd if I was annoyed by the character but I would.
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Review by Dominique
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
- The poem made me feel for the writer and their family. It gives you a sort of connection with them.
- It definiately triggered saddness inside of me yet also a glimmer of hope.
- I could relate to medical issues, not specifically Lupus but I understand pain. I understand struggle.
- It was interesting
- The character was believable
- The dialogue and more specifically, inner dialogue needs a little work so that it flows naturally.
- The time, place, and other setting characteristics worked together
- What I liked most was that the poem flowed but most importantly it had emotion in it that you could feel.
- What i liked least was the grammer errors.
- What stood out was mostly the common error in you're/your and it's and its. you're should read as "you are" and if it doesn't, it's likely the other your. Same situation for it's/its. If "it is" doesn't flow in the sentance structure then it would be its.
- What i would change is grammer errors. Specifically:
one foot at a time,*
at times, you change the tenses (past, present, future)
it's okay, *
"But Amanda, ...
No, it's just my body..
I'm sorry, I forgot.
you're* too young for all of this
tell my body that while it's having its* fun throwing its* fits.
Then, if a doctor doesn't believe, your treatment is the barest.
doctors look at you like you're crazy
you're a burden
they don't think you're doing all you can. (be doesn't flow at the end.)
you're not feeling good.

- The poem was memorable because I felt like it had heart and emotions added into it. It didn't feel as though someone wrote a poem off of the textbook definition of Lupus, you could feel the emotion in the poem.
- I enjoyed the poem and I hope you write more in the future because I'd love to read your work.
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