Today is Tuesday, February 23, 2021...
Your post says: February 23, 2021, at 4:09 am.
But, it is 7:42 pm here..
You've just posted this book in another time zone!
You literally posted it as I came on your portfolio!
Anywho, your central character Lon has a fetish to wear plaid when hunting.
Honestly, this time zone thing is awesome!
Did you know the Earth is wobbling?
Putin has put his coastal cities on alert for a tsunami. .
The wobbling is causing continental plate shifts and underwater earthquakes.
Nevertheless, plaid patterns for hunting come from Scotland ..
Will Lon be wearing a plaid kilt?
777 is the number of Jesus in numerology.
666 is the number of the anti-Christ.
Is love a mental disorder?
It can be if it is harmful, like Romeo and Juliet..
Your poem has heart and structure.
Is there such a thing as a rational lover?
From a biologically standing, love essential to the family.
Your premiss is a contradiction between life and death.
How can there be consciousness after the brain is dead?
We can remember the dead and honor them with monuments.
But, life is not death.
Death is the end of life.
This is the awful truth.
Everything that has a beginning has an end.
People can believe anything.
Wanting something to be true does not make it true.
This is a very thoughtful tribute to your dad.
It is a big responsibility to be a dad.
I wonder how Joseph felt about Jesus?
Jesus was a big part of my upbringing.
My dad insisted we all be Catholic.
But, I had doughts about magical Jews.
I digress. You are a very skilled poet.
We're all winners!
I remember hearing that after falling down a ladder painting a house.
"We're all winners," the EMT said.
He was a fireman too.
He told me I had no broken bones, but I should go to the hospital.
I got my skull x-rayed.
It was fractured..
You are a published author on Writing.com.
Is this an advertisement?
I like Weirdo Publishers and Gonzo Publishers.
They will publish bizarre content.
Delorance Publishers will publish your story
for $10,000 ..
That's a bit pricy for me.
I am not a fan of romance novels.
I have dealt with decades of rejection
from publishers and women.
Heathcliff is believable.
It's a story about division by class and wealth.
But, I not as handsome as Heathcliff.
This is a well thought out sci-fi air traffic controller story.
This past week has been tumultuous for me.
I juggle jobs to pay the rent.
This was a pleasant escape.
I remember the original Star Trek ..
I watched it on a JVC TV with a built-in VHS player.
Star Trek felt elitist in some ways, only the high teck could join
Your hero, Thorn is full of foibles.
He cries into the shoulder of another crewman.
I wonder if we will have a first contact this year.
Will they be like us?
Will they like us?
Will they have faces?
The tease in this erotic tale is will she or won't she.
I like a good tease and there is a lesbian temptation.
What if the best friend consented?
Is this lust or love?
Maybe, it's both.
Betty Davis remarked, "Actors are whores."
She wanted to kiss an actress but was paid to kiss
the leading man.
The human psyche is frenetic.
"the pair is" should be, "the pair are."
I'm not a fan of Audre Hepburn.
I did like her role as a school teacher rumored to be a lesbian.
I've forgotten the title.
She co-starred with Sherly MacClain.
The movie dealt with prejudice.
Did you like Breakfast at Tiffany's?
Keep watching and reviewing films
and include your opinion.
Ah-so. Are we safe from ourselves?
A disturbing notion is the multitude of cells that guide us.
Each cell has a function and tells us what to do.
Why and when and where are biologically preordained.
It will be possible to construct our babies from genetic engineering.
Will these perfected children be our own blood?
Cloning replacement organs could create an identity complex.
Am I my cloned brain cells?
What is my soul?
Does the mind survive after the brain is dead?
Perhaps our minds can be transferred onto a cloned brain?
For now, writing is our legacy.
Is this an outline for a story?
It's a first-person narrative.
The problem with a biological weapon is...
Have you seen Resident Evil and the Umbrella Corporation?
This short treatment could make a good sci-fi pod.
What worries me are the side effects of the vaccine.
We float on a thin mantle on a sea of fire.
The Ring of Fire is a joining of this mantle
from the Philippines to Hawaii to California.
Yellow Stone Park is a supervolcano.
If the hydrogen driven Sun released a solar flare
big enough it would fry our Earth.
An asteroid could crack the mantle and release the
Hell beneath our feet...
Your poem has an Eger Allen rhythm:
"I heard a tapping, gently rapping at my chamber door."
I'm not certain there is a God.. People can believe anything.
The question shouldn't be, "Can you believe it?"
but, "What evidence do you have to support your assertion?"
On the other hand, there are forces at work that one can control.
Joshua Ben Joseph was his Hebrew name.
It means Joshua son of Joseph.
This tome reads like an SNL sketch.
There's an SNL sketch where Jesus appears to Sally Fields.
She is praying to Jesus constantly.
Jesus appears to her and asks her to pray to her less frequently.
"Don't pray to me for a tasty cake" Jesus says.
People can believe anything.
I like Zen poetry.
No matter where you go you are there.
That's a Zen Haku.
Good lord Margo is having a bad day.
I first encountered Lesbians at 12 years of age.
Our neighbors, two lovely elderly women, were kissing.
I saw this and asked my mom why.
Mom said they were in love.
And that was that.
Margo is in Hell.
Her search for Becca has lead her to a bear trap.
Do you like Lesbians?
We fret our hour upon this stage.
The offense is not mentioned.
A trial with a weak defense.
"We all do it."
The purpose of this tome is a loss.
The voice of the people can be fickle.
I like the brief style.
Ha! I like this free verse universe.
I had no idea where this was going.
Were you a merchant marine?
I've worked with many people from different walks of life.
Merchant marines like to take life as it comes.
The dancing fox reminds me of Bernadet.
She liked to wear transparent blouses.
She also danced at TENS a strip club in Hampton.
A sucker of a tale.
I like the tempo of this thread.
I was sure Michael Myers would pop up.
The unusual demise of Samantha and Terij was a gruesome surprise.
My older sister had a fear of spiders and centipedes,
crawling in her ears and mouth and other orifices while she slept.
I've read that we inhale spiders while we sleep.
Our science has become a religion.
The metaphysical realm that once was the domain of traditional religion
is being redefined as the 5th dimension.
Miraculous events are examined with halo devices that show auras and bioelectric fields.
Can we heal ourselves with this knowledge?
But, I digress, Laura has every right to be pissed with Marc.
What wife would tolerate her man getting a witch pregnant?
Nobody liked Darwin in Bewitched.
If you strip away social ethics, what is left is love.
Every kitten loves a good petting.
Muzzy is a minister in The Universal Church and could perform a Marriage for Joan.
I remember a Twilight Zone episode
staring Peter O'Tool.
He was haunted by the Banshee.
The Banshee is the wrath that punishes
womanizers by screaming in the night
and eventually stopping the heart of their
This tome reveals the power of the written word.
There is the passing of a letter that the narrator has written for a boy.
I find the premiss charming ..
My father told me that the ocean hides Atlantis.
Is that what you were referring too?
I was confused by the use of the word "kils."
Did you mean kilometer?
There are many moral committees and taboos in film rating.
I like horror films for their simple morals.
Don't say the Boogy Man's name.
Don't go into the Boogy Man's house.
Halloween is my favorite Boogy Man Movie.
Michael Myers starts out as a psycho child.
But, he matures into a bulletproof Boogy Man.
The dating between Jayesh and Natasha is cute.
Principle Ravindra's reaction reminded me of a Marry Tyler More episode.
Lu Grant would comment on Marry's relationship in the sitcom TV Newsroom.
"Oh, Mr. Grant." Mary would reply to her boss an editor Lu Grant.
You were born in 2005.
I feel ancient.
Everywhere we go our shadow follows.
And sometimes we shadow our secrets.
Are we who we believe we are?
Here is an anecdotal example from my teenage years.
My best friend Michael Wild called me to his home.
He told me we could not be friends.
I queried, "Why?"
"Because .." he paused.
He asked me to leave.
I had had a relationship with his sister and thought that might be why.
It was the 70's and my older brother was in Vietnam.
Michael's father had asked me if my brother "Enjoyed killing people?"
Maybe, that was why?
Michael never gave me a reason.
That was 30 years ago and I still wonder why?
Anywho, I get the feeling your diary will enrich your writing.
Always believe in yourself.
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