Prosperous Snow celebrating's (nfdarbe) Reviews

, I am reviewing "Getting Too Tall to Be a Giant Too"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Jazon pushing YaVoni away from him. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, off his next to, I suggest changing next to neck.

I like: I like the climax, because it was the logical ending to the story .

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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#4698572

Review of A Private Professional

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi, PureSciFi

, I am reviewing "A Private Professional"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Helona grabbing Bracim by the collar. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, when he lied to be, I suggest changing be to me.

A typo in this phrase, could of weeks, I suggest changing could to couple.

I like: I like Helona because she is a strong woman who knows what she wants.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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#4698391

Review of Do Aliens Live Among Us

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi, Dr Gonzo

, I am reviewing "Do Aliens Live Among Us"

, because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (May 24, 2023)"

.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the question. The descriptions are part of the action and move the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the description of the alien hand, because it reminded me of some of the description I have read on the subject.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the evidence was presented.

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#4698373

Review of Midnight Shivaree

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi, Words Whirling 'Round

, I am reviewing "Midnight Shivaree"

, because I discovered it in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (May 24, 2023)"

.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and plot of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other while the rhythm moves the plot forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the poem plot.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the plot and the rhythm.

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#4698297

Review of The Cabin on Lake Arrowhead WC 245

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, jackiesmuse

, I am reviewing "The Cabin on Lake Arrowhead WC 245"

, because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"

forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker and her husband being alone in their cabin. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the couple builds the suspense and emphasizes Carl's memory problems.

Suggestions: I found no technical issues.

I like: I like the way this story shows how devastating Alzheimer's can be.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0, because of the way it educates people about Alzheimer's.

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#4698280

Review of Poems for Weekly Challenge

for entry "Left-wing Moon Bats vs. Right-wing Wingnuts"

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, JCosmos

, I am reviewing "Poems for Weekly Challenge "

"Left-wing Moon Bats vs. Right-wing Wingnuts"

, because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"

forum page.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it closes the poem with a message.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of its message.

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#4698209

Review of The Real Meaning of The Lord's Prayer

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, Moomintroll

, I am reviewing "The Real Meaning of The Lord's Prayer"

, because I discovered it on the religious genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph of this article hooked me with the Lord's Prayer being misunderstood. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while giving the reader something to think about concerning the Lord's Prayer.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way scripture verses are used in this article. They help the reader understand the meaning of the prayer.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written article a 5.0 because it gave me something to think about concerning the Lord's Prayer.

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#4698089

Review of A Quiet Little Man

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi, Damon Nomad

, I am reviewing "A Quiet Little Man"

, because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: Phil's statement in the first paragraph hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters build the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it was a surprise.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0, because of the lesson about not assuming the worst about people.

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#4697937

Review of Full Moon

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Honoring Mona

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Hi, Serena Blade

, I am reviewing "Full Moon"

because I discovered it on the "May SuperPowers Review Raid"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker feeling the moon's magnetic pulse. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: I like the description of the transformation because it was part of the action.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

}Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the description of the transformation.

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#4697932

Review of MediEvils

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Honoring Mona

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Hi, Beholden

, I am reviewing "MediEvils"

because I discovered it on the "May SuperPowers Review Raid"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the time the story occurred. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: I like the climax because it was a surprsie.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

}Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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#4697928

Review of Mistakes

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Honoring Mona

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Hi, Beholden

, I am reviewing "Mistakes"

because I discovered it on the "May SuperPowers Review Raid"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The managers statement hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: I like Falcon Durridge because he is an intriguing and somewhat sympathetic character.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

}Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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#4697910

Review of Memory Calls

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

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Hi, Beholden

, I am reviewing "Memory Calls"

because I discovered it on the "May SuperPowers Review Raid"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Gaston driving through the rain. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I Like: I like this simile, giant rocks scattered like sentinels along its length, because it is fresh, descriptive, and visual.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

Final Thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of its active descriptions.

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#4697472

Review of I Must Love You

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi, Weirdone-Back in the games

, I'm reviewing "I Must Love You"

because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "

forum page.

First Thoughts: The fourth paragraph hooked me with the murder on the night of the full moon. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way the first person point of view and voice are used in this story. This point of view helps the reader understand the motives of the main character.

Final Thought: This is an intriguing story with a sympathetic main character.

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#4697441

Review of The Fool's Reign

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Hi, brom21

, I'm reviewing "The Fool's Reign "

because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (May 17, 2023)"

.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Nimrod liking to take things to the extreme. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like Nimrod because he was an intriguing characters who was both sympathetic and unsympathetic.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of Nimrod.

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#4697436

Review of Rain, Rain Almost Never Goes Away

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi, PureSciFi

, I'm reviewing "Rain, Rain Almost Never Goes Away"

because I discovered it in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (May 17, 2023)"

.

First Thoughts: Licus plowing a field in the rain hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the descriptions of the family planting fields and keeping their animals.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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#4697345

Review of Golden Tendrils

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, Louis Williams

, I'm reviewing "Golden Tendrils"

because I discovered it on the community newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other. The rhythm moves the narrative and inspiration emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite line, the strength inside that I need to shine. I like this line because it expresses both faith and hope.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this inspiration poem because of the way it expressed emotion.

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#4697269

Review of Attack Of The Nameless One

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, Louis Williams

, I'm reviewing "Attack Of The Nameless One"

because I discovered it in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (May 10, 2023)"

.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Frank's battle to get to the mountain. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it was unexpected.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because it made me smile.

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#4697243

Review of Mis-assembled

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, bas

, I'm reviewing "Mis-assembled "

because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (May 10, 2023)"

.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Nirav's brother tightening a screw. The interaction between the brothers moves the plot and the laughter forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the climax because it made me laugh.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because I also have problems assembling items.

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#4697224

Review of Dog Mom

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, JCosmos

, I'm reviewing "Dog Mom"

because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"

forum page.

First Thoughts: The first stanza of this free verse poem establishes the form, speaker, mood, and theme. The rhythm moves the narrative and descriptions forward at a good pace,
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Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The fifth verse is my favorite because of the dogs thinking they are masters of the universe.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because it reminded me of dogs I have had.

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#4696922

Review of Christian Meditation

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi, LightinMind

, I'm reviewing "Christian Meditation"

because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The introduction paragraph hooked me with the author's statement of faith in regards to meditation. This thought-provoking essay gives the reader a deeper understanding of Christian meditation.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: This is my favorite sentence, Meditation allows God to lovingly work inside of us. I like this sentence because it states one of the goals of meditation.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking essay a 5.0 because it gave me something to think about concerning meditation.

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#4696917

Review of Jots and Tittles and other Random Things

for entry "Meditation"

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi, AmyJo- only 2 steps behind -

, I'm reviewing "Jots and Tittles and other Random Things"

because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The second paragraph of this essay hooked me with the question. The question in this essay helped focus my attention on the narrative.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way the author used questions to help the reader focus on the subject of meditation.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking essay a 5.0, because it give me something to think about concerning meditation.

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#4696912

Review of Prayer as Meditation

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hi, Jeff

, I'm reviewing "Prayer as Meditation"

because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph of this essay hooked me with commonalities between prayer and meditation. This thought provoking essay helps give the reader a deeper understand of prayer and meditation

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: The third paragraph is my favorite because it list some of the steps to both prayer and meditation.

Final Thought: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking essay a 5.0, because it increased my understanding of both prayer and meditation.

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#4696903

Review of To Arms!

Review by Prosperous Snow...

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, AmyJo- only 2 steps behind -

, I'm reviewing "To Arms!"

because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "

forum page.

First Thoughts: The rhythm of this free verse poem move the plot and emotions of homesickness forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the way this poem looks on the page, because it helps focus the reader's attention.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the theme and the speaker.

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#4696823

Review of A Dish Best Served Cold

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi, Hyperiongate

, I'm reviewing "A Dish Best Served Cold"

because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (May 10, 2023)"

.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with the perfect crime. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the logical way Jessop 56 went about solving the crime.

Final Thought: I enjoy ed reading this story because of Jessop 56.

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#4696788

Review of Waiting On The Storm

Review by Prosperous Snow...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi, Louis Williams

, I'm reviewing "Waiting On The Storm"

because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Jenks setting in his lawn chair. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

My favorite part: I like the conversation between the father and daughter because it emphasized their relationship.

Final Thought: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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