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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, jackiesmuse , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Peony Caper WC 276" , because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page .

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with Abbie reaching through the chain link fence to pick a flower. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like Abbie because she is an intriguing character.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction among the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, jackiesmuse , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Runaway Cow WC 652" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker spending twice a year at a resort/working farm. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while recounting fond memories of her childhood.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the description of the cabins, with the ice boxes, and the outhouse.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because it brought back memories of my grandparents, who always called a refrigerator an ice box.

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Review of Conscapsis Theory  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Joseph D. Smith , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Conscapsis Theory" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph of this thesis hook me with the definition of the Theory of Conscapsis.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the logical flow of this thesis, because it gives an explanation about the theory and the basis of the theory.

Final thoughts: This thesis is thought-provoking and well written.

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Review of Loser's Club  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Joto-Kai , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Loser's Club" , because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (June 7, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the stranger statement. The conversation between the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like Kissla because she is an intriguing character.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the conversation between the characters.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, fyn , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Never Too Old for a Good Surprise" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (June 7, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Henry slumped by the window. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like both Henry and David because they are sympathetic and intriguing characters.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction among the characters.

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Review of June  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Spring in my Sox , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "June" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (June 7, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with June's homicidal tendencies. The narrative moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because of the way June revealed she was different.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Clipped Conversation" , because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (June 7, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, theme, plot, and mood of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite, because it made me smile.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing poem, because it made me smile.

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Review of Meditation  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, THANKFUL SONALI Now What? , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Meditation" , because I discovered it on the psychology genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the definitions for meditation. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while giving the reader several things to consider.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite sentence, Let anything which a person focuses on without distraction be termed meditation. I like this sentence because it makes meditation easier and gives a deeper understanding of the process of meditation.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because it gave me a different view of meditation.

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Review of Even Prompter  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Even Prompter"  "Waiting for Godot (apologies to Samuel Becket)" , because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"  forum page.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and plot of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the plot and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way this poem expresses both the emotions of patience and impatience. The last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the poem plot with impatience.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed emotions.

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Review of Intimacy with God  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, LightinMind , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Intimacy with God" , because I discovered it on the spiritual genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with God waiting for us to call. The moves the essays theme forward at a good pace. The questions ask in each section cause the read to pause and consider what is being said before moving on the the next section.

Suggestions: I found no difficulties.

I like: I like the emphases placed on making time for God in our lives, because it reminds the readers that they have to make time to listen for the Holy Spirit.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because of the thought-provoking questions.

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Review of First Contact  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Dave Ryan , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "First Contact" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The question in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I liked reading this conversation because some of it made me laugh.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed this story because of the conversation among the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, NOBODYLEARNS , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "This is the UFO [2 segments]" , because I discovered it on the legal genre page.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the peace treaty between the United Nations and the United Federations of Outer-space. The descriptions in Segment 2 were part of the action and helped move the plot forward a t a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the conditions in Segment 1 because they were logical, clear, and thought-provoking.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed this story because of the thought-provoking conditions and the action

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, Words Whirling 'Round , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Cosmic Contrapunto" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, theme, and subject of the poem, while hooking the reader with the first line. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The third stanza is my favorite, because it ask a question that requires me to think about.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking poem a 5.0 because it requires me to think.

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Review of Even Prompter  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Even Prompter"  "Brevette" , because I discovered it on the "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"  forum page.

First Impression: The poem follows the form, looks good on the page, and makes me hungry for a butter sandwich.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way the middle line is longer then the first and second line. It reminds me of a sandwich.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the subject.

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Review of The Messenger  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Messenger" , because I discovered it on the cultural genre page.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the sphere of prophecy. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like Fern because she is a sympathetic and intriguing character.

Final thoughts: I like the lesson this story told about God being interested in humanity.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Finder101 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Love Story of My GrandParents" , because I discovered it under Online Authors.

First Impression: The second paragraph of this non-fiction essay hooked me with Mary escaping an unwanted marriage. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while giving the reader enough information to answer any questions.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like both Mary and Adam because they are intriguing people.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this love story because of Mary and Adam.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Dawn Embers , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "tools of confusion" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (May 31, 2023)" .

First Impression: Jason's question in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation between Jason and Nick move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last sentence is my favorite because it made me smile.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, brom21 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Garden of Manna" , because I discovered it in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (May 31, 2023)" .

First Impression: Melony's question hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters built the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, else weeing simple one color tunics. I suggest changing weeing to wearing.

A typo in this phrase, out them in the bag, I suggest changing out to put.

I like: I like Nithos because he is a sympathetic and intriguing character.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of A Fireside Tale  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, OnlyMagicInkGlows , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Fireside Tale" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the old man's inquiry. The conversation among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way the story teller's ancestor received fire.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Dave Ryan , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Long, Boring Day" , because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Louis's question. The conversation and interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the repetition of a long, boring day, because it helped build the laughter.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, jonblair , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Star Voyagers: "THE GREY CONSPIRACY"" , because I discovered it under online authors.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Ensign Lindsey's request. The conversation and interaction among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it was a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Future Mrs. B , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Real Origins of Memorial Day" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph of this essay hooked me with the original name for Memorial Day, because I remember my Grandparents always call it Decoration Day.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way the history of Memorial Day is presented because it shows unity in commemorating soldiers who passed in way.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because of its subject.

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Review of Shep-herd  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, QueenNormaJeanGreeneggs&vegham , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Shep-herd" , because I discovered it on the mythology genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Jordie playing a handmade flute. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because it was a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Jordie and Shep-herd.

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Review of Humans  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, PiriPica , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Humans" , because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Impression: The questions in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this word, wan't, I suggest changing it to want.

I like: The conversation between the werewolf and the vampire made me smile.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Anna , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Dismantle (CH 1 un - edited)" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The third paragraph hooked me with the call from the unknown number. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like Peyton because she is a sympathetic and intriguing character. I also like the way this chapter ended because it aroused my curiosity about what was going to happen next.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this chapter because of the Peyton.

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