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Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, my name is Ned and this review is based on my personal impressions and opinions. Feel free to take what you think is useful, and ignore the rest. This is just my way of letting the author know how this reader reacted to the item being reviewed.


*CheckB* TITLE: The title fits well, it is a neat way of describing the subject of the poem.

*CheckR* FORM: The poem is written in a series of seven couplets.

*CheckG* RHYTHM/RHYME: The rhythm feels even and steady and there are no awkward lines but all the lines and the rhymes flow well.

*CheckP* IMAGERY: This poem is all abut creating imagery as the purpose and joy of writing. The author is exploring the places and things one can experience in writing.

*CheckR* FAVORITE LINE(S): "As I write this poem, my place expands". This line really encapsulates the freedom involved in writing. WRiting allows the author to create his/her own place regardless of the actual place in reality the author inhabits. Writing creates new places and expands horizons. This is a very good line.

*CheckB* SUGGESTIONS: I don't disagree with your choice of genres except I think you missed an opportunity to choose "writing" as a genre. As writing is the subject you explore in this poem, I might exchange either "Community" or "Entertainment" for "writing".

*CheckP* OVERALL IMPRESSION: I could relate to this poem as it describes the process of writing as one of world-building and the blank page as the foundation upon which the writer builds that place that feels that it is created just for the author but in fact, spurs the imagination of the reader as well.

Nicely written.




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Review of Lovesick Blues  
Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I could definitely hear the song, especially on the chorus.

This poem was a creative use of the prompt, applying the Lovesick Blues to a couple of dogs. In my head, I imagine it with a twang and and extended howling vowel on "blues" - something like "bloo-oo-oos". Sorry, but I have to make the tune up in my head.

The rhymes are all good and flow well. The little paws at the end is a nice touch *Smile*

Suggestions: There are two lines where I felt the meter was lost and so a bit awkward. They don't need changing so much as rearranging, that is, just changing word order changes where the stressed syllables are and changes the rhythm. For example:

"Given was the account" sounds better to me as "Was the given account"

"And the payment was due" I might try something like "Payment coming due"

Now this is just my opinion which may be judged to be faulty. But I do the same on my own poetry when I read it aloud, sometimes the rhythm seems not quite there. I find a slight rearrangment of words often makes it sound more rhythmic.

Overall Impression: I found this poem/song to be a creative use of the prompt and very amusing. A subject matter most dog owners will relate to. This was a fun read, well done.
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Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I had to read this a few times to really, really sink into its many layers.

First thoughts: Isn't that just like a scientist? Doing something just because he can and he wants to see how it turns out? Curiosity and the cat come to mind.

Details I noticed even if you didn't mean them:

Rebekkah's name is Smithe, a social climber variation of the name "Smith" which originally indicated a profession. Rebekkah, the smith, creates the actual metal structure. Very nicely inserted detail many will miss.

Alex's surname is Lawson or perhaps "law's son"? Certainly, he was subject to laws - Murphy's Law, Time, and all the other laws of the universe.

Suggestion: The only suggestion I could make is that you add two more descriptive genres. "Other" is a terrible choice. Choose Comedy if you feel it's applicable. Is there one for irony or even "serves them right for being so smug"? I don't know them off by heart, but there must be some that fit well.

Overall Impression: I love the little twist at the end. I love the "oops" coming to mind just a little too late. I would have enjoyed the story for its creativity, imagination and the twisted ending but you added the names and made it even better.

Of course, if the universe goes according to plan, in another 13 billion years or so, Alex and Rebekkah will do it all over again. And again? It boggles the mind.


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Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, my name is Ned and this review is based on my personal impressions and opinions. Feel free to take what you think is useful, and ignore the rest. This is just my way of letting the author know how this reader reacted to the item being reviewed.


*CheckB* TITLE: The title is lovely and descriptive. While the image is not a part of the poem, it is perfect to illustrate the title and the poem's subject.

*CheckR* FORM: The poem is written in quatrains with an ending couplet.

*CheckG* RHYTHM/RHYME: The rhyme scheme is aabb and is used well throughout the poem. The rhymes flow well and lend a musical quality to the verses.

*CheckP* IMAGERY: Imagery is the strong suit of this poem. The image of green grass being turned gold by the falling leaves appeals to the senses and paints a vivid picture of the season in an unusual way.

*CheckR* FAVORITE LINE(S): "Gold leaves in her hair, Autumn stands there". This line personifies Autumn and matches the image exactly. I love the description of autumn as shaking the gold leaves from her hair.

*CheckB* SUGGESTIONS: I really love the poem as it is, but I think it might have been stronger if you had stayed with the original concept of autumn and describing autumn rather than a sudden rush into winter at the end. Both seasons hold so much beauty and magic.

*CheckP* OVERALL IMPRESSION: I really enjoyed this poem about autumn. The imagery was fresh and evocative about a subject that is a well-covered one in poetry.


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Review by Ned
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Is his brother Keith Richard? The twist at the end is one reason that I love flash fiction. This one made me smile at the end.

I enjoyed the inclusion of some standard horror story phrases such as "dark and stormy night". The author keeps it light and slightly comedic while creating the traditional vampire story setting.

Suggestions : only one suggestion and that is regarding genre. I have oft been advised to pay more attention to what I choose to categorize my writings as. But your choices are showing up as "other" x 3. I am on my phone so if for some reason these are not the genres you chose but it's some malfunction of the website on my phone browser, I apologize. But if "other other, other"was really what you chose, then I have to suggest that you change it to perhaps horror or comedy or fantasy...

Overall impression: this is an amusing vampire tale with a twist and a nice use of the prompt.


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Review of A Change of Plans  
Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a delightful holiday story full of magic and fantasy. Santa isn't up to making the Christmas Eve run, but his children are well-trained and step up to help. The story follows the prompt well in an imaginative way.


The descriptions of Santa's workshop/North Pole are well drawn and include some lovely imagery. There were some gems in describing emotions as well. I liked such phrases as "shimmered with nervous energy" and "worry skittered along her spine".

The run is successful and the future of Christmas secure as we now know who will be taking over when Santa retires.

Suggestion: There are a few incorrect words that would not be caught by a spellchecker - for instances "heals should be "heels", "descent" should be "dissent" and there is one place where "there" is used when "their" is meant. A good proofread should do to find and fix these errors.

Suggestion: This is a personal preference but I think a larger font would make the story easier to read. Small and close fonts often put the readers off and so good writing gets passed over and not read.

Suggestion:This is an error I usually make and that is not choosing the best genres to best categorize an item to make it easier for readers/reviewers to find. For instance, I have often been chastised for choosing "Contest entry" and "Other" is not a category people prioritize in searches. Choosing more appropriate genres will help your writing get seen. Try "fantasy" or "family" etc to add to "holiday".

Overall, a fun and imaginative story in response to the prompt.


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Review of The note  
Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a pretty heavy subject for flash fiction, but the author has managed to make it feel real to the reader.

As with all good flash fiction, we are led to believe and expect one plot line but are then served up a twist in the end. In this case, the twist is that the note the author is writing sounds very much like the trials and complaints of most working women and mothers - balancing work requirements with the kids' needs. In the end, we realize she is not apologizing for missing an evening with her husband, but writing out her regrets for all the time she missed with him due to not having prioritized the relationship.

Suggestion: I really have only one and it's so minor, it's hardly worth mentioning. In the fourth paragraph - "Yeah, you've heard me right" I would change to "Yeah, you heard me right". It's not a matter of grammar, it's an ear thing. The tone of the note is conversational, and intimate. You can hear her speaking when you read it, and to me, it would sound more natural without the contraction. But that's just a personal thing and others might hear it differently.

Overall Impression: This is a moving piece that reminds us that we never know the future and ought not to take others for granted. Regrets are terrible things to live with. Well crafted story, enjoyed the read and it made me think.


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Review of Wrong Planet  
Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I love flash fiction and science fiction, so this story jumped out at me in the "Read and Review" rotation.

I was anxious to find out what the top secret project was as we watched George and John work. I think it's a strength of the story that we are not told the nature of their project, nor their plans for using it too early, but rather we find out when they actually use it. I personally was surprised by the nature of the device when it was revealed.

The response of the alien planet lord was funny in his dismissive attitude towards the two travelers, but that might not have been their biggest failure.

The twist at the end is my favorite part of flash fiction and you did not disappoint. This story has a definite twist which leaves one of the main characters with a rather disturbing problem of missing feet that got left behind.

Suggestions:

1. The appearance of Tim remains unexplained in the story. He says they no longer need the secret project but he doesn't say why. I wondered about that even after I found out what the secret project was.

2.I expected the death star laser to kill them when it zapped them. It's not a big thing, but you might consider calling it another name like "transport beam" or something like that.

3. In the sentence: "Suddenly in burst Tim." I would add a comma after "suddenly".

Overall Impression: An amusing science fiction story with a twist that is well told in a tidy 300 words. I enjoyed reading this and the missing feet gave me a laugh.

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Review of Even Prompter  
for entry "No Taxis" 
Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Your take on the prompt was so interesting that I had to choose this poem to review this week.

I love a poem that takes the prompt to unexpected places and this one did. The word play in "auto-biography" made me laugh. And what writer is not hoping to find an easy ride, whatever the assignment? But no, there are no taxis on the writer's street, he's got to navigate his writing gridlock on his own.

If we aren't famous enough to hire ghostwriters and sell books based on our name and fame, then it's a lot of work ahead. No taxis, no easy ride.

Wonderful.





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Review of Summer  
Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I noticed that you and I wrote about a similar aspect of nature for our Haiku prompts, so I decided to review your poem this week.

The poem focuses on a stretch of summer that is known for being unrelentingly hot and dry. Your word choices convey the pitiful state of the vegetation, describing them as parched - a great word for conveying their dry condition and their natural thirst that is not being quenched. I can see the heat rippling, and the earth that is cracked by the extreme level of drought. The first two lines are perfectly summed up by the last and the reader can easily visualize the time of year and the conditions you write about.

This is a well-constructed Haiku that follows the form requirements and is filled with descriptive word choices that help the reader "feel" the poem as well as see it.

Great response to the prompt!


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for entry "Invalid Entry" 
Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, I am on a March Madness Review Raid. I am reviewing your poem which was entered in both "EXPRESS IT IN EIGHT"  and "Promptly Poetry Challenge (2023-2024)"  . I think these poems are deserving of being read and reviewed more often and your poem definitely deserves to be read and appreciated.


I really liked the way you used the photo image to bring forth an important concept.
Man's evolution is no longer up to nature, he has taken it into his own hands but this is dangerous.

Your description of the robot conveys the cold, inhuman machinery that it is. Words like metallic and chrome make it sound like an accessory. Importantly, you remind us that without input,it's an empty shell. Man has the choice to activate it with programming or to even turn it or off. Your poem tells us that we should not follow this technology "don't give it anything" because "technology is danger".

And of course we have seen that humans often go too far when we think we are being clever. What if we invented these "slaves without masters"? Would we come to regret it? Would it be a disaster? I tend to think so, and am in agreement with the sentiment of your poem.

I know that the title refers to the double posting of the poem, but I would have liked to see a title that referenced the subject of the poem.

Great point made in just eight lines. Great job!

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Review of I Remember  
Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, my name is Ned and this review is based on my personal impressions and opinions. Feel free to take what you think is useful, and ignore the rest. This is just my way of letting the author know how this reader reacted to the item being reviewed.


*CheckB* TITLE: The title "I Remember" is perfect and is the repeated refrain.

*CheckR* FORM: The use of anaphora in this poem is well-executed. The repeated phrase of "I Remember" is hypnotic and puts the reader in a state of reverie as memories are recounted.

*CheckG* RHYTHM/RHYME: The repeated phrase of the anaphora makes for a steady rhythm that helps the reader feel gently lulled into childhood remembrances.

*CheckP* IMAGERY: All the senses are employed here, we see and smell and feel the wonderful images of childhood. These memories are personal to the poet, but every reader will be thinking back to the things that made them feel warm and happy in their childhood.

*CheckR* FAVORITE LINE(S): "I remember
the smell of Big Chief tobacco
mixed with the scents of diesel and dirt."
This is so specific and the reader can well imagine the scents involved.

*CheckB* SUGGESTIONS: none

*CheckP* OVERALL IMPRESSION: This is a lovely rendering of the memories of a child who experienced childhood in a close family and makes us all eel a bit homesick for our own individual childhood homes, families and special memories.


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Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This trip to the moon is both exciting and delightful. It's just the sort of fantasy adventure that children love to hear over and over.

Your characters are solid, being both curious and skeptical, adventurous and yet sometimes a bit cautious of the unknown. Just as children (and many adults) are.

Suggestions: In some places, I would love to see more detail. For instance, what kind of food is Moon food and what does Moon juice taste like?

The readability would be improved with some formatting changes. Using a larger font helps and the lines are not always broken up as one expects, which could be the result of copying and pasting the text from another source. Punctuation also should be punched up with more consistency in the use of quotation marks in dialogue.

Overall Impression: This is a delightful and creative tale that contains many fun and delicious adventures. How could anyone resist a chocolate ladder that you can eat as you climb?

I really enjoyed reading your father's story. What lucky children you were! I am glad you wrote it for us to read too. Thanks for sharing.

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Review by Ned
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Aww... The ending is so sad. I did not see that coming.

I really liked the way you used the form to create a light-hearted tone, created a sense of fun, then surprised the reader with a twist at the end. The repeated line drives home the point so well. The repetition lulls us, then surprises us.

The title is perfect. Illusions are not just the tricks we see with our eyes, but also those we choose to see with our hearts.

Excellent use of the prompt words and the poetic form chosen.

I am making an effort to review more Promptly entries as these poems deserve readers. This entry truly does deserve more readers. It is a very well-constructed poem that makes a story out of three prompt words. You capture our imaginations and then our emotions. Nicely done.



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Review of shy  
Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I came upon your poem through read and review.

This is a short poem that packs a bigger punch than its size would lead one to expect. It details, in very relatable words, how a shy person deals with or tries not to deal with the "rules of the universe" or, perhaps for the shy person, the way society works. The first instinct is to try to behave, stay unnoticed in the background, follow the "rules".

In the last two lines, the poet and the poem breaks free of these restrictions - both the ones imposed by the "universe" and one suspects, the rules that the subject of the poem has imposed on him/herself.

The poet gets heard, with the emphasis on the word "SOUND" and makes the point that if one wallows in one's own problems or thoughts, the universe will simply go on and not wait.

This poem feels like one of personal victory and is also good advice based on experience. Introverts and those with social anxiety will certainly relate. The "universe" is how big normal society and interaction feels to someone with those attributes. Learning how to "explode" and be heard is a great victory for that person.

I enjoyed the message this poem conveys.

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Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Impressions I am reviewing poetry in our Summer Fun Raid and what is more summery than an ice cream truck? We all have memories of ice creams purchased from the ice cream truck, so much a part of childhood summers.


Tone The poem is written with a voice of enthusiasm and great nostalgia for something that was an important summer ritual - the arrival of the ice cream truck. The repeating of the ice cream chant (you scream, etc...) lets us hear the children's voices and keeps us right there with neighborhood friends, waiting for our frozen treats.


Form/Rhyme/Technical The poem is written in five line stanzas with an aabb rhyme scheme and each ending with the same fifth line which has an internal rhyme. There is no line spacing between the third and fourth stanzas. I think this is just a formatting mistake.


In Conclusion This is a fun and light-hearted rhyming poem that explores a common childhood experience and a traditional summer sight. I could relate to the scenes portrayed and felt those tugs of childhood memory as I read it, Good job.

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Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Impressions I was drawn to this poem by the title. I wondered in which way the summer was a "marshmallow summer" and wanted to read the poem to find out.


Tone The poem is written in a voice of wistfulness and nostalgia. The author is remembering times from childhood, reminiscing about summers spent with the author's grandfather. There's a real feel of lazy summer days spent fishing and cozy summer nights spent round the campfire. There's texture introduced with "the muddy Chikaskia river". The marshmallow summer ends each day with roasting marshmallows over the fire while listening to grandpa tell tall tales.


Form/Rhyme/TechnicalThe poem is written as free verse though there is the occasional casual rhyme (trees, breeze) which fit the poem well.


In Conclusion This is an evocative poem that pays homage to "grandpa" and celebrates the memories of summers spent with him. It is clear that the author cherishes those memories and misses those simple marshmallow summer days. The poem will remind readers of their own cherished summer memories and certainly gets the reader in the "feels".


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Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Impressions I was drawn by the fun subject of the poem - Learning to cook from the mysterious Tess. We don't find out who Tess is, but that doesn't detract from the poem greatly.


Tone The tone of the poem is light and cheerful. The scene in the kitchen is well described to the reader, right down to the "dough boy" and the rolls (a reference that nearly everyone will understand. I loved the reference to The Galloping Gourmet. I am sure that will bring back memories for quite a few readers.


Form/Rhyme/Technical The rhyme and rhythm of the poem is bouncy It encourages the reader along as the culinary adventure continues.


In Conclusion This is an amusing poem about cooking lessons and the secret ingredient that makes all food taste better. The bouncy rhythm added to the light-hearted tone. It was a fun read, but I did wonder about poor Tess being delegated to the kitchenette forever.


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Review of WINTER REST  
Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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First Impressions For a very short poem, these four lines are full of vivid imagery. The word choices are excellent and convey the atmosphere of the scene.


Form/Rhyme/Technical The poem is one quartet with a rhyme scheme of aabb. The near rhyme of hung and drum works well. I wanted to insert another syllable in the third line, as in "the branches..." etc. The comma in the first line is useful and made me miss the inclusion of commas in other lines where I felt a natural pause when reading.


In Conclusion I like the imagery of this poem and the rhythm and rhyme could easily make it a poem one might memorize. It creates for the reader sights, sounds and sensations, making it a full experience. I enjoyed reading this poem.

Any suggestions made are merely my opinion and do not reflect on my enjoyment in the work as a whole.






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Review of Little by little  
Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I am reviewing your poem "Little by little" . Please keep in mind that ALL of the views expressed are purely my own, any suggestions are meant to be helpful, but you are entitled to reject any and all of my opinions. I hope you find something helpful or encouraging.

*StarfishP* FIRST IMPRESSIONS: The opening lines really grabbed my attention and kept me reading. I loved the imagery of whittling away defenses likened to whittling on a stick, because it's not for attack purposes, it is to create something more beautiful in many cases.

*StarfishB* VOICE/TONE: This is a poem of tender expressions about falling in love and building a relationship. It is written with emotion and gratitude. I am sure that the feelings expressed in this poem would resonate with a lot of readers.

*StarfishR* FORM: The poem is free verse which is a great choice. Too much emotion in too many rhymes often makes light of the emotions and this poem struck just the right notes for me.

*StarfishY* FINAL THOUGHTS This is a sweet, heartfelt little poem that says a lot about relationships and how "little by little" can build a lasting relationship. The last two lines wrap it up succinctly but with great feeling:

"There is no doubt that little by little we found each other
soulmates forever bound"

I thought it was lovely.


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Review of Springtime  
Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I ran across your poem in Read & Review. I wanted to jot down a few lines to tell you what I liked about it.

I read the poem before looking at the title or the explanation and I didn't realize it was an acrostic at first. That says a lot about the quality of the writing.

Normally, I am not the biggest fan of acrostic poems because often the effort is put into finding words to fulfill the requirements of the word(s) in question and the poetry of the thing ends up being secondary. That is not the case here.

The imagery of spring is vivid in the poem's appreciation of spring and the reader is filled with similar appreciation.

Favorite line: "Imaginings of love bloom with the flowers"

This is a sweet and sentimental poem full of the loveliness of springtime. I enjoyed the transition from snow to spring as I read along.

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Review by Ned
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I am reviewing your poem "The Ode Master Writes" . Please keep in mind that ALL of the views expressed are purely my own, any suggestions are meant to be helpful, but you are entitled to reject any and all of my opinions. I hope you find something helpful or encouraging.

*StarfishP* FIRST IMPRESSIONS:There's an atmosphere created here from the first line of this poem to the last syllable. It draws the reader into the world of the Ode Master.

*StarfishB* VOICE/TONE:The poet helps us observe and feel, there is a sense of age, the Ode Master has trembling handwriting. There is a sense of loss and grief, the voices of those who have died are sounding in the Ode Master's head, as he writes odes to those who have passed under the scythe of the grim reaper.

*StarfishR* FORM:The poem is written in free verse and the author uses it to great advantage in painting a vivid scene with such wonderful lines as
"As smoke blows across a paper moon
leaving charcoal smudges
on the walls".
Definitely my favorite line.

*StarfishY* FINAL THOUGHTS I enjoyed reading this poem. It created a well-drawn character and world, bringing it to life with vivid imagery. Very well done.


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Review of Good-bye Despair  
Review by Ned
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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This is an emotional piece that is something between a farewell note and an exculpatory essay. This relationship deteriorates not only because one person is always being grim and unhappy, but also because the other party in the relationship needs to save his/her own sanity and avoid the traps of depression.

This poem highlights the difficulties of being with someone who suffers from irrational fears and lack of hope:

         "Love cannot live without light,
         It cannot survive depression's blight."

The title's good-bye is not just to the relationship, but to the feelings that person brought to the relationship which are unhealthy for both of them.




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Review of The Vampire Blues  
Review by Ned
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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I must admit that I really love flash fiction. It's such a challenge to fit a whole story, characters, conflict and resolution all in a limited number of words. This flash fiction pretty much does all that in a tidy little story of paranormal romance.

A lot of people will identify with both the vampire and his librarian in that sometimes the modern world goes too fast and lacks charm. There's plenty of charm in this tale of a budding romance.

I started to write that I wanted more of a twist at the end, seeing the final declaration of "I don't have forever" as being poignant and sad since their romance is doomed to end and then I slapped myself upside the head as I realized THAT is the twist. Our hero is a vampire... oh dear, I nearly missed that brilliant ending.

Now I have more of a smile on my face than I did when I started writing this review. Great story!




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Review of Whispering Walls  
Review by Ned
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
*Jackolantern2* I am reviewing in the "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" " Ghostly Hallows Raid."

The superstitions regarding the number thirteen are many and this story uses those fears to advantage in setting up the reader for the ultimate twist in the tale of Flint Trent.

The reader has no reason to doubt Flint as we are told of his intentions to disprove the superstition and that it can be done by purposely employing the number thirteen in everything he does. The house/museum devoted to the superstition doesn't seem that odd or out of place. However, the uneasiness begins when Flint is asked for his friends' names. I had no idea why this happened at the time it happened, early in the story. It felt eerie but mysterious. Once we know the real story, this makes sense, but is even more eerie and scary when we know why the question was asked.

I was genuinely surprised at the twist in the plot at the end and the realization that this ritual was all part of Flint trying to erase the curse that was now on him forever.

Creepy, spooky and spine-tingling, the reader feels the wrongness of the walls that whisper in the vanishing room. An effective use of the prompt. Great title that fits well into the storyline. An enjoyable read.



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