|I am reviewing your item "Breakfast." . Please keep in mind that ALL of the views expressed are purely my own, any suggestions are meant to be helpful, but you are entitled to reject any and all of my opinions. I hope you find something helpful or encouraging.
FIRST IMPRESSIONS: At first, I wondered about where this story was leading us, as the conflict in the plot wasn't immediately apparent. But as the story unfolded, it all became clear. Presentation wise, the grammar is correct, there are no typos and the font and spacing make this easy to read for which I, as a reader, am grateful.
PLOT: Shweta is a student and her mother is head of the Biology Department. Her mother has a presentation and is nervous so they are leaving for school early. Shweta is more concerned with her empty stomach and missing breakfast than she is her mother's success with her presentation, even though an important person, the Head of the Board, is going to be there.
CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: Shweta is completely believable as a school student who has to deal with all the usual difficulties of being school age as well as having her mother there at the school. We don't get to know the mother as well, but we do see her struggling with her various responsibilites and stresses in life.
FINAL THOUGHTS The predicament that the mother finds herself in, namely having prepared a lesson on the importance of eating breakfast yet having neglected to give her own child any at all, is amusing and true to life. Perhaps the buildup to the embarrassing part for them both could have been more dramatic. Overall, this was a well-constructed, pleasant read.
KEEP ON WRITING!
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