A pretty dark flirtation. A deep communication with no dialogue, you still got the relationship and the depth of his feelings understood. The fact that you only allude that she feels the same way and not just playing with him only adds to the story. I liked reading this short story. It was very interesting. Good job.
Beautifully tragic. Talking about the death in a first person perspective was well done.You managed to get a big story into just a single paragraph. Kudos.
An interesting twist making them aliens in the end. You could even have a part two to this story, about what happens when/if she reaches Earth. I enjoyed reading this short story.
A powerful poem,capturing how smiles and a happy face can hide great pain. Keeping it together while shattering inside. I hope you no longer feel this despair.
I always enjoy a good parody. This captured the vanity contests with tongue-in-cheek. This poem captures the voices of the various bards mentioned.The reader can almost see the party and enjoy the celebration along with the legendary wordsmiths. I really enjoyed reading this piece. I raise my cup to you. Great job.
A dramatic imaging of running, I get the impression that it is about running from something. The description of the night was impactful, in that you really show what that night was like. The reader can visualize it. It flowed easily, making it easy to read. Good job.
An intriguing poem. The flow was easy to go along with. I liked how you made the meaning up to the reader. It seems like it is almost a God perspective. If I am correct with that, I like that, it is uncommon.It is had great imagery, dark but not overly dark. My favorite lines where the last two. great job.
I good rhyming scheme. An easy flow that makes for easy reading. Showing the stress and struggles of the corporate world are very well illustrated here. Good job.
A lovely poem.It shows the excitement and longing of young love as she waits her love. I like how you do not tell if he ever arrives. I hope he did. Good job.
A nice read. I feel so bad for that poor little boy. A good message about being kind, and about how people can shake your belief in yourself. Good job.
Interesting story. I noticed you used the same phrase "To say the least" twice really close together, if you intended that,good.I liked how you incorporated different cartoons and animated movies into your piece. Good job.
I found this story entertaining to read. I would like to know more about the eyes. I found the twist interesting. I find myself asking why she has no fear, but the twist comes and her fearful reaction resolves that question. Good job.
A very interesting,dark twist to two childhood nursery rhyme/myth. I enjoyed the pacing and the flow. Vivid imagery without being too vivid. I enjoyed it.
This was an interesting short story. I had mixed feeling on the sad ending, I both disliked and loved it in equal measure, which is a good reaction for a sad ending. I enjoyed reading this. Good job.
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