I am so sorry for your loss. I am happy for you that you had her in your life. I found this essay very moving. The foster care system can be so very hard on a child's soul,it is good that you found the happy and that your soul came through. Thank you for sharing your very personal journey.
Sage advice, there are a lot of people who should heed it. All of us should, actually. The flow of this poem easily carried me from the beginning to the ending. I like the hope you put in, by emphasizing that we can become more positive and better people, capable of love and understanding. I really enjoyed reading this.
I enjoyed this poem. It did an effective job of eliciting feeling in such a brief piece. The imagery shows your love and appreciation of art very well. I found your description of the form of the poem very helpful. You did a very good job with it. I really enjoyed reading it.
A very entertaining poem. I like how the personified ideas illustrate how many types of ideas are formed. The jaunty flow carried me to the end with ease. I smiled throughout, thinking about how ideas have both subtly came and hit me. I found this a very fun read.
A very important poem. This shows how important it is to love yourself and that it is ok to compliment yourself. Your list of self- affirmations was inspiring. It is refreshing to see a person saying kind things about themselves without being egotistical. I really enjoyed this.
A very loving tribute to all veterans. Threading the repetitive phrase, "We can" helps carry the reader along. This poem illustrates the bravery and heroism of our soldiers in a very moving way. I liked how you focused on the soldiers instead of the actual wars. Thank you for sharing.
Very illustrative on the breaking up process. Resolution and healing take time, and this poem shows that very well. I like how you realize at the end, that you will heal and move on. I hope you have healed from this break-up. I found the flow carried me through easily. I enjoyed reading this.
A very entertaining story from the canine perspective. I like how you had him turn his nose up at the liver to eat his "dad"'s food in the refrigerator. I found it amusing when the dog thought how it has been a long time since he has "chewed up anything expensive". I enjoyed reading this.
A very interesting twist in the end. That the trees/leaves are sad shares an important message, that it is important to take care of your environment. Not actually ending it, also helps illustrate the message.I liked how you saved the revelation about why the leaves were blue kept the reader engaged. I enjoyed reading this.
An interesting story. The open ending leaves the reader wanting more. The unanswered questions about what happened to the girls, did they survive the ordeal? Who kidnapped them and why? An intriguing short story. It could grow into a longer story. I really enjoyed reading this.
A jaunty, upbeat description of a very dark event. I like that, instead of of bemoaning the execution, you describe it from the rope's perspective. I really liked your description,"well-spun twine, with deeds to cope,/Hung way up high". Your description, is like the poem itself, both light and dark. I really enjoyed reading this.
I do love a good satire, and this was a good satire. It is subtle in tone, so it could be a serious piece. I enjoy subtle humor, so I like that you used that voice.The flow just carried me along easily to the end. It kept me smiling through the entire, brief piece. I really enjoyed reading this.
"The path of true love never runs smooth." This poem holds such hope for the young lovers, able to overcome any obstacle thrown in their path in hopes to derail the romance. The upbeat flow fosters the hope to grow. I found the last two lines just closed it up perfectly. I really enjoyed this.
A very relatable struggle. I find myself wondering about the two words in bold, "chronic" and "carbonated". The flow takes the reader down the relaxing path to sleep with ease. I am sorry that you have such trouble getting to sleep. I really enjoyed reading this poem.
A very eloquent description of living with chronic pain and autoimmune disorder. I am so sorry that you are going through that. The longer lines disrupt and slow the flow, BUT, that works with the theme and the meaning.The poem illustrates your struggles very effectively. Thank you for sharing.
A wonderful example of a double etheree poem. I have never heard of one, so I had to look it up, and I like learning new things. The imagery of this poem is quite beautiful. Being both serene and sad at the same time. It leaves a question, of who/what you are, are you a feather, for example? I found the flow easy to go along with. I really enjoyed reading this.
A very romantic poem. A love like the one described is rare and beautiful. I like how you keep it tied together by threading it with the repetitive phrase, " A forever love". The flow carries the reader through the entire poem. You can almost feel the love you feel for this woman. I really enjoyed reading this.
Capturing an entire story in a single scene, very well done. The dramatic image of the creature's death was beautiful. Its death was almost sad. A sad ending blended with a happy ending. Sad because the creature dies after it became so beautiful and that there was only one survivor, happy because the creature dies after causing so much death and that there was a survivor. I enjoyed reading this story.
A very hopeful poem. The flow carries the reader along with your wishes for mankind. Showing the reader what can be, gives light and hope. It illustrates your faith beautifully. It shows God without shouting it, but in a voice that gets listened to. I enjoyed this poem.
The death of a dream is so very sad. Just because one grows up, does not mean the dream must die. The imagery of the slow death of a dream, by shrinking shows how subtly it can happen. One should never let their dream die. I hope you have not allowed yours to languish. I enjoyed reading this poem.
An emotional roller coaster, in the good sense. This poem captures the passionate intensity ok love, anger and lust very effectively. I enjoyed the imagery. The romanticizing of domestic violence, via the slap, even though abuse is unforgivable, it fit in this scene of unrestrained emotion. I enjoyed reading this poem.
I really enjoyed this piece. It could have been written for the latest election. Instead of just saying what they will or want to accomplish, they only assassinate their opponents. Your poem captures the vileness and futility of political campaigns very well.
Sage advice. A love that burns fast, burns hot and burns out. A love that is nurtured and grown over time becomes strong. This poem had a nice pace. One of my favorite sections, "Halt.
Take your time.They will have to wait with you.You both will bask in a single emotion for as long as possible." creates a nice image of the object of your love waiting and going at your pace shows the patience of love. I enjoyed reading this.
An absolutely beautiful description of a storm. I too, love a good storm, but I am not so sure I would be on the roof when tornadoes are coming. I like how you bring it full circle by using the same lines at the beginning and in the end. I really enjoyed reading this poem.
A very effective, introspective poem. I am so sorry you feel all that pain, I hope you have found some happiness. A lot of readers can relate to these feelings, we all want to be loved and accepted. Self-doubt can be extremely destructive, and this piece shows that very well. Thank you for sharing.
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