I have entered the 24 syllable contest before and found it very difficult. I think you told a great, simple story here. Everybody loves stories about puppies. I enjoyed reading this through. I hope it did well in the contest. I liked the simplicity of the writing.
I really enjoyed reading this poem through. It was very well written. There was beauty in every corner of this poem. I hope it did well in the contest. There wasa very poetic feeling to this poem and it was beautiful. A nice title too. Great writing again. You are improving every day.
I thought your piece of writing here was very poetic and beautiful. I liked the way you wrote this piece. You have inspired me a great deal. I liked the title too. Sometimes the sky can give a writer the most inspirational sights ever. I think you had a good moment on your trip. I am glad you shared this wonderful poem here.
I thought your poem here was written perfectly. I loved the flowing rhymes and the rhythm too. I think you expressed yourself very, very well here.
This life has left me so afraid.
Am I to feel this to the grave?
I turn and look but no one's there.
Does anyone see? Does anyone care?
Was my favourite part of the poem, it summed up the whole theme of the writing and made your position in life very clear. A love lost is very hard to deal with. I find poetry helps empty the soul of bad feelings and emotions. A great piece of writing.
I thought your poem here was fantastic throughout. The philosophy you used to write this piece was amazing. You contrasted the difference between two conditions, good and evil, happy and sad. This was cleverly written. The title was good and it was clever to include the title into the writing. I really enjoyed reading this through. Great work my friend.
I think in reality it takes guts to admit you love somebody. I liked your honesty here in this piece of writing. The theme was good and I enjoyed reading it through. In some parts of the writing, it was quite musical. I liked how you wrote this piece. Great expressions.
I actually quite liked this writing from you. It held a good little story to it. You were quite honest in the last line. I liked the philosophy of your writing here. I was gripped from start to finish, I was also inspired by reading this through. Great writing.
This is another great piece of writing from you. Again, it was raw and real and very honest. I have really liked your last two poems. You write from the soul, which is obviously a deep but tainted one. The themes were dark and maybe twisted a little bit, but the realness of the meaning was fantastic. I really loved the raw power the most. Great work.
I read your little poem through and thought it was perfect for the mood I'm in right now. It did seem like a tiny little rant about your life at that specific time of writing. I loved the raw feeling this poem gave me. It was very real and true. Great writing.
I thought your little poem here was amazing. There was a little story in there. I really enjoyed reading this through. I was amazed at the inspiration a got from this poem. The last two lines were amazing. Pat yourself on the back for writing this special poem. Great work.
I thought this writing from you was very nice and sweet. The simplicity was amazing. 55 years is longer than I have been alive, so therefor, you are very lucky to still have that love with you. I enjoyed the rhymes in this piece of work from you. It was a very sweet and lovely little poem. Well done for expressing yourself.
I think you were being quite hard on yourself. I am sure there is someone who loves your heart the way it is. I liked how you expressed yourself here. I think women are very complicated creatures and need a lot of attention in the right areas. I also thought this poem was well crafted and written. I enjoyed reading this through.
I am not a drawer or scetcher but I liked this poem. Only you can decide the answer to your ending question. You will have to look at the drawing again and see. Maybe even post the drawing here. I liked the theme of the writing and the creativity you had here. Your originality was great. Good work.
I thought you expressed yourself very well here. You described a horible place to be. I did like the darkness you wrte about though. There was a contrasting line between light and dark. The desire to reach out beyond your normal self. You have probably spoke for many different poets with this writing here. I liked the poem as a whole. Great work.
I thought your poem here was beautiful and lavish. The double acrostic is quite an achievement in my eyes. I also thought this writing was very, very poetic through out. The title was excellent and you wrote of whispering winds really well. I really enjoyed the creativity used here. Great writing.
I liked the theory behind this writing. To write about fact. The Sun will die in about 3 million years. It has been linked to poetry for countless years. The feel of your poem here was intense and real and I enjoyed the honesty of your writing. I have only felt the warmth of the Sun, I have never heard it call to me. Great writing my friend.
I tought this was a beautiful piece of writing. I see this was written a couple of years ago and it still means something to the reader. This was a lovely story but you never ended with what happened to you.... if you have fully recovered then thats fine, edit that into your story. I felt a great wave of emotion as I read this through. Great work.
I thought the rhymes in your poem here were great and the flow was perfect. I am from the Uk and yet I too have shivers down my spine at this song. The title was fitting and noble. This song is as powerful as "TAPS" in my honest opinion. Both are very special.
I actually really liked this poem from you. I really loved the last two lines, they summed up the realness of a bleeding heart. The two lines were exact and clever. The whole poem had a sense of pain about it and the imagery was good. This was a well crafted piece of writing. Great work my friend.
I have to say, I thought your little piece of writing here was brilliant and amazing. I just loved the overall effect the words had on me. This writing was strong and noble and powerful.
Your line, The world ain't a friend but neither a foe
Was the best crafted line I have read in such a long time. The line is very clever and true. The philosophy of this line is 2nd to none. The title was very special too. I adored this poem from you. I read it several times. If you keep writing like this here, you will go far with your writings. Great, great writing my friend.
There was something interesting about this writing here. I think it was the clever way you wrote each line. It is hard to pinpoint. The theme was very original and had a little heart and soul to it. The whole poem held a very poetic feel to it. Overall, I enjoyed reading it through. Good creativity here.
I thought your writing here was very well expressed indeed. The way you opened up your soul onto the page, the way you emptied your feelings down onto the paper. This writing is classic proof that writing helps the soul and mind. I liked the flowing rhythm to this piece of yours. I also liked the clever rhymes too. I couldnt help but sense a romantic side to you here. Great expressions here. Well done.
I loved the light-blue coloured font used here. I think desecribed the snow fall very well considering you have never seen snow. I can tell you the land goes very quiet as there are no vehicles on the roads. Yes, the children do come out in droves and they are all wrapped up. I liked the flow of this poem. The heroic tale was good too. Well written.
I thought your little poem here was great and very rewarding. I think it is great that you are very positive about your wheelchair bound life. The words and lines in this piece of writing were very uplifting and powerful. This was a joy to read through. Great writing !!
I thought this poem was very well written and displayed. The poem was very deep and intelliegent to me. I liked the sentiment of each line. There was also a hint of sorrow in some of the lines. I reaaly liked the title too. The title drew me into the writing. A great read, thank you.
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