I think you described depression very well here. It seems like the harder you try to escape, the worse it gets. Your poem here reminded me of the Pink Floyd songs from the concept album "The Wall".... That whole album is themed around a man experiencing difficulties. You spoke of a brick like wall. This sparked the thought. I hope you are feeling much better these days. God bless and keep going....
There was something catchy about this writing here. I liked the theme of the poem. I also liked the size of the font you used. I found no errors and no way of improving the writing. I enjoyed the innocence of each line. Great inovated writing. Keep going...
Aww, this little piece of writing was very sweet. The imagery that came along with the words was great. There was a pinch of excitement coming from this write. A world of wonder and mystical beings. I loved every word and read it through numerous times. Great work and keep going....
I thought your poem here was really sweet. Your fond memories were captured perfectly here. The form was good too. All your writings seem to come with a thump from the heart. Soulful and spiritual. Your themes are sentimental and meaningful. Well done for recreating the memories. Keep going....
I thought your little piece of writing here was good. I liked the theme, it was an opener for discussion. Modern man and life, is speeding up and technology is waiting for no one. There was a good flow to your writing. Children are born these days into a world of gagets. It is actually quite scary. Good work. Keep going....
I thought your writing here was lovely. This was such a nice accolade for your niece. The descriptive lines of each stage of her new life was special and rewarding. I really liked the last two lines the most. They seemed to sum up your feelings really well. Your writing style here was great. Keep going....
I thought your little piece of writing here was great. I loved the last line most. It summed the writing up perfectly. I am not familiar with the form you used, but I know it made the poem exciting. Yes, there was imagery coming from the words and lines. Good expressions. Keep going...
Stuart Adamson was the finest writer of his time. The words to Eiledon (The Seer), are the most emotional words I have ever read. I often cry at the musical genius that Stuart was. I have shook Stuarts hand at a concert I went to. I have seen Big Country play 6 times and have met Bruce Watson personally. Bruce was Stuarts wing man on guitar and stage. There is a fanpage on Facebook for Big Country fans, it is called "Through a Big Country"..... I am a member. Stuart took his own life and it was the worse day of my life. I listen to Big Country every day. Stuarts sucide note was this.... and it is all he wrote....
"I will be back at noon"
Stuart Adamson is the finest man I ever knew. I miss him. A musical genius.
I thought your little story here was direct and to the point. I was gripped to the story as it unfolded. It would have been nice if you wrote more and in more detail. Most people like a good scare including me. I liked the atmosphere of your story. Keep going....
I actually quite liked this little piece of work from you. The message was honest and it made me smile. The darkness of the meaning was real yet positive. There was a little story here in this writing. I liked all three lines and wouldn't change a thing with this item. Good work. Keep going....
I thought your little piece of writing here was good. The imagery coming from the words and lines was good. This made me feel cold. (lol). Walking in winter time can be very refreshing and soul inspiring. The theme was great. I enjoyed reading this through. Keep going...
I liked your poetic sway in this writing. You wrote this very well. The prompt was a good one. I am very familiar with Pink Floyd's "PULSE" concerts. I have the PULSE DVD and watch it regulary. You crafted this writing very well. I hope this did well in the contest. Keep going...
I thought this was very romantic indeed. The nostalga of a remembered love. I loved the poetic sway of romance here. The story you told was very sweet. I also thought your writing here was very thought provoking. Made me feel lucky to have a love of my own. Great writing. Keep going....
Awww. I thought your poem here was very, very good. The sentiment and value of each line was special. To me, this was a clever write, a special write. Daddy always means a lot to his daughter. I loved the emotion in this piece of work. The lines struck a chord in my soul. Well done for writing a special piece of work.
I thought your little piece here was very nice and rewarding to read through. The secnd line was sublime and really set my imagery on fire. I must admit, I don't know what "piper" is, you will have to fill me in on that one. (Doh). Overall, a lovely sweet piece of writing.
Yes, a gripping story here. They have said that love can be a killer and your charcter proved it so. I thought your grammar and story telling was perfect. The story was told in a quality way. I couldn't find any faults in your tale here. 10 out of 10 for executing this fine piece.
I think the human mind works in so many ways that is impossible to keep track of. Controlling the mind or brain is something that we all should do more often. To change the way we think in our lives is sometimes handed over to God, especially in America. I am from the UK and rely on my own thoughts to retrieve my dignity, I do however believe in the higher power that is God. I think intellect can be a curse, I have known some very smart and clever people in life only to have poor dead end jobs, yet were terrific at school. Your writing here was very uplifting and positive. You opened up the doors to an educated discussion of the spirit of man and how he can adapt oneself.
I thought this writing from you was well crafted and processed. I really liked the flow of this piece. The last stanza really caught my eye the most. The rhyming was great and made the writing special. To me all of the poem was quite poetic. A different piece to the norm. Great writing. Keep going...
I thought your poem here was very nice and rewarding. The romantic sway of a love gone by. Your imagination in this piece was fantastic. The presentation was perfect. The italic font made the writing and contents much more poetic and had a real effect on me. Great work.
A lovely little story this was. Simple and yet very effective. Your grammar was great and set the scene very well. The whole piece sent shivers down my spine with high spirituality. The imagery was great and inspired me somewhat. I wouldn't change a thing with this piece, it is fine the way it is. Great writing. Keep going....
I thought your little story here was quite cool. I was gripped to the story line throughout. The concept of the story was great and I loved the title, this was very imaginative and rewarding. Your grammar was clear and direct. I found no errors and no way of improving the piece. Great work. keep going...
I thought your writing here was very special indeed. I loved the philosophy behind this piece from you. My creative mind was inspired greatly by this piece. A whisperer in the darkness is a beautiful title and matched the writing superbly. Fantastic writing, keep going....
I thought your little piece of writing here was quite good. Your grammar and story telling is actually rather impressive. After reading this through, I felt like I could read a book from you. You painted a picture with good imagery. It seemed like a scene from the movie and games of "Silent Hill".....
Well written piece of writing. It did however make me laugh. I loved the last line, it rolled along perfectly and it summed up the quality of the whole item. You managed to write a good little story in just a few short lines. I loved it all......
I thought your little piece of writing here was fantastic. Written perfectly. The theme was sweet and innocent. The flow was good, the rhythm and rhymes were special. This is one of the finest poems I have read in a long while. Great work and keep going....
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