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Review of Atychiphobia  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
interesting story. I have said that in a lot of reviews recently, but I have been coming up pretty lucky in picking things to read. I love the mythology and all, but it seems to be a pretty desperate battle for survival. It sets things up really well for an epic battle between good and evil and then we fade out just as the epic battle begins. That part is a bit of a disappointment. I was really looking forward to finding out which side would win. I was hoping that Lione would win. I feel really bad for him.

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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found this story interesting. It reminds me of some stories I played around with writing when I was younger. I find it coincidental that Stelsong could so easily appear human. Perhaps it would help to clarify how. Some of the grammar is stilted and there are some places where words have obviously been accidentally left out. I would suggest reading it aloud to so that you can make sure it says what you think it does. Overall it is a good draft. I would be interested in reading more if you have any.
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Review of Northern light  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting poem. I like the metaphor of windows. They tie the poem together well. They seem to signify all things good, hope, wealth, connection. At the same time they can be negative. He values the eastern, western, and southern views but states "There is No Glory in northern light." it reminds me of the sense of failure that comes with returning home to live as an adult.
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Review of Natural Immunity  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Oooh creepy. I wad thinking about so many things that could happen. I did not expect the trees to eat the people. It wasn't a twist because it was foreshadowed, but i just didnt quite see that happening. At one point i thought the men would suicide rather than let it be trashed.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
There are several places where you used of when i think you meant off. It is very full of dialog for a battle scene. Perhaps less talkie more fightie would help. Speeding up the pace of it might be good too. But i am nitpicking. I like the story even though historical fiction isn't one of my favorite genres.
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Review of Dear Me (2013)  
Review by Spring in my Sox
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I love the structure you set up in using a complaint letter as your form. I love the tongue in cheek tone throughout. I like how you are critical of certain past results while being proactively encouraging to yourself on future exploits. Bravo. Excellent piece!
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Review of A Displaced Man  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.0)
The punctuation and capitalisation are erratic. I cant fault that much, i do it myself more than i like to admit. The subject matter gets a little. Wobbly in the second half, like it should maybe split into two poems. I don't know though. I love the imagery of the first two stanzas. But the last one confuses me a bit.
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Review of Snokum Joe  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
One-eyed Billy sounds like a glutton for punishment, or maybe he's just not the sharpest shovel in the shed. I would look for a kindly old grandmother's grave after the first one. Or is this semetary full of the oneriest cusses in creation. Maybe Billy should just save time and dig his own grave.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
It is an interesting story, it sounds like you did a good job of keeping it age appropriate. I like the conversational tone and the comfortable way you
"spoke" to your granddaughter. Sharing things like this with the younger generation is a treasure in the making. Someday when she is a grandmother she will pull this journal out and show it to her grandkids and tell them about their great-great-granmother.
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Review of I fall...  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
this poem is visually impressive. I love the perfect teardrop shape of it. What is even more awesome is how the subject matter flows through the shape. It is very moving to me. I love the overall positive message and have to admit there have been times in my life where this poem would have been very helpful.
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Review of My Writings  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You wrote a cute little poem here, I like the repetitive patterns you used. It was a longer poem than I usually write and I admire you for that. I appreciate that you didn't use any unnecessarily flowery words. This poem has a clear point it is trying to make and I rather like it.
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Review of Closet  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this story, and especially the double twist, first the monster is real, then it is just a dream. The characterization is cool I love the demonic father reassuring his demonic daughter it is awfully sweet. I was worried it was some kind of monster forcing him to be so sleepy.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This poem is strong. I like the story it tells about someone who is too proud to accept help when they need it. THey have charity for everyone else in the world except themselves. I have known a lot of people with that affliction. Working three jobs to get by rather than applying for aid from the government or going to food banks. It can be a scary way to live. Wouldn't it be better for everyone to realize everyone depends on everyone else.
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Review of ~KARMA~  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a good story of Karma. It is told well through the format of memos and diary entries. I don't know the prompt but I am certain it is an excellent adaptation. The upright character Mandy displays is apparent from the beginning. I suspected Sally of setting her up from the beginning. I am glad she got hers and got fired. I am also Glad Mandy got not one but two good jobs in the end.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Whoa! Did you write that? Wow. It is a serious discussion of a subject that most people don't want to think about. I don't know how it manages it but it is simultaneously dark and hopeful. It rides the edge between dragging you down and lifting you up with the concept that death is universal so why anticipate it live instead. I liked this even though it got very deep and philosophical.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The story is awesome, it is definitely not what I was expecting. I like the two main characters a lot. The two murderers aren't as likable and aren't as well illustrated. The first half really is good, but the ending is a lot of telling not showing. There are a couple of places that could use another hard return between paragraphs otherwise there isn't really much to criticize.
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Review of False Arrest  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I love this story. I could see my great uncle Donald doing something like this when my mom was growing up. There are a lot of stories most of them involved him moving to a new state until the statute of limitations was up. He lost his license more times than I have renewed my ID.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This doesn't follow some conventions, dialog is usually held between quotation marks, with each speaker receiving a new paragraph, tags like said or questioned are common but not required. I would recommend reading about things like this to assist you in making your writing more accessible to everyone.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, there's that. The numerous descriptive words, while vivid were a little hard to chew on, even for me. I liked the descriptions they formed really strong images in my mind. Still it was a rough read all in one big chunk like that. The last line made me rethink the whole thing in terms of the matrix.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This seems a very thorough self-review . You cover most of the major points that should come up in a good review. One thing I think you should have added is a link to the actual story in case someone like me comes across this review and is intrigued enough to want to read the story itself. To do a link you type
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where the "x"s are the item number for the story and that can be found at the top of the story below the title.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
This is a good chapter, it has great characterization and I loved the pov character. I can feel his anxieties and the prejudices he has faced throughout his life through this small sliver of a morning in his life. I like the way his tech works, but have to admit that kind of tech scares me. It feels like one step away from thought police.
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Review of What If?  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I liked the poem. The way it is just a list of questions leave the reader to answer them for themselves about people in their lives. Everyone has regrets in the past and this poem seems to explore them. I followed through smoothly until the last line. That last question was a shocker, it seems to ask if having a child was a mistake.
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Review of Sometimes  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This seems unfinished and unorganized. It could be a beautiful free verse poem with just an ounce or two more work. I like the images and sensations it talks about but they could flow just a bit better, and the last line just hangs unfinished. For what it is it is really good.
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Review of Control Center  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the metaphor. My control room needs some sweeping up too. I have a professional do a once over once a week but you can't leave it all to them. You have to do some of the upkeep yourself, get plenty of rest, eat nutritious foods, get plenty of exercise, sort through the junk and dump what should go into the recycle bin.
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Review of Tear Me Down  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, that is a lot of emotion packed in just a few words. It looks like a fairly long poem, but it says a lot in what seems like so few words. It is about pain, that is clear. And a miserable childhood. Life spent belittled and unappreciated. Pain can lead to beauty and I feel like it lead to a beautiful poem.
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