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Review by Carl
Rated: E | (5.0)
A truly fantastic interactive!!
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Review by Carl
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
An interesting poem. I have mixed feelings regarding the doctrine of prayer. If things (like Revelations) are ordained and will happen and cannot be changed, what use is praying about not letting it happen? Either way interesting writing and I like the use of bold at the end.
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Review of cotton candy  
Review by Carl
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was really cute I especially like the ending:

At first, it seems he'll start to cry
but parents laugh and wipe his eyes
and prompt "now Henry, lick your lips."
Then Henry smiles in sweet surprise.

About as sweet as the treat he just got. I like how not every poem needs to be super serious, having some be light and fluffy is cool. :)
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Review by Carl
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very cool story, always a fan of foot related content. Only suggestion would be to make storyline's deeper than spread out. IE instead of having 10 chapters for 10 girls have like 2 girls with 5 chapters that the story keeps going for significantly longer before it ends.

Other than that THIS STORY ROCKS!!!
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A good start I hope more people add to it!
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Review by Carl
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good stuff!
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Review by Carl
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
So far so good but it needs more chapters!
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This looks interesting - I love the way you have the tournament set up with some specific rules. Look forward to reading more.
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Cool start looking to see more of the Mage's order route!
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Review of Big Sister Femdom  
Review by Carl
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Could use some more additions but this is a good interactive!
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Awesome story you have here!
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is a really creative story! Not a big furry fan but you made it fun with lots of nice fetish action. :)
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Good stuff! I like a lot of the story lines.
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Review by Carl
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good story! Not a huge DBZ fan but I didn't need to be to enjoy the story. :)
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Review of Office Feet  
Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
The start of another fantastic story I'm sure! I love the detailed description and cast of characters - well done. :)
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Good start - be interesting to see what kind of action you'll be writing.
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Review by Carl
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
("Did you guys not hear me?" Chelsy declared in disbelief. They weren't even paying attention to her.
Finally, Lori turned around. "What's your problem, Chelsy?" she snapped.
"My PROBLEM?" Chelsy reply hotly, "I tell you, I'm hearing VOICES, Lori! I hear a bunch of voices in my head!"
"You are seriously delusional." Lori concludes with a blank expression on her face.)

I thought this was part was well written. Though I would recommend more space in between sentences.
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Good start - looking forward to seeing more.
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This a good start - best of luck with the interactive!
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Very cool idea! The Bunny Girl entries are HOT HOT HOT!
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Great story!
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
WOW! What a great new story. I loved the slow build up and now the foot domination is starting. I can't wait to read more! :)
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Perfect 10 - I love this story!
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Review of They Can't  
Review by Carl
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Story too short - I want more!
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Review by Carl
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Looks like you've done a decent job of setting up the examples but there isn't a whole lot of story here. When there is more content I'll adjust my rating. :)
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