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Review of Youth  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)


 
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Youth  (ASR)
Youth is wasted on the young, but love doesn't have to be.
#1304964 by Shaara


IMPRESSIONS:*CheckR*: A very accurate piece for the kind of Writer's Cramp line you were given. I liked the amoral moral and the subject that cast a real truth to the personna's life and times in a nutshell. It has a bit a poetry, I'm telling you. No doubt about it. That I have always loved about your work. The question of youth and love as a bait line really reels in your readers.

GRAMMAR, SYNTAX, SPELLING:: The material proved to be a success by the end of the piece, well-intact. Love whistles through her purple hair, as the woman is portrayed. No spelling mistakes I could find.

FINAL COMMENT: *CheckR* It may be a fantasy piece in that I noted the theme with the personna as 127 years old as the remedy for remaining wise and it appears to be true. But then, I am sure there are other remedies and this is but one of them. I'm sure you also fully aware of that. True, this piece is stylish. So glad to know you edited this week's Love/Romance Newsletter. Well-done editing, I felt.

Feather Duster
aka vicki



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Review of The Funeral  
In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)


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Just about covers it all, when it comes to a funeral. It reels in the years of maybe really knowing "mother" and finding a prayer for in the end not in vain. Well-done style. I found it very spiritual and good to relate to. Great for a feature in the Spiritual Newsletter this week for purposes of really giving readers a chance to gain comprehension on the matters of mind, spirit, and soul.



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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)




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FIRST IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR*Examining Sci Fi like this, (what little I know of it by reading it), I found it quite exciting and suspenseful. "Quorilax: High Tide" is a true and golden masterpiece. As the Hub Folder continues on, I think I will read it. Even if I don't review it, I would like you to know that it is a great undertaking on your part, and I admire you for it.

GRAMMAR, SYNTAX, SPELLING:*CheckR* There were no mistakes in spelling that appeared to me. Your material was swiftly a
good piece for me to read with its congrousness, without the pain of reading through much conjectures. Material like this
is fascinating. Like a conundrum, it falls into place. I liked things in sucession and noted in "One": 'like a tiny deer caught in giant headlights"; "Two": "Had I become the pet of a giant cat?". Lines also like: "I must be um . . .a little king." and in,say,
"Five": You will be where you been thus far, with Zarbaxa." Quotes which are the fibers that you find flow amongst good dialogue
lines.

SUGGESTIONS:*CheckR*Tell us more, tell us more. THus, is the reason for reading on with this piece.

FINAL COMMENT:*CheckR*It is only my opinion. I openly want to admit that I love a Sci Fi channel on TV. Film sometimes
can do justice to a piece. However,in the long run, for me,it is the novel that keeps time with the causal theory of relativity in a silent, mature, and effective way for me.


Feather Duster
aka vicki

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Review of Claire  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice intro to a mysterious girl. If this gels. it is something your memory will love to explore. Put a comma instead of period after . . . new pitcher," in the fifth line to keep grammatically correct. Voila, another excellent beginnings for a story. Write on!
Best of intentions,
Feather Duster
aka vicki

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)



"Mina
"The Countess
"Lucy
"Mina Learns A Secret About Her Lover



IMPRESSIONS: This journal, about three wives of Dracula is done tastefully and descriptively. Romance is the center of Megan Rose's journal here as it is in many of her exclusive pieces that come acrossin changing times like barbie dolls and ken dolls, princesses and princes, kings and queens, indian maidens and warrrors in armor,and in this case, vampires and their wives.. She is steadily giving us great picturesque stories that are great with characters and their attitudes in a psychological way. She is really good at it. I like her many sides to wolves as well and how she has worked with wolves in her work.

GRAMMAR: A few mistakes. Typos.

SUGGESTIONS: Continue with entries to tie in. It's an exciting journal.

FINAL COMMENTS: Princess Megan Rose's graphics have always been exceptional and the best. As you browse her portfolio those there in different folders are a joy to examine, showing a personal touch and a brilliant artistic examination of the labour of life and life in fiction.


Feather Duster
aka vicki

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Review of God's Eyes  
In affiliation with God's Way Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS:*CheckR*Long are the days when I have feared the devil's wrath. To be there where the Lord lies in truth and civility toward opinions, I can see through these eyes, too. And How Great Thou Art. Thank you.

GRAMMAR, SYNTAX,SPELLING:*CheckR* Material for all time, all ages, all places. Excellent verse lines, steady and traditional. Content material at a balance, no spelling mistakes.

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* Write on!

FINAL COMMENTS: May I keep that last line in mind for my brothers too? It is so appropriate. This is my opinion one day at a ime.


Feather Duster
aka vicki


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In affiliation with God's Way Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS:*CheckR* It is true that when accidents happen God watches over us. In that, I trust. My impressions of your poem are straightforward for you: you have acheived what you want to acheive and it is something I want. . .good things happen to people who wait.

GRAMMAR, SYNTAX, SPELLING: *CheckR* I believe this is a sestina, am I right? You have not specified this at the bottom of your poem. This makes it nice for reviewers. With respect toward your sense of things you shape things with a great power and a voice. It is powerful. It is what I think you might have wanted to have reviewers see. Moving, yes.

SUGGESTIONS: True to form, I believe. No suggestions.

FINAL COMMENTS: Saw this feature in the Spiritual Newsletter this week. Congrats. It is a must-read for us at WDC who love this Newsletter.


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In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


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Girl from a Dusty Memory  (18+)
Searching the dusty folders of my memory, her elusive name made me fall all over again
#1227557 by iKïyå§ama


IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* Coming from a distant star like Beetlejuice, you have captured me. I loved your dialogue with this piece. I find your bio a masterpiece and I hope to GOD I fit in with WDC because I feel I must have luck to enjoy pieces like "Girl From A Dusty Memory".

GRAMMAR:, SYNTAX AND SPELLING:*CheckR* Gee, you are all over the place with this. It's fabulous. A real epic adventure nd I'm wondering if you have done an interactive nor not. I'm not getting chummy but are you for real?

SUGGESTIONS:*CheckR* Keep it the same, keep it the same, keep it the same. LOL

FINAL COMMENT: *CheckR* Hope to someday visit your star again, er your portfolio I mean. You have great, raw talents with respect to where you are beaming from.


Feather Duster
aka vicki


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


 Fairytales come true  (13+)
This poem was dedicated to two of my best girl friends and their boyfriends.
#1702660 by Jae



Such a wonderful message to me today on this early morning! Brilliant writing for a breath of air and a cup of coffee. Thank you for giving me a chance to hear this today. May you have a nice day!




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Rated: E | (4.5)


 My best friend disability  (E)
Living with a disability
#1701295 by The Sky's the limit


IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* Wow. I'm sure you have talent. You have much to say in a clever way that branches out toward
the excellent line:

We make a good team, disability and I

I think this poem has heart and gives of itself. I love the form of poetry you used. I recognize it. I'm familiar with poems whichcome across as a lesson to learn, a gift to know about, a wish to handle with a star somewhere.

SUGGESTION: *CheckR*I'm not sure I myself would center it in that way. It is your procedure and your poem. It has a good attractive look; however, I would go line by line with commas and periods and make it shorter lines with stops for the
correct conjunctions. Come from the left side non-centered.

FINAL COMMMENT: *CheckR* This poem keeps your intellectual juices going! It does not strap you with a bulwark of nonsense nor too much of the garden. It picks one up. It gives sweat a little to a good word. Likely that it will be an excellent
poem to keep safe in your portfolio.


Feather Duster
aka vicki


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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)


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Cherokees and Animal Spirits  (ASR)
Soldiers are in trouble when they try to take on a Cherokee tribe.
#1700582 by Princess Megan Rose


IMPRESSIONS:*CheckR* How precious and perfectly told. You have made me dream of great things with graphics with the silver fox, and the deer, and the big bear, and the tiger, and the wolf. Twilight Wolf is most illusive, provocative, and beautiful. Your style of tale here furnishes the reader with a lovely story that is well-thought out and very worthy of being award-winning.

GRAMMAR: *CheckR* For perfect copy on line 41, put a space between the word you and hadn't.

SUGGESTONS: *CheckR* Hope you are well and keeping healthy!

FINAL COMMENTS: *CheckR* I am working on reading a man in Canada as I had mentioned to you. He is a true tribesman. And writes with the wide world of communication. Michael Running Wolf. Your story has new elements and yet goes on the same lines of his tales. Highly fascinating.


Feather Duster
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Review of Thirst  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)



QUICK IMPRESSION: *CheckR* Liked your idea with its "creature". The mystery of the woman's body is a a can-see reaction. Thinking on it is a little scary but okay. Then the title. It grabs the point. Clear. I like syllogisms like reading this item.

Feather Duster/aka vicki

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



just clicking through the Romance/Love Newsletter this week with its hot items. Premontions come to me with this and I feel at ease with it. Jist of things that loops time and ground roots. Very well-spaced and smart dialogue that doesn't wander. Enjoyed it!!


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Review of Sr Mary Carola  
In affiliation with God's Way Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)



FIRST IMPRESSIONS:*CheckR* I am so proud to read this piece. Probably one of the best short cultural pieces I have read on WDC. Moving and a just all-in-round feel good piece.

GRAMMAR:*CheckR* Excellent style of speech with this. That was what I noted first. Content was so interesting that it caught my attention and I related to the wonderful last line! Great way to write this. No spelling mistakes.

SUGGESTONS: *CheckR* Hope you have a nice day!

FINAL COMMENTS:*CheckR* Without matters of our faith like you have described I probably would have not been able to be keeping my interests in looking for great pieces like these and not be here.


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Rated: E | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS*CheckR* I love your offer to revisit your portfolio. What I have seen here is again a naturally gelled poem with great impressions to mark. I see again your womanly senses with a powerful force of earth rings and perhaps a sun and moon existence in a grand fashion of stars. It is kind of a romantical poem to me. Perhaps giving no leeway to lose a lover. Therefore, enticing. You can put barriers up against love, but when you talk of your lover perhaps just perhaps, it's just notion I am going on:

pretending we're different even though we're the same

is a line that governs the poem with a great impression of survival that you speak of, with romance as a guide as well.


GRAMMAR*CheckR*: Good verse. People flourish in it. I love it. I don't see why not. If there is a traditional line movement it takes it just that much more tight.



SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* Write on! Good job.


FINAL COMMENT:*CheckR* I like your portfolio. I'm a fan already!



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Review of Her Tears  
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Rated: E | (5.0)


FIRST IMPRESSIONS:*CheckR* Words such as these tame the wild heart and calm the soul. I like your soothing sounds and your knowledge of the grand mother nature as woman. Questions we ask ourselves in the great cosmos. Look for these questions to answer and we are making our way in the world. Perhaps, the Lord is there to care, and a man is not hearing. I believe the opposite does not happen. the Lord is there to guide and not quit guiding. Gravesites are many, we must kneel in mud at times, and there are always more. I have to admit, at times it is hard for me to see.

GRAMMAR:*CheckR* A little off alignment but that is all.

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* I will think on your poem.

FINAL COMMENT: *CheckR* You did just fine. Highly understandable and get a spiritual language with it.


Feather Duster
aka vicki


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


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The Shell Necklace  (18+)
A management trainee's act of kindness is reciprocated in a touching way.
#1686667 by Prof Moriarty







FIRST IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* I would like to admit immediately I have not read anything quite like this on WDC yet. It was a most prestigious, detailed account of a love encounter that came after the character had some time to think on what it was he might end up receiving from a lover. Oh, to be in the heartland of Africa. You know your stuff. I read Robert Rurak for African Lit and he was excellent. Kind of Heart Of Darkness stuff by Joseph Conrad. I love your African Queen. Rosa is loveable, too. Your signs of knowing life itself with a certain bend on psychology shine through. Light at the end of the tunnel. The working man and his dilemma vs. the land concerns me here. I see the true task of your labors and it is manly fiction. Liked it as a femaie, to be honest.

GRAMMAR: *CheckR* You might add-on to the following line and explain saying something indignantly. You are only slightly prone to showing us what you want to feel without keeping your character of a good, solid man at only a few points.


"Next time, ask her to meet me. Otherwise, don't accept any more of these," I replied indignantly, gesturing at the honey

and then you forgot the word "me" after this first sentence of a paragraph:

Abena’s husband continued to elude,

These are only a few grammatical mistakes. To polish off your piece you don't need to do much.

PRAISE AND APPLAUSE: *CheckR* I commend you for doing a grand job of mapping out an African encounter. It is suspenseful and enjoyable and then enters into an intimate encounter and gives the reader a love scene that is very sexy. I liked your knowledge It borders on a message or lesson that we get. And I love to see that in stories. I did not mind the length because I kept up with it and it keeps my attention.

FINAL COMMENTS:*CheckR* Talent. Real talent is displayed here in your writing. I like your style. You're very close to giving us a winning piece here.


Feather Duster
aka vicki


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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)



IMPRESSIONS: I just find it irresistable. It is very easy to like this poem. It has all the markings of genuine love, affections, and faith in another that make poems unforgettable. I thought of you, Megan, and your life, and related it and it became lovely and highly admirable to me.

GRAMMAR: The kyrielle sonnet form is an excellent traditional way of expressing poetry. You did very well with it.

SUGGESTIONS: I like your style and can't say much to suggest. Merely a word on line breakage. It is good to be fragile with it and alignment can sometimes make a poem awkward.

FINAL COMMENT: You are the most talented author I know. I'm so glad I get a chance tor review your stuff.

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Review of Paper World.  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)


IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* I am close with Cardio. My boyfriend has heart problems and I worry endlessly over him. Let us just say this piece has me left with a sad smile. I have no reality to it but that life is treating us well and I hope luck is on his side.*Star*

FINAL COMMENT: *CheckR* Is there an afterlife? Dad always prayed for one. Can we call it just a serene place? Or is it more? Dare we ask?*Star*


Thanks for letting me in your portfolio It was a pleasure. Write on!

Feather Duster
aka vicki

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Rated: E | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS:*CheckR* I could not but think of Savior Christ Jesus. For a moment it grabbed me to pray and then I thought beyond it. There is endless and useful markings of those speaking of His Great Steps. I am but a pebble in that pond where fishes swim. I wonder if you know how deep and impressive this is. A WDC genuine high mark.*Star*

GRAMMAR:*CheckR* Excellently done. To have unquoted and quoted originally, it's precious.*Star*

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* Look to the future.*Star*

LAST COMMENTS: *CheckR* I might add there are things that come to me on a second read, it is that kind of poem. It will come to me if I were to read it thrice.*Star*

Feather Duster
aka vicki

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IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* Just as do you, I enjoy the beloved haiku form. Now I am aware of what you call The Familiar Form. Thank you. I see the illusions and the most important thing I think a haiku to my mind has: closeness to nature. The haiku form can be taken from China earth, but it still regenerates is renewed and never ends. *Star*

GRAMMAR:*CheckR* Perfect.*Star*

SUGGESTIONS: *CheckR* None.*Star*

FINAL COMMENTS: *CheckR* I will finish your portfolio. I enjoyed this visit.*Star*


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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)


The tiger is just beautiful: Princess. I love this story. It is sweet and cartoonesque with its Clara a woman. And it has movement to it which gives the piece a good rating from me. To talk with the animals, squeek and squack with the animals, it's just what Dr. Doolittle tells us! Quite a feed. I'm impressed.

Feather Duster
vicki

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IMPRESSIONS: *CheckR* Isn't this a sly part of the series? Jane Austen has always had that charm down through the ages and somehow you capture it! You know you make this meaningful. I asked myself who this Miss Schippen is and her place in life and it became very meaningful. Yes, you have meaningful stuff and it's quite fun to read! You have a captivating character study here in your storyline. Trumble is humourous in the contemp way. You know? It is your style. It's outstanding with . . . style. I loved it.

GRAMMAR*CheckR* I did find a few spelling errors: line 21:mahogany is the correct way as is in line 24 "with" and line 27 pompous and line 28 charming. I know they are typos and you were probably going at break-neck speed. watch out to go back and enjoy your piece and you will have perfect spelling. It's not my strongest point, personally. one other: Jennifer and Megan sit to sat on line 22.


SUGGESTIONS:*CheckR* Keep writing! You are just the best.

LAST COMMENTS: {:e:checkR} To me, your stuff has much greatness even if it is in its raw form. This is essentially not raw at all, it speaks from that other century, when women were interesting in a different way. It is sophisticated. It comes across well. And to illude to oneself in a way gives all the mystery to a piece that you think you have, yes, it is there.


Feather Duster
vicki

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Review of No End Valley  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)


IMPRESSIONS: I like this poem. It gives us a glorious, colorful and thoughtful usage of the Lord's words. Its spiritualness takes us on a journey into mindul expressions of what he can be and mean for us. Your own place in the poem tells us something. It is behest of a message.
It tells us you follow Him.

PRAISE: I am singing the melodies of the clouds you say. Very nicely metaphoric. You sound as though your journey causes you to walk long. Do not stumble. He will answer.

LAST COMMENT: Words of praise are good to engage in. The best of poems. The psalms are so wonderful. We can never really do justice to them.

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vicki

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Review of Who Am I?  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)


IMPRESSIONS: You sound like a dedicated mother and you really came up with something when you told us about the Bible study you went through
with your husband. God's Way has this featured in their forum and I thought I would go ahead and read it. I liked your blog/journal. I had made a journal/blog but did not put it on the site about vacation time I spend in Florida for ten years and it is very long. I like reading blogs. Every day life can be so thought-provoking and much more than trivial.

PRAISE: I give you credit. You should write every day. It's a great goal.

Feather Duster
vicki

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