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ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3279935

Review of Promises of Spring

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about spring. Very nice presentation. Skillfully crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a spring mornings dew and tall grass needing to be mowed.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aba. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line two (spring, bring).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the joy of spring. Nice aha moment in line three. Good contrast to lines one and two.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3279923

Review of Is He There?

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about her dream lover. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm of your poem even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. She expresses her love for this man of her dreams who is illusive, just out of her reach.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and good assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3279091

Review of Great Pyramid of Cheops

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good short write that is concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a blue sky and on the ground beneath it ancient man made stones that seem untouched by time.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Thoughtful. A lovely sense of history.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3279043

Review of A Way with Words

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write that says thank you creatively. Clever word play. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of simile: 'Her compliment was like a kiss' - a very nice descriptive/comparison about how her compliment touched you.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece (today, way; me, sea). Nice internal rhyme in line one (day, today); line eight (see, sea) and line nine (mist, wrist).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thoughts for her and your friendship beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line five, should be 'Veggies'.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3279024

Review of Rainbow

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the comfort this special person gives to you. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, if you add a comma at the end of line one, the flow and rhythm is even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the warmth you feel for this person who means so much to you and whose voice is golden because it uplifts and encourages, like a rainbow.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3278386

Review of Lightning

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a storm. Skillfully crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a powerful thunderstorm, with crackling lightning and booming thunder.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the crescendo of a powerful storm beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3278217

Review of A poet with a movie camera

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective as you use a camera to see yourself, to look within to seek your true self. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion as you try to express the darkness which is consuming that you see with that lens. You seem to find lost pieces of yourself in this moving picture you have created.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of your feelings. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3278211

Review of My Monster

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good dark write about the battle raging inside you. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming couplets which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Powerful. You express your feelings about this 'monster' within you that seems to consume you as you cry out to someone close to you to help pull you from this darkness.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3277715

Review of Wild Horses-Acrostic Contest

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A nice title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about love that ends resulting in a broken relationship. A well crafted free style metered rhyming acrostic.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccddaa. A good mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how crazy in love you once were, but no more as you finally say goodbye to each other and your relationship. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3277677

Review of Once a Man

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the life of our Lord. Skillfully crafted free verse couplets that are short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the character of the God man, our Lord and Savior and how he was treated by mankind while He walked the earth.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Strong use of repetition for emphasis of His treatment by others.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on

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#3277649

Review of Love's first kiss

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about a first kiss. Romantic. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of love's first kiss and sweet tenderness of a soft caress.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express the warmth and romance of closeness with someone dear to you as you and this special person surrender to love's first kiss.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the special touch as love blossoms. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3277150

Review of Ephemeral Slumber

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about fleeting sleep. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of how you view your day which you describe much like a soldier's work day that follows you into your time of sleep, which you don't get.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'as a soldier weighted with weapons, I trudge day's path drearily' - a very good descriptive/comparison on how tired you feel and how it affects your sleep.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good and a unique rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how hard it is for you to rest because you can't find peace from your daily struggles which cause you toss and turn unable to find restful sleep.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, consonance and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3277141

Review of Circus Circuits

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective. Clever word play. Skillfully crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice simile: 'my mind works more like clouds, whirling with winds of thoughts' - a very good comparison/descriptive of your mind and nature (clouds/winds).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about how your mind works creatively in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of your subject, your working mind. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, very nice closing lines with a bit of humor. A good read, write on.

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#3277065

Review of Moving Target

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write, heartfelt and introspective about your life journey. Thoughtful. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of what you see on the road, leading you to a place unknown. Through the lens of your eyes, the reader sees the trees and mystyness that clings to the windshield and hears the hum of the wheels of your car as it travels down the road.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts of this journey and where it may lead to very well in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of rhetorical questions for use of emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3276584

Review of My Love For You

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the love you feel for this very special person in your life. Heartfelt and romantic. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a picture of the beauty of sunrise and its brilliant colors that you can see from day to day, comparing it to your love for him that like those colors will never fade away.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love and passion for him that will continue to grow just as surely as day turns into night, stars turn on their light and the moon glows every night. Poetic.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3276568

Review of Masterpiece

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write a mother's love for her child she holds close at his passing. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcabc. A good mix of dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Poignant and prayerful.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice dialogue for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3276557

Review of Time

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about time and how it affects us and how we need and depend upon it. Skillfully crafted free verse couplets that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express just how important time is to all of us, especially when we want to spend time with the one most dear to us.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis on time. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3276548

Review of You Are The One

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write to the one you love. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for him with passion.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3276530

Review of Withering

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about family coming together for celebrations. Clever word play. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. The warmth of coming together in reunion to reminisce and embrace, the distance of time and miles fades away. I also like the bit of humor. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good, strong alliteration, good assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3276521

Review of Winsome Wants

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your ponderings, whimsical. Clever word play. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and nice use of enjambment.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express wanting to experience the wood, but are not sure if you're brave enough to leave the warmth and safety in the house looking out the window upon the night, and the sights and sound found there.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good. Strong alliteration, nice assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3275929

Review of Surprise

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write that is short, concise and succinct. Introspective and heartfelt. A skillfully crafted tercet about how you see yourself that doesn't match up to what you see in a mirror.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aba. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. The reader can sense your surprise at your reflection in the mirror, feeling so young and alive is contrasted by that older person you see reflected in the mirror that 'isn't' you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3275887

Review of Force of Nature

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation about the power of nature and it's terrible force. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the battering of earth that occurs through earthquake, storms and fires that is destructive and life threatening.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile

Nice personification of nature as a female with terrible anger who can serve or hurt us and demands respect.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the unique rhyme scheme: abbc deec fggh ijjh klml. A good mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the dark might of nature that is destructive and frightening.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3275576

Review of Voice Extreme

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official First People's Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about a powerful emotion. Heartfelt. Nice shape. A skillfully crafted Rictameter. Perfect 2/4/6/8/10/8/6/4/2 syllabic form.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the extreme of energy that builds up within a person. Whether fear, joy or pain, it can shake ones foundation, ones soul when it at last is finally released, resulting in this power that is extreme (and loud).

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3275477

Review of Into the ether

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official First People's Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and heartfelt invitation to join you in weaving a tale to bring words to life. Whimsical. Skillfully crafted free verse poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling as you draw others in to take part in this activity of weaving words from your master's pen to share sorrow and light and share tales of joy and woe.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about passing into the ether. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Elegant verse.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3275432

Review of Hope

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official First People's Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your fears and the hope you look for in the light that shines from your closet that eases it. Heartfelt and introspective. Good shape form. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your tears show that you need comforting and seeing that light softly glow from your closet almost makes you feel that you're not alone and that God is on the other side of the wall giving you warmth and hopefulness. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.