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Episode 2 - Beyond the door

Continuation of story " The box that changed my life"

Episode 3 - Omnious Vision

Continuation of story " A box changed my life "

Grief

From a large family that has begun losing members, this is my narrative of that process.

THE MASTER ILLUSIONIST

Is mankind really free as we see it? Is freedom attainable for us?

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I Wish

An ode to a beloved friend and companion

How Would You Feel?

Personal. Based upon my benevolent past. Nothing's free. Someone always pays for it.

Gentoo Day

There are ways to predict the days of winter and this one takes a shift

Meeting Moses

He met you along that divide of fate and hell / knowing he must tell you something

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#3284289

Review of Wish Upon A Star

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about who you would like to be. Introspective. A nice blend of free verse and free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint with vividness a person who shines like a star.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice. Lines one, two, seven and eight are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express a wish to be like someone else at the same time wondering if it would make you truly happy.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition and rhetorical questions for emphasis of feeling about how you'd like to view yourself as a person. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3283851

Review of Low Times After High Tide

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about 'flood' and the havok that it wreaks. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the destructiveness and devastation of floodwaters.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghgh. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the power and devastation that water can bring, washing away peoples homes, separating people from their pets and at the same time looking like a mirror that no one wants to see.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3283838

Review of Good Night My Ladybug

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your love for your daughter. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of your love for your daughter, her tiny-ness and the loving hugs she gives you is precious.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jklk. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line two (bug, rug).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for your little one beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line five, should be 'girl'.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed. Write on.

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#3283831

Review of A Simple Knot

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about your love for your wife and your bond in marriage. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice metaphor 'a simple knot,' a good descriptive/comparison to oneness of lovers in marriage.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Lines 2,4,6,8,10,12,14 and 16 are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love and passion for your wife beautifully in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, consonance and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3283813

Review of The Rose

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about the moment in beauty of the rose. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of a rose that is majestic and beautiful along with the contrast of it as it withers away.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of the rose, as a woman and royalty.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defg hiji klal. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express with poignance the death of once beautiful red rose. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3283799

Review of Feelings on the Weather

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about a storm, the excitement of it. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of a violent storm; through the lens of your eye your readers can see leaves flowing, the sharp crackle of lighting and the gusts of powerful wind.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeffe. A nice mix of perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in lines four and five of the third stanza (hustling, bustling; dancing, prancing).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the joy of the storm, being able to experience the power in nature. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3283785

Review of Thank You, Givers.

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about gratitude to those who give. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry that I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghijh. Every second/fourth line in the first two stanzas and second/fifth line in the third stanza are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your thankfulness to others who are gift givers beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3283760

Review of Blaring Silence

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the silence of war. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the horror of war, the death and destruction, the darkness and fear.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express sounds of war that permeates the poem, its intensity, but even it is not louder than the silence.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3283747

Review of A Book

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about books and reading. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih. Every second/fourth line throughout poem is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your love of books and reading beautifully in this piece. I'm a trained librarian and I relate very well to your thoughts about books.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about books. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3283289

Review of Out

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a depressing time in your life. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion as you express your feelings that are down, feelings of helplessness and being unloved. A dark place to be.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line nine, should be 'don't'.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3283287

Review of Forever, Timless

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write of your 'carousel' of love. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabba cabba ddbbd eebbe. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express the love you feel beautifully in this piece and that this love is forever, true and timeless.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance. Just a note, there is a typo in line two of your second stanza, should be 'will'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3283284

Review of Winter Nights

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the cold of winter and the beauty of snow. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a beautiful wintery scene of snowcovered trees, a blanket of snow that covers the earth; of cold that is penetrating and being in your home in front of the hearth as the warmth of its flames brings your numb hands, legs and feet back to life so that you can rest.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your love for winter and snow that the reader can relate to.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3283282

Review of Shattered

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about your feelings. Introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely (falling, breaking; why, cry; away, day).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your hurt and pain deeply in this piece. Lamentful.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3283277

Review of A Simple Prayer

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your prayer.

Form/Style:

A very good write and prayer of supplication. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse that I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your faith and trust in God, your love for Him knowing that He hears your petition and will grant you all that you ask for; to have His heart, compassion for our fellow man, perseverence through hardship and temptation that only He can strengthen us to overcome.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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Review of Mirror

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about not seeing who you are. Concise and succinct. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express a way of not looking deep within yourself, whether it be in a mirror's reflection of yourself or your own thoughts. You don't have to see your 'true' self if you choose not to.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of your choice.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3283228

Review of Teenagers

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about what a teenager thinks about herself. Thought provoking. Introspective. Well crafted free verse couplets.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. A creative way to see yourself, between child and young adult, a semi-circle, still growing, not yet complete as you look forward to the future and at the same time live with uncertainties. I think all of us have felt this way while we were growing up.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3282680

Review of Today

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about living each day as one never lived before. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I think that if you change the period to a comma at the end of line one, the flow and rhythm of that line and those following will be even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. Thoughtful and an upbeat way of living life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling about life. Good alliteration and nice assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3282661

Review of Wait for me

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting for the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about feeling lonely and the need for direction and encouragement. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express feelings of being lost and needing help to find your voice and not be afraid.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3282618

Review of Together We Stand

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the man you love and your special relationship. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aaba cdbc efbf cgbh ijbj. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express the love you share with your husband passionately and with beauty in this poem. Your love for family shines in this piece. You are blessed.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. Just a note, "I" should always be capitalized.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3282599

Review of Shut-up

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write how someone else can't tell you who you love, or that you will reciprocate the love they feel for you. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhymint poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, strategically placed commas at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhyme even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Lamentful. You express your feelings about love and that you have to follow your heart when it comes to whom you care for, even when another person cannot accept that you don't feel for them the way they do for you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there is a type in line two "I" should be capitalized.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of Healing Rain

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about healing rain sent by God. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and near perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your longing for a healing rain in your life, this healing that comes from the Lord's hands. Your faith and trust in God shines in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of Innocence Personified

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about family and love for ones children. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your love for your children, the innocence that makes them who they are and the harmony of love that is shared.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of Heaven

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about heaven, a state of mind. Heartfelt. A blend of free verse and free style metered rhyming triplets.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'like ghosts that move among the living' creative descriptive/comparison about how heaven moves.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice as is the rhyme scheme: abc ddd eef gbh. In second and third stanzas, perfect masculine end line rhyme (flows, toes, nose; keys, trees).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express where you think heaven is thoughtfully in its invisibility. Mysterious (the keys to heaven, hidden in plain sight yet unseen) and thought provoking.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of thought about heaven. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3280735

Review of Vision Quest

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

MY FIRST PEOPLES FORM POETRY CONTEST REVIEW

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about a vision quest. Heartfelt and introspective. An excellent interpretation of the picture prompt. A skillfully crafted string of Archimedes Pi poetry. Perfect 3/1/4/2/8/6 form.

Originality/Imagination:

Original, a vivid expression of the vision quest, a communion of the spiritual in meditation resulting in illumination in this sanctuary where you commune with the Great Spirit.

Content:

Content is good. Deep and thoughtful.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Emotion/Depth of Feeling:

Deep expression of emotion. You express how the cleansing of the body and mind allows one to hear the voice of the Great Spirit.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this place where you commune with the Great Spirit. Through the lens of your eye the reader sees the mountain peaks you tread, sunrise and sunset; the pine and sage that you use in rituals.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of the Eagle, Wolf and Wind who work in harmony.

Alliteration/Assonance/Consonance:

Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of what is taught to you in this quest. No spelling or punctuation errors.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Thank you for taking part in my contest. Write on.

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#3280712

Review of Seeds of Wisdom

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Native First Peoples Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

MY FIRST PEOPLES FORM POETRY CONTEST REVIEW

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and prayer. Heartfelt and introspective. Very good interpretation of the picture prompt. A skillfully crafted Archimedes Pi poem. Perfect 3/1/4/2/8/6 form.

Originality/Imagination:

An original prayer/conversation with the wolf spirit who gives you his wisdom.

Content:

Content is good.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Emotion/Depth of Feeling:

Deep expression of emotion. Your trust in his wisdom permeates the poem as does the promise to share these 'seeds' of wisdom wherever you go.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice use of simile: 'and like Eagle, I'll drop your precious seeds' - a good descriptive/comparison of sharing the knowledge and wisdom received with others.

Alliteration/Assonance/Consonance:

Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good. No spelling or punctuation errors.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Thank you for participating in my contest. Write on.

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