ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3298209

Review of Hope

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about hope that is eternal. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm of the piece even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express how hope's flame never goes out, there is always a glimmer of it waiting for one to reach out for it.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3297051

Review of Clean Sheets

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about laundry day and hanging the wash outside
on the clothes-line. Very nice form. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of doing laundry and hanging it outside on a windy, sunny day and the fresh scent of the sheets once they are dry and then put back on the bed.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express you pleasure of completing your chore and the fresh scent that fills your senses.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3296709

Review of A SPECIAL KIND OF LOVE

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about true love and how special it is to you. Heartfelt and lyrical. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'an open doorway to the heart of angels,' a beautiful descriptive/comparison to love.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jkjk. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You define love between a man and a woman beautifully in this poem. Seamless and romantic. I wouldn't have known that two people wrote this piece if you hadn't mentioned it in your notes.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of love. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3296701

Review of A PIECE OF MY HEART

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and tribute to the man you love. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'we fit together perfectly, like hand to glove,' - a very nice descriptive/comparision about the love you share.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccbb ddbb eeff. A good mix of dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in line two of stanza three (doubt, about).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You passionately express your love for him and that he is a gift to you from God. Your love for him shines in this piece. You are blessed to have him in you life.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3296416

Review of Drifts

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about snow and having fun in it. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of the bliss you see in nature on a cool and crisp day waiting and hoping for snow fall to play in.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transtion and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a nice rhyme scheme. A nice mix of feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece (sight, bright; inviting, biting; observe, reserve).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your hope for it to snow, the joy of seeing a pristine blanket of it with no footprints in sight as the sun shines down upon it. I can relate to these feelings.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3296284

Review of Child of Joy

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and dedicatory piece to Hannah. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'Hannah is a ray of light on a cloudy winter day' - a lovely descriptive/comparision of the personality trait of this little girl.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef agag. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your love for Hannah and her loving ways. She brings you joy when you watch her at play.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of Hannah and her sweetness. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3296210

Review of YELLOW ROSES AND YOU

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about memories of the man you loved who has passed. A lovely tribute to him and the love you shared. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free syle metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Just a suggestion, to change the period to a comma in line five. This will make the flow and rhythm of the line following even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abccdeff. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece (day, way; true, you). Nice internal rhyme in line six (died, cried).

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your love for each other beautifully in this piece. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3296130

Review of Unwritten

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about writing a poem that will uplift and encourage your spirit, as you struggle with writers block. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice simile: 'to, like birds, fly away from this island of darkness that has held my smiles hostage to hopelessness.' good descriptive/comparison of your feelings.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express how you want to write something beautiful, something emotional that is freeing to your heart and mind, but all you do is sit and stare at a blank piece of paper with a pen in your hand. I can relate to these feelings very well as a poet.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3296121

Review of Dream Catcher

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about pursuing your dreams. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint a vivid picture of your daydreams, like sun on a drooping flow or nectar to a bumble-bee or a breeze on a summers day. Delightful pictures.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice simile: 'like the sun to a drooping flower" and 'like a breze on a summer day' - very nice descriptive/comparision about the similarity to these things to your daydreams.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Imaginative. You express your feelings about daydreams beautifully in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3295881

Review of Alone

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about being alone and lonely. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythmm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling as you express your fear and sadness about being alone, lonely and distant from the world around you in the silence that is your world.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3295849

Review of Whisper Softly, My Love

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poetic prose.

Form/Style:

A very good write about love and passion. Heartfelt and intimate. Skillfully crafted prose poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the act of true love.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Very nice simile: 'Like a consummate musician you play me,' very good descriptive/comparison of making love.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Delightfully sensual as you surrender to his love, that there is only you and him experienceing this deep tenderness that is erotic, passionate and intoxicating.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3295844

Review of To Be Held

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about love and new found romance. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your surprise at finding true love, something you never experienced before; to truly be held by one who loves you. Romantic.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good with strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3295533

Review of A Tribute to a Friend

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and tribute about your special friend, Kathy Smile. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'this friend of mine was sweeter thant the finest wine' - lovely descriptive/comparison of Kathy's personality.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A good mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. Through your words, the reader senses just how special she was to you and how she helped you through rough times, and helped you with your writing. She gave of herself and you were grateful to her and was glad to call her friend.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling and friendship. Nice alliteration, consonance and good assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3295507

Review of Strength To My Soul

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about your love for parent and their continued support that allows you to grow. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy and prefer.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a nice rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece (won, son; true, you; see, me; go, know; you, do, true).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your love for your parent and the strength given you through them shines brightly in this piece. You are blessed to have a such a parent. A lovely tribute to them.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3295499

Review of They Must Be Lovers

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: ASR | N/A (Unratable.)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about lovers and their relationship. Skillfully crafted free verse triplets that are short concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of these two people who share a bench and their love that anyone walking by can see.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express their love beautifully, through the tenderness shared between them, their touch, whispers and closeness... yes, I agree; they must be lovers.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; strong use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3295494

Review of Love Changes Everything

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about true love coming late in life. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free verse poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Love does change ones life when it comes and when it's true. It is a sensual delight in which we are blinded by the passion that sweeps us off our feet.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3295236

Review of Adoring Eyes

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and presentation about your pet cat. Heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of your cat who give you her love, who looks upon you with adoring eyes and a comforting purr.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, in stanza one line three you don't need the period after tenderly and in stanza two line three, no need for the period after contentedly which will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdad ecec. A good mix of dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express your love for your cat and the comfort she gives you. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3295234

Review of Ripening

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a blossoming flower and a bright new day. Short, concise and succinct. A well crafted haiku. Perfect 5/7/5 syllabic form.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as is the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of a sunny day and a blossoming flower that is opening up in the sunshine.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestions, I don't think you need the periods at the end of lines two and three. The flow and rhythm will be even better without them in my opinion.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express your hope and joy in a bright new day. Upbeat.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration and assonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3295230

Review of Dare Believe

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about hope. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Uplifting and encouraging.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of thoughts about being hopeful. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3295020

Review of Soar

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with Rising Stars of WdC

Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about faith and the truth that is revealed through one star. Lovely presentation. Heartfelt and thought provoking. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. A message about belief and drawing closer to Him that is uplifting and encouraging to ones spirit. Each new dawn, looking on His creation bonds us to His love.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance. and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3294861

Review of Doing it right

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about the poet and storyteller to bring their stories to life to their readers so that they are excited like children partaking in an adventure.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good meter and very nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'never ending nuggest we sowed just yesterday' - good descriptive about the teaching and wisdom received from the readers and hearers of our stories.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih. A nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the importance of the words and message of our stories to our audience and that we should be true to them.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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#3294845

Review of The Poets Dilemma

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write and message about a poets life and dilemma to be true to him or herself with courage. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Good syllabic meter of 7/6/7/6 throughout each stanza in poem. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jbkb. Every second/fourth line in each stanza is perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the strength of a poet who writes from the heart using his or her mind to put their thoughts down on paper with courage and understanding. It may not always be easy, but it is right.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3294797

Review of Living it up-Living it down

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (5.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about the ups and downs of living life. Heartfelt and introspective. Clever word play. Skillfully crafted rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Good syllabic meter: 7/6/7/6 in each stanza. Very nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb dece fghg ibjb. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece. Nice internal rhyme in stanza one line four (that, last).

Tone:

Good depth of feeling with a bit of humor. You express your feelings about pleasure that isn't meant to last when in comes to living down the past.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on.

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Review of Little Birdie

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and story poem from the perspective of a worm. A story that children would enjoy. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, in stanza three line one, I don't think you need a period there. If you remove it, the flow and rhythm will be even better in my opinion.

Metaphor/Personification/Simile:

Nice personification of the worm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cbcb dede fgfg. A nice mix of perfect feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express the feeling and resignation of the worm that knows he has no chance against the robin as his death draws near.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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Review of Ode To Saturday Mornings

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject to your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about relaxing on a Saturday morning in contemplation and rest. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a good picture of yourself resting in bed as you hear the sounds of the morning outside that coax you out to play.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, I don't think you need the comma at the end of line three in stanza two and at the end of line one in stanza three. If you remove them the flow and rhythm will be even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efgf. A nice mixture of near rhyme and near perfect dactylic, feminine and masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You express how much you enjoy your leisure on a Saturday morning as you lay comfortably in bed taking in the the sights and sounds of a beautiful day. I can relate.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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